书面表达新高考概要写作类解析版.docx

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书面表达新高考概要写作类解析版

专题30书面表达（新高考概要写作类）

1.【2019·浙江】概要写作（满分25分）

阅读下面短文，根据其内容写一篇60词左右的内容概要。

Parentseverywherepraisetheirkids.JennBerman,authorofTheAtoZGuidetoRaisingHappyandConfidentKids,says,"We'vegonetotheoppositeextremeofafewdecadesagowhenparentstendedtobemorestrict."Bygivingkidsalotofpraise,parentsthinkthey'rebuildingtheirchildren'sconfidence,when,infact,itmaybejusttheopposite.Toomuchpraisecanbackfireand,whengiveninawaythat'sinsincere,makekidsafraidtotrynewthingsortakeariskforfearofnotbeingabletostayontopwheretheirparents'praisehasputthem.

Still,don'tgotoofarintheotherdirection.Notgivingenoughpraisecanbejustasdamaginggasgivingtoomuch.Kidswillfeellikethey'renotgoodenoughorthatyoudon'tcareand,asaresult,mayseenopointintryinghardfortheiraccomplishments.

Sowhatistherightamountofpraise?

Expertssaythatthequalityofpraiseismoreimportantthanthequantity.Ifpraiseissincereandfocusedontheeffortnottheoutcome,youcangiveitasoftenasyourchilddoessomethingthatdeservesaverbalreward."Weshouldespeciallyrecognizeourchildren'seffortstopushthemselvesandworkhardtoachieveagoal,"saysDonahue,authorofParentingWithoutFear:

LettingGoofWorryandFocusingonWhatReallyMatters."Onethingtorememberisthatit'stheprocessnottheendproductthatmatters."

Yoursonmaynotbethebestbasketballplayeronhisteam.Butifhe'soutthereeverydayandplayinghard,youshouldpraisehiseffortregardlessofwhetherhisteamwinsorloses.Praisingtheeffortandnottheoutcomecanalsomeanrecognizingyourchildwhenshehasworkedhardtocleantheyard,cookdinner,orfinishabookreport.Butwhateveritis,praiseshouldbegivenonacase-by-casebasisandbeproportionate（相称的）totheamountofeffortyourchildhasputintoit.

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【答案】

Nowadays,parentstendtoofferconsideratepraisetotheirchildren,hopingtoboosttheirconfidence,butitmayproducetheoppositeeffect.（要点1）However,nopraisefromparentsalsodoesharmtotheirself-confidence.（要点2）Therefore,experts claimthatsincerepraiseshouldbegivenfortheprocessnotfortheresult.Meanwhile,kidsdodeservepraiseiftheystrivetodotheirduty.（要点3）Anyway,theamountofpraiseyouhavedependsonhowhardtheywork.（要点4）

【解析】作为概要写作，要注意每段归纳主题句和关键词，然后通过词汇替换，句式转变等多种方式，改写要点，要注意一定要用自己的语言，不可以完全照搬照抄。

然后，添加衔接词，使得逻辑上要点之间能够通顺、流畅。

最后要注意单词拼写不要出现错误，大小写和标点符号也是关键，还要注意字数的控制，不要少于40字或多于80字。

2．概要写作【2018年11月浙江高考】阅读下面短文，根据其内容写一篇60词左右的内容概要。

It’sareallygoodideatovisitcollegesbeforeyouapplybecausetheirwebsitescanallstarttolookandsoundthesame.Nothingwillgiveyouthesenseofwhatitwillactuallybeliketoliveonacollegecampus（校园）likevisitingandseeingforyourselfthedorms,classroomsandathleticequipmentand,ofcourse,thestudents.Itseemsalittlecrazyoncesenioryearhitstofindthetimetovisitcollegecampuses,anditcanalsobepriceyiftheschoolsyouareapplyingtohappentobemorethanacarrideaway.Butkeepinmindthatyouaremakingadecisionaboutthenextfouryearsofyourlife,anddoalltheresearchyoucantomakesureyouaremakingtherightone.

There’snoexcusenottovisittheschoolsinyourlocalarea.Infact,alotofcollegeapplicationsevenaskifyouhavevisitedcampus,andobviously,ifyouliveacrossthecountrythatwon’tbeasmuchofapossibility,butifyoulivenearby,gocheckitout!

Ifcampusvisitsaren’tgoingtohappenbeforeyouapply,attheveryleastyoushouldfindsometimebetweenapplyingandgettingyouracceptanceletterstovisittheschoolsyou’dliketoattend.Itcansaveyoualotofheartacheifyouruleoutnowthethingsthatyoudon’tlikeaboutcertaincampuses,thingsthatyouwouldn’tknowunlessyouactuallyvisit.

Now,iftimeandmoneyaremakingitimpossible,thencheckouttheonlinecollegefairsatCollegeWeekLive.It’sachancetochatonlinewithadmissionsofficers,students,andcollegecounselors（顾问）,anditwon’tcostyouapenny!

Youcanregisterforitsonlinecollegefairat.Whilevisitinganonlinecollegefaircan’ttaketheplaceofanactualcampusvisit,itcanbeaveryusefultoolthatalongwithallyourotherresearchwillhelpyoumakeaninformeddecisionaboutwhichcollegesoruniversitiesyou’dliketoattend.

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【答案】It’sreallyworthwhiletopayavisittotheirdesiredcollegespersonallybeforeapplying.Undoubtedly,studentsshouldvisittheirlocalcolleges,whichmaybeincludedinapplications.Atleast,theyshouldvisittheschoolandfigureoutitsrealconditionsinadvance.Forstudentswhoareshortofmoneyandtime,registeringfortheonlinecollegefairisagoodalternativetohelpthembetterunderstandschools.

【解析】

本文要求阅读短文，根据其内容写一篇60词左右的内容概要，即用尽可能少的词汇集中展现原材料的主要思想和观点。

这主要是考查学生把握文章主旨大意和段落大意的能力以及总结概括能力，熟练掌握从句、非谓语动词等语法知识和遣词造句的能力。

1.要先读懂、读透原作。

这是准确再现原文、写好概要的前提。

动笔前多读两遍原文，直至弄懂读透。

2.抓住文中的关键句，确定写作主题。

开头It'sareallygoodideatovisitcollegesbeforeyouapply点明了本文主题；Butkeepinmindthatyouaremakingadecisionaboutthenextfouryearsofyourlife,anddoalltheresearchyoucantomakesureyouaremakingtherightone.There’snoexcusenottovisittheschoolsinyourlocalarea.说明了去大学看看的必要性和可行性；Ifcampusvisitsaren’tgoingtohappenbeforeyouapply,attheveryleastyoushouldfindsometimebetweenapplyingandgettingyouracceptanceletterstovisittheschoolsyou’dliketoattend.在时间上提供了更多选择；iftimeandmoneyaremakingitimpossible,thencheckouttheonlinecollegefairsatCollegeWeekLive.为不能亲自去大学看的学生提供了另外一种方法。

3.拟好提纲。

有了提纲，写概要时就会有章法，也不会遗漏原作中的要点。

4.快速成文，反复推敲。

按照文章要求和拟好的提纲一气呵成，写完初稿。

5.对照修改润色，再读原文，查看是否漏掉了重要信息或主要内容。

用词是否恰当，可有可无的删掉。

注意词类、时态、语态的适当调整。

【点睛】

范文观点明确，重点突出，语言简练，词数适当。

作者在范文中使用了较多高级表达方式，如定语从句whichmaybeincludedinapplications.和whoareshortofmoneyandtime.动名词registeringonline作主语，显示了很高的驾驭英语的能力。

3.【2021届广东省仲元中学、中山一中等七校联合体高三上学期第一次联考】

阅读下面短文，根据其内容写一篇60词左右的内容概要。

Haagen-Dazs（哈根达斯雪糕）fromEuropestartedin1989andis5-10timesmoreexpensivethanregularicecream.Thereisnorealadvantage.However,itadoptedauniquemarketingstrategy,andquicklyoccupiedthemarketasatopicecreambrand.

Haagen-Dazsdidnotsetupshopsinordinarysupermarketsorgrocerystores.Haggen-Dazsleisurefashionshopsarelocatedinbusysectionsofmalls.Thelayoutiscarefullyplannedtocreateanelegantatmosphere,andsometimes,aflagship（旗舰）storewillcostseveralmilliondollars.

Comparedtoothericecreambrands,Haagen-Dazsconsumersaretightlygrouped.ItisunderstoodthatHaagen-Dazsseldomdoestelevisionadvertising.Themajorityofadshavethehighlyvisualimpactoftheprintmedium.Inparticularmanyadvertisementslookforthosepyramidtipconsumers.Moreover,aslongastheconsumerwhospends500Yuantofillinasmallformcanbecometheirmembers,thesememberswillberegularlysentadvertisementsbydirectmail.PraiseofcustomersisapowerfulweaponforHaagenDazs.

Thereisalwaysmuchcreativeingenuity（独出心裁）inHaagen-Dazsadvertising,soitisrememberedbythepublic.Initialadvertisementssuchas:

''DeliciousHaagen-Dazs,like24Kgold,KobebeeffromJapan,originalpalmoil,mushroomtrufflesandChineseceramics…''and''Loveher,lethereatHaagen-Dazs.''attractednumerousHaagen-Dazsloverswhobecameregulars.

Today,HaggenDazshasabout700storesin55countrieswithannualsalesofmorethan1billionUSdollars.Haagen-Dazshasbecometheworld’smostpopularicecreambrand.IntheUnitedStates,itsmarketshareis6.1%,1%inFrance,4.6%inJapan,4%inSingapore,and5%inHongKong.

Determinedtowinthemajorityofwealthycustomers,theycombinedpositioninginthemarketplacewithdedicatedbrandgoals.Thisistherealsecretofsuccess.

【答案】Haagen-Dazshasbecomethemostpopularicecreamforitsdistinctivemarketingstrategy.（要点1）Onereasonisthatitsshopsareoftensituatedinbusymalls.（要点2）Anotherfactorliesinitsprintadvertisementswithanexcellentvisualeffectespeciallytargetingconsumerswithgreatpurchasingpower.（要点3）Besides,thecreativityintheadvertisementsalsocreatesanimpressiveimage.（要点4）Inaword,adoptingauniquemarketingstrategyhascontributedtothebrand'sworldwidepopularity.（要点5）

【解析】

这是一篇概要写作。

文章主要介绍了哈根达斯成为最受欢迎的冰激凌的市场策略。

通读全文可知，本文是总分总结构，可以从以下五点进行总结：

因为独特的市场策略哈根达斯成为最受欢迎的冰激凌；原因之一是它的商店都开在繁忙的商场；原因之二是它的广告极具视觉效应，可以吸引顾客购买；原因之三是具有创造力的广告令人印象深刻；总的来说，独特的市场策略是这个品牌受到全世界欢迎的原因。

即：

Haagen-Dazshasbecomethemostpopularicecreamforitsdistinctivemarketingstrategy.（要点1）Onereasonisthatitsshopsareoftensituatedinbusymalls.（要点2）Anotherfactorliesinitsprintadvertisementswithanexcellentvisualeffectespeciallytargetingconsumerswithgreatpurchasingpower.（要点3）Besides,thecreativityintheadvertisementsalsocreatesanimpressiveimage.（要点4）Inaword,adoptingauniquemarketingstrategyhascontributedtothebrand'sworldwidepopularity.（要点5）

4.（2020·上海浦东新区高三二模）Directions:

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