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届高考英语作文书面表达满分提升原理大解析
高考英语作文书面表达满分提升原理大解析
请阅读下面文字,并按照要求用英语写一篇150词左右的文章。
Morethan100,000volunteersin132citiesspentaweekendpickingupplasticandotherwasteacrossthecountry,inajointworldwideefforttocleanuptheplanet.
Tocelebratethe10thWorldCleanupDayonSept15,some700non-profitNGOs(non-governmentaloriginations)andsocialgroupsheldactivitiesaimedatcleaninguptheenvironmentandtacklingthewastecrisisthroughoutChina,mobilizinganestimated1million-pluspeople.
Fromsnowcappedmountainstovastoceans,peopleunitedintakingactiontoremovewastefromtheenvironmenttoraiseawarenessoftheseverityofthecrisis.
“Wherethereisawill,everydaycanbeandshouldbe‘CleanupDay’,”saysMaYongjian,avolunteerfromBeijingwhorecentlydid“plogging”—joggingwhilepickinguptrash—withhisfriendsinYudongParkinthenorthwestofthecity.
“Wemustchangethewayoflivingweareusedto,toreducewastefromitssource,”saysJoeHarvey,aBritishnationalandpromoterof“zerowaste”lifestylesinChina.HeandhisgirlfriendCarrieYucreatedTheBulkHouse,abrandthatprovideszero-wastesolutionsfordailyliving.Theyareurgingpeopletoreduceoreliminatetheuseofplasticandsingle-usedisposables,suchasplasticutensils,bagsandbeveragebottles.
Soundinganoteofcaution,MaoDa,aspecialistinenvironmentalhistoryatBeijingNormalUniversity,says:
“Inrecentyears,themassiveconsumptionandmaterialisticcrazehaveworsenedthewastesituationastrashhasbeenproducedatafasterpaceandingreaterquantities.”
【写作内容】
1.以约30个词概括文章大意。
概括写法
一找、二并、三换
概括大意需要文体,无非:
新闻体、故事体、论说文。
就本文而言,是新闻体。
新闻体的大意主要看:
事实和评论(factsandopinions),评论有时和写作目的交织在一起。
关注点:
首段和末段(目的非常重要)
步骤:
1.找关键信息
Morethan100,000volunteersin132citiesspentaweekendpickingupplasticandotherwasteacrossthecountry,inajointworldwideefforttocleanuptheplanet.
Tocelebratethe10thWorldCleanupDay…activitiesaimedatcleaninguptheenvironmentandtacklingthewastecrisis
…peopleunitedintakingactiontoremovewastefromtheenvironmenttoraiseawarenessoftheseverityofthecrisis.
2.提炼和合并
去掉细节信息(例如数字),换为:
某人做了某事,目的+方式,即:
sbdosthtodo….bydoing….
Morethan100,000volunteersin132citiesspentaweekendpickingupplasticandotherwasteacrossthecountry,inajointworldwideefforttocleanuptheplanet.
Tocelebratethe10thWorldCleanupDay…activitiesaimedatcleaninguptheenvironmentandtacklingthewastecrisis
…peopleunitedintakingactiontoremovewastefromtheenvironmenttoraiseawarenessoftheseverityofthecrisis.
这里面目的有好几处,但基本相同,因此:
cleanuptheplanet,raiseawarenessoftheseverityofwastecrisis
最终是:
Incelebratingthe10thWorldCleanupDay,peoplemakeajointworldwideefforttocleanuptheplanetandraiseawarenessoftheseverityofwastecrisis.
但这个句子由于和原文相似多,稍微变换一下,改成:
sbdosthtodo….bydoing….。
The10thWorldCleanupDayhasraisedpublicawarenessoftheseverityofwastecrisisbyencouragingmoreandmorepeopleworldwidetocleanuptheplanettogether.
主体
材料中来,材料中去
(1)你对于“世界清理日”及类似活动有哪些看法?
所谓看法,无非你觉得这件事的好处或坏处,说白了就是影响。
当然谈影响,就要说明原因。
此类是环保话题,毫无疑问,从positive方好写:
思维要点:
环保,健康
环保—》reducewaste,createacleanenvironmentwherepeopleliveinharmonywithnature
健康—》价值观,生活方式–》serveasawake-upcall/reminderthatweshouldpursueahealthylifestyle.
Undoubtedly,suchactivitiescanbenefitthewholesocietyalotinmanyways.(说明主旨)First,theycontributetoacleanandharmoniousenvironment.(要点一:
干净和谐)Peoplehavebeensufferingtheconsequencesoftheworseningenvironmentandunfortunatelythemountingwasteisoneoftherootcauses.(解释,先从反面写垃圾的负面作用)Withvolunteerscleaningupthewaste,peopleworkandsocializehappilyphysicallyandpsychologically.(承接前一句,形成对比)Besides,theyserveasawake-upcallthatpeopleshouldpursueahealthierlifestylesuchasavoidingoverconsumption.(要点二:
生活方式的变化。
同时用举例法)
(2)你觉得要采取哪些措施来保持环境整洁?
公共性的措施无非是一大一小一意识,即:
个人怎么做,政府怎么做。
措施:
1.awareness:
2.regulations
3.recyclingproducts
但首先要明确一点,先要学会从材料中找要点,如果能找到的话,尽量先用材料中的要点来拓展。
原文有:
Wherethereisawill,everydaycanbeandshouldbe‘CleanupDay’
reducewastefromitssource
reduceoreliminatetheuseofplasticandsingle-usedisposables,suchasplasticutensils,bagsandbeveragebottles
综合一下:
Honestlyspeaking,holdingactivitiesaloneisfarfromenough.(说明主旨)Foronething,eachindividualshoulddohisparttocleantheenvironmentaroundhiminsteadofthrowingrubbishatwill.(要点一:
个人责任,注意insteadof的信息添加丰富骨干,避免说空话)Alittleeffortcanmakeabigdifference.(承接前一句,说明原因)Foranother,producersshouldobeyenvironmentalrulesandregulationsandbesubjecttosupervision.(要点二:
生产商做法。
为了避免观点走空,加一个接受监督。
)Onlyinthiswaycanacleanearthbeinsight.(最后总结)
完整的作文:
The10thWorldCleanupDayhasraisedpublicawarenessoftheseverityofwastecrisisbyencouragingmoreandmorepeopleworldwidetocleanuptheplanettogether.
Undoubtedly,suchactivitiescanbenefitthewholesocietygreatly.First,theycontributetoacleanandharmoniousenvironment.Peoplehavebeensufferingtheconsequencesofworseningenvironmentandunfortunatelythemountingwasteisoneoftherootcauses.Withvolunteerscleaningupthewaste,peopleworkandsocializehappilyphysicallyandpsychologically.Besides,theyserveasawake-upcallthatpeopleshouldpursueahealthierlifestylesuchasavoidingoverconsumption.
Honestlyspeaking,holdingactivitiesaloneisfarfromenough.Foronething,eachindividualshoulddohisparttocleantheenvironmentaroundhiminsteadofthrowingrubbishatwill.Alittleeffortmakesabigdifference.Foranother,producersshouldobeyenvironmentalrulesandbesubjecttosupervision.Onlyinthiswaycanacleanearthbeinsight.(共158词)
心得
不要过于自信,慢慢说,小心写
我一直认为,写作不要用太多的长句子,毕竟写作是让读者(这里就是阅卷老师)在最短时间内明白你说的要点,用短句子说明主旨,用长句子(但不要都是)解释主旨句,长短结合。
另外,句子一长了,各种汉式说法就冒出来了,神不知鬼不觉的。
总之,写作文应该让读者读得舒服,那么能用一个常见的容易理解的词就不要用复杂生僻的,能一个名词作主语的,就不要用动名词短语,能一个简单句说明白的,就不要硬凑上定语从句和非谓语动词。
一些搭配要牢记。
参考答案说明:
个人感觉答案第二部分说看法时,只是把材料复述一遍,并非发表了看法,因此需要斟酌。
Agreatmanyvolunteersthroughoutthecountrymadejointeffortstopickuprubbishscatteredaroundsoastobringtheseverityofenvironmentalcrisisintothepublicfocus.
Thepastdecadeshavewitnessedthedevelopmentofeconomy,butwepayahighpriceforit,damagingtheenvironment.Toobservethe10thWorldCleanUpDay,theChineseparticipateinthisworldwideaction.Someorganizationshavecarriedoutvariousprogramstargetedatcleaningupoursurroundingsandawakeningpeople’sawarenessofenvironmentalprotection.Inresponsetothecampaignslaunched,peopledotheirbitstohelpsustaintheplanetwhereweco-exist.
Asforindividuals,wecanstartfromminorthingsasfollows.Tobeginwith,wecanuseenergy-savingproductsasmuchaspossible.Inthesecondplace,wecannotthrowrubbishatwillandwecaneliminateusingplasticanddisposablechopsticks.Onlywhenweallenhancetheeco-friendlyawarenesscanweenjoyahealthierlife.
高中英语新高考-英语作文:
谈谈写作的评判性思维(简化模式)
评判性思维英文名字:
criticalthinking。
定义颇多,各种术语比较费脑。
我参考了一些文本解释,比较通俗易懂的是下面这个:
批判性思维就是一种慎重的思考过程。
在这一过程中,你使用批判性思维来考虑一个问题。
最终,你判断什么是可信的,或决定将要做什么。
以下是批判性思维的方法,包括:
1、别急着判断,而是检查一个命题或行动的有效性。
2、用多维视角思考。
3、考虑一个想法或行动的内涵和影响。
4、用理由和证据来解决分歧。
5、根据最新信息来重新评价一个观点。
简化为:
1、你的观点是什么?
2、你有什么理由支持你的观点?
3、你为什么这么想?
4、关于这个问题有没有不同的视角?
因此总结一下比较容易掌握的评判性思维的模式:
主题—》解释一下—》给个细节或例子—》为什么呢/那又如何?
这种练习可以在平时经常练习,例如:
小明迟到了
--》为什么呢?
Itisbecause他起晚了–》为什么呢?
forthereasonthat熬夜打游戏
–》那又如何?
Itisclearthat上课很多知识听不懂。
--》那又怎样?
whichmeansthat他上课开始走神。
--》那又怎样?
Therefore,他回家无法完成课堂作业。
题目
请阅读下面短文,并按照要求用英语写一篇150词左右的文章。
LiShuangyingsaidher18-year-oldson,whojusttookthisyear’scollegeentranceexam,wouldbecomeaprofessionalintheartificialintelligence(AI)field.
Artificialintelligenceisthebranchofcomputerscienceconcernedwithmakingcomputersbehavelikehumans.TherequirementforAItalentsisasolidfoundationofmathsandEnglish,soforseniorhighgraduates,theyshouldhaveahighermathematicalthinkingabilityandhaveagoodcommandofEnglishiftheywanttobecomeprofessionalinAI.
LiShuangyingsaidhersonalwayshasbeenoneofthetopstudentsinhisclassatoneoftheleadinghighschoolsinZhongshan,Guangdongprovince.Zhongshan,whichneighborsGuangzhou,hasbeenoneofChinaspioneeringcitiesinembracingreformandopeningup.Itflourished(繁荣)onlabor-intensiveindustries,butrecentrisinglaborshortagesandcostshavebecomearealthreat.Inresponse,localmanufacturershavebeenquicktoembraceautomation(自动化)andadoptAI-assistedrobotsforsurvival.
ThecompanyLiworksfor,amedium-sizedhomeappliancemanufacturerwithannualoutputofabout1billionyuan($150million),isnoexception.Lisaidsheusedtobringhersontoherworkplacefromtimetotime,andhehasdevelopedastronginterestinAI,automationandrobots.“OurfamilyallagreethatAIisthetrend,anditholdsgreatpotentialforfuturedevelopment,”Lisaid.Thatviewissharedbymanycollegestudentsandtheirparents,whoconsiderAladesirablemajor.
【写作内容】
1.用约30个词概括上文。
2.用约120个词发表你的观点,内容包括:
(1)请你谈谈对人工智能专业的看法;
(2)作为高三学生,你是否会选择人工智能专业?
简要说明理由(2至3点)。
如何概括
第一步:
确定本文是新闻体,通过一个具体例子来谈现象,因此具体人物细节就不要出现,应该笼统说是一类人。
找(关键句)
LiShuangyingsaidher18-year-oldson,whojusttookthisyear’scollegeentranceexam,wouldbecomeaprofessionalintheartificialintelligence(AI)field.
developedastronginterest
itholdsgreatpotentialforfuture
第二、三步:
整合和替换:
WiththefastdevelopmentofAIandlaborshortage,manystudentsarekeenonAI’spotentialanddecidetoembracethefieldastheirmajorincollege.
主体
(1)请你谈谈对人工智能专业的看法;
这里涉及到如何评价一个专业的有用与没用,教育部说:
对不起良心的专业应该停办了。
用评判性思维公式来简化本文:
AI专业好—》解释一下:
AI处理事情又快又好AIcanperformboth