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范文分析
Inmanycountriestoday,theeatinghabitsandlifestyleofchildrenaredifferentfromthoseofpreviousgenerations.Somepeoplesaythishashadanegativeeffectontheirhealth.
Towhatextentdoyouagreeordisagreewiththisopinion?
Ithasrecentlybeensuggestedthatthewaychildreneatandlivenowadayshasledtodeteriorationintheirhealth.Ientirelyagreewiththisview,andbelievethatthisalarmingsituationhascomeaboutforseveralreasons.
Tobeginwith,thereistheworryingincreaseintheamountofprocessedfoodthatchildrenareeatingathome,withlittleornoneofthefreshfruitandvegetablesthatearliergenerationsateeveryday.Secondly,moreandmoreyoungpeoplearechoosingtoeatinfast-foodrestaurants,whichmaybeharmlessoccasionally,butnoteveryday.Whattheyeatthereisextremelyhighinfat,saltandsugar,allofwhichcanbedamagingtotheirhealth.
Thereisalsoadisturbingdeclineintheamountofexercisetheyget.Schoolshavebecomeobsessedwithexams,withtheshockingresultthatsomepupilsnowdonosportsatall.Tomakemattersworse,fewevengetanyexerciseonthewaytoandfromschool,asmostofthemgointheirparents’carsratherthanwalkorcycle.Finally,childrenarespendingfarmoretimeathome,playingcomputergames,watchingTVorsurfingtheInternet.Theynolongerplayoutsidewithfriendsortakepartinchallengingoutdooractivities.
Tosumup,althoughnoneofthesechangescould,onitsown,havecausedwidespreadharmtochildren’shealth,therecanbelittledoubtthatallofthemtogetherhavehadadevastatingeffect.This,inmyopinion,canonlybereversedbyencouragingchildrentoreturntomovetraditionalwaysofeatingandliving.
Thenumberofoverweightchildrenindevelopedcountriesisincreasing.Somepeoplethinkthisisduetoproblemssuchasthegrowingnumberoffastfoodoutlets.Othersbelievethatparentsaretoblamefornotlookingaftertheirchildren'shealth.
Towhatextentdoyouagreewiththeseviews?
Thereisplentyofevidencetosuggestthatchildrenareoverweightandthesituationisgettingworse,accordingtothemedicalexperts.Ifeelthereareanumberofreasonsforthis.
Somepeopleblamethefactthatwearesurroundedbyshopssellingunhealthy,fattyfoodssuchaschipsandfriedchicken,atlowprices.Thishascreatedawholegenerationofadultswhohavenevercookedamealforthemselves.Iftherewerefeweroftheserestaurants,thenchildrenwouldnotbetemptedtobuytake-awayfood.
Thereisanotherargumentthatblamestheparentsforallowingtheirchildrentobecomeoverweight.Itendtoagreewiththisview,becausegoodeatinghabitsbeginearlyinlife,longbeforechildrenstarttovisitfastfoodoutlets.Ifchildrenaregivenchipsandchocolateratherthannourishingfood,orarealwaysallowedtochoosewhattheyeat,theywillgoforthesweetandsaltyfoodseverytime,andthiswillcarryonthroughouttheirlives.
Thereisathirdfactor,however,whichcontributestothesituation.Childrenthesedaystakeverylittleexercise.Theydonotwalktoschool.Whentheygethome,theysitinfrontofthetelevisionortheircomputersandplayvideogames.Notonlyisthisanunhealthypastime,italsogivesthemtimetoeatmorejunkfood.Whattheyneedistogooutsideandplayactivegamesorsport.
Thetwoviewsdiscussedplayanequalroleincontributingtotheproblem,butIthinkwehavetoencourageyoungpeopletobemoreactive,aswellassteeringthemawayfromfastfoodoutletsandbadeatinghabits.Weneedtohaveabalancedapproach.
Position:
Writerreferstoanumberofreasonsintheintroduction,andtotheneedforabalancedviewintheconclusion.
Mainideas:
Firstsentenceofthesecondparagraph;firstandsecondsentencesofthethirdparagraph;secondsentenceofthefourthparagraph.
Linkers:
and,accordingto,somepeople,suchas,if,then,thereisanotherargument,because,or,thereisathirdfactor,however,notonly,also,thetwoviewsdiscussed,but,aswellas
Referencewords:
the,this,who,themselves,these,thisview,they,their,them
Topicvocabulary:
medicalexperts,shops,unhealthy,fattyfoods,chips,cooked,take-awayfood,chocolate,sweetandsalty,exercise,walk,television,computers,videogames,unhealthypastime,junkfood,activegames,sport,fastfoodoutlets
Sentencetypes:
Awiderangeofcomplexstructuresandsentencesisused.
Length:
286words
Somepeoplesaythatadvertisingencouragesustobuythingsthatwereallydonotneed.Otherssaythatadvertisementstellusaboutnewproductsthatmayimproveourlives.
Whichviewpointdoyouagreewith?
Thepurposeofadvertisingistotelltheconsumeraboutanynewproductorserviceoranynewpromotionontheexistingproductandservice.Weneeditsowecanmakegooddecisionswhenwegoshopping.Advertisingtellsuswhennewandimprovedproductsbecomeavailableandletsusknowwhichoneshavethebestprice.
Throughadvertisingwelearnaboutnewproducts.Forexample,manygrocerystoresnowsellprepackagedlunches.Theseareveryconvenientforbusyparents.Theycangivetheselunchestotheirchildrentotaketoschool.Busyparentsdon’thavetimetolookateveryitemonthestoreshelf,sowithoutadvertisingtheymightnotknowaboutsuchaconvenientnewproduct.
Evenproductswearefamiliarwithmaybeimproved,andadvertisingletsusknowaboutthis.Mostpeopleusecellphones,butnewtypesofcellphoneservicebecomeavailableallthetime.Therearedifferentplansthatgiveyoumorehourstotalkonthephone,youcansendtextmessagesandphotos,andnextweekprobablysomeevennewertypeofservicewillbeavailable.BywatchingadvertisementsonTVitiseasytofindoutaboutnewimprovementstoallkindsofproducts.
Advertisementskeepusinformedaboutprices.Priceschangeallthetime,buteveryonecanlookattheadsinthenewspaperandseewhatthelatestpricesare.Advertisementsalsoinformusaboutsales.Infact,somepeoplebuythenewspaperonlyinordertocheckthepricesandplantheirweeklyshopping.
Advertisementsimproveourlivesbykeepingusinformedaboutthelatestproductsdevelopmentsandthebestprices.Advertisementsserveausefulpurpose.
Somepeoplebelievethatcomputersaremoreahindrancethanahelpintoday'sworld.Othersfeelthattheyaresuchindispensabletoolsthattheywouldnotbeabletoliveorworkwithoutthem.
∙Inwhatwaysarecomputersahindrance?
∙Whatisyouropinion?
∙Theadvanced`Mindmachines'socalled`theComputers'arenodoubtthebestproductsoflatesttechnology.OnecannotimaginetheadvancementoflifeandScienceswithoutthesemachines.
Butlikeotherachievements;theyhavetheirowngoodandbadeffectsasseenwithexperienceandpassageoftime.Inmyopiniontheyaregoodifusedforeducationalandbeneficialusesforhealthandlivingetc.
BasicallytwentiethcenturyhadbeenfamousforitslatestComputertechniquesandtheirapplicationonourlives.DatasshownonComputershelpustoassesshowmucheducationisconductedthroughthismedia.Theassessmentwaysaswellasexaminationsareimproved.MoreoverpersonalskillsofreadingandwritingarefarmoreimprovedthroughComputers.
MoreoverScienceandtechnologyprogressedimmenselywithcomputers.Researcherslikecloningandtransplantsareonlypossiblewithmoderncomputerizedskills.
Goodquestioncomestoonesmind...wherewillthisComputerwouldtakeusnext?
?
Certainlynooneknows!
Wemightexplorenewplanners.MaybewewillbuyhousesonMoon,MarsorJupitor.Orwemightlooseourownidentity.Onecannotforgettheendof2000millenniumwheneverybodywasinchaostothinkwhatwillhappenifthecomputerscrash?
Theaeroplanesweregoingtocrashandthetrainswouldcolloid.ThatShowweareforcedtothinkthatoneshouldnotbedependentonthesemachineafterallwearehumans.Weareheretocommandcomputersnotthemtoorderus.
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∙ThisisananswerwrittenbyacandidatewhoachievedaBand5score.Hereistheexaminer'scomment:
∙Thecandidatehasattemptedtoorganizesomegoodargumentswithvalidexamplesandcomplexideas.Thereissomerelevantvocabulary(cloning)andsynonymsavoidrepetition(badeffectsvhindrance,goodeffectsvhelp).However,theargumentsinparagraph3arenotclearandthe'against'argumentsarecontainedinthefinalparagraph,withnoseparateconclusion.Therearefrequentgrammaticalinaccuracies(scienceandtechnologyprogressed,Researcherslikecloning,wherewillthiscomputerwouldtakeus,thatshowwe).Thisanswerhasalsolostmarksbecauseitistooshort(190words).
Comparetheadvantagesanddisadvantagesofthreeofthefollowingasmediaforcommunicatinginformation.Statewhichyouconsidertobethemosteffective.
∙comics
∙books
∙radio
∙television
∙film
∙theatre
∙Inourdailylife,wealwayscommunicateinformationthroughthemedia,suchastelevision,radio,film,Thesemediahavedifferentadvantagesanddisadvantagesforus.Now,Iamgoingtocomparetheadvantagesanddisadvantagesofbooks,televisionandfilm.
Booksbringusdifferentknowledge.ItbasesonwhatBookweread.AfamousChinesetraditionalversewhichdescribedbooksisatreasure.Wecanfindagoldenhouseinthere.Moreover,whenwewanttoreadit,wecanfinditeasily,suchasbookstore,library.Wecanalsolearnalotofwordsfrombooks.Anditcanimproveourreadingandwritingskills.
However,booksalwaysarenotattractiveforchildrenoryoungster.Itisbecausebooksarequiteboring.Alotofwordsandlesspicturesinsidethebooks,comparetotel