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范文分析

Inmanycountriestoday,theeatinghabitsandlifestyleofchildrenaredifferentfromthoseofpreviousgenerations.Somepeoplesaythishashadanegativeeffectontheirhealth.

Towhatextentdoyouagreeordisagreewiththisopinion?

Ithasrecentlybeensuggestedthatthewaychildreneatandlivenowadayshasledtodeteriorationintheirhealth.Ientirelyagreewiththisview,andbelievethatthisalarmingsituationhascomeaboutforseveralreasons.

Tobeginwith,thereistheworryingincreaseintheamountofprocessedfoodthatchildrenareeatingathome,withlittleornoneofthefreshfruitandvegetablesthatearliergenerationsateeveryday.Secondly,moreandmoreyoungpeoplearechoosingtoeatinfast-foodrestaurants,whichmaybeharmlessoccasionally,butnoteveryday.Whattheyeatthereisextremelyhighinfat,saltandsugar,allofwhichcanbedamagingtotheirhealth.

Thereisalsoadisturbingdeclineintheamountofexercisetheyget.Schoolshavebecomeobsessedwithexams,withtheshockingresultthatsomepupilsnowdonosportsatall.Tomakemattersworse,fewevengetanyexerciseonthewaytoandfromschool,asmostofthemgointheirparents’carsratherthanwalkorcycle.Finally,childrenarespendingfarmoretimeathome,playingcomputergames,watchingTVorsurfingtheInternet.Theynolongerplayoutsidewithfriendsortakepartinchallengingoutdooractivities.

Tosumup,althoughnoneofthesechangescould,onitsown,havecausedwidespreadharmtochildren’shealth,therecanbelittledoubtthatallofthemtogetherhavehadadevastatingeffect.This,inmyopinion,canonlybereversedbyencouragingchildrentoreturntomovetraditionalwaysofeatingandliving.

Thenumberofoverweightchildrenindevelopedcountriesisincreasing.Somepeoplethinkthisisduetoproblemssuchasthegrowingnumberoffastfoodoutlets.Othersbelievethatparentsaretoblamefornotlookingaftertheirchildren'shealth.

Towhatextentdoyouagreewiththeseviews?

Thereisplentyofevidencetosuggestthatchildrenareoverweightandthesituationisgettingworse,accordingtothemedicalexperts.Ifeelthereareanumberofreasonsforthis.

Somepeopleblamethefactthatwearesurroundedbyshopssellingunhealthy,fattyfoodssuchaschipsandfriedchicken,atlowprices.Thishascreatedawholegenerationofadultswhohavenevercookedamealforthemselves.Iftherewerefeweroftheserestaurants,thenchildrenwouldnotbetemptedtobuytake-awayfood.

Thereisanotherargumentthatblamestheparentsforallowingtheirchildrentobecomeoverweight.Itendtoagreewiththisview,becausegoodeatinghabitsbeginearlyinlife,longbeforechildrenstarttovisitfastfoodoutlets.Ifchildrenaregivenchipsandchocolateratherthannourishingfood,orarealwaysallowedtochoosewhattheyeat,theywillgoforthesweetandsaltyfoodseverytime,andthiswillcarryonthroughouttheirlives.

Thereisathirdfactor,however,whichcontributestothesituation.Childrenthesedaystakeverylittleexercise.Theydonotwalktoschool.Whentheygethome,theysitinfrontofthetelevisionortheircomputersandplayvideogames.Notonlyisthisanunhealthypastime,italsogivesthemtimetoeatmorejunkfood.Whattheyneedistogooutsideandplayactivegamesorsport.

Thetwoviewsdiscussedplayanequalroleincontributingtotheproblem,butIthinkwehavetoencourageyoungpeopletobemoreactive,aswellassteeringthemawayfromfastfoodoutletsandbadeatinghabits.Weneedtohaveabalancedapproach.

Position:

Writerreferstoanumberofreasonsintheintroduction,andtotheneedforabalancedviewintheconclusion.

Mainideas:

Firstsentenceofthesecondparagraph;firstandsecondsentencesofthethirdparagraph;secondsentenceofthefourthparagraph.

Linkers:

and,accordingto,somepeople,suchas,if,then,thereisanotherargument,because,or,thereisathirdfactor,however,notonly,also,thetwoviewsdiscussed,but,aswellas

Referencewords:

the,this,who,themselves,these,thisview,they,their,them

Topicvocabulary:

medicalexperts,shops,unhealthy,fattyfoods,chips,cooked,take-awayfood,chocolate,sweetandsalty,exercise,walk,television,computers,videogames,unhealthypastime,junkfood,activegames,sport,fastfoodoutlets

Sentencetypes:

Awiderangeofcomplexstructuresandsentencesisused.

Length:

286words

Somepeoplesaythatadvertisingencouragesustobuythingsthatwereallydonotneed.Otherssaythatadvertisementstellusaboutnewproductsthatmayimproveourlives.

Whichviewpointdoyouagreewith?

Thepurposeofadvertisingistotelltheconsumeraboutanynewproductorserviceoranynewpromotionontheexistingproductandservice.Weneeditsowecanmakegooddecisionswhenwegoshopping.Advertisingtellsuswhennewandimprovedproductsbecomeavailableandletsusknowwhichoneshavethebestprice.

Throughadvertisingwelearnaboutnewproducts.Forexample,manygrocerystoresnowsellprepackagedlunches.Theseareveryconvenientforbusyparents.Theycangivetheselunchestotheirchildrentotaketoschool.Busyparentsdon’thavetimetolookateveryitemonthestoreshelf,sowithoutadvertisingtheymightnotknowaboutsuchaconvenientnewproduct.

Evenproductswearefamiliarwithmaybeimproved,andadvertisingletsusknowaboutthis.Mostpeopleusecellphones,butnewtypesofcellphoneservicebecomeavailableallthetime.Therearedifferentplansthatgiveyoumorehourstotalkonthephone,youcansendtextmessagesandphotos,andnextweekprobablysomeevennewertypeofservicewillbeavailable.BywatchingadvertisementsonTVitiseasytofindoutaboutnewimprovementstoallkindsofproducts.

Advertisementskeepusinformedaboutprices.Priceschangeallthetime,buteveryonecanlookattheadsinthenewspaperandseewhatthelatestpricesare.Advertisementsalsoinformusaboutsales.Infact,somepeoplebuythenewspaperonlyinordertocheckthepricesandplantheirweeklyshopping.

Advertisementsimproveourlivesbykeepingusinformedaboutthelatestproductsdevelopmentsandthebestprices.Advertisementsserveausefulpurpose.

Somepeoplebelievethatcomputersaremoreahindrancethanahelpintoday'sworld.Othersfeelthattheyaresuchindispensabletoolsthattheywouldnotbeabletoliveorworkwithoutthem.

∙Inwhatwaysarecomputersahindrance?

∙Whatisyouropinion?

∙Theadvanced`Mindmachines'socalled`theComputers'arenodoubtthebestproductsoflatesttechnology.OnecannotimaginetheadvancementoflifeandScienceswithoutthesemachines.

Butlikeotherachievements;theyhavetheirowngoodandbadeffectsasseenwithexperienceandpassageoftime.Inmyopiniontheyaregoodifusedforeducationalandbeneficialusesforhealthandlivingetc.

BasicallytwentiethcenturyhadbeenfamousforitslatestComputertechniquesandtheirapplicationonourlives.DatasshownonComputershelpustoassesshowmucheducationisconductedthroughthismedia.Theassessmentwaysaswellasexaminationsareimproved.MoreoverpersonalskillsofreadingandwritingarefarmoreimprovedthroughComputers.

MoreoverScienceandtechnologyprogressedimmenselywithcomputers.Researcherslikecloningandtransplantsareonlypossiblewithmoderncomputerizedskills.

Goodquestioncomestoonesmind...wherewillthisComputerwouldtakeusnext?

?

Certainlynooneknows!

Wemightexplorenewplanners.MaybewewillbuyhousesonMoon,MarsorJupitor.Orwemightlooseourownidentity.Onecannotforgettheendof2000millenniumwheneverybodywasinchaostothinkwhatwillhappenifthecomputerscrash?

Theaeroplanesweregoingtocrashandthetrainswouldcolloid.ThatShowweareforcedtothinkthatoneshouldnotbedependentonthesemachineafterallwearehumans.Weareheretocommandcomputersnotthemtoorderus.

∙（249words）

∙ThisisananswerwrittenbyacandidatewhoachievedaBand5score.Hereistheexaminer'scomment:

∙Thecandidatehasattemptedtoorganizesomegoodargumentswithvalidexamplesandcomplexideas.Thereissomerelevantvocabulary（cloning）andsynonymsavoidrepetition（badeffectsvhindrance,goodeffectsvhelp）.However,theargumentsinparagraph3arenotclearandthe'against'argumentsarecontainedinthefinalparagraph,withnoseparateconclusion.Therearefrequentgrammaticalinaccuracies（scienceandtechnologyprogressed,Researcherslikecloning,wherewillthiscomputerwouldtakeus,thatshowwe）.Thisanswerhasalsolostmarksbecauseitistooshort（190words）.

Comparetheadvantagesanddisadvantagesofthreeofthefollowingasmediaforcommunicatinginformation.Statewhichyouconsidertobethemosteffective.

∙comics

∙books

∙radio

∙television

∙film

∙theatre

∙Inourdailylife,wealwayscommunicateinformationthroughthemedia,suchastelevision,radio,film,Thesemediahavedifferentadvantagesanddisadvantagesforus.Now,Iamgoingtocomparetheadvantagesanddisadvantagesofbooks,televisionandfilm.

Booksbringusdifferentknowledge.ItbasesonwhatBookweread.AfamousChinesetraditionalversewhichdescribedbooksisatreasure.Wecanfindagoldenhouseinthere.Moreover,whenwewanttoreadit,wecanfinditeasily,suchasbookstore,library.Wecanalsolearnalotofwordsfrombooks.Anditcanimproveourreadingandwritingskills.

However,booksalwaysarenotattractiveforchildrenoryoungster.Itisbecausebooksarequiteboring.Alotofwordsandlesspicturesinsidethebooks,comparetotel