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中考冲刺之写作范文点评及素材积累

中考冲刺之写作范文点评及素材积累

作文素材积累

（一）

话题:

Socialrelationship

作文题目1:

 Howtokeepaperfectrelationshipamongfriends/ studentsandteachers

相关词汇：

sharehappiness,  givesb.suggestionson,agreatrespect,begoodtosomeone,makefriendswithsomebody,getonwellwithsb.

重要句型：

Itisimportantforsb.todosth.

          Friendshipcanmakeus…

          Makefriendswithapersonwho…

          Giveyourfriendahandwhenheorsheisintrouble.

Possibleversions（基础版）:

WhenIfirstsatinschool’sdesks,

（1）Ireallydidn’tknowhowtogetalongwellwithotherpupilsespeciallytheteachersaroundme.

（2）Ievenfeltalittleshyandafraidtotalktoteachersatthattime.But,afterseveralweeks,Ifoundsometeacherswereverykindtouspupils,andotherslookedabitserious.（3）Theyareverystrictwithus.

Bynow,Ihavebecomeamiddleschoolstudent,andgotmoreideasabouttherelationshipbetweenstudentsandteachers.（4）Inmyopinion,teacherssometimesfeellikeourparents.Theygiveussuggestionsonourstudyandlife.Sometimes,teacherstalkwithusaboutfilms,books,cartoons,andsomeotherthingsweareinterestedin,justlikeourclosefriends.AtschoolIoftenaskmyteacherdifferentkindsofquestions,andtheyalwaysshowsgreatpatienttodiscusswithme.

（5）Schoolistheplacewherewespendmostofourdays,andteachersgiveussomuchunderstandingandhelp.MyclassmatesandIhavegreatrespecttoourteachers.Thismakesourschoollifemoreinterestingandhelpful.

点评：

1、该句运用了短语getalongwellwithsb.,表示与某人相处的好，especially表示尤其是、特别是。

2、Beafraidtodosth,害怕做某事

3、Bestrictwith,对某人严厉

4、Inmyopinion在我看来

5、定语从句，引导词是where，表地点

Possibleversions提高版:

Everyoneneedsfriendstosharelifeandfeelings.

（1）But,howtokeepaperfectrelationshipwithourfriendsisalsoaproblemforustodealwith.Ithinkfriendsshouldbehonesttoeachother.Weallneedhelp,soweallneedtogivehelp.

（2）Youcannevercheatyourfriendsorlookdownuponthemwhennevertheyarerichorpoor.Oneshouldhelpaperson  introuble,becausewemakefriendsnotonlyforourwonbenefits（利益）.（3）Ibelieveafriendinneedisafriendindeed.Anotheropinion,（4）Itisespeciallyimportantforonetomakeyourfriendsfeeltheyareveryimportanttoyou.Thatistosay,atanytimeyoushouldbereadytolistentoyourfriendsandbegladtosharefeelingswiththem.（5）Tryingtotalkingaboutthingswhichbothofyouareinterestedinisveryimportantforkeepaperfectrelationshipbetweenfriends.Anyway,tomakeandkeepaperfectrelationshipisaprocessofcommunication,andwehavetolearnandpracticemorewhilewegetonwithourfriends.

点评：

1.对某人来说做某事存在问题要用Itisaproblemforsb.Todosth.

2.Lookdownuponsb.瞧不起某人

3.谚语互相帮助的朋友才是真正的朋友

4.Itis+adj./adv.+forsb.todosth.It作形式主语，表示对某人来说做某事怎样

5.定语从句，which是先行词

作文题目2：

 Keepaperfectrelationshipamongfamilymembers

相关词汇：

 bestrictwith,introuble,bealwaysreadytohelp,getonwellwith…,takecareof,chatwitheachother   

重要句型：

Youarenotonlymygoodparentsbutalsomyteachers.

           Firstofall…,Second…,Thelastbutnottheleast…

Possibleversion（基础版）

Canparentsbefriends

Parentsgivetheiralllovetotheirchildren,

（1）butsomestudentsthinkitimpossibletomakefriendswiththem.

（2）Theythinktheirparentsaretoobusytocareaboutthem.（3）ButIbelieveIcanmakefriendswiththem.  Firstofall,theyaresoexperiencedthattheycanhelpussolvethedifficulties.（4）Second,whenwefailintheexam,theyalwaysencourageusnottogiveup.（5）Thelastbutnotleast,theyareourgoodteachersaswellasparents,theyspendalotoftimeteachingushowtobeausefulperson. （6）Inmyopinion,weshoulddevelopagoodrelationshipwithourparents.

点评：

1、it作形式主语，makefriendswith和某人交朋友

2、too...to...太...而不能...

3、宾语从句

4、giveup放弃

5、thelastbutnotleast最后一点aswellas也

6、Inmyopinion,依我来看

Possibleversion（提高版）:

   Keepanidealparent-childrenrelationship

（1）Peoplealwayssay,“Homeisawarmharbor.”Ithinkthat’strue,andIbelievethatanidealparent-childrenrelationshipisthebaseofthisharbor.

（2）So,parentsandchildrenshouldmaketheireffortstokeepanidealrelationship.Parentsgavelivestousandtheytakecareofusonthewayofourgrowth,soweshouldtreatourparentswithkindness.（3）It’sveryimportantforustostudywell,becausethatmaybetheirbestwishes.（4）We’dbetterhelpthemdosomehousework,too.Thatmaymakethemgetmorepleasure.Sometimeswemayhavedifferentideaswithourparents.（5）Inordertoletparentsrespectourchoices,weshouldexchangeideaswithparentsintime.Ofcourse,ifparentstreatuslikefriends,wecanhavemoreencouragementandchancestotalkwiththemfreely,andfamiliescangetmoreunderstandingandrespectfromeachother. Keepanidealparent-childrenrelationship,andmoreeffectiveandhelpfuladvicebyparentswillhelpusalot.（6）Asaresult,ourfamilylifewillgetmuchhappier.

点评：

1、引用谚语家是一个温暖的港湾

2、Makeeffortstodosth.尽力做某事

3、Itis+adj./adv.+forsb.todosth.It作形式主语，表示对某人来说做某事怎样

4、Hadbatterdosth.最好做某事

5、Inorderto为了表目的

6、Asaresult因此表示结果

 推荐关于这个话题的好句子5-20句：

（前面几句最好是简单易学、易记的。

）

1.       Everyoneneedsfriends.Friendshipcanmakeushappier.

Everyone作主语，谓语动词单数happier,比较级，表示交友能使我们更开心

2.       Ilearntalotfromyou.

Learnfromsb.向某人学习

3.       Friendshipisoneofthemostimportantthingsineveryone'slife.

最高级的用法

4.       Wealwaysplayedbasketballontheplaygroundandhadagoodtime.

频率副词always；玩的开心haveagoodtime

5.       Doyoustillrememberthedayswhenwewenttotheparktogether?

Therewespentmostofourfreetime.

表示时间的定语从句先行词是when

6.       Inmyeyes,youareanoutgoingboywhocanalwaysgivemeahandwhenIamintrouble.

who引导的定语从句；givesb.ahand帮助某人；introuble遇到困难

7.       Inmyopinion,weshoulddevelopagoodrelationshipwithourparents.

developagoodrelationshipwithsb.某人处好关系

8.       Inourfreetime,we’dbetterdosomethingwecantohelpourparents.

Hadbetterdosth.最好做某事

9.       Afriendinneedisafriendindeed.

谚语提供帮助的朋友才是真朋友

10.   Whenyou'redown,friendscanliftyouup.Whenyouloseyourway,friendsguideyouandcheeryouon.

Liftsb.up=cheersb.on使某人振作

11.   Alifewithoutafriendisalifewithoutsun.

谚语没有朋友就像生活中没有阳光

学生作文素材积累

（二）

话题:

Sports

作文题目1:

Myfavouritesport

相关词汇：

favourite,keephealthy,feelconfident

重要句型：

l         Theyaremanydifferentformsofexercisetosuitdifferenttastes.

l         Moreandmorepeopletodayarerealizingtheimportanceofregularphysicalexercise

l         Takingexercisescankeepusstrongandfit,whichcankeepusfrommanydiseases.

l         Tohaveasoundmindforstudy,wemustkeepourbodiesfit.

l         Doingsportseverydayhelpsuskeepenergeticandhealthy.

l         Sportshelptokeeppeoplehealthy,makepeoplewise,trainpeople’scharacters,andaboveall,helppeopletolivehappily.

l         Playingtabletennisismyfavouritesport.Ithasnotonlybuiltupmyhealth,butalsomyconfidentinstudy.

l         Wecangainknowledgeandlearnnewskillsbyplayinggames.

老师上课可以提的引发学生思考的问题：

Ø         Isitimportantforustohavsports?

Ø         What’syourfavouritesport?

Ø         Howdoyouhavesports?

（when,where,withwhom...）

Ø         Whatcanyoubenefitfromsports?

Possibleversions（基础版）:

    Myfavouritesports

TherearemanykindsofsportsthatIenjoy,suchasswimming,running,anddancing.However,thesportthatIlikemostisbasketball.WhenIwasinthejuniorhighschool,Istartedtoplaybasketballinschool.Atthattime,IfoundIhadloveddeeplythissport.Now,IwouldliketowatchbasketballgamesasmuchasIcan.Thebasketballgameshavegivenmethemostwonderfultimeinmylife.

文章开头第一句用Therebe句型导入表达思想清楚，紧接着用However切入，紧扣主题，但是全文句子结构单一,句式简单。

      Myfavouritesports

    Sportshelpeveryonetokeephealthy,happy,andefficient.SoIpayspecialattentiontogames,especiallytable-tennis.Tabletennisismyfavoritegame.Iplayitalmosteveryday.

Table-tennisisanidealgametousbecauseitbringsthewholebodyintoaction.Itstrengthensourmuscles,expandsourlungs,promotesthecirculationoftheblood,andcausesahealthyactionoftheskin.Besides,itisveryamusinganddoesnotcostusmuchmoney.Table-tennisisverymoderate;itisnotsoroughasfootball.Itisanindoorgameandcanbeplayedevenonrainydays.Thus,itismyfavoritekindofexercise.

该文主题突出，论述充分而有层次。

句子之间衔接自然，逻辑性强。

文中词语搭配讲究，符合英语表态习惯，strengthensourmuscles,expandsourlungs,promotesthecirculationoftheblood,andcausesahealthyactionoftheskin等词语的恰当搭配，充分说明了table-tennis是anidealgame。

Myfavouritesports

Nowadays,moreandmoreteenagersenjoyplayingbasketballbecauseitisveryinterestingandexciting.Iamnoexception.Inmyopinion,itismorethanaballgamebecauseithasgivenmesomuchthatIshouldbethankfultoit.First,Ifeelexcitedwhenwatchingthegame.WhenIconcentrateonwatchingthegame,IwillfeelIampartofthegame.IthastaughtmethatifIwanttodosomethingwell.Ishouldputmyheartintoit.Then,whenIplaybasketball,Icanbuildupmybody.Beforeplayingbasketball,I’mafrequentvisitortothehospital.ButsinceIstartedtoplaybasketball,Ihavebeeningoodhealth.Moreover,itisalsoaplatformtoshowmyselfandgivemeconfidenceinmyself.Lastbutnotleast,ithastaughtmetobelieveothers.Basketballgamesaskforteamwork,andyoucan’twinthematchbyyourself.Youshouldbelieveyourfriend,yourteammatesandyourself.Briefly,Ishouldexpressthankstomyfavouritesport,basketball,becauseithasgivenmepleasure,