中考冲刺之写作范文点评及素材积累.docx

1、中考冲刺之写作范文点评及素材积累中考冲刺之写作范文点评及素材积累作文素材积累（一）话题: Social relationship作文题目1:How to keep a perfect relationship among friends/students and teachers相关词汇：share happiness,give sb. suggestions on , a great respect , be good to someone, make friends with somebody, get on well with sb.重要句型：It is important for sb

2、. to do sth.Friend ship can make us Make friends with a person whoGive your friend a hand when he or she is in trouble.Possible versions(基础版):When I first sat in schools desks, （1）I really didnt know how to get along well with other pupils especially the teachers around me. （2）I even felt a little s

3、hy and afraid to talk to teachers at that time. But, after several weeks, I found some teachers were very kind to us pupils, and others looked a bit serious. （3）They are very strict with us.By now, I have become a middle school student, and got more ideas about the relationship between students and

4、teachers.（4） In my opinion, teachers sometimes feel like our parents. They give us suggestions on our study and life. Sometimes, teachers talk with us about films, books, cartoons, and some other things we are interested in, just like our close friends. At school I often ask my teacher different kin

5、ds of questions, and they always shows great patient to discuss with me.（5）School is the place where we spend most of our days, and teachers give us so much understanding and help. My classmates and I have great respect to our teachers. This makes our school life more interesting and helpful.点评：1、该句

6、运用了短语get along well with sb.,表示与某人相处的好，especially表示尤其是、特别是。2、Be afraid to do sth,害怕做某事3、Be strict with,对某人严厉4、In my opinion 在我看来5、定语从句，引导词是where，表地点Possible versions提高版:Everyone needs friends to share life and feelings. （1）But, how to keep a perfect relationship with our friends is also a problem fo

7、r us to deal with. I think friends should be honest to each other. We all need help, so we all need to give help. (2)You can never cheat your friends or look down upon them when never they are rich or poor. One should help a personin trouble, because we make friends not only for our won benefits(利益)

8、.（3） I believe a friend in need is a friend indeed. Another opinion, （4）It is especially important for one to make your friends feel they are very important to you. That is to say, at anytime you should be ready to listen to your friends and be glad to share feelings with them. （5）Trying to talking

9、about things which both of you are interested in is very important for keep a perfect relationship between friends. Anyway, to make and keep a perfect relationship is a process of communication, and we have to learn and practice more while we get on with our friends.点评：1.对某人来说做某事存在问题 要用It is a probl

10、em for sb. To do sth. 2.Look down up on sb. 瞧不起某人3.谚语 互相帮助的朋友才是真正的朋友4.It is+adj./adv.+for sb. to do sth.It 作形式主语，表示对某人来说做某事怎样5.定语从句，which是先行词作文题目2：Keep a perfect relationship among family members相关词汇：be strict with , in trouble, be always ready to help, get on well with, take care of, chat with each

11、 other重要句型：You are not only my good parents but also my teachers.First of all, Second, The last but not the leastPossible version(基础版)Can parents be friendsParents give their all love to their children, （1）but some students think it impossible to make friends with them. （2）They think their parents a

12、re too busy to care about them. （3）But I believe I can make friends with them.First of all, they are so experienced that they can help us solve the difficulties.（4）Second, when we fail in the exam, they always encourage us not to give up.（5） The last but not least, they are our good teachers as well

13、 as parents, they spend a lot of time teaching us how to be a useful person.（6）In my opinion, we should develop a good relationship with our parents.点评：1、it作形式主语，make friends with 和某人交朋友2、too.to.太.而不能.3、宾语从句4、give up放弃5、the last but not least最后一点 as well as 也6、In my opinion,依我来看Possible version(提高版)

14、:Keep an ideal parent-children relationship （1）People always say, “Home is a warm harbor.” I think thats true, and I believe that an ideal parent-children relationship is the base of this harbor. （2）So, parents and children should make their efforts to keep an ideal relationship. Parents gave lives

15、to us and they take care of us on the way of our growth, so we should treat our parents with kindness. （3）Its very important for us to study well, because that may be their best wishes. （4）Wed better help them do some housework, too. That may make them get more pleasure.Sometimes we may have differe

16、nt ideas with our parents. （5）In order to let parents respect our choices, we should exchange ideas with parents in time. Of course, if parents treat us like friends, we can have more encouragement and chances to talk with them freely, and families can get more understanding and respect from each ot

17、her.Keep an ideal parent-children relationship, and more effective and helpful advice by parents will help us a lot. （6）As a result, our family life will get much happier.点评：1、引用谚语 家是一个温暖的港湾2、Make efforts to do sth.尽力做某事3、It is+adj./adv.+for sb. to do sth.It 作形式主语，表示对某人来说做某事怎样4、Had batter do sth.最好做

18、某事5、In order to 为了 表目的6、As a result因此 表示结果推荐关于这个话题的好句子5-20句：(前面几句最好是简单易学、易记的。)1.Every one needs friends. Friendship can make us happier.Every one 作主语，谓语动词单数 happier,比较级，表示交友能使我们更开心2.I learnt a lot from you.Learn from sb. 向某人学习3.Friendship is one of the most important things in everyones life.最高级的用法4

19、.We always played basketball on the playground and had a good time.频率副词always ；玩的开心 have a good time5.Do you still remember the days when we went to the park together? There we spent most of our free time.表示时间的定语从句 先行词是when6.In my eyes, you are an outgoing boy who can always give me a hand when I am

20、 in trouble.who引导的定语从句；give sb. a hand 帮助某人；in trouble遇到困难7.In my opinion, we should develop a good relationship with our parents.develop a good relationship with sb. 某人处好关系8.In our free time, wed better do something we can to help our parents.Had better do sth.最好做某事9.A friend in need is a friend in

21、deed.谚语 提供帮助的朋友才是真朋友10.When youre down, friends can lift you up. When you lose your way, friends guide you and cheer you on.Lift sb. up=cheer sb. on使某人振作11.A life without a friend is a life without sun.谚语 没有朋友就像生活中没有阳光学生作文素材积累（二）话题:Sports作文题目1: My favourite sport相关词汇：favourite, keep healthy, feel co

22、nfident重要句型：lThey are many different forms of exercise to suit different tastes.lMore and more people today are realizing the importance of regular physical exerciselTaking exercises can keep us strong and fit, which can keep us from many diseases.lTo have a sound mind for study, we must keep our bo

23、dies fit.lDoing sports everyday helps us keep energetic and healthy.lSports help to keep people healthy, make people wise, train peoples characters, and above all, help people to live happily.lPlaying table tennis is my favourite sport. It has not only built up my health, but also my confident in st

24、udy.lWe can gain knowledge and learn new skills by playing games.老师上课可以提的引发学生思考的问题：Is it important for us to hav sports?Whats your favourite sport?How do you have sports?(when,where, with whom.)What can you benefit from sports?Possible versions(基础版):My favourite sportsThere are many kinds of sports

25、that I enjoy, such as swimming, running, and dancing. However, the sport that I like most is basketball. When I was in the junior high school, I started to play basketball in school. At that time, I found I had loved deeply this sport. Now, I would like to watch basketball games as much as I can. Th

26、e basketball games have given me the most wonderful time in my life.文章开头第一句用There be句型导入表达思想清楚，紧接着用However切入，紧扣主题，但是全文句子结构单一,句式简单。My favourite sportsSports help everyone to keep healthy, happy, and efficient. So I pay special attention to games, especially table-tennis. Table tennis is my favorite g

27、ame. I play it almost every day.Table-tennis is an ideal game to us because it brings the whole body into action. It strengthens our muscles, expands our lungs, promotes the circulation of the blood, and causes a healthy action of the skin. Besides, it is very amusing and does not cost us much money

28、. Table-tennis is very moderate; it is not so rough as football. It is an indoor game and can be played even on rainy days. Thus, it is my favorite kind of exercise. 该文主题突出，论述充分而有层次。句子之间衔接自然，逻辑性强。文中词语搭配讲究，符合英语表态习惯，strengthens our muscles, expands our lungs, promotes the circulation of the blood, and

29、 causes a healthy action of the skin等词语的恰当搭配，充分说明了table-tennis是an ideal game。My favourite sportsNowadays, more and more teenagers enjoy playing basketball because it is very interesting and exciting. I am no exception. In my opinion, it is more than a ball game because it has given me so much that I

30、 should be thankful to it. First, I feel excited when watching the game. When I concentrate on watching the game, I will feel I am part of the game. It has taught me that if I want to do something well. I should put my heart into it. Then, when I play basketball , I can build up my body. Before play

31、ing basketball, Im a frequent visitor to the hospital. But since I started to play basketball, I have been in good health. Moreover, it is also a platform to show myself and give me confidence in myself. Last but not least, it has taught me to believe others. Basketball games ask for team work, and you cant win the match by yourself. You should believe your friend, your teammates and yourself. Briefly, I should express thanks to my favourite sport, basketball , because it has given me pleasure,