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tfoundanythingIwasgoodat.Onesunnyafternoon,ourgymclasswentouttotheschool'
srunningtrack.Theteachertaughtusallvarioustrackandfieldevents.Iwasaloserinallofthem.Thencamethejavelin(标枪).Suddenlysomethinginsidemebegansaying,“Tryit!
Tryit"
Ihadtowaitmyturn,though,becauseseveralotherswantedabreaktoo.Shyandscared.Iwatchedthem,tryingnottolooktooeager.Finally,wheneveryonehadhadachancetothrow-thebestthrowgoingabout30yards-Ilookedattheteacher.
“Hey,Orowitz,youwanttotry?
”heasked.
Embarrassed,Ilookeddown,butmanagedtonodmyhead
“Well.comeonthen."
hesaidimpatiently,andhandedmethejavelin.BehindmeIcouldhearsomeofmyclassmateslaughing.AsIgraspedtheJavelininmyhand.Iwasseizedwithastrangefeeling-anew-foundexcitement.Forsomecrazyreason,IwasrelaxedoverwhatIwasabouttodo,eventhoughI’dneverdoneitbefore.Iraisedthejavelinovermyhead,tooksixquickstepsandletthethinggo.Thesamevoicethathadurgedmeintothrowingit,nowtoldmeitwasagoodthrow.
注意:
1.所续写短文的词数应为150左右
2.应使用5个以上短文中标有下划线的关键词语
3.续写部分分为两段,每段的开头语已经为你写好
4.续写完成后,请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。
Paragraph1
Iwatchedasthespeartookoff.Myheartbeatfaster,
Paragraph2:
ThatnightItookthejavelinhomewithme.
步骤一:
根据时间顺序提炼原文3-5个主要情节,并确定主题,主题偏向于积极正能量
原文情节
(1):
IusedtobelieveIwasnotgoodatanythinguntilonesmalleventchangedmymind.
原文情节
(2):
Duringagymclass,IgotexcitedaboutthejavelinevenbeforeItriedit.
原文情节(3):
Theteacheraskedmetotryitandmyclassmatewerelaughing
主题:
talent
步骤二:
结合原文情节、续写段首语、主题3个要素推理出4个左右续写情节,并确定关键词
Paragraph1:
根据原文情节
(1)和原文情节(3)可推断
续写情节①:
Ithrewthejavelinfarmorethan30yardsoutandallmyclassmateswereamazed
从paragraph2段首语可知:
续写情节②:
Thegymteacheraskedmetokeepthejavelin.
paragraphI关键词:
30yards,gymteacher,EugeneOrowitz
Paragraph2:
从paragraph2段首语可推断:
续写情节③:
Itoldmyfather/motherwhathadhappenedandhe/sheencouragedme.
根据主题和原文情节
(1)可推断:
续写情节④:
Iworkedhard,andachievedsuccessinjavelin
paragraph2关键词trackthebestthrow.talent
步骤三
运用“3w”法(what、how、why)给每个续写情节添加1-2个描写,使文章连贯
Ithrewthejavelinfarmorethan30yardsoutandallmyclassmateswereamazed.
Question:
Howdidthejavelinland?
(动作描写)
HowwereallmyclassmatesandIamazed?
(情绪描写)
参考答案:
Iwatchedasthespeartookoff.Myheartbeatfaster,asIsawitcontinued
tofly,30yardsout,then40anditwasstillgoing.Suddenly,someoneexclaimed,“50yards.It’s50yards.”Soamazedweremyclassmatesthattheyallbegantoclaptheirhands.Hearingthem
cheeringforme,IfeltasifIhadbeendreaming.
Thegymteacheraskedmetokeepthejavelin
Question:
Whatdidthegymteachersaytome?
(语言描写+情绪描写)
参考答案
Still,Itookthejavelinbacktothegymteacher."
EugeneOrowitz,awidesmilespread
onhisface.Iwantyoutokeepthejavelin.hopingitwillremindyouthatyouareverygifted
Paragraph2
Question:
Whatdidmyfather/mothersaytome?
(语言描写)
ThatnightItookthejavelinhomewithme.Itoldmyfatherwhathadhappenedhepattedmeontheshoulder,"
Son.Iamsogladthatyouhavefoundyourtalent.Promisemethatyoudon'
twasteit.”HiswordsmadeadeepImpressiononmeandIwasinspired
续写情节④Iworkedhard,andachievedsuccessinjavelin.
WhatdidIachieve?
WhatdidIlearnfromtheexperience?
(发表感悟)
Sincethen,Ipracticedhardandmadeittotheschooltrackteam.Inthesameyear,Ithrewthejavelin211feet,thebestthrowbyanyhigh-schoolboyinthecountry.Haditnotbeenforthesmallevent,Iwouldn’thavefoundandthenfulfilledmypotential.Eventoday.Iamconstantlyremindedoftheexperience,whereIwastaughtthelessonthateveryonehasatalentandyouareabletofinditandmakeuseofit
二、情绪描写之复杂结构
1.从句的使用What+情绪v+sb.+is/was+that从句
Eg.Whatsurprisedmewasthattheshyboywaswillingtoaccepthelpfromothers.
[句式翻译1]令他感到尴尬的是他在聚会上摔了一跤。
[句式翻译2]令我们感到震惊的是他一年可以读五百本书。
[句式翻译3]今她感到失望的是她的男朋友约会迟到了一个小时。
[句式翻译4]令我们感到好笑的是他从来没有认真实行他的节食计划。
[句式填空1]Whatconfusedmeaboutherwasthat
[句式填空2]thatsomeonewasknockingatthedoorwhileIwassleeping.
[句式填空3]Whatdelightedhisfatherwasthat
[句式填空4]thatshehadnotheardfromhersonforaweek
2.So+情绪adj.+部分倒装+that从句
e.g.Soangrywashethathethrewthevaseonthefloor.
[句式翻译1]这个小女孩感到如此羞愧,以至于都不敢看她爸爸的眼睛。
[句式翻译2]这个歌手如此紧张,以至于忘记了歌词(lyrics)
[句式翻译3]老师对于他这次考试的分数感到如此惊讶,以至于怀疑他是作弊的。
[句式翻译4]老板对于他的表现感到如此满意,以至于给他加了薪水。
[句式填空1]Hearingthenews,soexciteddidhefeelthat
[句式填空2]thatheimmediatelyfellasleep.
[句式填空3]Sosadwasshewhenshelefthermotherthat
[句式填空4]thathelosthistemper.
3.With+情绪n./Toone's+情绪n
e.g.Withanger,shedroppedthevaseonthefloor
Tomygreatsatisfaction,myhusbandmanagedtogiveupsmoking
[句式翻译1]听说取得了唱歌比赛第一名,他兴奋地跳了起来。
[句式翻译2]没有收到圣诞礼物,小女孩失望地看着外面正在下的雪。
[句式翻译3]令他遗憾的是,他因为考驾照而错过了演唱会
[句式翻译4]使乘客们惊恐的是,水流入了船舱,船开始下沉。
[句式填空1]Afterherbirthdayparty,Janestartedtounwrapthepresents
[句式填空2]withembarrassment.
[句式填空3]Muchtomysurprise,theoldwoman
[句式填空4]hedoctortoldthemtheoperationwassuccessful
4.,sb.feltasif+虚拟语气
Lookingatthetrainleaving,hefeltasifhewouldneverseeheragain.
[句式翻译1]走在寂静而空旷的小路上,她感觉有人在跟着她
[句式翻译2]看着家人一起拍的老照片,他感觉自己回到了童年。
[句式翻译3]听到自己被哈佛大学录取的消息,他感觉自己在做梦一样
[句式翻译4]她的小狗死的那一刻,这个小女孩感觉自己失去了一个亲人
[句式填空1]Exposedtotheburningsunshine,Ifeltasif
[句式填空2]IfeltasifIhadbeeninaparadise.
[句式填空3]Havingeatennothingforthreedays,hefeltasif
[句式填空4],hefeltasifhecouldtouchthesky.
三、情绪描写之发表感悟
1.if过去的虚拟倒装
e.g.Haditnotbeenformyteachershelp,Iwouldn’thavewonthemathcompetition
Hadmyteachernotofferedmehelp,Iwouldn’thavewonthemathcompetition
[句式翻译1]要不是这次难忘的经历,我本不会学到如此珍贵的一课
[句式翻译2]要是当时我能够冷静地控制我的情绪,我们本不会吵架.
[句式翻译3]要不是你的慷慨帮助,我本不够渡过那个艰难的时期
[句式翻译4]要是我当时不粗心大意,我本能够避免如此尴尬的局面。
2.强调句
e.g.Itwasmyfathersencouragementthatmadememoreconfidentthaneverbefore
[句式翻译1]正是Rani的友好和温暖的微笑让我得到了安慰。
[句式翻译2]正是他的话语让我从自己羞愧感中解脱出来并且感觉到喜悦。
[句式翻译3]正是Lorry的冷静才使这个妇女得以保住性命。
[句式翻译4]正是我妈妈的无私使我对自己充满了自豪。
2.综合运用
e.g.Haditnotbeenformydaughterskindacttowardsthebagger.Iwouldn’thaveknownwhat
wastruekindness.Eventoday,Iamconstantlyremindedoftheexperience,whereIwastaughtthelessonthatitisofferingothershelpwithouthesitationthatmakesakindheart
[句式转换1]Fromthisexperience,Ibegantotrulyknowtheoldman.Ilearntthatwhetheryoungorold,aslongasyouhavepassion,youwillmakeadifference.
[句式转换2]Thelocalshelpedmegothroughallthedifficulties.heymademerealizethatwhatreallymattersisnotwhatIcangetformyself,buthowwecanallmakeitthroughtogether
[句式转换3]Hismotherthankedme,simplybecauseIpraisedthekidaccidentally,afterwhichhegraduallybecameadifferentPerson.Itoccurredtomethatsometimes,alittleencouragementwillhelpmakeaconfidentperson.
[句式转换4]Isimplybakedbiscuitswiththechildren,butIlearnedaninvaluablelessonfromit
fixingkids"
problemsdoesn’talwaysgivehopefortheireducation;
butinstead,findingwhatexcitesthemandthenmakingfulloftheexcitementdoes.
动
作
描
写
动作描写之词汇替换
1.walk
wander闲逛
march坚定行进
stagger摇摆不定地走
crawl缓慢行进
tiptoe惦着脚走
limp一瘸一拐走
2.run
rush冲
dash快跑
flee快速逃走
hurry急匆匆地走
chargeat冲向
fly飞一样地跑
3.see
catchsightof看到
getaglimpseof瞥见
notice注意到
spot发现
find发现
discover发现
4.look
gaze凝视
stare盯着
glance扫视
glare怒视
watch观察
observe观察
5.eat
chew咀嚼
dine吃饭
swallow吞咽
taste品尝
finish吃完
sip小口喝
6.beat
hit击打
strike猛打
break打破
pound重击
knock敲击
punch用拳头打
pat轻拍
tap轻敲
break粉碎
7.say
tell告诉
ask问
answer回答
reply回答
whisper轻声说
exclaim大声说
shout叫喊着说
interrupt打断
state申明
claim声称
complain抱怨
explain解释
insist坚持
order命名
request请求
demand强烈要求
suggest建议
recommend推荐
repeat重复
argue争论
thank感谢
apologize道歉
add补充
blurtout脱口而出
二、动作描写之复杂结构
1.谓语动词A,谓语动词Band+谓语动词C
e.g.WangMeiputherhandintoherpocket,tookoutherredcellandpressedthetalkkey
[句式翻译1]男孩们兴奋地冲向湖边,脱掉衣服,跳入水中
[句式翻译2]他吃完早饭,戴上帽子,急冲冲地走出了家门。
[句式翻译3]她突然停下脚步,环顾四周,发现周围什么也没有。
[句式翻译4]这个参赛选手扫视了一下台下的观众,深吸一口气,开始演唱。
[句式填空1]Onthecollectionday,thepoorgirl,
anddroppedtwocoinsintothecollectionbox.
[句式填空2]Thewomanstoppedatthewindowofherfavoriteclothesstore,
and.
[句式填空3]Theshyboy,hesitatedforawhile.and
.
[句式填空4]Iheman,handedherabunchofflowersand
said,””.
2.V+ing短语,+主句
e.g.Standinginalon