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高三英语写作失分点讲解
Overview
教案撰稿人
完稿时间
审核人
审核时间
课程进度
第次课
课程标题
注意高考失分点
学生对象：
高三
教学目标
1．准确掌握写作常见失分点
教学安排一览
事项
时间
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复习上次课的内容
5分钟
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批改并讲评上次课的家庭作业
10分钟
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引入本课内容-
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讲解重点考点及相关习题
60分钟
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课堂巩固练习及评讲
30分钟
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总结本次课所学内容及布置回家作业
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Review
1,对上次课内容的回顾
2，对上次课作业的评讲
Introduction
Handout1快速阅读
BeautyandBodyImageintheMedia
Imagesoffemalebodiesareeverywhere.Women—andtheirbodyparts—selleverythingfromfoodtocars.Popularfilmandtelevisionactressesarebecomingyounger,tallerandthinner.Somehaveevenbeenknowntofaintonthesetfromlackoffood.Women’smagazinesarefullofarticlesurgingthatiftheycanjustlosethoselasttwentypounds,they’llhaveitall—theperfectmarriage,lovingchildren,greatsex,andarewardingcareer.
Whyarestandardsofbeautybeingimposedonwomen,themajorityofwhomarenaturallylargerandmorematurethananyofthemodels?
Theroots,someanalystssay,areeconomic.Bypresentinganidealdifficulttoachieveandmaintain,thecosmeticanddietproductindustriesareassuredofgrowthandprofits.
Andit’snoaccidentthatyouthisincreasinglypromoted,alongwiththinness,asanessentialcriterionofbeauty.Ifnotallwomenneedtoloseweight,forsurethey’reallaging,saystheQuebecActionNetworkforWomen’sHealthinits2001report.And,accordingtotheindustry,ageisadisasterthatneedstobedealtwith.
Thestakesarehuge.Ontheonehand,womenwhoareinsecureabouttheirbodiesaremorelikelytobuybeautyproducts,newclothes,anddietaids.Itisestimatedthatthedietindustryaloneisworthanywherebetween40to100billion（U.S.）ayearsellingtemporaryweightloss（90to95%ofdietersregainthelostweight）.Ontheotherhand,researchindicatesthatexposuretoimagesofthin,young,air-brushedfemalebodiesislinkedtodepression,lossofself-esteemandthedevelopmentofunhealthyeatinghabitsinwomenandgirls.
TheAmericanresearchgroupAnorexiaNervosa&RelatedEatingDisorders,Inc.saysthatoneoutofeveryfourcollege-agedwomenusesunhealthymethodsofweightcontrol—includingfasting,skippingmeals,excessiveexercise,laxative（泻药）abuse,andself-inducedvomiting.Thepressuretobethinisalsoaffectingyounggirls:
theCanadianWomen’sHealthNetworkwarnsthatweightcontrolmeasuresarenowbeingtakenbygirlsasyoungas5and6.Americanstatisticsaresimilar.Severalstudies,suchasoneconductedbyMarikaTiggemannandLevinaClarkin2006titled“AppearanceCultureinNine-to12-Year-OldGirls:
MediaandPeerInfluencesonBodyDissatisfaction,”indicatethatnearlyhalfofallpreadolescentgirlswishtobethinner,andasaresulthaveengagedinadietorareawareoftheconceptofdieting.In2003,Teenmagazinereportedthat35percentofgirls6to12yearsoldhavebeenonatleastonediet,andthat50to70percentofnormalweightgirlsbelievetheyareoverweight.Overallresearchindicatesthat90%ofwomenaredissatisfiedwiththeirappearanceinsomeway.
MediaactivistJeanKilbourneconcludesthat,“Womenaresoldtothedietindustrybythemagazineswereadandthetelevisionprogramswewatch,almostallofwhichmakeusfeelanxiousaboutourweight.”
UnattainableBeauty
Perhapsmostdisturbingisthefactthatmediaimagesoffemalebeautyareunattainableforallbutaverysmallnumberofwomen.ResearchersgeneratingacomputermodelofawomanwithBarbie-dollproportions,forexample,foundthatherbackwouldbetooweaktosupporttheweightofherupperbody,andherbodywouldbetoonarrowtocontainmorethanhalfaliverandafewcentimetersofbowel.Arealwomanbuiltthatwaywouldsufferfromchronicdiarrhea（慢性腹泻）andeventuallydiefrommalnutrition.JillBarad,PresidentofMattel（whichmanufacturesBarbie）,estimatedthat99%ofgirlsaged3to10yearsoldownatleastoneBarbiedoll.
Still,thenumberofreallifewomenandgirlswhoseekasimilarlyunderweightbodyisepidemic,andtheycansufferequallydevastatinghealthconsequences.In2006itwasestimatedthatupto450,000Canadianwomenwereaffectedbyaneatingdisorder.
TheCultureofThinness
Researchersreportthatwomen’smagazineshavetenandone-halftimesmoreadsandarticlespromotingweightlossthanmen’smagazinesdo,andoverthree-quartersofthecoversofwomen’smagazinesincludeatleastonemessageabouthowtochangeawoman’sbodilyappearance—bydiet,exerciseorcosmeticsurgery.
Televisionandmoviesreinforcetheimportanceofathinbodyasameasureofawoman’sworth.CanadianresearcherGregoryFoutsreportsthatoverthree-quartersofthefemalecharactersinTVsituationcomediesareunderweight,andonlyoneintwentyareaboveaverageinsize.Heavieractressestendtoreceivenegativecommentsfrommalecharactersabouttheirbodies（“Howaboutwearingasack?
”）,and80percentofthesenegativecommentsarefollowedbycannedaudiencelaughter.
Therehavebeeneffortsinthemagazineindustrytobuck（抵制，反抗）thetrend.ForseveralyearstheQuebecmagazineCoupdePoucehasconsistentlyincludedfull-sizedwomenintheirfashionpagesandChâtelainehaspledgednottotouchupphotosandnottoincludemodelslessthan25yearsofage.InMadrid,oneoftheworld’sbiggestfashioncapitals,ultra-thinmodelswerebannedfromtherunwayin2006.FurthermoreSpainhasrecentlyundergoneaprojectwiththeaimtostandardizeclothingsizesthroughusingauniqueprocessinwhichalaserbeamisusedtomeasurereallifewomen’sbodiesinordertofindthemosttruetolifemeasurement.
Ethics
Anotherissueistherepresentationofethnicallydiversewomeninthemedia.A2008studyconductedbyJuanitaCovertandTravisDixontitled“AChangingView:
RepresentationandEffectsofthePortrayalofWomenofColorinMainstreamWomen’sMagazines”foundthatalthoughtherewasanincreaseintherepresentationofwomenofcolour,overallwhitewomenwereoverrepresentedinmainstreamwomen’smagazinesfrom1999to2004.Self-ImprovementorSelf-Destruction?
Thebarrageofmessagesaboutthinness,dietingandbeautytells“ordinary”womenthattheyarealwaysinneedofadjustment—andthatthefemalebodyisanobjecttobeperfected.
JeanKilbournearguesthattheoverwhelmingpresenceofmediaimagesofpainfullythinwomenmeansthatrealwomen’sbodieshavebecomeinvisibleinthemassmedia.Therealtragedy,Kilbourneconcludes,isthatmanywomeninternalizethesestereotypes,andjudgethemselvesbythebeautyindustry’sstandards.Womenlearntocomparethemselvestootherwomen,andtocompetewiththemformaleattention.Thisfocusonbeautyanddesirability“effectivelydestroysanyawarenessandactionthatmighthelptochangethatclimate.”
1.Women’smagazinesarefullofarticlestourgewomento___________.
A）eatlesssweetfoodC）marryarichhusband
B）loseweightD）haveatleasttwokids
2.Thecosmeticanddietproductindustriesgainprofitsby____________.
A）exaggeratingthegoodnessabouttheirproducts
B）targetingatchildrenandfemales
C）presentinganidealimagedifficulttoachieve
D）distributingfreesamplesfromhometohome
3.CanadianWomen’shealthNetworkwarnsthatweightcontrolmeasuresarenowbeingtakenbygirls_____________.
A）atage5or6C）atage13or14
B）atage9or10D）atage16or17
4.In2003,Teenmagazinereportedthat____________percentofnormalweightgirlsbelievetheyareoverweight.
A）35to50C）50to70
B）50D）90
5.ResearchersfoundthatarealwomanwithBarbie-dollproportionswould_____________.
A）sufferfromheartdiseaseC）liveamorerewardinglife
B）beverypopularwithmalesD）diefrommalnutrition
6.Televisionandmoviesemphasizethatawoman’sworthcanbejudgedby_____________.
A）thecosmeticssheusesC）thethinnessofherbody
B）thejewelryshewearsD）thewealthofherhusband
7.Spainhasrecentlyundergoneaprojectto_____________.
A）includefull-sizedwomeninitsfashionmagazines
B）standardizeclothingsizes
C）banultra-thinmodelsfromtherunway
D）promoteweightlossamongmen
8.Inmainstreamwomen’smagazinesfrom1999to2004,______________wereoverrepresented.
9.JeanKilbourneconcludesthatmanywomenjudgethemselvesby_______________________.
10.Thefocuson___________________________destroysanyawarenessandactionthatmighthelptochangethetrend.
Thekeys:
1-7BCACDCB
8.overallwhitewoman
9.thebeautyindustry'sstandards
10.thebeautydesirability
Presentation-写作失分点
解析：
典型例子2
解析：
比较下面这篇满分作业，它从以下方面论述了参加集体舞比赛的理由。
1>能够减轻学习压力，活跃气氛
2>舞蹈不仅创造美，还锻炼了身体
3>在排练的过程中，可以培养交往能力
4>增强凝聚力，培养集体荣誉感
典型例子3
古人云：
“天生我材必有用”（theremustbeauseformytalent）.通过描述你生活中一件事，说明人各有所长，无论才能大小都能成为有用的人
学生习作：
Chinesehaveaoldsayingthat“theremustbeausefortalent”.Ithinkitistrue.WhyIthinkso?
Becauseofaexperienceofme
解析：
这篇作文除了较多的语法和拼写错误（划线部分）外，所举的例子似乎不能说明题目要求，讲的是通过努力做成某事。
对于如何体现天生我材必有用而言，有些离题。
典型例子4
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解析：
这篇作文之所以得高分，因为它结构严谨，遣词造句讲究地道，另外，一个主要原因是，该考生认真审题，以题目中的要求为指导，仔细读懂表格，准备把握，无一遗漏地表达所传递的信息。
典型例子5
分析：
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失分点二：
构思不周
真题点拨1：
请你谈谈轿车大量进入家庭后，对家庭，环境和经济可能产生的影响。
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失分点三：
立意不高
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真题点拨2
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真题点拨4：
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FocusedPractice
Handout2提高练习
范文：
Handout3提高练习
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