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一、回顾篇
1、2010年5月作文题目
Dopeoplesucceedbyemphasizingtheirdifferencefromothers?
首先审题,理解成创新类别,也就是让各位考生写一个因为创新所以成功的故事。
同笔者课上复习的这个题目很类似:
Iscreativityneededmorethaneverintheworldtoday?
怎么回答呢?
结合5月考题,自然是需要创造力,因为有了能成功。
归纳来看,结合去年下半年的考题,大家会发现,美国考官一直在对这个问题进行考察。
比如去年11月要不要挑战新想法,你可以写不要,因为新想法就是创造力会让大家成功。
去年12月考要不要挑战权威,自然是写要,挑战权威,提出新想法,个人和社会才会更好。
再看今年5月份,还是强调不要从众,要有自己的个性。
我给大家找了一篇满分作文,写的是失败到成功的故事,大家可以参考。
Thispastyear,Iwasauditioningforthefallplay,"CatonaHotTinRoof."TomydetrimentIthoughtitwouldbeagoodideatowatchthemovieinordertoprepare.FortwohoursIstudiedElizabethTaylor'smannerisms,attitude,anddiction,hopingIcouldmimicherperformance.(背景)
Iauditionedforthepartof“Maggie”feelingperfectlyconfidentinmyportrayalofElizabethTaylor,however,IwasunawarethatmydirectorsawexactlywhatIhadbeenthinking.Unfortunately,Ididn‘tgetthepart,andmydirectortoldmethatheneededtosee“Maggie”frommyperspective,notElizabethTaylor’s.(失败的记忆)
Ilearnedfromthisexperience,andpromisedmyselfIwouldnottrytoimitateanotheractress,inordertocreatemycharacter.(从失败中经验教训)
Persevering,Iwasanxioustoauditionforthewinterplayjusttwomonthslater.TheplaywasNeilSimon's"Rumors,"andwouldgettheopportunitytoplay"Chris,"asarcasticyetwittyrole,whichwouldbemyfinalperformanceinhighschool.Inordertodevelopmycharacter,IplannedoutherlifejustasIthoughtitshouldbe,gaveherthevoiceIthoughtwasright,andtherestofhercharacterunfoldedbeautifullyfromthere.(准备过程)
Mydirectortoldmeafterthefirstshowthat“Rumors”wasthebestworkhe‘deverseenfromme,andthathewasamazedathowI’ddevelopedsuchabelievablecharacter.(成功)
实战演练:
接下来我们来做一个工作,就着这个素材来写5月的题目。
Dopeoplesucceedbyemphasizingtheirdifferencefromothers?
大家从题目里面找到两个重点,一个是不同,一个是成功,需要用细节去细化。
接下来围绕这两个点,结合例子素材,整出例子的思路链条。
例子思路:
背景(参演学校话剧的演出)——为了成功,看Taylor的演出,为了做到和她一模一样(点题)——失败——安排导演宣布失败理由(完全没有体现出自己的个性,要有不同)——痛定思痛——准备下一次演出——强调自己的个性(点出题目的difference),按照自己的方式给出这个觉得的声音包括表演方式——成功(安排导演讲出)
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Thispastyear,Iwasauditioningforthefallplay,"CatonaHotTinRoof."TomydetrimentIthoughtitwouldbeagoodideatowatcharelevantmoviestarredbyElizabethTaylorinordertoprepare.FortwohoursIstudiedhermannerisms,attitude,anddiction,hopingIcouldmimicherperformance.
Iauditionedforthepartof“Maggie”feelingperfectlyconfidentinmyportrayalofElizabethTaylor;however,IwasunawarethatmydirectorsawexactlywhatIhadbeenthinking.Unfortunately,Ididn‘tgetthepart,andmydirectortoldmethatheneededtosee“Maggie”frommyperspective,notElizabethTaylor’s.
Ilearnedfromthisexperience,andpromisedmyselfIwouldnottrytoimitateanotheractress.Instead,itisimperativetofindoutmydifference,namely,myuniquewayofacting,inplayinganewrole.(点题)
Persevering,Iwasanxioustoauditionforthewinterplayjusttwomonthslater.TheplaywasNeilSimon's"Rumors,"andwouldgettheopportunitytoplay"Chris,"asarcasticyetwittyrole,whichwouldbemyfinalperformanceinhighschool.Inordertodevelopmyowncharacter,Iplacedemphasisonoriginality(点题),planningoutherlifejustasIthoughtitshouldbe,givingherthevoiceIthoughtwasright;naturally,therestofhercharacterwasunfoldedbeautifullyfromthere.(准备过程)
ThenIwentforanothertry.(加强过渡)Afterthefirstshowmydirectortoldmethat“Rumors”wasthebestworkhe‘deverseenfromme,andthathewasamazedathowI’ddevelopedsuchabelievableanddifferent(点题)character.(成功)
2、2010年1月作文话题
Dopeoplemakethegreatestdiscoveriesbyexploringwhatisunfamiliartothemorbypayingcloseattentiontowhatseemsfamiliar?
关于审题,这是一个难题。
同学们在考场上需要从脑海里面把准备的例子迅速想一遍,看看哪个更适合此题目。
由于限定了discovery,笔者班上的同学们应该能快速想到伽利略或者哥白尼。
前者做出了伟大的发现,比如两球下降的正确理论;后者发现了日心说。
以前者为例,他发现的理论很明显是符合题干中的后者的,因为两球下降之前就有过相关理论,他对此熟悉的理论做了分析研究,最终有了正确的伟大的发现。
还是给大家找一篇文章作为素材的参考,写作者是Lily同学,去年6月考试作为是满分,习作的题目是isitnecessarytoquestiontheauthority?
AnotherstoryofGalileoisalsoaverytypicalonetoexplaintheimportanceofchallengingtheauthority.ItisknowntousallthatAristotleisagreatphilosopherinancientGreeceandiswidelyregardedasthemosteruditemindsofar.Histheories,asaresult,arefirmlybelievedbyalmosteveryoneintheMiddleAge.(塑造权威)
However,Galileo,atalentedphysicistatthattime,foundoneofAristotle’stheoriesthatthevelocitiesoftwofallingweightsareproportionaltotheirweightsincorrectthroughhisthousandsofexperiments.(为什么挑战)
HefinallydecidedtoshowhisresearchresultsbydoinganexperimentontheLeaningTowerofPisainfrontofthepublic,whichlaterturnedouttobeablockbusterinthefieldofphysics.
Galileodroppedtwoironballsofdifferentweightstothegroundandeverybodypresentwitnessedthehistoricmomentthatthetwoballsreachedthegroundatexactlythesametime.(怎么挑战)
Galileo’sexperimentsanddiscoveriesviolentlychallengedthatofAristotleandstartedarevolutionarydebateamongscientists.Moreimportantly,hecorrectedthousandsofpeople’swrongbeliefsandcontributedalottothemodernphysics.(挑战的结果)
实战运用:
题目Dopeoplemakethegreatestdiscoveriesbyexploringwhatisunfamiliartothemorbypayingcloseattentiontowhatseemsfamiliar?
我们先确认观点:
应该研究看上去熟悉的。
关键字:
研究看上去熟悉的——重大发现。
接下来写出例子的基本思路:
背景(亚里士多德是权威)---提出了两球下降理论(速度和质量成正比)——伽利略(Pisa大学毕业后,开始大量阅读书籍)——研究公众十分熟悉,并且基本公认的理论——两球下降理论——认为没有经过试验检测,不可靠——比萨斜塔实验——结果,两球同时落地——伟大的发现(正确的理论——速度和质量部成正比)——科学界的突破,打破对于权威的盲目相信,实验科学的创始人。
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AnotherstoryofGalileoisalsoaverytypicalonetoexplaintheimportanceofexploringwhatisfamiliartous.ItisknowntousallthatAristotleisagreatphilosopherinancientGreeceandiswidelyregardedasthemosteruditemindsofar.Histheories,asaresult,arefirmlybelievedbyalmosteveryoneintheMiddleAge.Amongallthesetheories,onetheorythatthevelocitiesoftwofallingweightsareproportionaltotheirweightsenjoyedwidespreadfamiliarityamongthepublic.(点题)(熟悉的东西是什么)
Atthattime,Galileo,anunknownscientist,wasabsorbedinbooksofAristotle.However,insteadoftotallycopyingthethoughtsofhim,Galileodevelopedhisownwayofthinkingandgaveprioritytotheeffectofexperimentationonscience,doubtingthefeasibilityofthewidelyknown(点题)theoryaboutthespeedoffallingobjects.(伽利略研究熟悉的东西)
HefinallydecidedtofindoutthetruthbydoinganexperimentontheLeaningTowerofPisainfrontofthepublic.Duringtheexperiment,Galileodroppedtwoironballsofdifferentweightstothegroundandeverybodypresentwitnessedthehistoricmomentthatthetwoballsreachedthegroundatexactlythesametime.(伽利略挑战熟悉的理论)
Thatexperimentwitnessedthebirthofoneofthegreatestdiscoveriesinthefieldofscience,namely,thetheorythatthevelocitiesoftwofallingobjectsarenotrelatedtotheirweights.Moreimportantisthefactthatthisfindingweakenstheblindtrustofthepublictowardtheauthorityandpavedthewayforthewidespreaduseofexperimentationintestingthepracticabilityofatheory.(营造这是伟大的发现)
二、展望篇
回顾过去几场考试,可以发现collegeboard十分青睐挑战权威和提出新想法这个主题,既然如此青睐,各位参加6月考试的考生还是应该额外关注。
其他类别包括物质类别,个人价值观判断等。
接下来给大家罗列一些重点话题,以供参考。
6月考试重点一:
创新类
Iscreativityneededmorethaneverintheworldtoday?
参考思路:
大家要注意today这个措辞。
此题适合准备个人例子。
有了创造力,才能distinguishyourselffromothers,不妨借鉴班上一个马来西亚同学说过一的学生会竞选的有趣故事。
他说最后获胜者提出了很creative的东西来吸引学生,比如:
1)(boardingschool)shopping,onceamonth一月安排一次集体购物,他们是寄宿学校。
2)(Single-sexeducation)ball,invitethegirlsinthegirls-school,一周安排一次集体舞会,要求女校学生参加。
这就是与众不同啊。
重点二:
物质类别
Isitmoreimportanttodoworkthatonefindsfulfilingorworkthatpayswell?
参考思路:
比较难写的题目。
较容易额方法是些赚钱重要,因为挣了钱才能实现梦想,获得fulfilling.
开头段:
Workingforawell-paidjobismoreimportant.Whenonecangetaconsiderableincome,hecanutilizethisamountofwealthtodothosethingshefindsfulfilling.TheKingofSteel,AndrewCarnegie,isoneexamplethatcanprovetheabovepointofview.
中间框架:
卡内基童年贫苦——只能读夜校——因此希望帮助更多人读上书——努力工作——内战买了钢的专利权——建了公司——赚了钱——实现梦想——投生教育事业。
参考:
童年艰苦AndrewCarnegiehadanarduouschildhood:
astheageof13,asanemigrantfromScotlandtoAmerica,hesqueezedinanincrediblytinyapartmentwithotherimmigrants.Hestruggledforhissurvival,findingajobinonefactoryafteranother.Havingnoaccesstowelfare,toeducationandmedicalservices,hewasdeprivedofallbasicrights.
营造童年梦想Livingunderthisextremepoverty,AndrewCarnegieknewandunderstoodsodeeplyaboutthetorturewithin,andhedevelopedadreamtoprovideabetterliveforthepoor.
营造挣钱AndrewCarnegietookgreatnoticeofthebusinessworldandhissharpdiscernmentpaidhimback.DuringtheCivilWar,AndrewCarnegiediscoveredthepotentialofsteelindustryandthusboughtapatentofsteeltooperatehisowncompany.
Over20thousandemployees
Amarketshareof65%
Anannualincomeof$40million
横线部分过渡是重点,营造赚钱和满足感的关系:
Itwasthiswell-paidjobthatmadeAndrewCarnegie’schildhooddreamcometrue.Withthewealthhehadaccumulated,hefulfilledhisyouthful‘ambition’bymakinghiscontributiontotherealmsofphilanthropy.
营造梦想的实现Payingspecialattentiontolibrariesandhighereducation,CarnegieinvestedinbuildingofmanylocallibrariesandCarnegieMellonUniversity.TheseeffortschangedmanyAmerican’slives,offeringtheirinvaluableknowledge.
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