写作冲刺.docx
《写作冲刺.docx》由会员分享,可在线阅读,更多相关《写作冲刺.docx(21页珍藏版)》请在冰豆网上搜索。
![写作冲刺.docx](https://file1.bdocx.com/fileroot1/2023-6/9/5d02b1e9-58c1-4723-b598-6bc39d209903/5d02b1e9-58c1-4723-b598-6bc39d2099031.gif)
写作冲刺
四级写作考试冲刺班内部笔记
写作的重要性6分最低限,只要结构不出错,得分应该为9分。
评判作文
四级考试作文主要看内容、结构、语言三个方面。
内容不跑题即可,注意:
1.不要妄图以情动人;2.不要妄图在构思上出奇制胜。
结构上牢记总分总:
先写主题句(TopicSentence),再写分论点,最后写总结句(Conclusion)。
语言最重要,往往使评分产生重大差异,语言要模仿和包装。
基本表达
人们认为:
itisgenerally/widelybelieved/held/agreedthat
越来越:
beincreasingly+adj.,beontherise,thegrowingnumberof
万能理由(Omnipotence)
1.方便:
convenient/convenience
2.效率:
efficient/efficiently/efficiency
3.节省和浪费:
savetime/money/space;economical,thrift;wastetime/money/space;costly,lavish
4.人的心理健康:
independent,cooperative,competitive,considerate,confident,creative,sociable,perseverance;selfish,isolated,conserative
5.人的身体健康:
health,disease,strong,strength,energetic
6.娱乐:
colorful,pleasure,joy,recreation,entertainmentm,relax,tired,boring,lonely
7.环境:
environment,pollute,poisonous,dirty
8.安全和危险:
safe,danger,risk
9.经验:
experience,socialexperience,enterthesociety
10.人际:
humane,fair,unfair,help,assist,freedom,freely
写完之后修改注意:
(内容方面尽量不要修改)
1、字母大小写
2、怪符号
3、单词拼写
4、主谓一致
5、动词时态
6、名词单复数
实例一
题目:
Bicycles――AnImportantMeansofTransportinChina提纲:
(1)为什么自行车在中国这样普及
(2)和汽车的比较(3)自行车在中国的前途
Score:
8
BicycleisanimportantmeansoftransportinChina.TheimportantreasonofitistheeconomyofChinese.TheuseofbicycleinChinaiswidelybecausepeopleinChinahavenothighwage.Theycanonlyaffordabicycle,andtheyhavenomoneytobuyacarwhichistooexpensive.SoChineseusuallybuyabicycle,anduseittogotowork,orgototravelandsoon.TheotherreasonisthelargepopulationofChina.Allthesemadethebicyclebecometheimportantmeansoftransport.
Thebicycle,comparedtothecar,isnottooexpensiveanditiseasytolearnandtouseanditcansavethesurfaceofputtingit.Itdoesn’tasktobuildthegaragelikecar.ThispointisveryimportanttoChina,becauseofthelackofland.Itisn’ttooexpensive,soChinesecanaffordit.Itdoesn’tneedanyoil,anditcan’tcausethepolusion.Allofthesearethegoodneedscomparedtothecar.
Inthefuture,bicyclewillbewidelyused.Anditwillbeingooddemand.Peoplewillproducemuchmoremodernbicycles.
Score:
14
BicyclesareverypopularinChina.Almosteveryfamilyinthecityhastwoorthreebicycles.Duringtherushhour,youcanseethatthousandsofpeople--manandwoman,oldandyoung--ridetheirbicyclestoworkandstudy.ThatiswhyChinaiscalled“thekingdomofbicycles”.
注:
1.第一句总写,第二句和第三句分写,最后总写。
2.Duringtherushhour分词结构开头。
3.破折号内容为同位语,句式多变化。
Comparedwithcars,bicyclesaresuperiorinmanyways.First,theyarecheap,convenientandeasytoride.Second,ridingbicycleisgoodforhealth.Third,theybringnonoisenorairpollution.Thoughcarsarefasterandmorecomfortable,theyaretooexpensive.Theyconsumeplentyofoilandtheypollutetheair.Sometimes,itisdifficultforadrivertoparkhiscar.Moreovertheyoftencausetrafficjamsandaccidents.
注:
1.Comparedwithcars分词结构开头。
2.besuperiorto/beinferiorto优于/低于
3.thirst,second,third英语语言有层次感,信号词
4.cheap便宜,最好用inexpensive
5.begoodforhealth对健康有好处(万能理由)
6.Moreover表示递进
Inmyopinion,thefutureofbicycleisverypromising.SinceChinaisadevelopingcountryandhasalargepopulation,Ithink,ridingbicycleisappropriatetoChinesepresentconditions.Itwillbeanimportantmeansoftransportationforquitealongtime.
注:
promising有前途的apromisingyoungman
Score:
11
Theremillionsofbicyclesintoday’sChina.Bicyclesareveryimportantmeansoftransportinpeople’sdailylives.Becausetorideabicycleisverysimple,tobuyabicyclewillnotcostsomuchmoney,toparkabicycleneedsjustasmallroomandtorideabicycledoesnotneedoilbuttherider’sstrength,bicyclesarepopularallovertheworld,especiallyinChina.
注:
第一句应该用therebe结构
Comparedwithacar,abicycleismuchcheaper.ItismoresuitableforChinaasadevelopingcountry.Andabicyclehasalmostcausednopollutionbutacarhas.Onthecontrary,abicycleistooslow,itcostsmoretimesthanacar.
IthinkthepopulationofChina’sbicyclewillbekeptforthelongrun.Becauseitwillbereplacedbyacar,abusandsooninsomedevelopedareasinChina,anditwillbemadeawideuseinthedevelopingareasinChina,thenumberofbicyclesinChinawillbethesameastodaybutIbelievethatit’squalitywillbeimproved.
I、对比观点选择题:
1.有人认为……;2.另外一些人认为……;3.谈谈你的观点和看法。
(最好写成4段)
实例二99年6月真题
ReadingSelectivelyOrExtensively?
Outline:
1.有人认为读书要有选择2.有人认为应当博览群书3.我的想法
Howshouldweread?
Shouldwereadselectivelyorextensively?
Everyonehashisownview.
Somepeoplethinkweshouldreadselectively.Theyarguethatwiththedevelopmentofmodernscienceandtechnology,moreandmorebooksarepublished.Itisimpossibleforustoreadallthebooks.What’smore,therearemanybadbooksthatarepoisonoustoourmind,andweshouldn’treadthem.Sincewecan’treadallthebooksandweshouldn’treadbadbooks,wemustreadselectively.
Butothersmaynotagree,theyemphasizethattoday'ssocietyisnotwhatitwas.Ifonemanhasmanykindsofknowledge,hewillhavemorechancestosucceed.Ifamanknowsmuchinonefieldbutknowsnothinginotherfields,hemaybeuseless.Sincewemusthavemanykindsofknowledge,wemustreadextensively.
Who’sright?
Ithinkbothofthemhavesomethingright.ButIthinkweshouldreadextensivelyfirst.Weshouldreadbooksinmanyfields,andreadselectivelyinonefield.
典型的对比观点选择题的文章逻辑结构:
(启)ParagraphI:
(1)引出将要评论的事物或者是观点;
(2)简明扼要的提出人们在这个问题上的两种不同看法。
Score:
14分
Howshouldweread?
Shouldwereadselectivelyorextensively?
Everyonehashisownview.(启)
注:
第一句提出问题,第二句提出两种见解
典型的对比观点选择题的文章逻辑结构:
(承)ParagraphII:
(1)提出一种观点或优点;
(2)本段的支持性分论点;(3)本段总结(可以省略)。
Somepeoplethinkweshouldreadselectively.Theyarguethatwiththedevelopmentofmodernscienceandtechnology,moreandmorebooksarepublished.Itisimpossibleforustoreadallthebooks.What’smore,therearemanybadbooksthatarepoisonoustoourmind,andweshouldn’treadthem.Sincewecan’treadallthebooksandweshouldn’treadbadbooks,wemustreadselectively.(承)
注:
1.本段总分总结构
2.theyarguethat=theythinkthat
3.withthedevelopmentof...随着……的发展
4.what'smore递进关系,moreover
5.bad=pornographic色情的&violent暴力的
典型的对比观点选择题的文章逻辑结构:
(转)ParagraphIII:
(1)承上启下的过渡句;
(2)提出另一种观点或缺点;(3)本段的支持性分论点(4)本段总(可以省略)。
Butothersmaynotagree,theyemphasizethattoday'ssocietyisnotwhatitwas.Ifonemanhasmanykindsofknowledge,hewillhavemorechancestosucceed.Ifamanknowsmuchinonefieldbutknowsnothinginotherfields,hemaybeuseless.Sincewemusthavemanykindsofknowledge,wemustreadextensively.(转)
注:
1.But转折词(信号词)
2.theyemphasizethat=theythinkthat
3.today'ssocietyisnotwhatitwas现代社会今昔非比
4.许多知识awiderangeofknowledge/alargescopeofknowledge/muchknowledge;
获取知识acquire/getknowledge
5.knowsnothing→little;hemaybeuseless→hemaynotbeofgreatusetothesociety后者比前者更委婉
典型的对比观点选择题的文章逻辑结构:
(合)ParagraphIV:
(1)平衡两种看法;
(2)给出自己的观点。
Who’sright?
Ithinkbothofthemhavesomethingright.ButIthinkweshouldreadextensivelyfirst.Weshouldreadbooksinmanyfields,andreadselectivelyinonefield.(合)
Score:
11分
Whenitcomestoreading,somepeoplethinkthatreadingselectivelyisagoodway,butsomeotherpeopledonotagreewiththem,theythinkthatreadingextensivelyisbetter.
注:
结构非常好,可以套用。
Thosepeople,whothinkthatreadingselectivelyisbetter,believethatgoodbooksareasmanyasbadbooks.Thosegoodbookscangiveuspleasureandknowledge,whilethosebadbookscanonlyleadustothewrongway.So,theysuggestthatweshouldonlychoosethegoodbookstoreadandnevertouchthebadbooks.
注:
1.“people,who...,”应去掉逗号,改为限制性定语从句。
2.asmanyasbadbooks改为asmanyasbadones
3.leadustothewrongway改为leadsb.astray
4.theysuggestthat=theythinkthat
5.touch碰(闪光点词汇:
如教材P7:
shoulderingtheresponsibilityofdoingsth.肩负起责任)
But,theotherpeople,whoholdthatreadingextensivelyisbetter,thinkthatonekindofbookscanonlygiveusoneaspectofknowledge.Eventhebestbookonlycontainsonefieldofinformation.So,theycaneasilycometotheconclusionthat“toknowmore,toreadmore”.Sotheybelievethatreadingextensivelyisbetter.
注:
1.hold认为同样表示“think”的词还有argue,emphasize,believe,suggest,claim,insist,maintain,agree,hold
2.thebestbook在西方国家是“圣经”的意思
3.toknowmore,toreadmore错误,中式英语
Tomypoint,weshouldchoosegoodbookstoreadandreadgoodbooksasmanyaspossible.Bythisway,wecanincreasethequalityandquantityofreading.
范文22.IsTelevisionaBlessingoraCurse?
Now,itisgenerallyacceptedthattelevisionplaysanimportantpartinpeople’slives.But,thereisanongoingheateddiscussionastowhethertelevisionisablessingoracurse.
注:
itisgenerallyacceptedthat人们通常认为
Asisoftenpointedoutbysomepeople,televisionkeepsonebetterinformedaboutcurrentevents,allowsonetofollowthelatestdevelopmentsinpoliticsandscience,andoffersanendlessseriesofprogramswhicharebothinstructiveandstimulating.Themostdistantcountries,thestrangestcustomsandthemostattractivescenesofnaturearebroughtrightintoone’sroom.
注:
1.Asisoftenpointedoutbysomepeople=Somepeoplethinkthat
2.“使……”不用make,而用keep,all