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考点12书面表达读后续写解析版

考点12书面表达读后续写

Writing1（2021·辽宁丹东市·高三一模）

阅读下面文章，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一个完整短文，续写词数应为150左右。

Baskinwasa20-year-oldsophomoreattheUniversityofSouthCarolinawhoseparentsransmallrestaurant.Ashewastheonlycollegestudentinhisfamily,hisfamilytriedtheirbesttosupporthim.Baskinalwaysworkedasawaiterintherestauranttolightenhisparents'burdens.Hewassohardworkingthatmanycustomerspraisedhishospitableservice.Hisparentsalsoappreciatedandtrustedhimalot.

Itwasabusynightattherestaurant.Afterafewguestswalkedinandsatdown,theyorderedabottleoftheChateauPichonLonguevilleComtesse2001-avaluablewineworthalmost€6,000.

Havingtoserveanothertable,Baskinthenaskedaworkmatetofetchthebottle.However,sincetheemployeewasnew,sheaccidentallytookthewrongbottleofwine.Insteadofthewinethatwasorderedbythecustomers,sheservedtheChateauPichonLonguevillePomerol2001,whichcostabout€5,000.Asthebottlesandnamesweresimilar,noonenoticedthemistake.

Baskindidn'trealizethemistakeuntilthecustomerswantedtoorderasecondbottleafterfinishingthefirstone.Hecheckedtheorderquicklyandunderstoodwhatwaswrong.Hecleverlysuggestedtheyorderadifferentone,withoutlettingthemknowwhathadhappened,whichcouldgivehimtimetothinkabouthowtosolvetheproblem.

Everythingseemednormal,butBaskinwaslostinthought."WhatshouldIdotosolvethisproblem?

"heaskedhimself.Ifhedidn'ttellthecustomersthemistake,hecouldkeeptheextra€1000secretly.Ashewasalsothecashieroftherestaurant,noonewouldknowwhathappened.€1000wasthetuitionfeeforthewholeschoolyearandhisparentsneedn'tworkhardtoearnmoneyforhim.Orhecouldusethemoneytobuyhisfavoritelaptopwhichhisparentscouldn'tafford.Thisextramoneywasreallyahugetemptationtohim.Butinthisway,hewouldlosehishonestyanddignity.

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Whilehewasstrugglingwithhisoptions,hisfathercameover.

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Whenthecustomerscametopaythebill,withfather'sadviceinmind.Baskindecidedtodotherightthing.

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【答案】Possibleversion:

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Whilehewasstrugglingwithhisoptions,hisfathercameover.Seeinghismixedexpression,hisfatheraskedhimwhatwashappening.Baskincouldn'thelptellinghimthetruth.Hisfatherlistenedattentivelyandgavehisadvice.HetoldBaskinheshouldtellthetruthandadmithismistake.Baskinthoughtthecustomersprobablywouldn'tnoticethemistakeastheywerenotpayingtoomuchattention.Hisfathersaidthatheshouldalwaysbehonestandthatwayhewouldalwaysbetrusted.Baskinnoddedseriously.

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Whenthecustomerscametopaythebill,withhisfather'sadviceinmind,Baskindecidedtodotherightthing.Heexplainedthesituationtothecustomersandapologizedsincerelyfortheerror.Thecustomersweresurprisedatthisandsaidtheyhadn'tnoticedthemistakeatall.Instead,theysaidthatthewinetheywereservedstilltastedverygoodandfinishedbygivinghimalargetip.ToBaskin'srelief,hisfatheralsoforgavehimforhismistake,sayingthatnoharmhadbeendoneandthecustomersweresatisfiedwiththeserviceThinkingback,Baskinwasgratefultohisfatherforsuchgoodadviceandalsolearnedanimportantlifelesson.

【分析】

本文是一篇记叙文。

Baskin是一个为学费在饭店打工的大二学生。

一次工作当中的疏忽把6000块的酒误上成了5000块的红酒。

由于无人察觉这个失误，他有机会将一千元的红酒差价据为己有，但又无法忍受内心道德的谴责，这时父亲走过来了。

【详解】

1.段落续写：

①由第一段首句内容“正当他苦苦思索如何选择的时候，他的父亲走了过来。

”我们得知，父亲指导了Baskin如何处理这件事情。

所以第一段建议主要通过语言和动作描述Baskin和父亲之间的互动，即父亲如何劝说他跟客人说出事实。

②由第二段首句内容“顾客们来结账时，巴斯金心里想着爸爸的建议，决定做正确的事。

”可知，第二段主要描写Baskin在父亲的指导下如何解决这一问题。

解决方法可以写向客人说明事实并道歉。

升华可以写诚实和自尊拥有任何事物无法比拟的价值。

只有诚实才能获得内心的平静。

体现人与自我和正确价值观的主题渗透。

2.续写线索：

困惑——求助——真相——解释——满意

3.词汇激活（一个词汇要写出相近的表达）

行为类

承认错误：

admithismistake/accepthismistake

道歉：

apologizedsincerely/makeasincereapology/saysorryto

【点睛】

【高分句型写范文中的就可以，至少2个高分句型】

[高分句型1]Seeinghismixedexpression,hisfatheraskedhimwhatwashappening.（现在分词作时间状语，且句中使用what引导的宾语从句）

[高分句型2]Baskinthoughtthecustomersprobablywouldn'tnoticethemistakeastheywerenotpayingtoomuchattention.（句中使用as引导的原因状语从句）

[高分句型3]ToBaskin'srelief,hisfatheralsoforgavehimforhismistake,sayingthatnoharmhadbeendoneandthecustomersweresatisfiedwiththeservice（现在分词作伴随状语，且句中使用that引导的宾语从句）

Writing2（2021·辽宁抚顺市·高三一模）

阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。

续写的词数应为150左右。

IsabellaPieriisan11-year-oldgirlwholiveswithherfatherandbrothers.Shelosthermothertwoyearsagobecauseofanillness,whichhasagreatinfluenceonthedetailsofdailylife:

Thefatherhastakenoverallthefamilymanagement,includingtheneedtocombthebeautifulredhairofhisdaughter.

Isabella'sdadchosetocutthegirl'shair.Herhairhasbeenlong,thickandundisciplined（蓬乱的）.Thebesthecoulddowasasimpleponytail（马尾辫）.Littlegirlsalwayscareverymuchabouttheirhairstyles.ButIsabelladidn'tcomplaintoherfatherabouthersimplehairstyle.Instead,sheturnedtotheladywhodrivestheschoolbusforhelp.

SometimesIsabellahadseenherclassmatesrelyonthehandsofthedrivertogettheirhairinorderbeforegettingoffthebus.Thus,TracyDeancameonthescene,withskillsobviouslynotlimitedtodrivinglargevehicles.Knowingthegirl'sstory,Tracydecidedtocombherhaireverymorning.Therefore,Isabellacanshowoffalookeverydaythatinspireshertoholdherheadhigh.

Doesallthisdailycarecomefromasimpleinstinct（本能）ofgoodness?

It'ssomethingmore.Afewyearsago,TracyDeanhadcancer,andthefearofdyinghadledhertowonderwhowouldtakecareofherchildrenifshewasdead.Mysteriously,thatopenwoundinherheartpreparedherforaluckyencounterwiththesamewoundedheartofIsabella.EverydaywhenshemeetsIsabellaonthebus,shecombsherhairandsaysshewouldliketointroduceIsabellatoherchildren.“Everyhaironyourheadiscounted."shealwayssaystoIsabella.TracyevenexpectsIsabellatolivewithherchildren,whichshebelieveswouldhelpherchildrentoliveahappylifewhenonedaytheyarenotwiththeirmother.

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ThestoryofIsabellaandTracyspreadsquickly.

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Isabellafeelssheisluckytogainsomuchhelp.

【答案】Paragraph1:

ThestoryofIsabellaandTracyspreadsquickly.Isabellanotonlymeetsmorepeoplewhowouldliketocombherhairbutalsomanytoprovidefinancialhelpforherfamily.Whenshewalksonthestreetwithherfatherontheweekend,peoplemeetingthemalwaysgentlytouchherhair,whichmakesIsabellafeelveryhappy.Meanwhile,manypeoplearewillingtohelpTracy.Ahospitalhasevenofferedherfreemedicaltreatment.SheneverthoughtwhatshehaddoneforIsabellawouldmeansomuch.

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Isabellafeelssheisluckytogainsomuchhelp.Nowshecanraiseherheadinfrontofherclassmates,notonlybecauseofhertidyhairbutalsobecauseoftheconfidenceshehasgained.Sheisverygratefulforallthehelpshehasreceivedanddeterminedtodowhatshecantohelpothersinneedwhenshegrowsup,eventhoughwhatshecandomightbesomethingslight.Shebelievessmallthingscanalsomakeabigdifferencetoothers’life.

【分析】

本文以人物为线索展开，讲述了一个11岁的女孩——IsabellaPieri，她的母亲在两年前去世，目前和父亲和兄弟一起生活，伊莎贝拉的爸爸不会给她梳理辫子便给她剪了头发，后来遇到校车司机特蕾西·迪恩每天帮她打理头发，这件事散布后，遇到了很多愿意为她的家庭提供经济帮助的人的故事。

【详解】

1.段落续写：

①由第一段首句内容“伊莎贝拉和特蕾西的故事很快就传开了。

”可知，第一段可描写这一事件给她带来的影响。

②由第二段首句内容“伊莎贝拉觉得她很幸运能得到这么多的帮助。

”可知，第二段可描写伊莎贝拉的改变以及感悟。

2.续写线索：

梳头发——散布——获得救济——感谢——自信——感悟

3.词汇激活

行为类

①传开：

spread/getabout/takeair/volumeup

②抬起头来：

lookup/raiseone’sheadup/holdone’sheadhigh

情绪类

①很幸运：

be/feelluckyto

②感谢：

thanksbfor/showone’sappreciation/gratitude/begrateful

【点睛】

[高分句型1]：

Isabellanotonlymeetsmorepeoplewhowouldliketocombherhairbutalsomanytoprovidefinancialhelpforherfamily.这句话运用了who引导的定语从句。

[高分句型2]:

Whenshewalksonthestreetwithherfatherontheweekend,peoplemeetingthemalwaysgentlytouchherhair,whichmakesIsabellafeelveryhappy.这句话运用了which引导非限制性定语从句的结构。

[高分句型3]：

Sheisverygratefulforallthehelpshehasreceivedanddeterminedtodowhatshecantohelpothersinneedwhenshegrowsup,eventhoughwhatshecandomightbesomethingslight.这句话运用了省略关系代词的定语从句和what引导的宾语从句。

Writing3（2021·河北石家庄新世纪外国语学校高三月考）

阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两端，使之构成一个完整的故事。

Inmyearlyforties,Iwasdiagnosedwithlatestagebreastcancer.Asanon-smokerwhoatetherightfoodsandexerciseddaily,allIcouldthinkwas,"Whyme?

"Mygreatfearandanxietyofthelongtermtreatmentaheadrestrictedmefromseeingabrightside.

Afewmonthslater,myneighborGregfelloffaroofandwasparalyzed（瘫痪）fromthe