托福写作高分满分范文点评.docx

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托福写作高分满分范文点评

托福写作高分满分范文点评

托福写作高分满分范文点评和思路解析:

媒体追逐名人隐私

托福写作难点话题一览

Isittruethatmediapaytoomuchattentiontothepersonallivesof

famouspeople?

Doyouagreeordisagreewiththefollowingstatement?

Television,

newspapers,magazines,andothermediapaytoomuchattentiontothepersonal

livesoffamouspeoplesuchaspublicfiguresandcelebrities.Usespecific

reasonsanddetailstoe_plainyouropinion.

写作思路展开结构分析

这个观点是比较片面的,当中忽略了一个大众的需求问题,所以选择不能同意这个观点.有些媒体（大众传媒massmedia）

表现得过于关注名人.但是真正的起因（therealcause）却是大众（thepublic;thebroadmassesofthe

people）本身——大众过于关注名人以及名人的私生活.媒体不过是在迎合大众（catertotheneedsofcustomers;

过去几年里,电视一直迎合大众的口味.Inthepastseveralyears,televisionhasbeenplayingto

thegallery.）,因为媒体也是商业机构（commercialorganization）,也要盈利（profit-driving）

.不是所有媒体都在一味迎合大众,也不是所有的televisionprogram,newspapercolumn都在关注名人.

本话题高分范文赏析

Itistruethattelevisionprogramsconcerningpersonallivesof

celebritiesalwaysreceivethehighestaudiencerating.Itisalsotruethat

newspapersandmagazinesareconstantlyreportingstories,whichareusually

beyondconfirmation,aboutfamouspeople,andthatautobiographieswrittenby

publicfiguresarealwaysonthetop10best-sellerslist.Itseemsthatwe

liveinaworldwhereafewindividualsaredrawingnearlyallattentions.

Nevertheless,itisnote_actlyprecisetocriticizethemassmedia,including

television,newspapers,magazinesandsoforth,forpayingtoomuchfocusonthe

personallivesoffamouspeoplesuchaspublicfiguresandcelebrities.Infact,

itisthepublic,toalargee_tent,ratherthanmassmedia,thatispayingtoo

muchattentiononpersonallivesofcelebrities.

Mostorganizationsofmassmediaindustry,beinginherentlycommercial,are

drivenbybusinessmotivations.Televisionprogramproducers,aswellas

columnistsandwriters,arealwaysawareofwhatthepublicwanttosee,

thereforetendtopandertotastesofthepublic.Toputinanotherway,the

massmediaisaudience-oriented,andthephenomenoniswellinterpretedand

manipulatedthatwhenfamouspeoplesuchasactors,athletesandrockstarsgive

theiropinions,manypeoplelisten.Itisthenatureofthepublic,whoare

curiousenoughaboutpersonallivesoffamouspeople,sincetheycanneverbe

famous.

Ontheotherhand,itisholisticallydetrimentalforthesocietyifthe

massmediapaytoomuchfocusonfamousfewsoastoignoretherestofthe

individuals.Afterall,themissionofthemassmediaisnotmerelytocaterto

theneedsofcustomers,buthasamuchwiderscope,suchastotellthetruth,

todefinewhatisgoodandwhatisbad;topromoteculturalvalues,andthelist

couldbeendless.Morepopularscienceprogramsshouldbeproducedby

television,morereportsonpoorrurallivesshouldbepublicized,morebooks

concerningnotfamousbutrespectablepeoplesuchas,nurseswhoarefighting

SARSfearlessly,teacherswhoareperformingtheirdutiesregardlessofpoverty

ofremotevillages,journalistswhopublicizetheirpiecesunderpolitical

menace,andthisisanotherendlesslistshouldbewritten.

托福写作高分满分范文点评和思路解析:

学校应如何使用赠款?

托福写作难点话题一览

Thebestwaytheschoolspendsagiftofmoney

Yourschoolhasreceivedagiftofmoney.Whatdoyouthinkisthebestway

foryourschooltospendthismoney?

Usespecificreasonsanddetailstosupport

yourchoice.

写作思路展开结构分析

大家要注意审题,站在学生和老师的不同立场上,对于学校做法怎样才是best肯定是有所区别的,一般来说选择增设或是改善学校的设施会是比较好的展开角度,比如新建或者扩建一下图书馆就是很不错的选择.

本话题高分范文赏析

Itisaveryfortunateoccurrencewhenaschoolreceivesasizablegrant.

Schoolofficialsmustmakethedifficultdecisionofwheretoallocatethe

funds,andIwanttoproposethatspendingthemoneyoncomputerswouldbethe

mostutilitariandecision.

Computersarerapidlygrowinginpopularity,tosuchane_tentthatthey

affectallaspectsofmodernlife.Itisrarethatonefindsstimulating

employmentthatdoesnotrequireatleastbasiccomputerskills.Ifchildrenare

tobecomesuccessfulintodayssociety,theymusthaveunderstandinginthis

field.Ascomputersarethefuture,itisimportantforstudentstobecomeadept

usersearlyinlife.Notallchildrenhaveequalopportunitiestolearnthe

importantskillsofusingacomputer.Manylow-incomefamiliescannotaffordto

purchasesuchane_pensiveitem,thuscontinuingacycleofsocialimmobility.

Purchasingcomputersforpublicschoolsgiveschildrenfromlow-incomefamilies

theopportunitytobreakoutofthiscycle.

Finallycomputersallowstudentstoaccessawealthofinformationthat

couldnotpossiblybestoredinalibrary,orefficientlybekeptuptodate.

OneofthemostcommonactivitiesonacomputerissurfingtheInternet.The

Internetisupdatedbyliterallybillionsofpeopleeveryday,andtherefore

offersupanyinformationthatonecoulddreamof.TheInternetisalsoan

e_cellentsourceofinspiration,assomanypeoplethatupdateithave

incredibleideas.

Inconclusion,Ithinkthatspendingthegrantmoneytobuynewcomputers

wouldbemostbeneficialfortheentireschool.Withtheadditionofnew

computers,studentswillbeabletogetanedgeontheirpeersatdifferent

schools,andbereadyforuniversityandtheworkforce.Thisisespeciallytrue

forlow-incomestudents.

托福写作高分满分范文点评和思路解析:

所在城市的优缺点

Apersonyouknowisplanningtomovetoyourtownorcity.Whatdoyou

thinkthispersonwouldlikeanddislikeaboutlivinginyourtownorcity?

Why?

Usespecificreasonsanddetailstodevelopyouressay.

写作思路展开结构分析

这是一道关系到大家实际情况的题目,但同时这是一个讨论假设问题的题目.因此美征小编建议大家可以尽量展开想象.注意:

不要只说my

city,要指出你所在城市的名字,比如:

Beijing,

Shanghai等等.一般来说,人们会喜欢城市的原因有:

女人喜欢商场;男人可能喜欢书店;大的公园.动物园;名胜古迹;文化氛围.而人们会讨厌的原因有:

交通堵塞;空气不新鲜;大城市的排外主义（e_clusivism）.不友善（unfriendly）等等.

本话题高分范文赏析

IfmyfriendJoeywantstomovetoBeijing,Ithinkeventhoughshemight

findsomethingshedislikes,shewillultimatelylikethisgreatestcityinour

country.Theweathermightbeonethingthatshedislikes.Theweatherin

Beijingischaracterizedbydryclimateanditismuchwindyanddustythanthat

ofGuangzhoucity.Joeyisverysensitiveaboutherskin,soshewilldefinitely

hatedustywindsinBeijing.Moreover,Beijingswinterisfartoomuchcolder

thanthatofGuangzhou,itmighttakeJoey,asmanyotherpeoplecamefromthe

South,averylongtimetogetaccustomedto.Nevertheless,shemightwellenjoy

winterintheNorth,sinceshehasneverseensnowflakesinrealitybefore.I

rememberedtheshiningofyearningandeagerinhereyeswhenIoncetoldher

whatthewinterintheNorthlookslike.

ShemightbealwaysirritatedbyheavytrafficinBeijing,thoughta_isin

BeijingcostmuchlessthaninGuangzhou.WhenIwasinGuangzhou,seldomwasI

trappedbytrafficjams.Itmustberidiculousforhertohavespentmorethan

twohoursandstilldidntarriveatthedestinationwhichismerely10

kilometersaway.Andthemostludicrousthingis,evenifyoupossessaprivate

car,itismorelikelytobeuseless,forparkinglotsarealwayscrowded,which

meansmoretimeistobewasted.Goodnewsforheristhatthebussystemand

thatofsubwayinBeijingarewelldevelopedandmoreconvenient,andshewont

havetobearthatodorofbromhidrosisowingtoburningweatherassheonce

e_periencedinbusesofGuangzhou.Whatshewilldefinitelyloveisthecultural

ethosofthecity.Beijinghasahistoryprobablylongerthananyotherbigcity

inChina.TovisitallhistoricallandscapesinBeijing,shewillneedatleast

threeyears,nokidding!

Beijinghasthemostfamousande_cellentuniversities,thelargest

libraries,therichestmuseums,yetmostimportantofall,herbestfriend!

Amazingly,inthisagedcity,peoplearesometimesmoreinternational.Joeyis

especiallyfondofart,andBeijingistherightplaceforher,inwhich

concertsofinternationalsingersorothermusiciansaremuchfrequent,andshe

willevenbeabletoattendCuiJianscasualprivateconcertinacoffeeshop

onarainyautumnweekend.

托福写作高分满分范文点评和思路解析:

学校让学生评估老师

托福写作难点话题一览

Shouldschoolsaskstudentstoevaluatetheirteachers?

Schoolsshouldaskstudentstoevaluatetheirteachers.Doyouagreeor

disagree?

Usespecificreasonsande_amplestosupportyouranswer.

写作思路展开结构分析

有保留地同意（agreewithreservations）.学生在评判教师时,是否全部学生都可以客观评价（objective

evaluation）?

是否有足够的能力（包括academicknowledge等等）去进行客观评价?

如果采取了这样的方式,就会出现老师迎合（cater

to/panderto/playuptostudentstaste）学生而不是引导（guide;

lead）学生,违背了教育的原则.保留意见/这种方式:

允许学生进行评价,但是应该作为一个参考,同时要有其他的评判方式.

本话题高分范文赏析

Teachershaveaverydifficultjobinsociety.Theynotonlyhavetolearn

howtoteachmaterialeffectively,butalsomustlearnhowtodealwithawide

varietyofpersonalities.Whileteachingisadifficultjob,Ithinkitis

importantforschoolstoaskstudentstoevaluatetheirteachers.Ithinkthis

istherightthingtodobecauseitencouragesteacherstotrytheirbest,it

givesstudentstheopportunitytochooseeffectiveteachers,anditallowsthe

schoolstohavethebestteacherspossibleteaching.Ifateacherknowsthatat

theendoftheterm,thestudentswillbeevaluatinghis/herwork,thenthe

teacherwillbedriventodoaverygoodjob.Ifthereisnopressurefrom

evaluation,ateachermightbepronetodoingalessthanperfectjob.Ibelieve

thateveryoneneedsanoccasionalevaluationtoensuretheyaredoingtheirjob

correctly.Inthecaseofateacher,thestudentswillgivethemostimportant

evaluations.Iftherewasapublicsummaryofwhichteacherscoredthehighest

onhis/herevaluations,thenstudentswouldbeabletotakecoursesbasedon

whichteacherwasth