托福写作高分满分范文点评.docx

1、托福写作高分满分范文点评托福写作高分满分范文点评 托福写作高分满分范文点评和思路解析:媒体追逐名人隐私 托福写作难点话题一览 Is it true that media pay too much attention to the personal lives of famous people? Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Television, newspapers, magazines, and other media pay too much attention to the personal lives o

2、f famous people such as public figures and celebrities. Use specific reasons and details to e_plain your opinion. 写作思路展开结构分析 这个观点是比较片面的,当中忽略了一个大众的需求问题,所以选择不能同意这个观点. 有些媒体 ( 大众传媒 mass media ) 表现得过于关注名人.但是真正的起因 ( the real cause ) 却是大众 ( the public; the broad masses of the people ) 本身大众过于关注名人以及名人的私生活.媒体

3、不过是在迎合大众 ( cater to the needs of customers; 过去几年里 , 电视一直迎合大众的口味.In the past several years, television has been playing to the gallery. ) ,因为媒体也是商业机构 ( commercial organization ) , 也要盈利 ( profit-driving ) . 不是所有媒体都在一味迎合大众,也不是所有的 television program, newspaper column 都在关注名人. 本话题高分范文赏析 It is true that te

4、levision programs concerning personal lives of celebrities always receive the highest audience rating. It is also true that newspapers and magazines are constantly reporting stories, which are usually beyond confirmation, about famous people, and that autobiographies written by public figures are al

5、ways on the top 10 best-sellers list. It seems that we live in a world where a few individuals are drawing nearly all attentions. Nevertheless, it is not e_actly precise to criticize the mass media, including television, newspapers, magazines and so forth, for paying too much focus on the personal l

6、ives of famous people such as public figures and celebrities. In fact, it is the public, to a large e_tent, rather than mass media, that is paying too much attention on personal lives of celebrities. Most organizations of mass media industry, being inherently commercial, are driven by business motiv

7、ations. Television program producers, as well as columnists and writers, are always aware of what the public want to see, therefore tend to pander to tastes of the public. To put in another way, the mass media is audience-oriented, and the phenomenon is well interpreted and manipulated that when fam

8、ous people such as actors, athletes and rock stars give their opinions, many people listen. It is the nature of the public, who are curious enough about personal lives of famous people, since they can never be famous. On the other hand, it is holistically detrimental for the society if the mass medi

9、a pay too much focus on famous few so as to ignore the rest of the individuals. After all, the mission of the mass media is not merely to cater to the needs of customers, but has a much wider scope, such as to tell the truth, to define what is good and what is bad; to promote cultural values, and th

10、e list could be endless. More popular science programs should be produced by television, more reports on poor rural lives should be publicized, more books concerning not famous but respectable people such as, nurses who are fighting SARS fearlessly, teachers who are performing their duties regardles

11、s of poverty of remote villages, journalists who publicize their pieces under political menace, and this is another endless list should be written. 托福写作高分满分范文点评和思路解析:学校应如何使用赠款? 托福写作难点话题一览 The best way the school spends a gift of money Your school has received a gift of money. What do you think is th

12、e best way for your school to spend this money? Use specific reasons and details to support your choice. 写作思路展开结构分析 大家要注意审题,站在学生和老师的不同立场上,对于学校做法怎样才是best肯定是有所区别的,一般来说选择增设或是改善学校的设施会是比较好的展开角度,比如新建或者扩建一下图书馆就是很不错的选择. 本话题高分范文赏析 It is a very fortunate occurrence when a school receives a sizable grant. Scho

13、ol officials must make the difficult decision of where to allocate the funds, and I want to propose that spending the money on computers would be the most utilitarian decision. Computers are rapidly growing in popularity, to such an e_tent that they affect all aspects of modern life. It is rare that

14、 one finds stimulating employment that does not require at least basic computer skills. If children are to become successful in today s society, they must have understanding in this field. As computers are the future, it is important for students to become adept users early in life. Not all children

15、 have equal opportunities to learn the important skills of using a computer. Many low-income families cannot afford to purchase such an e_pensive item, thus continuing a cycle of social immobility. Purchasing computers for public schools gives children from low-income families the opportunity to bre

16、ak out of this cycle. Finally computers allow students to access a wealth of information that could not possibly be stored in a library, or efficiently be kept up to date. One of the most common activities on a computer is surfing the Internet. The Internet is updated by literally billions of people

17、 every day, and therefore offers up any information that one could dream of. The Internet is also an e_cellent source of inspiration, as so many people that update it have incredible ideas. In conclusion, I think that spending the grant money to buy new computers would be most beneficial for the ent

18、ire school. With the addition of new computers, students will be able to get an edge on their peers at different schools, and be ready for university and the workforce. This is especially true for low-income students. 托福写作高分满分范文点评和思路解析:所在城市的优缺点 A person you know is planning to move to your town or c

19、ity. What do you think this person would like and dislike about living in your town or city? Why? Use specific reasons and details to develop your essay. 写作思路展开结构分析 这是一道关系到大家实际情况的题目,但同时这是一个讨论假设问题的题目.因此美征小编建议大家可以尽量展开想象.注意:不要只说my city,要指出你所在城市的名字, 比如:Beijing, Shanghai等等.一般来说,人们会喜欢城市的原因有:女人喜欢商场;男人可能喜欢书

20、店;大的公园.动物园;名胜古迹;文化氛围.而人们会讨厌的原因有:交通堵塞;空气不新鲜;大城市的排外主义(e_clusivism).不友善(unfriendly)等等. 本话题高分范文赏析 If my friend Joey wants to move to Beijing, I think even though she might find something she dislikes, she will ultimately like this greatest city in our country. The weather might be one thing that she dis

21、likes. The weather in Beijing is characterized by dry climate and it is much windy and dusty than that of Guangzhou city. Joey is very sensitive about her skin, so she will definitely hate dusty winds in Beijing. Moreover, Beijing s winter is far too much colder than that of Guangzhou, it might take

22、 Joey, as many other people came from the South, a very long time to get accustomed to. Nevertheless, she might well enjoy winter in the North, since she has never seen snowflakes in reality before. I remembered the shining of yearning and eager in her eyes when I once told her what the winter in th

23、e North looks like. She might be always irritated by heavy traffic in Beijing, though ta_is in Beijing cost much less than in Guangzhou. When I was in Guangzhou, seldom was I trapped by traffic jams. It must be ridiculous for her to have spent more than two hours and still didn t arrive at the desti

24、nation which is merely 10 kilometers away. And the most ludicrous thing is, even if you possess a private car, it is more likely to be useless, for parking lots are always crowded, which means more time is to be wasted. Good news for her is that the bus system and that of subway in Beijing are well

25、developed and more convenient, and she won t have to bear that odor of bromhidrosis owing to burning weather as she once e_perienced in buses of Guangzhou. What she will definitely love is the cultural ethos of the city. Beijing has a history probably longer than any other big city in China. To visi

26、t all historical landscapes in Beijing, she will need at least three years, no kidding! Beijing has the most famous and e_cellent universities, the largest libraries, the richest museums, yet most important of all, her best friend! Amazingly, in this aged city, people are sometimes more internationa

27、l. Joey is especially fond of art, and Beijing is the right place for her, in which concerts of international singers or other musicians are much frequent, and she will even be able to attend Cui Jian s casual private concert in a coffee shop on a rainy autumn weekend. 托福写作高分满分范文点评和思路解析:学校让学生评估老师 托福

28、写作难点话题一览 Should schools ask students to evaluate their teachers? Schools should ask students to evaluate their teachers. Do you agree or disagree? Use specific reasons and e_amples to support your answer. 写作思路展开结构分析 有保留地同意 (agree with reservations).学生在评判教师时,是否全部学生都可以客观评价(objective evaluation)?是否有足够的

29、能力(包括academic knowledge等等)去进行客观评价? 如果采取了这样的方式,就会出现老师迎合(cater to/ pander to/ play up to students taste)学生而不是引导 (guide; lead)学生,违背了教育的原则.保留意见/这种方式:允许学生进行评价,但是应该作为一个参考,同时要有其他的评判方式. 本话题高分范文赏析 Teachers have a very difficult job in society. They not only have to learn how to teach material effectively, bu

30、t also must learn how to deal with a wide variety of personalities. While teaching is a difficult job, I think it is important for schools to ask students to evaluate their teachers. I think this is the right thing to do because it encourages teachers to try their best, it gives students the opportu

31、nity to choose effective teachers, and it allows the schools to have the best teachers possible teaching. If a teacher knows that at the end of the term, the students will be evaluating his/her work, then the teacher will be driven to do a very good job. If there is no pressure from evaluation, a te

32、acher might be prone to doing a less than perfect job. I believe that everyone needs an occasional evaluation to ensure they are doing their job correctly. In the case of a teacher, the students will give the most important evaluations. If there was a public summary of which teacher scored the highest on his/her evaluations, then students would be able to take courses based on which teacher was th