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4.避免生造词语
TobeathreegoodstudentisalwaysasymbolofachievementfortheChinesestudents.
Tobeanall-roundstudentisalwaysasymbolofachievementfortheChinesestudents.
二、用词形象生动
1.选用具体明确的词
1）Noonesawthebankbeingbrokeninto.
Noonewitnessedthebankbeingbrokeninto.
2）Piracyhasbecomeaphenomenonthatcanbeseeneverywhere.
Piracyhasbecomeaprevailingphenomenon.
2.利用不同的词类
Thesenovelsarewritteninplainlanguagesothateveryonecanreadwhentheywanttoentertainorrelaxthemselves.
Thesenovelsarewritteninplainlanguagesothateveryonecanreadforentertainmentortelaxation.
3．动态动词的使用
具体动作的动态动词往往比be,therebe,make,need等动词更有活力。
Therearevariousansweresamongdifferentgroupsofpeople.
Answersvaryamongdifferentgroupsofpeople.
三、避免重复和口语化
1.避免重复
写作中应尽量在此时做到言简意赅。
另外，要有意识地使用同义词、同根词、上义词或下义词来取代上文中出现的词汇。
Withthepublicationofthenovel,hebecamefamousasthegreatestwriterlivingthen,andhehasbeenmoreandmorefamousasamajorAmericanauthoreversince.HeisnowalsobecomingmoreandmorefamouswithChinesereaders.
Withthepublicationofthenovel,hebecamefamousasthegreatestwriterlivingthen,andhisreputationasamajorAmericanauthorhasbeenontheincreaseeversince.HeisnowalsobecomingmoreandmorepopularwithChinesereaders.
2.避免口语话
写作时要避免使用口语化的词汇和方言俚语。
Ifyoudon’tstudyhard,youwilleatit（忍受）onthetest.
Ifyoudon’tstudyhard,youwillfailonthetest.
四、注意过渡衔接
为了能够使文章主题明确、线索明了、浑然一体，句与句之间需要一定的连接手段，最常见的就是使用过渡性词语。
魔鬼训练：
设计亮点
下面先举一篇ComputerandI的14分优秀作文的例子，来对比说明如何运用闪光词汇与短语。
作文
词语比较点评
Ineverforgettheexceedinglythrillingdaywhenmymotherboughtmeacomputerasbirthdaypresent,whichexertedatremendousfascinationonmesothatIindulgedmyselfingooglinganarmyofusefulinformationIhadexpected,andenjoyaseaofmelodiousclassicmusic.ThatnightIwassleepless,feelingthatthewholeworldbelongedtome.
Exceedingly替换very
Thrilling替换exciting
exertedatremendousfascinationonme替换sb.beinterestedinsth.
googling替换searching
anarmyof/aseaof替换alotof
Thedawnofthenewcenturywitnessedtheincreasingpopularityofcomputers.Coincidentwiththeadvancementofscienceandtechnology,computerspouringintothecurrentsocietyasafashionareappealingtogrowingindividuals.Itisnoexaggerationtosaywehavebeensubergedbythem,inlargemeasure！
increasingpopularity替换very
Coincidentwith替换With
Advancement替换development
pouringinto替换enterinto
current替换 now
appealingtogrowingindividuals替换sb.beinaterestedinmoreandmorepeople
Forastart,wecan,freely,searchdesiredinformationatanymoment.Littlebylittle,ourknowledgewillbewellenriched,andourhorizonswillbegreatlybroadened.Additionally,wecangethugerecreationsonlinebychatting,playinggames,ordeliveringemail.
Forastart替换tobeginwith
Freely插入语
ourknowledgewillbewellenriched,andourhorizonswillbegreatlybroadened被动
Additionally替换inaddition/besides
delivering替换send
Thereisnodenyingthat,however,computerscanfunctioninthedisserviceofhumanbeings,inaway,especiallythegrowingviolence,pornpictures,AV-filmsemergingonthescreen,whichleadsquiteafewnetcitizenstocopying.
emerging替换appearing（fading替换disappearing）
Asaclassicproverbgoesthatnogardenhasnoweeds.Computersdoplayapositiveroleinthedevelopmentofpeople’slives,despiteasliceofunfavorableimpacts.Weshould,therefore,takeadvantageofthefruitsandavoidtheoppositefacet.
nogardenhasnoweeds替换everycoinhastwosides
positive替换important/good
asliceofunfavorableimpacts替换apartofbadeffects/influences
fruits替换advantages（defects替换disadvantages）
facet替换aspect
练习一句子单词练习
1.Nuclearproliferationisalwaysthetopproblemtheparticipantshavetodiscussatthiskindofmeet.（用近义词替换）
2.EatingdumplingsontheEveofLunarNewYearsisanationalhabitinChina.（同上）
3.Thefirstappearancewilldeterminetheapplicant’sfate.（插入moreoftentheannot）
4.Asweallknow,thepopulationofChinaisbecomingmoreandmore.（纠正搭配错误）
5.Thepopularofthebeautyindustryisbecauseofthefollowingreasons.（同上）
6.Womenhavestillnoequalrightsinthesociety.（用更具体的、更具动态的动词替换）
7.Pleasegiveyourhandtothisgirl,helphertopassthemostdifficultperiodinherlife,andtrytomakeherfinancialandmentalburdenlessandless.（用更具动态的动词换）
8.Afterwehaveobservedthemcarefullyandanalyzedthemcritically,wemayiderntifytheconceptionsthatwillactuallycontributetothesocialdevelopment.（其他词性改写）
9.Weshouldtaketheresponsibilityofprotectingourenvironment.（更具动态的动词替换）
10.Itisillegalunderthelawtomanufactureandsellfakecommodities.（避免啰嗦）
参考答案
1.Nuclearproliferationisalwaysthetopproblemtheparticipantshavetodiscussatthiskindofmeet.（用近义词替换）
1.issue（指重要的议题或争论点，二problem指实际存在或需要解决的问题）
2.EatingdumplingsontheEveofLunarNewYearsisanationalhabitinChina.（同上）
2.custom（值较大的社会群体的传统习惯，二habit则指个人或较小群体的习惯）
3.Thefirstappearancewilldeterminetheapplicant’sfate.（插入moreoftentheannot）
3.Thefirstappearancemoreoftenthannot（加上限定词后，更加严谨，更具说服力）
4.Asweallknow,thepopulationofChinaisbecomingmoreandmore.（纠正搭配错误）
4.thepopulation…increasinglylarge（形容人口不用many,而用large）
5.Thepopularofthebeautyindustryisbecauseofthefollowingreasons.（同上）
5.isduetothefollowingreasons（because和reason一般不能够搭配使用）
6.Womenhavestillnoequalrightsinthesociety.（用更具体的、更具动态的动词替换）
6.denied/enjoy（enjoy和deny比have更加具体也更具有动态效果，表达更加生动）
7.Pleasegiveyourhandtothisgirl,helphertopassthemostdifficultperiodinherlife,andtrytomakeherfinancialandmentalburdenlessandless.（用更具动态的动词换）
7.relieve（比make更具有动态效果，表达更加生动）
8.Afterwehaveobservedthemcarefullyandanalyzedthemcritically,wemayiderntifytheconceptionsthatwillactuallycontributetothesocialdevelopment.（其他词性改写）
8.Throughcarefulobservationandcriticalanalysis（将原来的“动词+副词”结构改成“形容词+抽象名词”结构，摆脱了汉语思维，更加生动地道，更简洁）
9.Weshouldtaketheresponsibilityofprotectingourenvironment.（更具动态的动词替换）
9.shoulder/bear（比take要生动形象）
10.Itisillegalunderthelawtomanufactureandsellfakecommodities.（避免啰嗦）
10.illegal（本身就表示“不合法的”）
改文训练
改文训练一
MyPreferredTypeofFriends
1.有的人喜欢与自己完全相同的人做朋友；
有的人则喜欢结交志同道合的人做朋友
2.比较交这两类朋友的好处
3.你喜欢交哪类朋友，说明理由。
8分作文
（1）Friendshipisveryimportant.
（2）However,wecan’tmakefriendswitheverybody.（3）Somepeoplelikesamefriends.（4）Somepeoplelikedifferentfriends.
（5）Samefriendsareverybeneficialtous.（6）Theyhavemanysameinterests,hobbiesandexperienceswithus.（7）Andtheyhavesamefeelingswithus.（8）Thesefriendsalsooftenknowhowtokeepuseachother’strust.（9）Andtheyknowthewaytoavoidprobablefriction.
（10）However,differentfriendsalsobringusmanyadvantages.（11）Ifweoftencontactdifferentfriends,itcanmakeyourworldoutlookbroad.（12）Besides,differentfriendscanleadtonewrisk.（13）Differentfriendscanshowyounewroadsinlife.
（14）Iliketomakesamefriends.（15）Foronething,thesamefeaturesbringfriendstogether.（16）Foranother,samefriendshavesamecharacters,hobbiesandsocialbackgroundswithus,sotheycanunderstandusbetter.（17）Ibelievethatifonemakesmorefriendshelikes,hewillgetmorehelpandmorepleasure.
14分作文
（1）（Friendshipisveryimportant.）Friendshipisoneoftheeternalthemesintheliteratureofalllanguages.（有文采，增加感染力）
（2）However,（wecan’tmake）friendswitheverybody.Itisimpossibleforustomake…（无灵主语）（3）Somepeoplelike（same）familiarfriends.（4）Whileothersprefer（Somepeoplelike）differentfriends.（合成一句）
（5）（Samefriendsareverybeneficialtous.）Undoubtedly,itisverybeneficialforustomakesimilarfriends.（强调句）First,（使条理清晰）（6）（Theyhavemanysameinterests,hobbiesandexperienceswithus.（7）Andtheyhavesamefeelingswithus.）Theycanshare（比have具有动态含义）ourfeelingssincetherearemanycommoninterests,hobbiesandevenexperiencesbetweenus.（合成一句）（8）（Thesefriendsalsooftenknowhowtokeepuseachother’strust.）Second（替换also，条理清晰）,similarfriendsalwaysknowhowtomaintainourmutual（替换eachother’s）trustand（9）（Andtheyknowthewaytoavoidprobablefriction.）howtoavoidpotential（替换probable）frictionbetweenus.（用and合并）
（10）However,differentfriends（also）equally（更显水平）bringusmanyadvantages.（11）（Ifweoftencontactdifferentfriends,itcanmakeyourworldoutlookbroad.）Frequentcontact（原动词变名词）withdifferentfriendsbroadens（代替make…broad,更具动态）ourworldoutlook（复合句改为简单句）.（12）Besides,differentfriendscannotonlyleadtonew（risk）advantures（比risk更加准确）.（13）（Differentfriendscanshowyounewroadsinlife.）butalsoshowyounewavenues（比road更加准确）inlife.
（14）（Iliketomakesamefriends.）Weighingup（更加逻辑）thesetwoarguments,Iprefer（比like出彩）tohavesimilarfrends.（15）Foronething,（thesamefeatures）itisthesimilarity（比samefeatures更加简洁地道）thatbringsfriendstogether.（强调句）bringfriendstogether.（16）Foranother,（samefriendshavesamecharacters,hobbiesandsocialbackgroundswithus,sothey）thefriendswhose（改成定语从句，更紧凑）characters,hobbiesandsocialbackgroundsaresimilartouscanunderstandusbetter.（17）（Ibelievethatifonemakesmorefriendshelikes,hewillgetmo
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