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第六届全国创新英语作文大赛优胜作文选登
第六届全国创新英语作文大赛优胜作文选登:
新浪教育讯日前第十届全国创新英语大赛工作已正式启动,以下为
题目:
Directions:
Somepeoplemaintainthatuniversitiesarethebestplaceforyoungpeopletoreceivehighereducation;otherpeoplebelievethatyoungpeoplecanbeequallyeducatedbytakingcorrespondencecoursesorgoingtoeveningclassesandopenuniversitiesintheirsparetime。
Writeanarticleofabout300wordsinwhichyoucompareandcontrasttheadvantagesanddisadvantagesofformaluniversityeducationandinformalhighereducation.Whichdoyouthinkismoreeffectiveanddesirable?
Supportyourargumentwithappropriateexamplesorillustrations。
命题思路:
本试题要求学生对比高等教育的两种主要形式:
正规的大学课堂教育与函授、夜大学、电视大学等业余的非正规高等教育。
学生必须在对比权衡两种不同模式的利弊后,阐述自己的观点,并有适当的例证。
就题目所涉及的内容而言,考生比较熟悉,因为高等教育是与他们最贴近的现实。
这样可以在一定程度上保证本次写作考试的信度,确保学生不至于因为思路障碍,无话可说而影响英语写作。
从组织结构而言,本试题是典型的”对比型”作文,能够比较有效地考察学生的逻辑思维能力、观点表达能力以及运用适当的语言形式来实现转折、衔接、连贯等语言能力。
评分细则:
本题作文的评分可参照如下标准:
1.内容:
(30%)
主要观测点:
■内容是否充实、完整;是否有一定的支撑细节;
■观点是否鲜明;
■论证是否有力;
■逻辑是否合理;
2.组织结构:
(20%)
主要观测点:
■总体结构是否合理;
■能否确定有意义的比照点,逐点分层次阐述;
■能否分段落陈述,各段落有合适的主题句(TopicSentence)和辅助句(SupportingSentences);
■段落之间是否连贯;
3.语言表达:
(50%)主要观测点:
■用词是否贴切;
■句子结构是否符合语法;
■能否运用不同的语言形式,灵活表达;
■能否运用对比、递进、转折等语言衔接手段,实现文章的连贯;
■语言是否得体,语气是否得当。
InformalHigherEducationServesBetter
姓名 黄沁 江苏省南京市南京师大附中 学校 高二(13)班级 准考证号0413
Althoughmoststudentsarestillfightingforthediplomainuniversitiesaftergraduationfromhighschool,ithasbeenacleartrendthatmoreandmorestudentschoosetostarttheirworkingcareerearlierandreceiveinformalhighereducation,whichinmyopinion,servesbettertobuildmorecompetition(competitive)andsuitablepersonalabilities。
Informalhighereducationoffersbetteropportunitiestoadapttosociallifeforstudents,andhelpthemunderstandbettertherealityoftheirsocialcommunityandresponsibilitiestheyaretotake.Comparedwiththosewhospendentirelytheirtimeinthe(on)campus,studentswhotakeeveningclassescouldcontactwithmorepeople,developtheircommunicationskillsandsocialbehaviorsduringworkinghours.Theyknowbetterhowcruelandrealisticthesocietyisandthatitisyourpowerandcapabilitiesthatonlyspeak.Theyunderstandandadaptbettertothepressureoflife’sdifficultieswhichinuniversitiescouldhardlyberealized。
Secondly,afterexperiencingrealworkinglife,these(those)whoattendcorrespondencecourseswouldknowbetterwhatkindofknowledgeandabilitiestheymustmaster,whichdefinitelyhelptheminfutureadvancementandcareerchoices.Supposeyou’reagraduatefromhighschoolandbecomeanassistofacarrepairingworkshop.Thenyou’llhavetoknowhowtheengineanddifferentpartsofthecarworksandhowtodealwithvariouscrisises(emergentproblems).Therefore,nightschools’education(eveningclasses)wouldenableyou(插入to)acquiremorespecializedknowledgewhicharefittoyou.However,inuniversities,youhavetolearnagreatmanycourses,someofwhicharecomparativelyuselessandcanevenmakeyoubewildedoffuture(bewilderedtothefuture)。
Furthermore,astheyhavemoretimetomanageforthemselves,studentsdrophighereducationinuniversitiescouldearnsomemoneyandgainearlierstartincareer.Thesewilleasetheirfamilies’burdensandsatisfytheirdesireforbasicmoneyneeds.Asamatteroffact,nowadays,morethanafewAmericanteensabandonuniversity’seducationandtrytobecomeaworkerlikeair-conditionalrepairer(air-conditionerrepairman)whocanearnasmuchas$30,000forthefirstyear.Thus,theirdecisionsbenefitthemselvesandtheirfamilies。
Conclude(Toconclude)fromallthefactstalkedabove,wecansafelyarriveatthesummarythatinformalhighereducationismoreefficientandservesbetter.Itmake(makes)youaheadofothersincareerdevelopmentwithmorecompetitiveskills,fitknowledge,preciousexperiencesofsociallifeandmoreleisuretoearnsomeessentialfinancialsupports.Aswe’llonedayindulgeourselvesintherealsoci(walkintotherealisticsociety,)informalhighereducationservesbetterforourpresentandfuturedeveloping.(development)
Fruit&theVitaminMedicine
姓名 俞艾杉 辽宁省大连市第二十四中 学校 2·10班级 准考证号 0335
Withtheworlddevelopingin(at)highspeed,moreandmoreyoungpeopletakepartinhighereducated(education).Someofthe(them)choosetogotouniversities,andtheothersjoinedeveningclassesandopenuniversitiesortookcorrespondencecourses.Ithink,ifweputtheformaluniversityeducationasthefruitsweeatandtheinformalhighereducationwouldbelikethevitaminmedicine.Bothofthemcouldgiveuswhatweneed。
Let’sseetwoexamples:
Thefirstoneismyeldersister,whostudyed(studied)verywellandwentintoBeijingUniversitywithahighmark.Now,afterthefour-yearuniversitylife,shewasemployedbyalawyerfirmandmakesalargesumofmoneyeveryyear。
Anotherexampleisagirlwhousedtoworkingin(workin)myfather’sbar.Shewasacountrygirl,(插入and)sheworkedhardbutgotlittlemoney,soundermyfather’sencouragement,sheattendedaneveningclassinsparetime.Thefirsttwoyearswasahardtime,becauseononehand,shemustto(去掉)learnknowledgeintheeveningwhenshewasverytiredafteroneday'swork;Ontheotherhand,shehadtomakemoneytopayfortheeveningclass.Butthenherwaywaswiderandwider,andnowshefoundabetterjobinasmallcompanyandcanoffermuchmoremoneytoherpoorfamily。
Inmyopinion,evenboththegirlandmysistergotagoodjobatlast,butIstillthinkthatenter(attending)formaluniversityisbetter.Becauseinuniversitieswecouldmakemorefriends,wecouldgetmorechancestocommunicatewiththeexperienceness(experienced)professors,wecouldgetmorewaystoreceiveinformationofourfuturejobs,andwecouldalsosendourselvesintothecoulful(colorful)groupsintheuniversitysothatwecouldhaveahappierhighereducatedlife.Butintheinformaleducation,therecouldnotbesomuchfun。
ThoughIthoughtlikethis,butIhavetosayequallythatbothfruitandvitaminmedicinecangiveusthevitaminsweneed,theonlydifferencebetweenthemisthatsomepeoplelovefruitsandtheothersmaythought(think)havingmedicineiseasier.Sowhateveryouchoose,thefruitorthemedicine(theformaluniversityeducationortheinformalhighereducation),themostimportantisthatyoucangettheknowledgeyouwanted,isn'tit?
Let'sGotoUniversities!
姓名 张培培 山东省淄博市第十一中 学校 高二22班级 准考证号 0209
There'sageneraldebate(插入on)whetherornotuniversitiesarethebestplaceforyoungpeopletoreceivehighereducation.Somepeoplethinkitrightwhileothersthinktheoppositeistrue.There’sprobablysometruthinbothopinions。
Somestudentsdreamtogo(dreamofgoing)touniversitiesbe-causestudyinginuniversitiesdoesdogoodtothem.Universitieshavesuper(outstanding)teachersandprofessorsandmostuniversitiesareequippedwithexcellentfacilities.Also,bytakingpartinallkindsofactivitiesorganizedinuniversities,studentscanwidentheirviews(插入and)increasetheirexperience.Inthiscase,manystudentsaremotivatedtostudyharderandacquiremoreknowledgeinmiddleschoolsinordertobeadmittedbytheuniversitiestheydreamof.Notonly(插入do)universitiesprovidegoodstudyingplace(circumstance),butalsothey(去掉)encouragestudentstostudy.However,therearealsosomedisadvantages.Forinstance,someuniversitiesarenotsogoodasexpected,(插入and)manystudentscan’tlearnmuchtomeettheneedofsociety.Thosewhofailintheirexamscan’tgototheirdesirableuniversities。
However,theopportunityisofferedbytheopenuniversities.Studentscanbeequallyeducatedbytakingcorrespondencecoursesorgoingtoeveningclassiftheyfailtogotouniversities.Theycanchoosecoursesthatcaterfortheirinterestandtheneedofthetimesfreely.Althoughtheyarerefusedtogotouniversities,theycanalsobenefitfromthecorrespondencecoursesoreveningclasses.Asthesayinggoes,“everycoinhastwosides”.Thingsalwaysleaveundesiabl(somethingundesirable).Therearesomeeveningclasseswhoes(whose)qualityisnotgood.It’shardforpeopletoreceivesufficientknowledge。
Forme,asastudent,Iwouldliketogotouniversities.Onceatime,IwalkedinthePekingUniversity.Iwasreallyattractedbytheswaggeringconfidence,theirrepressiblespiritandtheindomitablenervesthatthestudentsinit(去掉)have.Iwaslostinthestudyingatmosphere.I’mreallyeagertogotouniversitythatIlike.Itisthegoalthatmotivatesmetostudyhard.Ihavedonemybestandwillcontinuetodoso.Ibelieveitwon’tbelongbeforeIachievemygoal!
Ibsenoncesaid,“It’ayoursuprem(supreme)dutytocastyourselfintoausefulemplement。
”(implement)IsetmymindtogototheuniversityandI’mdeterminedtosucceed。
Let’sgotouniversitiesfortheuniversities’advantagesprovided。
StopYourSuperstitionOnUniversities
姓名 张益 中河北省石家庄市石家庄外国语 学校 高一(10)班班级准考证号 0208
Lastdecadesawthefloodpeakofstudentsstreamingintoformal,venerableuniversities.Itseemsasifuniversityistheonlycradlefor(插入its)talentedprofessers(professors)andwell-knowncelebribties(celebrities).However,Imyselfneverbelievethetheoryholdswater.Onthecontrary,Irecommendcorrespondencecoursesaswellasopenuniversitiestobethemorepreferablechoicesformodemteenagers。
Surely,formaluniversitiesenjoyamuchbetterreputationthroughoutthesociety,whichmaymoreorlessbehelpfulfortheirstudentstogetawell-paidjob.Butdon’tbedeceivedbytheattractingillusion.Universitymight