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读后续写示例与写作训练3
【写作示例】
【原文呈现】
阅读下面短文,根据所给情节进行续写,使之构成一个完整的故事。
OnedaywhenIwas12,mymothergavemeanorder:
Iwastowalktothepubliclibrary,andborrowatleastonebookforthesummer.Thiswasonemoreweaponforhertodefeatmystrangeproblem—inabilitytoread.
Inthelibrary,Ifoundmywayintothe“Children’sRoom.” Isatdownonthefloorandpulledafewbooksofftheshelfatrandom.Thecoverofabookcaughtmyeye.Itpresentedapictureofabeagle.Ihadrecentlyhadabeagle,thefirstandonlyanimalcompanionIeverhadasachild.Hewasmysecretsharer,butonemorning,hewasgone,givenawaytosomeonewhohadthespaceandthemoneytocareforhim.Ineverforgotmybeagle.
Thereonthebook’scoverwasabeaglewhichlookedidenticaltomydog.Iranmyfingersoverthepictureofthedogonthecover.Myeyesranacrossthetitle,Amos,theBeaglewithaPlan.Unknowingly,Ihadreadthetitle.Withoutopeningthebook,Iborroweditfromthelibraryforthesummer.
Undertheshadeofabush,IstartedtoreadaboutAmos.Ireadvery,veryslowlywithdifficulty.Thoughpageswereturnedslowly,Igotthemainideaofthestoryaboutadogwho,likemine,hadbeenseparatedfromhisfamilyandwhofinallyfoundhiswaybackhome.Thatdogwasmydog,andIwasthelittleboyinthebook.Attheendofthestory,mymindcontinuedthefinalsceneofreunion,onandon,untilmyownlostdogandIwere,inmymind,runningtogether.WhenIfinishedmyreading,astreamoftearsrandownmychecks.ItwasuntilthenIrealizedthatIhaveovercomemyinabilitytoread.Thus,thiswastheveryfirstbookformewhichIhadreadthroughanddeeplyimmersedinrealsense.
注意:
1.所续写短文的词数应为150左右;
2.应使用5个以上短文标有下划线的关键词语;
3.续写部分分为两段,每段的开头语已为你写好;
4.续写完成后,请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词。
Paragraph1:
Mymother’scallreturnedmetotherealworld.Isuddenlyrealizedsomething:
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Paragraph2:
Lastyear,mymotherwassoproudthathissonwasrewardedaPhDinliterature.
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【思维路径】
[核心内容]
文本主要内容为:
故事中的“我”从小患有阅读障碍,某年暑假,母亲鼓励“我”必须完成一本书的阅读,于是“我”便去图书馆寻找读物,偶然间,“我”发现了一本故事书,该书的封面上是一只猎犬,这让“我”想起了自己曾经养过的小狗。
在兴趣的驱使下,我成功的读完了整本书,克服了阅读障碍。
[写作思路]
(1)明确故事人物关系(characters)。
故事中主要人物为患有阅读障碍的“我”和“我”的母亲。
(2)理清故事主要事件(events)。
故事主人公“我”患有阅读障碍,主人公的母亲为了让他克服这个障碍要求他暑假必须完成一本书的阅读,于是“我”便去图书馆借书,一本关于猎犬的书引起了主人公的兴趣,他想起了自己曾经的宠物,最后主人公成功看完了整本书克服了他的阅读障碍。
(3)根据已知人物、事件及续写段落首句预测故事发展(development)。
故事总体的发展应该是主人公“我”开始对阅读产生兴趣,每个礼拜都会去图书馆借书看书,并且一直到大学他也从未停止过对阅读的热爱,毕业后“我”拿到了文学博士学位,并且成为了一名作家。
续写第一段:
“我”开始热爱上了阅读,在母亲的鼓励下,我每天坚持去图书馆阅读各类书籍,并且我也尝试着自己去写一些故事,到了大学,“我”主修文学,对阅读的热爱丝毫不减。
续写第二段:
“我”成功拿到了文学博士的学位,母亲为我感到骄傲,并且“我”也找到了人生的方向,即成为一名作家,而这一切完全归功于那一年暑假我读的第一本书。
(4)结合下划线词罗列写作要点(points)。
结合下划线词和文本内容,展开尽可能丰富的想象,罗列出尽可能多的故事发展情节。
例如,第一段可以通过问以下问题来获取写作要点“Didheovercomehisinabilitytoread?
Didhegoonreading?
Whatwastheinfluenceofthefirstbook?
”等”第二段可以问以下问题来获取写作要点:
“WhatwouldhappenedafterhegothisPhDinliterature?
Whywouldhechooseliteratureashismajor?
Whatwouldhedoforhisfuturecareer?
Andhowdiditrelatedtohisveryfirstbook?
等”
[参考范文]
Mymother’scallreturnedmetotherealworld.Isuddenlyrealizedsomething:
BookscouldbeincrediblywonderfulandIwasgoingtoreadthem.Fromthenon,Ikeptgoingtothelibrarymoreoften.Inthelibrary,Iwasexposedtodifferenttypesofbooks:
detectivestories,lovestories,poems,fablesandsoon.Mymotherencouragedmetospendtimedoingmyfavoritething.Daybyday,Iwasfinallysucceedinovercomingmyinabilitytoread.Moreover,Ibegantowritesomestoriesbymyself.WhenIwenttotheuniversity,Ichoseliteratureasmymajor.
Lastyear,mymotherwassoproudthathissonwasrewardedaPhDinliterature.Inevertoldmymotheraboutmy “miraculous”experiencethatsummer.ItwastheveryfirstbookthatmademewhatIamtoday.Thisyear,Ibeganwritingmyfirstbookcarriedthetopicofmybeagle.Ihopeitcouldbemylifelongcareer.Thepowerofthewordshasheld.(174words)
[范文解析]
范文围绕文章的内容进行了合情合理的拓展。
第一段写了“我”在母亲的鼓励之下,一直坚持不懈的阅读,在图书馆里接触不同类型的各类书籍,最终完全的克服了阅读障碍,本着对阅读的热爱,“我”在大学将文学作为主修。
第二段,我成功获得文学博士学位,并且成为了一名作家,开始了第一本书的写作,而“我”的第一本书正是关于我的猎犬,与上文对我人生产生影响的第一本书交相呼应,符合故事发展的逻辑,升华了主题。
[提炼归纳]
1.展开充分想象
续写有助于培养想象力,但是想象力贵在合理。
这个“理”指的就是生活的逻辑性。
续写部分不应该游离开头部分,应该是开头部分的顺理成章的发展。
如文中第二段所给开头写到Lastyear,mymotherwassoproudthathissonwasrewardedaPhDinliterature.以首句为前提,进行合理的想象,即“我”在毕业之后,开始了我的写作生涯,并且成为了一名作家,这符合文中发展,又充满了丰富的想象,使得文章成为了一个有机的整体。
2.注意前后照应
续写要注意前后照应,防止自相矛盾。
特别是给出开头的续写,必须要与上文紧密联系,使上下文融为一体。
如文章前面提到“我”所读的第一本书对“我”的意义非同小可,所以在续写中,“我”开始了一本书的写作,而第一本书的主题刚好就是关于“我”的曾经养过的猎犬,与前文相互照应。
【写作演练】
1.阅读下面短文,根据所给情节进行续写,使之构成一个完整的故事。
Itwas1stJanuary,thefirstdayoftheyearandaholidayforme.Whatluck!
Idecidedtowithdrawsomemoneyfromthebank,Thebankperson,anelderlygentlemanwithawhitebeard,repliedindifferentlyasusualtomypolite“HappyNewYear.”HenoddedandIsatinfrontofhim.
Minutespassedbuthedidn’traisehishead.
ThenveryhesitantlyIputmyformandbookletinfrontofhim.Hewasbusyfillingupentriesinhisregister.Afterafewminuteshetookmyformandfromhiscabinethetookoutaverythickfile,fromwhichhestartedfillinginmydetails,Isattherewonderingwhywehadcomputerizedbankingifwewerestillfillinginformsandregister.
Afterwaitingforafewmoreminutes,inwhichIshowedallsignsofbeingimpatient,Iaskedhimifmyworkwasdone.ThemomentIsaidthewords,Ifeltasifabombhadfallenonhim.Heshouted,“Nothingisdone,itwilltaketime!
”
JustthenIsawhismorningcupofteawhichhadbeenlyingthereforthelasttenminutes,untouched.Theteahadtunedalmostcoldwhilehewasdoinghiswork.SuddenlyIfeltwhatthisman,whohadbeenworkingatthiscounterforthelastGod-knows-how-manyyears,mustbefeelingwhencustomerslikemecomewhoarealwaysinahurrytogettheirworkdone.Wedonotevenfeeltheneedtothankthemforbeingthere,Hemustbefeelingsoanxiousthat“herecomesanotherpersonwhowillpushmefordoinghisworkfirst.”
注意:
1.所续写短文的词数应为150左右;
2.至少使用5个短文中标有下划线的关键词语;
3.续写部分分为两段,每段的开头语已为你写好;
4.续写完成后,请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。
Paragraph1:
Thinkingofthis,Itoldhim,“Sir,youpleasehareyourtea,Iamnotinahurry.”
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Whathesaidreallytouchedmyheart.
______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________2.阅读下面材料,根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段,使之构成一篇完整的短文。
续写的词数应为150左右。
WhenIspentthelastsummerwithmyGrandmotherinWarwick,N.Y.,shesentmedowntothegrocerystorewithalongshoppinglist.Staringatalltheitemsonthelist,IwonderedhowIcouldfindanythingonthepackedshelvesaroundme.Butsheinsisted.
Iwalkeduptothecounter.BehinditwasaladylikenooneI’deverseen.Thickglassesrestedonthetipofhernose,grayhairwaspiledonherhead.
“Excuseme,”Isaid.Shelookedup.
“You’rethatClementskid,”shesaid.“I’mMissBee.Comecloserandletmegetalookatyou.”Shepushedherglassesuphernose.“Iwanttobeabletodescribeyoutothepolicemanifsomethinggoesmissingfromthestore.”
“I’mnotathief!
”Iwasshocked.Iwastooyoungtobeathief!
“Maybenot,butIcantellyou’vegotpotential.”Shewentbacktoreadinghernewspaper.
“Ineedtogetthese.”Isaid,holdingupmylist.
“So?
Gogetthem.”Sheignoredmyneedofafavor,“There’snoonehereexceptyouandmeandI’mnotyourservant,soIsuggestyoustartlookingforthethingsonthatlist.”
Thestorewasapuzzletoaseven-year-old,anditseemedtoholdallthegoodsintheworld.IcomplainedaboutthistaskGrandmahadsetmetodowhiletryingtofindalltheitemsonmylist.Ittookmeoneandhalfanhourtodoit,andthemeanladybehindthecounterdidn’tevenbothertolookatmeonce.
IvisitedMissBeeacoupleoftimesaweekthatsummer.Sometimesshesoldmeanoldnewspaperinsteadofonethatwasthelatest.Sometimessheoverchargedmeanddidn’tseemembarrassedwhenIpointeditout.Goingtothestorewasmorelikegoingintobattle,butIsurvived.Bysummer’sendtheshoppingtripthathadoncetakenmeanhourwasdonein15minutes.ThemorningIwastoreturntoBrooklyn,Istoppedintogetasoda.
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“Allright,MissPotential,whatdidyoulearnthissummer?
”shesaid.
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Onedayafterallthoseyearsmyseven-year-olddaughtercametomewithhomeworktroubles.
______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________3.阅读下面材料,根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段,使之构成一篇完整的短文。
续写的词数应为150左右。
AfunnythinghappenedtoArthurwhenhewasonthewaytoworkoneday.AshewalkedalongParkAvenueneartheFirstNationalBank,heheardthesoundofsomeonetryingtostartacar.Hetriedagainandagainbutcouldn’tgetthecarmoving.Arthurturnedandlookedinsideatthefaceofayoungmanwholookedworried.Arthurstoppedandasked,“Itlookslikeyou’vegotaproblem,”Arthursaid.
I’mafraidso.I’minabighurryandIcan’tstartmycar.”
“IstheresomethingIcandotohelp?
”Arthurasked.Theyoungmanlookedatthetwosuitcasesinthebackseatandthensaid,“Thanks.Ifyou’resureitwouldn’tbetoomuchtrouble,youcouldhelpmegetthesesuitcasesin