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一

标题：

TeamWork

字数:

不低于100字并且不高于500字

满分:

100

要求：

Directions:

Forthispart,you'llhavetowriteanessayentitledTeamWork.Youshouldwriteatleast120wordsfollowingtheoutlinegivenbelow.

1）为什么我们要学习团队合作；

2）你是如何在大学加强自己的团队合作能力的；

3）学会团队合作的关键是什么。

Asweallknow,teamworkplaysanimportantpartinoursuccess.However,whatisteamwork?

Withoutdoubt,whatiscalledteamworkmeanseachpersonontheteamshouldworkwithinagroupofpeople,whichisnumberofpeoplegreaterthanone.Certainly,evenifthereareonlytwopeopleinthegroup,theycanbecalledateam.Therefore,itisanessentialrequirementofanyemploymentthatanypotentialemployeeisateamplayer.

Asthesayinggoes:

Manyhandsmakelightwork;Ifeveryoneismovingforwardtogether,thensuccesstakescareofitself;Talentwinsgames,butteamworkandintelligencewinchampionships;Agreatpersonattractsgreatpeopleandknowshowtoholdthemtogether;etc.Allthesayingsabovewehaveheardornotaboutteamallemphasizethesignificanceofcooperationtoanextent.Therefore,itisnecessaryforustolearntohowtocooperatewithothers,whichwillturnouttobeeasierforustosucceedinouraims.

Ascurrentcollegestudents,playinganimportantroleontheteamnomatterwhatwherethatisfrom.Tomypointofview,eventhepupilsknowtheeffectofcooperation,whichisthereasonwhywecollegestudentsshouldtakeactionrightaway!

What'smore,itiswellknownthatanygreatprojectcanmakeitwithoutteams.

Soduringmytimeinuniversity,Iwilltakeanactivepartintheteamstoworkhardinordertoachievemoresuccesses.Forinstance,givesomesuggestionsortrymybesttosupporttheteamwork.

Insteadofmerelystudyhardregardlessofthethingsaroundus,somethingthatIthinkisthemostimportantiseverymemberoftheteamhasaveryspecificrole--asacaptain,goalkeeper,striker,midfielderordefender.Apartfromthat,eachmembershouldcareforeachother.Whenoneofthememberismissing,theteamishandicappedandsoon.Onlyinthisway,cantheteamachieveagreatsuccess.

1.1

Asweallknow,teamworkplaysanimportantpartinoursuccess.[修改]

[搭配统计]动名搭配play...part在教材中出现过4525次

[学习提示]易混词汇:

part,piece,section,division,portion,fraction,fragment,segment,share均可表示“整体的一部分”之意。

important的近义表达有crucial/essential。

[批改提示]know近义表达有cognize/recognize/realize/foreknow

1.2

However,whatisteamwork?

[修改]坛是普特www.put

1.3

Withoutdoubt,whatiscalledteamworkmeanseachpersonontheteamshouldworkwithinagroupofpeople,whichisnumberofpeoplegreaterthanone.[修改]

[学习提示]易混词汇:

group,crowd,gang,band,mob,throng,masses,swarm均含“群，帮，伙”之意。

[批改提示]people表示“人，民族”。

查看与person的区别。

[批改提示]person表示“人”。

注意与people的区别。

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1.4

Certainly,evenifthereareonlytwopeopleinthegroup,theycanbecalledateam.[修改]

[学习提示]易混词汇:

certainly,naturally,ofcourse,surely均有“肯定地，当然”之意。

[批改提示]people表示“人，民族”。

查看与person的区别。

1.5

Therefore,itisanessentialrequirementofanyemploymentthatanypotentialemployeeisateamplayer.[修改]

[学习提示]易混词汇:

profession,job,occupation,trade,vocation,career,work,employment均含“职业”之意。

[批改提示]批改提示，注意potent与potential的区别。

第2段

2.1

Asthesayinggoes:

Manyhandsmakelightwork;Ifeveryoneismovingforwardtogether,thensuccesstakescareofitself;Talentwinsgames,butteamworkandintelligencewinchampionships;Agreatpersonattractsgreatpeopleandknowshowtoholdthemtogether;etc.[修改]

[搭配统计]动名搭配attract...people在教材中出现过2116次

[搭配统计]动名搭配make...work在教材中出现过3088次

[搭配统计]动名搭配win...championship在教材中出现过14291次

[搭配统计]动名搭配win...game在教材中出现过35020次

[学习提示]易混词汇:

athletics,sport,game均有“体育运动”之意。

注意game和match的区别。

2.2

Allthesayingsabovewehaveheardornotaboutteamallemphasizethesignificanceofcooperationtoanextent.[修改]

[搭配统计]动名搭配emphasize...significance在教材中出现过20次

[学习提示]易混词汇:

hear,listen,overhear均含“听”之意。

[批改提示]emphasize/accentuate/stress/underline/highlight

2.3

Therefore,itisnecessaryforustolearntohowtocooperatewithothers,whichwillturnouttobeeasierforustosucceedinouraims.[修改]

[学习提示]易混词汇:

aim,goal,purpose,end,target,object,objective均有“目标，目的”之意。

[批改提示]learn近义表达有takein/absorb/ingest/acquire

[批改提示]cooperate近义表达有pulltogether/worktogether/joinforces/coordinate/collaborate

第3段

3.1

Ascurrentcollegestudents,playinganimportantroleontheteamnomatterwhatwherethatisfrom.[修改]

[搭配统计]动名搭配play...role在教材中出现过26773次

[学习提示]易混词汇:

college,university,institute,school,academy均含有“学院，大学”之意。

important的近义表达有crucial/essential。

3.2

Tomypointofview,eventhepupilsknowtheeffectofcooperation,whichisthereasonwhywecollegestudentsshouldtakeactionrightaway!

[修改]

[搭配统计]动名搭配know...effect在教材中出现过252次

[学习提示]易混词汇:

act,action,deed,operation,performance均含“行为，行动”之意。

[批改提示]reason表示“原因，理由”。

注意与cause的区别。

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thereasonwhy意为：

...的原因是...，属于四六级经典高分句型。

[批改提示]know近义表达有cognize/recognize/realize/foreknow

3.3

What'smore,itiswellknownthatanygreatprojectcanmakeitwithoutteams.[修改]

[学习提示]易混词汇:

big,large,great,grand均含“大的”之意。

[批改提示]know近义表达有cognize/recognize/realize/foreknow

what'smore意思是另外，而且…，是四六级经典补充类词组。

第4段

4.1

Soduringmytimeinuniversity,Iwilltakeanactivepartintheteamstoworkhardinordertoachievemoresuccesses.[修改]

[搭配统计]动名搭配achieve...success在教材中出现过1003次

[学习提示]易混词汇:

attain,reach,achieve,arrive均有“达到”之意。

4.2

Forinstance,givesomesuggestionsortrymybesttosupporttheteamwork.[修改]

[搭配统计]动名搭配give...suggestion在教材中出现过161次

[学习提示]易混词汇:

give,accord,award,confer，grant,endow,present,bestow均含有“给予，赠给”之意。

第5段

5.1

Insteadofmerelystudyhardregardlessofthethingsaroundus,somethingthatIthinkisthemostimportantiseverymemberoftheteamhasaveryspecificrole--asacaptain,goalkeeper,striker,midfielderordefender.[修改]

[搭配统计]动名搭配have...role在教材中出现过6325次

[学习提示]易混词汇:

each,every都有“每一个”之意。

[批改提示]very的近义表达有extremely,exceedingly,remarkably,intensely。

important的近义表达有crucial/essential。

5.2

Apartfromthat,eachmembershouldcareforeachother.[修改]

[学习提示]易混词汇:

care,mind均有“介意，在乎”之意。

[批改提示]apartfrom在做“除去……，除……意外”讲时，近义表达有withtheexceptionof。

[批改提示]注意carefor和like区别。

5.3

Whenoneofthememberismissing,theteamishandicappedandsoon.[修改]

[学习提示]易混词汇:

lose,miss,misplace均有“丢失，遗失”之意。

5.4

Onlyinthisway,cantheteamachieveagreatsuccess.[修改]

[搭配统计]动名搭配achieve...success在教材中出现过1003次

[学习提示]易混词汇:

attain,reach,achieve,arrive均有“达到”之意。

Asweknow,ateamteamworkplaysanimportantpartinoursuccesstoadegree.However,whatsuccess.However,whatisteamwork?

Whatteamwork?

Withoutdoubt,whatiscalledteamworkmeanseachpersonontheteamshouldworkwithinagroupofpeople,whichisnumberofpeoplegreaterthanone.Evenone.Certainly,evenifthereareonlytwopeopleinthegroup,theycanbecalledateam.Therefore,itisanessentialrequirementofanyemploymentthatanypotentialemployeeisateamplayer.

Certainly,asplayer.

Asthesayinggoes:

Manyhandsmakelightwork;Ifeveryoneismovingforwardtogether,thensuccesstakescareofitself;Talentwinsgames,butteamworkandintelligencewinchampionships;Agreatpersonattractsgreatpeopleandknowshowtoholdthemtogether;etc.Allthesayingswehaveheardornotaboutteamemphasizethesignificanceofcooperationtoanextent.Inshort,extent.What'smore,itisnecessaryforustolearntohowtocooperatewithothers,whichwillturnouttobeeasierforustosucceedinouraims.

Asthecurrentcollegestudents,playinganimportantroleontheteamnomatterwhatwherethatisfrom.Besides,eventhepupilsknowtheeffectofcooperation,whichisthereasonwhywecollegestudentsshouldtakeactionrightaway!

Itaway!

Atthesametime,itiswellknownthatanygreatprojectcanmakeitwithoutteams.

Soduringmytimeinuniversity,Iwilltakeanactivepartintheteamstoworkhardinordertoachievemoresuccess.Forinstance,givesomesuggestionsortrymybesttosupporttheteamwork.

Meanwhile,somethingthatIthinkisthemostimportantiseverymemberoftheteamhasaveryspecificrole--asacaptain,goalkeeper,striker,midfielderordefender.Apartfromthat,eachmembershouldcareforeachother.Whenoneofthememberismissing,theteamishandicappedandsoon.Onlyinthisway,cantheteamachieveagreatsuccess.

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二

BeingCreative

Asisknowntous,imaginationisthebeginningofcreation.Youimaginewhatwedesire,youwillwhatyouimagineandatlastyoucreatewhatyouwill.Firstall,anythinguniqueisunderthecreationthatisderivedfromthecreativepeople.Resultfromthecreation,variousthingsmeaningfulstarttoexist.Inshort,creationissoimportantthatwehavetokeepanddevelopittoanextent.

Inmyopinion,creativepeoplehaveagreatdealofphysicalenergy,buttheyarealsooftenquietandatrest.Besides,theycanworklonghourswithgreatconcentrationwhileremainingfreshandenthusiasticallthetime,whichdoesnotmeanthatcreativepeoplearealwaysactive.Infact,theyrestoftenandsleepalot.What'smore,thekeytosuccessisthatthecreativepeopleknowhowtocontroltheirenergy,whichisnotruledbythecalendar,theclockoranexternalschedule.Whennecessary,theycanfocusitlikealaserbeam;whennot,creativetypesimmediatelyrechargetheirbatteries,whichisnotabiorhythminheritedwiththeirgenesandwaslearnedbytrialanderrorasastrategyforachievingtheirgoals.

Meanwhile,weshouldnotonlystudyhardbutalsocatchtheopportunitiesinordertobecreativepeople.Only