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第二类topics:

Discusssomeissueofpersonal,local,nationalorinternationalconcernanditsimportancetoyou.

Thisquestionisamongthehardesttoanswer.Evenhereyouneedtostaypersonal.Ifacauseisimportanttoyouoryouhaveastrongopinionaboutit,relateitbacktoyourlife.Whataboutyou,yourexperiences,oryourupbringinghasmadethisissueresonateforyou?

Whydoyoucare?

Doestheissueaffectyoupersonallyinanyway?

Besuretowriteaboutbothsidesoftheissuestoshowthatyoucanthinkobjectivelyandlogically.Showingthatyouarepassionateisgreat;showingthatyouareone-sidedorbull-headedisnot.Finally,besuretorefrainfrommakingsweepinggeneralizationsaboutissuesthatwouldbeoutofyourrangeofexperience.

附两篇范文：

SAMPLEESSAY1:

Carnegie-Mellon,currentaffairs:

MiddleEastdebate

AGreekphilosopheroncesaid,“Inargument,truthisborn.”Eventhoughsometimesfeelingsandemotionscomeintoplaythatconfusetheissueathand,usuallyanargumentresultsinanewinsightonthesubject.Evenifapersonholdsstrongviewsthatareunshakenbyanythinghisadversarymaysay,hemayneverthelessgainfromthedebate.Itforceshimtoorganizeandanalyzehisviews,leavinghimwithaclearerunderstandingofthesubjectthanbefore.Further,hisopponent’sargumentshelphimbetterappreciatehisviewsandtheirdifferences.Finally,theargumentforcesbothtolookinwards,attheircharacterandvaluesystem.

Forthesereasons,IenjoydebatingissuesthatareimportanttomeandaboutwhichIholdstrongviews.OnesuchissuereceivinggreatnationalattentionistheMiddleEastpeaceprocess.WhilethepeaceprocesshasalwaysbeenimportanttotheAmericancommunityasawhole,andmorespecificallytotheJewishAmericancommunity,theassassinationofIsraelPrimeMinisterYitzhakRabinhasfocusedthespotlightuponit,aswellasintensifiedthedebatearoundit.SinceIattendaprivateJewishschool,Ioftendiscussthistopicwithmypeers,oftenfindingmyselfintheminority.Mostofthemsupportthepeaceprocess,whileIadheretotheviewsoftheLikud（opposition）party,whichopposesthepeaceprocess.

Complicatingtheissueareseveralemotionalstigmasthatareoftenattachedtoit,transformingthediscussionfromanobjectiveonetoonedrivenbypassion.Theforemostofthesestigmasistheaccusation,whichisoftenhurledattheopponentsofthepeaceprocess,ofpromotingwarandviolence.Oftenmadebypeoplewhoknowlittleabouttheissue,thisviewfailstorealizethatoppositiontothepeaceprocessdoesnotimplyoppositionofpeace.Rather,itimpliesdisapprovalofcertaintacticsandspecificsofthepeaceprocessasitwascarriedoutbyRabin.

AnothercommonlyadvancedaccusationagainstAmericanJewswhodisagreewiththepeaceprocesscentersaroundthequestionofwhethertheyhavetherighttoinfluenceIsraelipolicy.“Youdon’thavetosendyourchildrentotheArmy,”itissaid,“yourchildrendon’tdieinwars.Whatrighthaveyoutoopposepeace?

!

”Thefallacyofthisargumentisthatitdoesn’tdifferentiatebetweenbeliefandaction.Whileitistrue,forpreciselythereasonsabove,thatAmericanJewshavenorighttotrytoinfluenceIsraelipolicy,thatdoesnotprecludethemfromhavingideasofwhatthatpolicyshouldbe.

Finally,theassassinationofYitzhakRabinhasintroducedyetanotherdimensionintothisdebate.Initsaftermath,opposingthepeaceprocesssometimesisidentifiedwithcondoningtheassassinationitself.Suchanidentificationofthemanandhisbeliefsinvolvesgravedangers,suchasrashlyimplementinghisideasinaflurryofcompassionandcommiseration.

Whatallofthesestigmashaveincommonisthattheyforsakelogicalandobjectivedebate,optingratherforemotions,generalizationsandaccusations.AndthedangersofthathappeningarethemainlessonIlearnedfrommydebates.WhilethosedebateshaveshednewlightontheissueandhaveforcedmetoreconsiderwhatIthinkismoralandjust,mostimportantlytheyhavedemonstratedthenecessityofobjectivenessandremovalofemotionsfromthediscussion,especiallywhen,asinthecaseofthepeaceprocess,thousandsoflivesareatstake.Whenpassionsandhatredtakeover,wemuststopandthinkofwhatitallisreallyabout.

COMMENTS:

Thesocialconcernsorethicsessayisnotoriouslydifficulttowrite.Thisessayisttacklesitwellwithsolidarguments,clearthinking,andgoodstructure.Themainsuggestionforimprovementcamefromoneofficerwhofeltthatthestatementsmadeinthefirstparagraphweretoobroadandloftyforacollegeessay.

Veryclearheaded.

Thisstudentputtimeandenergyintothisessayanditshowsinthewritingstyle,theflowofdiscourseandtheconclusionsthatthewritercomestointheend.Itisawellthoughtoutessaywithdepthandfocus.

Thisessayiswellwritten,andbringsoutaninterestingpointofview,oneofwhichIhadnotbeenawareuntilnow.Thisauthorgraspsthesubtletiesofadifficultpoliticalposition.Ithinkhewouldbeaninterestingpersontoknow,andwouldcertainlymakepeoplethink,bothinclassandindiscussionsoutsideofacademics.

Theargumentintheessayislogicalandsubstantiatedwithsolidexamples,makingitaneffectiverepresentationofthestudent’sthoughtandwritingstylewhilerevealingthestudent’spersonalopinionsontheMiddleEastpeaceprocess.

SAMPLEESSAY2:

Harvard,currentaffairs/familyillness:

Medicine

TheKeytoMedicalAdvancement

Throughoutthetwentiethcentury,virtuallyeveryaspectofmodernmedicinehasreapedtherewardsoftechnologicaladvancements.Societywillbeforeverindebtedtothosepioneerswhoconceivedthevastarrayofpreventions,treatments,andcuresthatarereadilyavailabletomankindtoday.Apparently,theimaginationsofthesepioneersknownoboundaries,foreverydayweareinformedofprogressinyetanotherdomainofstudy.

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Untilrecently,relativelylittleethicalconsiderationneededtoaccompanyourquestforimprovement.Indeed,fewcanfindmoralfaultwithimportantdiscoveriessuchasapoliovaccineandinsulin.However,medicineisnowventuringintoareas,suchasgenetics,whichexploretheverycoreofhumanexistence.Consequently,Ibelievethatifmedicaladvancementsinthesefieldsaregoingtocontinuetobenefitsociety,weneedtoconsiderallpossibleethicaleffectsbeforeimplementingnewdiscoveries.Wemustensurethatthepotentialforabusewillnotoverridethecapacityforgain.

Oneofthebiggestbreakthroughsingeneticshasbeentheuseofbacteriatogeneticallyengineerdrugssuchasinsulinandgrowthhormone.Fiveyearsago,abraintumordestroyedmybrother’spituitarygland.Henowtakesgeneticallyengineeredgrowthhormoneonadailybasistoreplacethatwhichhenolongernaturallyproduces.Thistechnologyhashelpedgivebacktohimaportionofwhathelosttothetumor.Aneffortiscurrentlyunderwaytomakegrowthhormonemorereadilyavailabletothegeneralpublicfortreatmentofailmentssuchasosteoporosis,severeburns,andinfertility.Manypeoplecouldbenefitfromgrowthhormone,butthereisalsoahighprobabilitythatitwillbeabusedforathleticpurposes.FootballgreatLyleAlzadoappearedonnationaltelevisionappealingtothepublictorefrainfrommisusingthegrowthhormonewhichhefeltwasresponsibleforhisbraincancer.ThereforeIfeelweneedtolimithowavailablewemakethedruginordertoensurethatitdoesmoregoodthanharm.

ResearchingeneticsisalsohelpingustolocategeneswhicharelinkedtodiseasessuchasCysticFibrosis,SickleCellAnemia,andHuntington’sdisease.Theknowledgeofthesegenesmayleadtobettertreatmentsandmaybeevenacureoneday.Aswell,geneticsisnowbeingusedinamniocentesisteststodetermine,forabortionpurposes,ifanembryohasanabnormalitysuchasthemedicalconditionknownasDown’sSyndrome.

Givingpeopletheopportunitytoabortanunplannedchildisanissueallbyitself.Givingpeopletheopportunitytoabortaplannedpregnancybecausethechildisn’twhattheywantedisabsolutelyludicrous.IamasupportworkerforachildwhohasDown’sSyndrome.He’severybitasmuchahumanbeingasyouandI,andthereforeisentitledtoalltheprivilegesthataccompanythestatus.EverydayhemakesmesmileandremindsmeofhowluckyIamsimplytobealive.Heistheepitomeoftheinnocencewhichisalltoooftenabsentfromourfast-pacedlives.

Whathappenswhenourknowledgeexpands,asitinevitablywill,andanamniocentesiscantestforhairandeyecolor?

Willweabortapregnancybecausethechildwon’tdevelopblondhairandblueeyes?

Afterall,theargumentcouldbemadethatapoorphysicalappearancemaycausehardshipinlife.Moreimportantly,ifthetechnologybecomesavailable,willwecustomdesignchildrentoourspecificationsbymanipulatingtheirgenes?

Whateverhappenedtoplayingthecardswe’redealt?

Ifwe’renotcarefulwemightcreateanotherFrankenstein.

Implementingthese,andothertechnologiesraisessomecriticalethicalissues.Aworldwartookplaceover50yearsagobecausenumerouscountriesintenselydisagreedwithAdolfHitleronsomeofthesesameissues.HitlerwantedtocreateasupremeraceandeliminatedisabledpeoplesuchasthosehavingDown’sSyndrome.DoweagreewithbasicprinciplesbehindHitler’sintentionsandmerelydisagreewiththemethodheemployed?

Hitlerwasoneofthemostdespisedmenofmodernhistory.Don’tlooknow,butitapp