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大学英语经典作文简评
大学英语经典作文简评
每一个英语专业的大学生,和英语之间都有一种不可言说的联系。
下面是给大家整理的大学英语经典作文简评,供大家参阅!
大学英语经典作文简评:
TheLabelIWoreToday,mostofmyfriendswillprobablydescribemeasanoutgoingandsomewhattalkativegirl,displayingherboldnessinstudyaswellasvarioussocialactivities.Butseveralyearsago,whenIwasinmiddleschool,thingswerequitetheopposite.Despitemyoutstandinggraderecord,Ioncebelongedtoagroupthatdemandedlittlenoticeduetomychildhoodpersonality.Peoplearoundlabeledmeas"timid",andthatlabel,regardlessofthesomuchbitterfeelingitaroused,hasbecomesomethingofalifetimeinfluenceonme.
Asachild,Itookaftermymotherandwasquiet,shyandsomewhatclumsyatverbalexpression.Theproblem,asIoftenreflectedupon,wasnotthatIwasunsociableoreccentric,forallofmyclassmatesandteachersmingledwellwithme.ItwasthatIwouldblushandfeeldizzywhenmanypeoplelookedatmeatthesametime.IwassouneasyinpublicthatIaminclinedtoshutmymouth,whichsadlyresultedinmylabel"timidity".
Bearingsuchalabelwasanythingbuteasyformetotolerate.EverytimeIfinallypluckedupenoughcouragetoraisemyhandandtriedtoairmyview,Istoodthereonlytofindtherestfiftypairsofeyesfixingonme,allwiththesametraceofsurpriseanddoubtinthemasifaquietpersonlikemewerenotsupposedtotalkinpublic.DistressimmediatelyseizedmeandIbegantostutter,swallowedupmywellcontrivedspeechandretreatedintomyseat.Ifeltabasedandhurt.
NeverhadIfoundthelabelsoannoyinganddetestableasonthoseoccasions.Aninnervoiceagainandagainclatteredinmybrain:
You'renotinferiorordull.Whycan'tyoujusttalkfreelylikethetalkative?
Ifyouwannahaveachange,it'suptoyouyourself.Thebiggestobstaclelayinsideme.AslongasIcouldovercomemytimidity,therestwouldtakecareofitself.
Andinthoseyears,neverhadIstoppedthispainstakingyetextremelyrewardingshiftfromspeechlessnesstoverbalstrength.Atthebeginning,Ipromptedmyselftogivesimpleyesornoquestions.Inastepbystepfashion,Iwasthensupposedtotalkinlongsentences,todiscussandtopresent.Urgedbyaninnerdrive,ItookpainswiththetransitionandwitnessedwiththeutmostjoythechangeIwasgoingthrough.Forthefirsttime,Ididn'tfeeluneasyunderpublicattention.Forthefirsttime,myresponsetoteacher'squestionwasapplauded.IrejoicedineverybitofprogressImade.ConfidencebegantosetrootinmeandI,likeastrayingchildwhocatchessightofhome,wasgraduallyledbacktomymesmerizedeloquence.IfinallyrecoveredwhatIhadbeencravingforsolong.
Nowyearshavepassedwhenthelabeloftimiditynolongerhauntsme.Ifindthisexperiencemostvaluableandinterestinginretrospection.Nodoubt,labelingexertsprofoundinfluenceon
individual'sdevelopmentandthecommonbeliefisthatpeoplewillliveuptotheirlabels,implyingthatpositivelabelsinspireandencourageuswhereasnegativeonesonlyworsenthesituation.Butafterall,nomatterhowdisheartenedorfrustratedwefeelabouttheprejudice,wearethesolemastersofourowndestinies.Whyfallvictimstothelabel?
AsFranklinD.Rooseveltsaid,"Theonlythingwehavetofearisfearitself."Thepointistofreeourselvesfromthefearfornegativelabelsandcheerupinsideustheunrelentingwilltooverthrowthem.Thelabelissomethingofamirror.Aslongasweadjustourselves,thereflectionsinthemirrorwillaltertoo.Inthissense,negativelabelingmayaswellbecomesomethingextremelypositiveandrewarding,justasI'veexperienced.
简评
世界上最难战胜的就是自我,在自我的软弱面前是沉默,还是勇敢地去面对?
挑战自我,你会发现人生变得更有意义了。
第一、二、四段最后一句都出现了timidity一词,紧扣主题。
keyword的重复出现,加深读者印象,增强文章的节奏感。
第三段的心理描绘,细腻真实,抓住一个细节进行放大,把笔者的心理表达得淋漓尽致。
文章用词准确,表达生动,如作者写到试图在众人面前说话时,“IfinallypluckedupenoughcouragetoraisemyhandandtriedtOairmyview...”可她却发现此刻,“DistressimmediatelyseizedmeandlbegantOStutter,swallowedupmywell-contrivedsveechandretreatedintomyseat.”面对这样的挫败,她并不气馁,一段简短的自白,道出了她的决心:
“You'renotinferiorordull.Whycan'tyoujusttalkfreelylikethetalkative?
Ifyouwannahaveachance,it'suptoyouyourself.”在战胜怯懦的过程中,她曾经感到annoymganddetestable,可她所付出努力是painstakingyetextremelyrewarding,战胜怯懦后的感觉是mostvaluableandinteresting。
此外,作者的表达准确,用词灵活、生动,驾驭语言的能力很强。
冒雯雯同学给我们留下了一个鼓舞人心又有启迪意义的结论,借用美国总统Franklin的话告诉我们“Theonlythingwehavetofearisfearitself.”并且,以一个浅显的比喻,形象地讲出了这个影响她一生性格的深刻道理。
这个结尾是积极的,耐人寻味的。
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大学英语经典作文简评:
SparetheRodInsomeoldfashionedtraditions,thereisasaying,"sparetherod,spoilthechild,"whichisworshippedbydictatorialparentsandhaslongbeenapoliteexcuseforcruelbodypunishment.Astomyopinion,itisnotrightandnorreasonable.
First,letusfocusonthevictim;thechildren.Nomatterwhatwrongtheyhavedone,theyarestillchildren,childrenwhoarecharacterizedbytheirvagueconceptofgoodorevil,bytheirlittleknowledgeofwhattodoornot,bytheirstraightforwarddesireforothers'loveandcare.Theyliveinthepristineworldoftheirheart.Suchmistakesthatappearintolerabletoparentsmaybetheirfirststeptodiscovernatureortheirinitialattempttocommunicatewithpeople.Butwhatawaitthemisonlyseverepunishment,whichbreakstheirheart,destroystheirtrust,roughstheirtemper,makesthemconservative,andsuccessfullyleadsthemtobuildawalltoprotectthemselveswhileisolatefromtheworld.Thisisnokidding.ThefamouspsychiatristDrFreud,whoisamasterinstudyingtheeffectofearlyageexperienceonlaterlife,provesthatchildhoodexperiencemakesbothsuperficialandunderlyingsignificanceinone'slifetime.Andstatisticsalsoshowthatadultoradolescenceviolencehassomethingtodowithearlylifecircumstance.Achildlivinginanenvironmentofviolencewillbedoomedtobecomeviolent.
Incontrast,loveiswhatchildrenneedfirstandforemost.Kindwords,gentlesmile,sincerepraise,properencouragement,alltheseelementscontributetotheformationoffinecharacterandoptimisticattitude.Pleasesparetherod.
Secondly,letusconcentrateontheperformer;theparents.Beforeourdiscussion,wecansafelyignoretheirrationalparents.Thissortofparentsbeatchildrenbecauseoftheirowndistortedmentalitystemmingfromtheirmiserablelifeorabnormalgenes.Ortheybeatthemjustforfun!
Therationalparents,unlikely,areinstronghopestoseetheirchildrensuperiortoothgenes.Ortheybeatthemjustforfun!
Therationalparents,unlikely,areinstronghopestoseetheirchildrensuperiortoothers.Thus,theyapplydiscipline,whichradicallyturnstoriolence,meanwhiletheirheartsarebleeding."Weloveourchildrensowebeatthem."Theseparentssay,inordertopersuadethemselvesratherthanpersuadeotherstoaccepttheirwayofeducation.Butascreamriseshigherandhigherfromtheirheartsaying,beatingourchildisnobetterthanbeatingourselves,yetwhatshouldwedotopreventtheirfallinginpits,toprotectthemfromdrugs,streetgangs,pornographywithoutbeatingthem?
ButIwonder,doesbeatingwork?
Itisnotaremedy,butapoison.Undersuchpressure,childreneasilyrebelandbetraythemselves.Theirparents'actioninthepursuitofgratitudeandlovefromtheirchildrenonlycallsforhatred.Thisisaloselosesolutionundoubtedly.Pleasesparetherod.
Afterall,itcomestoaproblemofhowtoeducatechildren.Insteadofusingrod,lovecouldbeabettersolution,whichworksbetter,harmsless,asI'vementionedbefore.Makegooduseofit,thechildrennolongerneedtofeelbitter,theparentsnolongerneedtoreproachthemselves,andthesocietywillbemoreharmonic.
Pleasesparetherod.
简评
在中国,体罚有时是一种教育子女的方法。
本文作者运用心理学理论说明体罚将对孩子的身心健康造成严重伤害,并分析了父母“不打不成材”的错误心态,一针见血地指出棍棒教育不是良方,而是毒药,作者再三呼唤:
放下你的棍子!
在严厉谴责棍棒教育的同时,对孩子的殷殷关切之情溢于言表。
本文的最大特色在于,作者借用多种写作技巧和论证方法将自己的感情融入议论之中。
如引用权威——弗洛伊德的理论谴责体罚将造成孩子性格扭曲时说,“thisisnokidding'’,义正词严;强调体罚的伤害时,用“severepunishmentbreakstheirheart,destroytheirtrust,roughtheirtemper,makethemconservative,andisolatethemfromtheworld'’的排比,唤起了读者的深深忧虑;对父母体罚心态的深入讨论,也是声情并茂;各段末“sparetherod"祈使句的反复使用,强化了文章的感染力。
此外还运用了比喻、描写等手法,达到了动之以情,晓之以理的写作效果。
大学英语经典作文简评:
LeavingThesunshonebrightontomyface,dancingonmyeyelids.WithinafewsecondsIopenedmyeyestoanewdaysofullofpromiseandhope,justlikethemorningsunshine.However,thelovelydaywouldhavetobeasadone,forI'dhavetoleavemyhomeforcollege.
Turningaround,mymotherfixedhereyesonthephone.Blinkingbacktears,sheforcedherattentionelsewhere.Mumgotherselfbusyanddidallthethingssheneededtodo.Still,myraresilencemadethehousestrangelyempty.However,likethefledgling,Ihadtoflyawayandfindmyplaceintheworld.Sheknewthisinhermind,yetherheartwasstillsaddened.
Timemarchedonandtherewasnothingwecoulddotostopit.Soonwewereintherunningcar,feelingthewarmbreezeonourfaces.Maybeit'squiteasuitabletimetoshowlovetoeachother,butneitherofussaidanything.
Thesunfinallydippedbelowthehorizon,andwewereindifferentplaces.Nocallsfromhome,thoughIknewexactlywhatshewasdoingthen.Shemusthaveturnedawayfromthephonesoasnottoseeit,andcontinuedtodotheendlesshouseworkasusual.
Nochoiceisperfectintheworld.ButIwillalwaysbegratefulforthepricelessgiftthatdaygaveme:
thewisdomtoknowthatallourexperienceinlifedoesnotmakeuslessbutmoreabletolove.
简评
考上大学了,离家的心情相信所有经历过的人都不会忘记。
对家庭的依恋,对父母的牵挂,对新生活的向往和对未知世界的忧虑,让人百感交集,又有些不知所措。
作者这篇优美的散文通过对离家赴校那一天的景物