BEC高级写作大作文补充讲义何钢.docx

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BEC高级写作大作文补充讲义何钢

BEC高级写作大作文补充讲义

何钢

PartTwo

InthispartoftheWritingpaper,youhavetochoosefromthreeoptions:

areport,aletteroraproposal.Therubrictellsyouthereasonforwritingandwhoyouarewritingto.Atthislevel,bothreportsandproposalsmustbeclearlyorganisedanduseasuitableformat,including,forexample,paragraphs,headings,introductionand/orconclusion.Intheexam,youshouldwriteyouranswersinpeninyourquestionpaperbooklet.

InPart1,theassessmentfocusisoncontent,effectiveorganisationofinput,appropriacytotheintendedaudience,accuracyandconciseness.InPart2,thefocusismainlyoncontent,style/registerand,becausethetaskislongerthanPart1,candidateshavemorescopetodemonstratearangeofstructureandvocabulary.

样题：

•Yourcompanyhasemployedanoutsideconsultanttoorganiseanexhibitionofyourproducts,tobeheldnextmonth.Hisworkisunsatisfactory,andyourbosshasnowdecidedthatyoushouldtakeoverfullresponsibilityinstead.Yourbosshasaskedyoutowritetotheconsultanttoexplainwhyhehasbeenreplaced.

•Writethelettertotheconsultant:

•givingtworeasonswhyhehasbeenreplaced

•tellinghimhewillbepaidforthiswork

•askinghimtobriefyouonthecurrentsituation.

DearMrJones

MynameisSvenjaPietzonka,IamanemployeeofacompanyArdo,whereyouwereemployed.Ihavebeengiventhisunpleasantjobofcontactingyouandexplainingwhyyouhavebeenreplaced.AnotherreasonforwritingyouistoinformyouthatIwilltakeoveryourresponsibilityandtoaskforyourhelp.

Thereasonsforyourreplacementare,asyoucanassume,thatyoudidn’tknowourproductswellenough.Youobviouslydidn’tquiteunderstandwhicharethefeaturesofourproductsthatattractpotentialcustomersandwhatourmarketingstrategiesare.Thisledtothelackofideasthatyouhad.Weknowthatyouintroducedafewideas,butwethinkyouwouldagreethatnonewassatisfactory.Wehopethatyouunderstandwhywedecidedso.

Weconfessthatyourfailuretosucceedisalsoourfault.Weshouldhaveintroducedyoutoourproductsbetterandweshouldhaveletyouknowwhattheobjectivesofourcompanyareandwhichmarketstrategiesweusetoachievethem.Takingallthesefactorsintoaccount,weagreedthatweshouldpayyoutheworkyouhavedone.

Iwouldliketoaskyouifyoucouldbriefmeonthecurrentsituation.Youprobablyknowthatitisextremelyhardtostartaprojectwhensomeonewasworkingonitbeforeyou,soIhonestlyhopethatyouwillbepreparedtoassistmewithyourhelp.

Iamlookingforwardhearingfromyousoon.

Yourssincerely

SvenjaPietzonka

EXAMINERCOMMENTS

Goodachievementofthetaskset,mainlyduetotoneandcontent,whichwouldhavethedesiredimpactonthetargetreader.However,therearesomenon-impedingerrorsandanoccasionalawkwardnessinexpression.

Band4

Dearsir,

Thankyoufortheworkyouhavedonetoorganiseanexhibition.Mostthingsarekeptinorderintheinitialstageofthewholeprocessandyourjobisconfirmedandphrasedbyourbosstosomeextent.However,therestillremainssomeshortcomings.Asisknowntoall,youareaveryexcellentconsultantinmanyrespects.Youhavelotsofexperienceinadvising.Butthatitisbasedonoutsideconditionsdoesnotfitusverymuch.Thepolicies,thestrategiesseemabitdifferentfromwhatweown.Andthatcausessomebarriersamongourpeople.Sowiththedevelopmentoftheprocess,theorganisingworkmaynotbewelldone.Toavoidsuchshortcomings,wemayappreciatesomeonewithlocalexperienceinthenextstageoftheprocess.Probablyhewillbehelpfultotheco-operativework,andacceptedbytheinsideones.Hemaynotbeascreativeasyoubutsomehowsuitsthesituationnow.

Wewillpayyouaccordingtoyourcreativeworkandhelpfuladviceandyouwillbethankedforyourfavourinourcompany.

AsIwilltakeyourplaceandhopefullyIintendtogetsomehelpfromyou.Ifyoucouldbrieftheworkonthecurrentsituation,Ishallbeverygrateful.Thankyouverymuchagain.

Lookforwardtohearingfromyou.

Regards.

JessicaChoi

CompanyAdviser

EXAMINERCOMMENTS

Allcontentpointsareincluded.Reasonableregisterandformat.However,anambitiousattemptatlanguageresultsinfrequentimpedingerrorsandlackofclarity.

Band2

书信作文格式：

Salutation

Body

Complimentaryclose

Signature

Yourssincerely

Yoursfaithfully

Withregards

Lotsoflove

Withlove

Regards

HeGang

DearSir,

Iwouldapologizefortheemployeeyoureceivedfrommycompany.

DearSir/Madame,

Wehavereadofyourletterofcomplaintabouttheincapabletemporaryadministrativeassistant.Pleaseacceptthesincerestapologyfromus.

DearSir,

I’mapologizingforhavingsenttheunacceptabletemporaryadministrativeassistant.Duetothisissue,wehaveseveralexplanationsforyou.

Curriculumvitae

Resume

串句run-onsentence

破句sentencefragment

Hissinceritymaskedhisincapabilityinsecretarialresponsibilities.

Referee

Reference

Pastemployers

Yourperformancewasfarfromsatisfactory.

Yourperformanceseemedtofallshortofourexpectations.

Filecabinet

Filingcabinet

Printers

Photocopiers

Iamwritingtocomplainaboutthemove….

Iamwritingthislettertoexpressourdissatisfactionwiththemove…

Produce

Decliningmorale

Unfriendlyatmosphere

Befired

Besacked

Belaidoff

Bereplaced

Heavierworkload

Exhausted

Areburntout

Standardletterphrases

●Referringtopreviouscorrespondence:

Withreferencetoyourletterdated…inwhich…

Thankyouforyourinterest…

Furthertoyourletterof…inwhichyou…

Furthertoourconversationof…

Asrequested…

●Startingthepurposeofyourletter:

Iamwritingtoconfirm/applyfor/outline…

Iwouldliketothank/complain/commenton…

Iamwritingconcerning…

●Enclosinginformation:

Asrequested,Ienclose…

Pleasefindenclosed…

●Endingtheletter:

Ifyourequireanyfurtherinformation…donothesitateto…

Shouldyouhaveanyfurtherquestions,pleasecontactmeon…

Ilookforwardtohearingfromyou/meetingyou/seeingyou/workingwithyou.

Ihopetohearfromyousoon.

Mainpointsandsupportingideas

Linkingwords

Contrast:

but,while,whilst,whereas;ontheotherhand,onthecontrary,incontrast,bycontrast;instead,insteadof,ratherthan…

Consequence:

asaresult,asaconsequence,thus,thereby,so,therefore,andso

Addition:

and,moreover,furthermore,

信的开头：

Wearewritingtoenquireabout…写信是询问关于……

Wearewritinginconnectionwith…写信是关于……

Weareinterestedin…andwewouldliketoknow…我们对……感兴趣……我们想知道

askingif…感谢（某日）询问是否……的来信

Thankyouforyourletterof（date）,enquiringabout…感谢（某日）询问有关……的来信

Wehavereceivedyourletterof（date）,enclosing…感谢（某日）的来信以及随信寄来的……

concerning…我们已收到（某日）关于……的来信

如果写信的开头或者是信中要提到某件事情：

withreferenceto…关于……

furtherto…继……之后

withregardto…关于……

Iamwritinginconnectionwith…我写信是为了……

Apointinyourlettergivesusgreatconcernthat…我们很关心您信中提到的……

Regarding…关于……

告知好消息

Iampleasedtotellyouthat…我很高兴的告诉你/通知你……

Iamdelightedtoinformyou……

Iamhappytoadviseyou…

Wearepleasedtoinformyouthat

Wehavepleasureininformingyouthat

Wehavethepleasuretoappriseyouof

Wehavethehonourtoinformyouthat（of）

坏消息

Iregrettotellyouthat…很遗憾/很抱歉告诉你/通知你……

Iamsorrytoinformyou…

Iamsorrytoadviseyouthat…

Weregretthat…我们很遗憾……

说明能做与不能做的事情

Weareunableto…我们不能……

Weareableto…我们能……

Wehavebeenforcedto…我们不得不……

说明原因

Thiswasowingto…这是因为……（多半为坏消息）

Dueto…这是由于……

Asaresultof…这是……的结果

Becauseof…这是因为……

请求采取行动，如果紧急的话，可以加上后面的词组

Pleasecouldyou…assoonaspossible请你尽快……

Wewouldbegratefulifyoucould…withoutdelay如果你能尽快……，我们将不胜感激

Wewouldappreciateitifyoucould…immediately…如你能尽快……我们将不胜感激

道歉

Wemustapologizefor…我们必须为……表示我们的歉意

Weapologizefor…我们必须为……道歉

Weareextremelysorryfor…我们为……感到抱歉

询问信息

Wewouldliketoknowabout/if…我们想了解有关……

Pleasecouldyougiveusfurtherdetailabout…请给我们更多有关……的信息

Wewouldbegratefulifyoucouldletusknowabout/if…如果能告诉我们有关……，我们将不胜感激

Wewouldappreciateitifyoucouldinformusabout/if…如果能告诉我们有关……，我们将不胜感激

轻度抱怨

Unfortunately,然后直接说不幸的事情发生了，比如，

Unfortunately,wehavenotyetreceivedyourpayment,wewouldbegratefulifyoucouldmakethepaymentsoon.

提起注意（用在强烈抱怨中）

Ishouldliketodrawyourattentionto（thefactthat）…我想提请你们注意……

Ishouldliketopointoutthat…我想指出……

Ishouldliketoremindyouthat…我想提醒你们……

Ihopethatitisnotnecessarytoremindyouthat…我希望没有必要提醒你们……

警告

Unless…除非……，否则我们将不得不……

If…（not）…,wewillbeforcedto…如果……不……，我们将不得不…….

（二）常用句型

普通结尾：

Ilookforwardtoreceivingyourreply/order/products/etc.　期待收到你的答复，定单，产品等

Lookingforwardtohearingfromyou.期待你的来信

提供消息类邮件的结尾

Ihopethatthisinformationwillhelpyou.　期待这些消息会对你有所帮助。

Pleasecontactmeifyouneedanyfurtherinformation.如果需要更多的信息，请你与我联系

Pleasedonothesitatetocontactmeifyouareneedanyfurtherinformation.如果需要更多，请随时联系我

Pleasefeelfreetocontactmeifyouhaveanyfurtherquestions.有什么问题，请有我联络。

Pleaseletmeknowifyouneedanyfurtherinformation.如果需要更多的信息，请告诉我。

道歉信结尾

Pleaseacceptourapologiesonceagain.请接受我们的歉意

Wehopethatthishasnotcausedyouanyinconvenience.我们希望这不会给你造成不便。

结尾

IlookforwardtoseeingyouagainnexttimeIamin…我期待着下次我在…时，与你见面。

（三）表示感谢

Thankyouforoneofthemostmemorabledaysofmytrip.

为了旅途中最值得留念的一天，谨向您表示感谢。

Thankyouforoneofthemostenjoyablevisitswehavehadinmanymonths.

在您处的参观访问，是我们几个月中最愉快的一次。

谨向您表示感谢。

Thankyouforoneofthemostmemorabledaysofmytrip.

为了旅途中最值得留念的一天，谨向您表示感谢。

Thankyoufordoingsomuchtomakemyt