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PartA从语篇角度谈情景作文写作技巧
一、情景作文的基本写作思路:
主题先行+双线并行
所谓主题先行,是指我们在写情景作文时,一定要对四幅图片进行宏观把握,抽出文章的大主题,这样,有助于我们从整体的角度出发,对每幅图进行情感渲染。
同时,我们要明白:
要写好情景作文,必须保证叙事清晰、情感充沛。
换言之,要保证“动作描写”和“情感描写”两条线并行不悖,给人层次清晰、逻辑严密、动作到位、情感充实的印象,这便是所谓的“双线并行”。
要保证叙事清晰,一定要在上幅图转换到下幅图时,运用好起承转合的连词,同时对时间、场景的转换做好交代。
要保证情感充沛,一定要对静态的画面进行挖掘,分析人物心理,补充事实细节。
【例一】
假设你是红星中学高二
(1)班的学生李华。
最近你班组织了一次活动,寻找身边的雷锋。
请根据下图提示将此次活动情况记录下来,并以“LookingforLeiFeng”为题向你校英语报刊投稿。
注意:
1.文章题目已为你写好。
2.词数不少于60。
LookingforLeiFeng
【写作初稿】
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【教师评分与修改意见】
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【范文赏析】
AmongallthegreatfiguresinChina,ComradeLeiFengisoneinspiringgenerationsofpeople.Lastweek,amemorableactivitywasheldinourclass,aimingtofindoutpeoplefollowingLeiFeng’sspiritsintheirdailylife.
Earlyinthemorning,wesetoutingroups,takingcameras,intheexpectationtocapturemanytouchingscenesofpeopleselflesslyhelpingeachother.NosoonerhadwearrivedattheShoppingMalloftheCityCenterthanwecaughtsightofablood-donationcar,withmanypeoplewaitinginthequeuetodonatetheirblood.Weimmediatelytookphotos,withgreatadmirationofthesepeople’sdevotiontothoseinneed.
Soonafterwards,wearrivedatthehospitalneartheShoppingMall.Seeingapatientsparingnoeffortstohelpanotherpatientwalkdownthestepsofthestair,wecouldfeeltheatmosphereofloveandcarepervadeintoeverycornerofthespace.Withthescenetakenintoourcamera,wewentbacktotheschoolbus.Hardlyhadwediscoveredavacantseatwhenwesimultaneouslynoticedanagedlady.Wespontaneouslyhelpedhertoapproachtheseat.Seeinghergetseatedandofferingappreciation,weallfeltsatisfiedforthesakeofbeingabletohelpothers,justlikeLeiFeng.
Afewdayslater,acolumninthebulletinwassetasideforouractivity,withallourphotosoftheliving“LeiFeng”inourlifepresentedtoall.Weintroducedwhatwehadseentoourclassmates,arousingheateddiscussionamongthem.
Wealltreasurethisactivity,foritnotonlyteachesustodiscoverthekindnessinourlife,butalsoinspiresustobecometheverypersondeliveringlovetoeveryonearoundus.
【他山之石】
请总结范文中表示心情的语言点,并仿写句子。
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二、情景作文写作技巧:
注意矛盾冲突,注意心理发展过程,注意动作全程
情景作文中有的图片往往存在很强的情节冲突,这就为我们进行情节扩展提供了广阔的空间。
在这种情况下,一定要注意突出各个主人公之间的反差、人物与环境之间的反差。
在这个过程当中,人物在心理、动作方面往往有发展、变化的过程,所以一定要将这个变化过程写清楚。
【例二】
假设你是红星中学高二
(1)班的学生李华,上周六在颐和园你做了一件好事。
请根据以下四幅图的先后顺序,写一篇英文周记,叙述事情发生的全过程。
【写作点拨】
通过分析四幅图片便不难发现,在第二幅图中,围观的人与求救的小男孩之间构成了强烈的反差。
而在第三幅图中,李华的反应与围观的人群也构成了强烈的反差。
所以,这两组矛盾,我们一定要写清楚。
同时,在第四幅图中,李华将小孩拖到岸上这个画面,涉及大量的动作,同时涉及作者一系列的心理反应,所以大家要将这个画面写透。
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ManyatimeIhaveexperiencedunforgettablemoments.Butonecertainmemorystandsoutandspeaksvolumestome.
ItwasearlyinthemorninglastSaturday.IwasbathinginthewarmsunshineandreadinganovelinSummerPalace.SittingbesidetheKunmingLake,Ifeltthebeautifulsceneriesofwinterseemedtohaveamagicpower.
Suddenly,anurgentcrypiercedtheskyandshatteredmysilentenjoymentofthescenery.Iapproachedthecryandfoundaboyinthefreezingcoldwater.Apparentlyhefellintothelakebyaccident.Thepoorlittleboycalledforhelpdesperately,withalargegroupofpeoplewatchingbeside.Iwonderedwhynobodywentintothewatertopulltheboyontothebankandthenpeople’swhisperwentintomyears.
“It’snoneofmybusiness”“It’sfreezingcold”People’sremarksmademyheartsink.Feelingobligedtosavelife,Imadeupmymindtotakeaction.HardlyhadItakenoffmycoatwhenIjumpedintothewater.“God!
It’ssocold!
”Ichilledinthewater.However,thelittleboy’seyesofexpectationinspiredmegreatlyandmotivatedmetoswimahead.FinallyIgotholdofhishandandtookpainstodraghimontothelakebank.Itwasnotsuchalongdistance.However,forme,itseemedtobeanendlessjourney.EventuallyIreachedthebankandthelittleboywassaved.Hekeptthankingme,butIwastooexhaustedtoofferanyreply.
IneverthoughtIwasahero.IjustdidsomethingIwassupposedtodo.Afterall,bysavingothers’life,wearealsomakingourownlifefulfilled.
请总结范文中对你有启发的语言点,并仿写句子。
三、情景作文写作技巧:
对画面细节进行联想、扩充
情景作文的画面,一般由四幅图构成。
这四幅图中,有的图集中了大量动作,写起来比较容易;
有的图仅仅是一个场景,要将其写好、写活,必须依赖联想、发挥。
【例三】
假设你是红星中学高三
(1)的学生李华,请根据以下四幅图的信息,为校刊英语园地写一篇英文稿件,叙述上周六你参加学校组织的“CareerDay”的活动过程及感受。
1.文章的开头已为你写好。
OurschoolholdsCareer.DayonceayearinMarch,offeringusachancetogetfamiliarwithdifferentbusinessesandcareeroptions.
LastSaturday,
这四幅图都是场景,我们要写出一篇情感充沛、细节丰富的文章,务必要结文章
“职业发展教育”的主题,重点谈我们在每一个环节的收获。
只有这样,才能将简略的场景中人物的心情描写得无比动人。
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