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IguessitwasinevitablethatI’dbeonhockeyskatesatsomepointinmylife,butIdidnotexpectthatI’dbecomeoneofararegroupoffemaleicehockeyofficialsbeforeIevenreachedhighschool.Beingbornintoafamilyofhockeyplayersandfigureskaters,itseemedthatmydestinyhadalreadybeendecided.
Rightfromthebeginning,mytwoolderbrothersandmyfatherstrappedmeupandthrewmeontotheice.Iloveditand,inmymind,IwasonmywaytobecomingafemaleGretzky!
Butmymomhadtothinkofsomethingfasttodragherlittlegirlawayfromthissportofruffians.Entermyfirsthotpinkfigureskatingdress!
Thatwasallittooktolaunchfifteenyearsofcompetitivefigureskating.Eventhoughfigureskatingsoonbecamemypassion,Ialwayshadanunsatisfiedyearningforicehockey.Ittookagreatdealofconvincingfrommyparentsthatcompetitivefigureskatingandicehockeydidn’tmix.Mycompromisebecamerefereeingicehockey;
littledidIknowthatIwasbeginninganactivitythatwouldinfluencemycharacterandwhoIamtoday.WhenIbegan,Iwouldonlyworkwithmydadandbrothers.EveryonewasfriendlyandacceptingbecauseIhadjuststarted.IsoonrealizedthoughthattogetbetterIneededtostartrefereeingwithpeopleIwasn’trelatedto,andthat’swhenmyexperiencedrasticallychanged.Anapologeticsmileandan“I’msorry”wasn’tgoingto
getmethroughgamesnow.AsIbeganofficiatinghigher-levelgamesanddealingwithmorearrogantcoaches,Isuddenlyenteredanewmale-dominatedworld,aworldIhadneverexperiencedbefore.Myconfidencewasshot,andallIwantedtodowasgetthrougheachgameandbeabletoleave.SometimesIwaseventooscaredtoskatealongtheteams’benchesbecauseIwouldgetupsetbywhatthecoacheswouldyelltome.“Doyouhaveahotdatetonight,ref?
”wasatypicalcommentthatcoacheswouldspitatmeduringthecourseofagame.Intheireyes,Ididnotbelongonthatice,andtheyweregoingtodowhatevertheycoulddotomakesurenowomenwantedtoofficiatetheirgames.Iwasdeterminednottoletthemchasemeofftheice.
Imadethedecisiontostandupformyself.Ineverrespondedrudelytothecoaches,butIdidnotletthemwalkallovermeanddestroymyconfidenceanymore.Istartedtoactandfeelmorelikethe4-yearcertifiedAtlanticDistrictOfficialthatIam.Therewerestillafewsituationsthatscaredme.OnetimeIcalledapenaltyinachampionshipgameduringthethirdovertimeandtheteamIpenalizedendeduplosingbecausetheygotscoredon.IknewIhadmadetherightcall,eventhoughIwasunnervedwhenIsawthelosingteams’parentswaitingformeatmylockerroom;
forthemomentIwishedIhadn’tcalledthatpenalty.Althoughitwasscaryatthetime,Istoodmygroundandovercamemyfears.Thatwasanimportant
stepping-stoneinmyofficiatingcareerandinmylife.
Afterfouryearsofrefereeing,Istillcan’tsayit’seasy.EverygamehandsmesomethingnewandIneverknowwhattoexpect.NowIhavetheconfidenceandpreparationtodealwiththeunexpected,onandofftheice.Inowalsoknowtotakeeverythingwithagrainofsaltandnotletitgettome.Ihavelearnedthatlifeisjustlikebeingoutontheice;
ifIampreparedandactwithconfidence,Iwillbeperceivedasconfident.ThesearethelittlelessonsthatI’mgratefultohavelearnedasawomanreferee.
ThingstoNoticeAboutThisEssay
1.Theauthortellsaninterestingstoryaboutherexperiencesasareferee.
2.Asenseofherpersonality—determination,flexibility,goodhumor—comesthroughinthenarration.
3.Detailslike“Doyouhaveahotdatetonight,ref?
”makethenarrationmemorable(we’dlovetohearmoreofthesekindsofdetails).
4.Theessayneedsafasterstart.Thefirstparagraph(threesentences)saysthesamethinginboththefirstandthirdsentences—andgivesawaytheessay’ssurpriseinthesecond!
Agoodrevisionwouldallofparagraphoneandstartatparagraphtwo.
5.There’stoomuchframehereandnotenoughpicture.Theessayneedsfurtherdevelopment,especiallyaboutthedifficultiesof
becomingandbeingaref,tokeepitvivid.
6.Theauthorshould“dwell”inthemeaningoftheexperiencealittlemoreattheend—“Iwonderabout…Ialsothink…SometimesIbelieve….”Significantexperienceslikethisone,woventhroughmanyyearsoftheauthor’slife,don’tmeanjustonething—therearemoreinsightsandlessonstoexplorehere.
篇二:
申请国外大学的范文和指导
除了通用申请的Essay之外,有些学校还提供另外写一篇Essay的机会。
有些学校让你在他们提供的题目中作出选择;
而有些学校则没有任何限制。
比如耶鲁大学的要求非常简单,只是要求你写一篇500单词以内的你想让耶鲁阅读的Essay即可,基本没有任何限制。
哈佛大学也是让你自行决定写什么内容、什么题目,只不过给出了几个可能的写作题目建议:
a)你生命中的一个不寻常经历;
b)你在其他国家旅行和生活的经历;
c)对你最具影响力的书;
d)某学术经历(课程、研究项目、论文、或研究课题);
e)过去一年中你读过的一系列图书。
请记住,这些只是哈佛建议的题目,决不是要限制你从中挑选,你完全可以自定题目来写。
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