TOEFL写作高分满分范文点评Word文档格式.docx

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　　托福写作高分满分范文点评和思路解析：

危险运动的吸引力

　　托福写作难点话题一览

　　Theattractionsofdangerousactivities

　　Whydoyouthinksomepeopleareattractedtodangeroussportsorotherdangerousactivities?

Usespecificreasonsandexamplestosupportyouranswer.

　　写作思路展开结构分析

　　没有提供选择给考生，因此完全需要大家自己提炼立场或者展开观点。

的建议是给出2-3个理由，然后逐个理由用例子来证明。

比如大家可以说参与危险运动可以赚取更多的金钱，能够体会到刺激带来的快乐，或是因为无知跟风而参与其中等等。

总之这道题目只要能够做到给出的理由和例子逻辑自洽就可以了。

　　本话题高分范文赏析

　　Peopleengagethemselvesindangerousactivitiesforvariousreasons,whichprobablyincludesmoney,pleasure,andperhapsironically,nescience.Perhapsthemostdirectdrivemightcomefrommoney,whichisneededforeveryone,anytimeandeverywhere.ThosestuntmenorwomeninHollywoodmovies,photographerswhoshootsharksorcrocodiles,orthosewhoparticipateinstockcarracing,arealwayssophisticatedenoughcalculatewhethertheoutcomeoverweightherisk.Iftheyarewillingtotaketherisk,theymusthaveevaluatedwell.Theyknowexactlytherule:

themoreriskstheytake,themoretheymightget.Therealsoisanotherkindofpeopleinthisworld.MoneyisofalmostnoimportancetothemTheyperformdangerousactivitiesjustfortheirownpleasure.Perhapsthemostappropriateexampleinvolvessports.Actuallyeverykindofsportsisdangerous,andevencanbedeadly.Dangeralwaysexists,butpeopletendtosimplyignoreit.Takeparachutingforexample,whocanrefusethefascinationofflyingintheskylikeabird?

Ontheotherhand,itseemsthatdangeritselfmakestheactivitysofascinatingastoohardtorefuse.Toconqueristheverynatureofhumanbeingfromtheverybeginning.Pheidippidessaidsecondsbeforedroppingdeadtwothousandyearsago,"

Rejoice,]weconquer!

"

Anditseemsperfectlylogicalforsomepeoplethatcelebrationfollowsconquer.Ironically,sometimesblindbravecomesoutofnescience.Sometimespeoplesimplydontknowtheactivityishazardousorhowperilousitexactlyis.Itcanbeexemplifiedbyarecentincident.Fivestudents（threeofthemhaveamastersdegree）losttheirlivesinamountaineeringexpedition.Thosestudentsreportedlydidnt,anditseemshighlyprobable,makeanadequatepreparationbeforeexpedition,whichmadethetragedyineluctable.Peoplealwayspraisealpinistswithwordssuchasstrong,brave,courageous,butinthiscasenoneofthesewordsisappropriateThoseyoungstudentstradedtheirspringtimewithblindbrave,anddiedinvain.

是否允许孩子做家务?

　　Shouldchildrenberequiredtohelpwithhouseholdtasksassoonastheyareabletodoso?

　　Doyouagreeordisagreewiththefollowingstatement?

Childrenshouldberequiredtohelpwithhouseholdtasksassoonastheyareabletodoso.Usespecificreasonsandexamplestosupportyouranswer.

　　"

assoonastheyareabletodoso"

有些过于绝对。

所以不能同意让孩子太早参加家务活动更好写一些。

尽管让孩子做家务有很多的好处，但让他们过早参与家务劳动，而不顾孩子的承受能力，可能会导致孩子的逆反心理（antagonisticpsychology），反倒达不到教育目的。

要先让孩子明白做家务的好处，让他心甘情愿地去做才能达到教育的目的。

　　Helpingoutwithhouseholdtasksisthefirstjobthatmostpeopleusuallypartake.Fromanearlyage,childrenareencouragedtohelparoundthehouse,doinglittletasksthathelpouttheirparentsandgrandparents.Ibelievethatthisisanimportantfeatureofsociety,andshouldbecontinued.Itisveryimportantforchildrentolearnhowtoberesponsiblefortheirenvironment.Thisisaskillthattheywilltakewiththemthroughouttheirlives,anditshouldbefosteredatanearlyage.Ifpeopleareabletokeepacleanhouseorworkplace,theywillbeabletoachievetasksmuchmoreeasily.Forexample,ifchildrenlearnearlyinlifethateverythinghasitsplace,thenthislessonwillnotonlyteachthemtokeepthingstidy,butalsoinstructthemonhowtostayorganized.Anotherreasonwhythisisimportantisbecauseitpromotesastrongworkethicinchildrenatanearlyage.Ifachildisgivenresponsibilitiesaroundthehouse,anditismadesurethatthechildcompletesthesetasks,thechildwilllearnhowimportantitistofollowthroughoninstructions.Manyparentsgosofarastopunishtheirchildrenfornotdoingchores,whichIthinkwillultimatelybebeneficialforthechildren.Itwillhelptheminalloftheirlaterendeavorsinlife.Finally,encouragingchildrentodoworkaroundthehouseassoonastheyareabletogivesthemanappreciationofwhattheirparentsdoforthemtokeepthemsafe,cleanandwarm.Manyyoungchildrenhavenoideahowdifficultitistokeepahouseingoodcondition.Itisimportantthatchildrenlearnfromanearlyagehowmuchtheirparentsdoforthem,andlearntorespecttheirparentsmorebasedonthis.Overall,Iagreewithputtingchildrentoworkearlyinlifearoundthehouse.Ofcourse,therearelimitsonthis.Childrenshouldnotbecomethemaidsofthehousehold.The