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托福写作高分满分范文点评和思路解析:
危险运动的吸引力
托福写作难点话题一览
Theattractionsofdangerousactivities
Whydoyouthinksomepeopleareattractedtodangeroussportsorotherdangerousactivities?
Usespecificreasonsandexamplestosupportyouranswer.
写作思路展开结构分析
没有提供选择给考生,因此完全需要大家自己提炼立场或者展开观点。
的建议是给出2-3个理由,然后逐个理由用例子来证明。
比如大家可以说参与危险运动可以赚取更多的金钱,能够体会到刺激带来的快乐,或是因为无知跟风而参与其中等等。
总之这道题目只要能够做到给出的理由和例子逻辑自洽就可以了。
本话题高分范文赏析
Peopleengagethemselvesindangerousactivitiesforvariousreasons,whichprobablyincludesmoney,pleasure,andperhapsironically,nescience.Perhapsthemostdirectdrivemightcomefrommoney,whichisneededforeveryone,anytimeandeverywhere.ThosestuntmenorwomeninHollywoodmovies,photographerswhoshootsharksorcrocodiles,orthosewhoparticipateinstockcarracing,arealwayssophisticatedenoughcalculatewhethertheoutcomeoverweightherisk.Iftheyarewillingtotaketherisk,theymusthaveevaluatedwell.Theyknowexactlytherule:
themoreriskstheytake,themoretheymightget.Therealsoisanotherkindofpeopleinthisworld.MoneyisofalmostnoimportancetothemTheyperformdangerousactivitiesjustfortheirownpleasure.Perhapsthemostappropriateexampleinvolvessports.Actuallyeverykindofsportsisdangerous,andevencanbedeadly.Dangeralwaysexists,butpeopletendtosimplyignoreit.Takeparachutingforexample,whocanrefusethefascinationofflyingintheskylikeabird?
Ontheotherhand,itseemsthatdangeritselfmakestheactivitysofascinatingastoohardtorefuse.Toconqueristheverynatureofhumanbeingfromtheverybeginning.Pheidippidessaidsecondsbeforedroppingdeadtwothousandyearsago,"
Rejoice,]weconquer!
"
Anditseemsperfectlylogicalforsomepeoplethatcelebrationfollowsconquer.Ironically,sometimesblindbravecomesoutofnescience.Sometimespeoplesimplydontknowtheactivityishazardousorhowperilousitexactlyis.Itcanbeexemplifiedbyarecentincident.Fivestudents(threeofthemhaveamastersdegree)losttheirlivesinamountaineeringexpedition.Thosestudentsreportedlydidnt,anditseemshighlyprobable,makeanadequatepreparationbeforeexpedition,whichmadethetragedyineluctable.Peoplealwayspraisealpinistswithwordssuchasstrong,brave,courageous,butinthiscasenoneofthesewordsisappropriateThoseyoungstudentstradedtheirspringtimewithblindbrave,anddiedinvain.
是否允许孩子做家务?
Shouldchildrenberequiredtohelpwithhouseholdtasksassoonastheyareabletodoso?
Doyouagreeordisagreewiththefollowingstatement?
Childrenshouldberequiredtohelpwithhouseholdtasksassoonastheyareabletodoso.Usespecificreasonsandexamplestosupportyouranswer.
"
assoonastheyareabletodoso"
有些过于绝对。
所以不能同意让孩子太早参加家务活动更好写一些。
尽管让孩子做家务有很多的好处,但让他们过早参与家务劳动,而不顾孩子的承受能力,可能会导致孩子的逆反心理(antagonisticpsychology),反倒达不到教育目的。
要先让孩子明白做家务的好处,让他心甘情愿地去做才能达到教育的目的。
Helpingoutwithhouseholdtasksisthefirstjobthatmostpeopleusuallypartake.Fromanearlyage,childrenareencouragedtohelparoundthehouse,doinglittletasksthathelpouttheirparentsandgrandparents.Ibelievethatthisisanimportantfeatureofsociety,andshouldbecontinued.Itisveryimportantforchildrentolearnhowtoberesponsiblefortheirenvironment.Thisisaskillthattheywilltakewiththemthroughouttheirlives,anditshouldbefosteredatanearlyage.Ifpeopleareabletokeepacleanhouseorworkplace,theywillbeabletoachievetasksmuchmoreeasily.Forexample,ifchildrenlearnearlyinlifethateverythinghasitsplace,thenthislessonwillnotonlyteachthemtokeepthingstidy,butalsoinstructthemonhowtostayorganized.Anotherreasonwhythisisimportantisbecauseitpromotesastrongworkethicinchildrenatanearlyage.Ifachildisgivenresponsibilitiesaroundthehouse,anditismadesurethatthechildcompletesthesetasks,thechildwilllearnhowimportantitistofollowthroughoninstructions.Manyparentsgosofarastopunishtheirchildrenfornotdoingchores,whichIthinkwillultimatelybebeneficialforthechildren.Itwillhelptheminalloftheirlaterendeavorsinlife.Finally,encouragingchildrentodoworkaroundthehouseassoonastheyareabletogivesthemanappreciationofwhattheirparentsdoforthemtokeepthemsafe,cleanandwarm.Manyyoungchildrenhavenoideahowdifficultitistokeepahouseingoodcondition.Itisimportantthatchildrenlearnfromanearlyagehowmuchtheirparentsdoforthem,andlearntorespecttheirparentsmorebasedonthis.Overall,Iagreewithputtingchildrentoworkearlyinlifearoundthehouse.Ofcourse,therearelimitsonthis.Childrenshouldnotbecomethemaidsofthehousehold.The