1、1分析解读读后续写是浙江省英语高考特有的题目。其考查目标综合了阅读理解和写作,是对考生语言综合能力的考查。该题不仅考查考生的语言表述能力,还考查考生对文章的理解能力、对文章结构的把握能力和对情节发展的判断构思能力。考生只有在对原文准确深刻理解的基础上,对情节的发展做出判断,运用合适的构思能力,才能做出优秀的续写。因此,读后续写具有较大的难度。【命题探究】命题解读1.设题材料均为故事类记叙文。读后续写是浙江的特有题目,其设题思路也比较特殊。从官方的四套试题来看,有其明显的特点。材料都是具有很强故事情节的记叙文。年份文章体裁前文内容概要考试说明样题故事类记叙文主人公在银行门口“偶遇抢劫犯”的幽默故
2、事2016年10月小两口野外游玩不幸走散,女主人迷路,在野外独自度过夜晚2017年6月朋友一起骑车游玩,野外遇到狼的故事2017年11月和父母一块去旅游的故事2.所给的表示词以名词为主,部分动词和形容词等。名词或名词词组形容词或副词动词1082633.所给的段落提示句均是故事情节发展的过程句。四次考试所给的句子都是叙述类的过程句子。对续写故事的发展有提示、引导和限制作用。思路点拨1.准确深刻地理解文章。不仅对文章的整体内容要有较好的理解,对文章一些特定的信息也要敏感。如考试说明样题中的“funny”。从这个词上,我们就可以得出所谓的“银行抢劫案”应该不是真的,而是一个误解。如果真是银行抢劫案,
3、那么就不是一个funny的故事了,而是一个serious的故事了。如2017年11月,文章的标题就是“AVacationwithMyMother”,而文章的原文中多次提到妈妈的forgetful的性格特征。因此,续写时要注意反映此性格特征。2.清晰地把握文章结构。只有对文章的整体结构有正确的把握,才能做出对续写内容的正确判断。对文章的结构有准确的了解,才能顺畅地写出结尾,写出的结尾才能与原文的脉络一致,主旨一致。后续构思要从内容和结构上符合原文的逻辑发展,在文体上和原文保持一致,最后做到情节和结构完整。3.注意语法的准确,使用丰富的词汇和高级的语法结构,保证句子之间的顺畅连接。本设题的特点其实
4、不是考查故事的构思能力,因为故事的发展已经有诸多的设定,发挥的余地并不大。考查的主要目的其实是语言的表述能力。因此一定要注意语言的地道和精巧。【五年高考】Writing1(2017浙江11月)阅读下面短文,根据所给情节进行续写,使之构成一个完整的故事。AVacationwithMyMotherIhadaninterestingchildhood.Itwasfilledwithsurprisesandamusements,allbecauseofmymotherloving,sweet,yetabsent-mindedandforgetful.Onestrangefamilytripwetook
5、whenIwaseleventellsalotabouther.MytwosetsofgrandparentslivedinColoradoandNorthDakota,andmyparentsdecidedtospendafewweeksdrivingtothosestatesandseeingallthesightsalongtheway.Asthefirstdayofourtripapproached,David,myeight-year-oldbrother,andIunwillinglysaidgood-byetoallofourfriends.Whoknewifwe
6、1;deverseethemagain?Finally,themomentofourdeparturearrived,andweloadedsuitcases,books,games,campingequipment,andatentintothecarandbravelydroveoff.WebravelydroveoffagaintwohourslaterafterwedreturnedhometogetthepurseandtravelerschecksMomhadforgotten.DavidandIwerealwaysalittlenervou
7、swhenusinggasstationbathroomsifMomwasdrivingwhileDadslept: “Youstandoutsidethedoorandplaylookout(放哨)whileIgo,andIllstandoutsidethedoorandplaylookoutwhileyougo.” Ihadterriblepicturesinmymind: “Honey,wherearethekids?” “What?!Oh,Gosh.Ithoughttheywerebeingawfullyquiet.” Wewereneveractuallyleft
8、behindinastrangecity,butwewerentabouttotakeanychances.Onthefourthorfifthnight,wehadtroublefindingahotelwithavacancy.Afterdrivinginvainforsometime,Momsuddenlygotagreatidea:Whydidntwefindahousewithalikely-lookingbackyardandaskifwecouldsetuptentthere?DavidandIbecamenervous.Toourgrea
9、trelief,Dadturneddowntheidea.Momnevercouldunderstandourobjections(反对).Ifastrangefamilyshoweduponherfrontdoorstep,Momwouldhavebeendelighted.Shethinkseveryoneintheworldisasniceassheis.Wefinallyfoundavacancyinthenexttown.注意:1.所续写短文的词数应为150左右;2.至少使用5个短文中标有下划线的关键词语;3.续写部分分为两段,每段的开头语已为你写好;4.续写完成后,请用下划线标出你
10、所使用的关键词语。Paragraph1Thenextdaywerememberedthebrand-newtentwehadbroughtwithus.Paragraph2Wedrovethroughseveralstatesandsawlotsofgreatsightsalongtheway.答案【写作提示】原文是一篇有关家庭旅游生活的故事。文章内容贴近生活,中学生容易发挥想象去续写。续写的内容应该还是按照家庭旅游的主线来进行,当然,涉及“妈妈健忘,但是很善良”的特点也是续写的关注点。【参考范文】Paragraph1:Thenextdaywerememberedthebrand-newten
11、twehadbroughtwithus.Wedecidedtocampalongtheriver.Theviewsthereweresurpassinglybeautifulthewarmsunshine,thefreshair,thecleanwater.Wesatonthegrass,enjoyingthesplendidnature.However,whenDadwasabouttoputupourtent,hewasdisappointedtofindthatithadbeenleftinthehotel.Well,Dadhadtogobacktofetchittocontinueou
12、rcamping.Paragraph2:Wedrovethroughseveralstatesandsawlotsofgreatsightsalongtheway.Everytimewegottoanewplace,Momwouldcheeruplikeachild.Shewouldgetoffthecarexcitedly,laughinganddancingaround.Togetherweenjoyedthemodernsightsinthebigcities,thehistoricalbuildingsinthesmalltownsandtheamazingsceneryinnatur
13、e.Whenwecamebacktothehotelafterthetiringbutexcellentvisit,Momwouldhugusandkissusonourfaces.Howsweetshewas!Absent-mindedandforgetfulasshewas,sheneverforgottoexpressherlovetous.Writing2(2017浙江6月)Onabright,warmJulyafternoon,MacHollan,aprimaryschoolteacher,wascyclingfromhishometoAlaskawithhisfriends.One
14、ofhisfriendshadstoppedtomakeabicyclerepair,buttheyhadencouragedMactocarryon,andtheywouldcatchupwithhimsoon.AsMacpedaled(骑行)alongalone,hethoughtfondlyofhiswifeandtwoyoungdaughtersathome.Hehopedtoshowthemthisbeautifulplacesomeday.ThenMacheardquickandloudbreathingbehindhim. “Man,thatsabigdog!
15、”hethought.Butwhenhelookedtotheside,hesawinstantlythatitwasntadogatall,butawolf,quicklycatchingupwithhim.Macsheartjumped.Hefoundouthiscanofbearspray.Withonehandonthebars,hefiredthesprayatthewolf.Abrightredcloudenvelopedtheanimal,andtoMacsrelief,itfellback,shakingitshead
16、.Butaminutelater,itwasbyhissideagain.ThenitattackedthebackofMacsbike,tearingopenhistentbag.Hefiredatthewolfasecondtime,andagain,itfellbackonlytoquicklyrestartthechase(追赶).Macwaspedalinghardnow.Hewavedandyelledatpassingcarsbutwascarefulnottoslowdown.Hesawasteepuphillclimbbeforehim.Heknewtha
17、toncehehitthehill,hedbeeasycaughtupandthewolfsteethwouldbetearingintohisflesh.Atthismoment,PaulandBeckyweredrivingtheircarontheirwaytoAlaska.Theydidntthinkmuchofitwhentheysawtwocyclistsrepairingtheirbikeonthesideoftheroad.Abitlater,theyspottedwhatthey,too,assumedwasadog
18、runningalongsideamanonabike.Astheygotcloser,theyrealizedthatthedogwasawolf.Macheardalargevehiclebehindhim.Hepulledinfrontofitasthewolfwascatchingupfast,justadozenyardsawaynow.2.应使用5个以上短文中标有下划线的关键词语;Thecarabruptlystoppedinfrontofhim.Afewminuteslater,theothercyclistsarrived.【写作提示】文章题材仍然和野外生活相关,故事具有冒险性
19、。原文是主人公Mac在和朋友一起外出骑车旅游时不幸遭遇饿狼的故事。就在最危险的时候PaulandBecky驱车走进。这样,精彩的故事进一步展开。本文故事设计具有很大发展空间。根据文章的第一段提示句,本段应该描述Paul和Becky是如何帮助Mac脱险的,而根据第二段的提示句,本段则应该是Mac的朋友到来之后发生的事。考生可以根据自己的理解和想象进行合理的续写。一定要注意续写的内容的合理性,不可脱离原文的故事无限发展。Thecarabruptlystoppedinfrontofhim.Macrusheddownfromhisbicycleandwavedatthepeopleinsidethec
20、arforhelp.PaulandBeckyinsidethecargotoutimmediatelytohelphimclimbintothecar,inspiteofthedangerthatthefiercewolfwasrunningnear.TheyquicklypushedMacintotheircarandclosedallthedoorsashardaspossible,legstremblingandbreathless.Seeingthis,thewolfstillhowledoutsidethecarforsometimeandthenleftunwillingly.Af
21、ewminuteslater,theothercyclistsarrived.Macsfriendswereshockedtohearthestoryandverygratefultotheyoungcouple.Macinvitedallofthembacktohishomefordinnerandheintroducedhiswifeanddaughterstohistwonewfriendswhosavedhislife.Duringthedinnertheyrecalledtheadventureandtalkedaboutthewaystodealwithsuch
22、dangeroussituations.Writing3(2016浙江10月)OneweekendinJuly,Janeandherhusband,Tom,haddriventhreehourstocampovernightbyalakeintheforest.Unfortunately,onthewayanunpleasantsubjectcameupandtheystartedtoquarrel.Bythetimetheyreachedthelake,JanewassoangrythatshesaidtoTom, “Imgoingtofindabetterspotfor
23、ustocamp”andwalkedaway.Withnopathtofollow,Janejustwalkedonforquitealongtime.Aftershehadclimbedtoahighplace,sheturnedaround,hopingtoseethelake.Tohersurprise,shesawnothingbutforestand,farbeyond,asnowcappedmountaintop.Shesuddenlyrealizedthatshewaslost.“Tom!”shecried.“Help!”Noreply.Ifonlyshehadnotlefthe
24、rmobilephoneinthatbagwithTom.Janekeptmoving,butthefarthershewalked,themoreconfusedshebecame.Asnightwasbeginningtofall,Janewassotiredthatshehadtostopforthenight.Lyingawakeinthedark,JanewantedverymuchtobewithTomandherfamily.Shewantedtoholdhimandtellhimhowmuchshelovedhim.Janeroseatthebreakofday,hungrya
25、ndthirsty.Shecouldhearwatertrickling(滴落)somewhereatadistance.Quicklyshefollowedthesoundtoastream.Tohergreatjoy,shealsosawsomeberrybushes.Shedrankandateafewberries.Neverinherlifehadshetastedanythingbetter.Feelingstrongernow,Janebegantowalkalongthestreamandhopeitwouldleadhertothelake.Asshepickedherway
26、carefullyalongthestream,Janeheardahelicopter.Isthatforme?Unfortunately,thetreesmadeitimpossibleforpeopletoseeherfromabove.Afewminuteslater,anotherhelicopterflewoverhead.Janetookoffheryellowblouse,thinkingthatsheshouldgotoanopenareaandflagthemiftheycamebackagain.Butnomorehelicopterscameanditwasgettin
27、gdarkagain.ItwasdaybreakwhenJanewokeup.这是一篇情节自然,但是有冒险色彩的故事。原文讲到Tom和Jane因琐事吵架,后来Jane意外迷失在森林。根据原文及所给的段首句,续写部分的构思不会太难。根据第一段的首句可知,本段应该描述当天晚上Jane的心态和行动。而根据第二段的提示句可知,本段主要叙述Jane最终是如何获救的。当然,在续写中,一定要反映出Jane的坚韧和聪明,同时,最后一定要有Tom努力救援的信息,这样的续写故事结尾才有正能量。【参考范文】Butnomorehelicopterscameanditwasgettingdarkagain.Shehad
28、tostayaloneintheforestforanothercoldnight.Janewassotiredanddisappointed,butshedidntloseheart.SheknewTommustbetryinghisbesttosearchforher.ShebelievedthatthehelicoptermusthavebeencalledbyTomandwassureitwouldcomebackagaintomorrow.Shefoundaplacenearthestreamandslept.ItwasdaybreakwhenJanewokeup
29、.Shewalkedalongthestream,hopingtofindasuitableplacesothatthehelicoptercouldfindher.Shewassoluckythatbeforelongabigrockappeared,whichwashighabovethetrees.Theresheclimbedandwaitedwithheryellowblouseinhandforthehelicoptertocomeagain.Tohergreatjoy,shedidntwaitlongbeforeshesawthehelicopterinthe
30、sky.Shewavedhardwiththeyellowblouseandthehelicopterquicklyfoundher.ShewasrightanditwasTomwhocalledthehelicopterandsavedher. 【三年模拟】模拟题组Writing1(2018浙江金丽衢十二校二模)Ihavebeenintheteachingprofessionmorethanthirtyyears,andoneofthebestteachersIhaveeverknownwasMr.Rowe.Iwasluckyenoughtoco-teachfourthgradewithhim.Mr.Rowehadinfinitepatienceandunders
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