作文闪光点的制造举例.docx

1、作文闪光点的制造举例1. 适当用被动代替主动，这样能更客观的反映事实,句子开头不要总是用we / I (比如写结尾时不用we should pay attention to而用Attention should be paid to. )举个经典结尾2004年六月六级作文的最后一段：It is, therefore, high time that some applicable approaches were implemented by the service industry like that. Thus，its competitive edge will be sharpened eff

2、ectively. 2. 善于使用插入语，比如说把副词、连接词等，作插入语放在中间，一般放在主语、动词或者助动词后，两边分别加上逗号。如however / therefore /for example/I believe做插入语放在中间，一般放在动词，助动词后，两边分别加上逗号。比如说：Other individuals, however, take the attitude that3.一定要学会换词，换形象，具体的代替太宽泛的。(考试中一般不要出现good, bad , many, thing, think, people, opinion等等)比如上面例子中，applicable代替pr

3、oper; approaches代替ways; implement代替carry out; sharpen ones competitive edge代替enhance ones competitiveness(提高某物竞争力) 下面举一篇我班上一位同学写的优秀作文(14分)的例子，看看他是如何运用各类写作技巧的。这位同学把老师上课讲的各类写作手法和精彩替换和句型都用上了，作文有了很大的提高。标题：Computer and I 第一段：I never forget the exceedingly thrilling day when my mother bought me a computer

4、 as birthday present, which exerted a tremendous fascination on me so that I indulged myself in googling an army of useful information I had expected, and enjoy a sea of melodious classic music. That night I was sleepless, feeling that the whole world belonged to me. exceedingly替换very thrilling替换exc

5、iting sth. exert a tremendous fascination on sb替换sb. be interested in sth. google替换search an army of替换a lot of 第二段：The dawn of the new century witnessed the increasing popularity of computers. Coincident with the advancement of science and technology, computers pouring into the current society as a

6、fashion are appealing to growing individuals. It is no exaggeration to say that we have been submerged by them, in large measure! The dawn of the new century witnessed是一个精彩句型，用来描述在某个时期发生了什么事情；Increasing popularity替换more and more popular Coincident with非常地道的词汇，表达与一致的意思，替换WithAdvancement替换development

7、Pour into ( flood into / swarm into )替换enter into Current ( currently )替换now Appeal to sb.替换sb. be interested in sth. Growing individuals替换more and more people It is no exaggeration to say经典句型，说某事是毫不夸张的 第三段：To begin with, we can, freely, search desired information at any moment. Little by little, ou

8、r knowledge will be well enriched, and our horizons will be greatly broadened. Additionally, we can get huge recreations online by chatting, playing games, or delivering email. We can, freely, search用了插入语的写作手法our knowledge will be well enriched, and our horizons will be greatly broadened.用了非常精彩的被动Ad

9、ditionally替换In addition / Besides Deliver替换send 第四段：There is no denying that, however, computers can function in the disservice of human beings, in a way, especially the growing violence, porn pictures, AV-films emerging on the screen, which leads quiet a few net citizens to copying.There is no deny

10、ing that , however, computers can function in the disservice of human beings,这个句子有三个精彩之处，首先There is no denying that这个句型，还有however作为插入语，function in the disservice of替换do harm to Emerging代替appearing ( fading代替disappearing ) Net citizen网民，属于精彩用词 第五段：As a classic proverb goes that no garden has no weeds

11、. Computers do play a positive role in the development of people lives, despite a slice of unfavorable impacts. We should, therefore, take advantage of the fruits and avoid the opposite facet. No garden has no weeds替换Every coin has two sides Computers do play，do强调Positive替换important / good等A slice o

12、f替换a part of Unfavorable替换bad Impacts替换effects / influences We should, therefore, take advantage of使用插入语Fruits (而且fruits用的非常形象，merits/ virtues)替换advantage ( defects替换disadvantage ) Facet替换aspect 各位同学，上面的作文里有这么多精彩的闪光点，作文怎么会不得高分呢！以下是30个最经典的替换词，各位同学可以参考一下。1.individuals,characters, folks代替(people ,perso

13、ns) 2: positive, favorable, rosy(美好的)，promising (有希望的)，perfect, pleasurable , excellent, outstanding代替good 3:dreadful, unfavorable, poor, adverse(有害的)代替bad 如果bad做表语，可以有be less impressive代替eg. An army of college students indulge themselves in playing games, enjoying romance with girls/boys or killing

14、 time passively in their dorms. When it approaches to graduation ,as a result, they find their academic records are less impressive. 4.(an army of, an ocean of, a sea of, a multitude of ,many, if not most)代替many. 注：用many, if not most一定要小心，many后一定要有词。eg. Many individuals, if not most, harbor the idea

15、 that.同理用most, if not all ,代替most. 5: a slice of, quiet a few , several代替some 6:harbor the idea that, take the attitude that, hold the view that, it is widely shared that, it is universally acknowledged that)替think (因为是书面语，所以要加that) 7:affair ,business ,matter代替thing 8: shared代common 9.reap huge frui

16、ts代替get much benefit ) 10:for my part ,from my own perspective代替in my opinion 11:Increasing(ly),growing代替more and more(注意没有growingly这种形式。所以当修饰名词时用increasing/growing.修饰形容词，副词用increasingly. eg. sth has gained growing popularity. Sth is increasingly popular with the advancement of sth. 12.little if any

17、thing,或little or nothing代替hardly13.benefitial， rewarding代替helpful， be beneficial of14.shopper,client,consumer,purchaser,代替customer15.exceedingly,extremely代替very16.hardly unnecessary, hardly inevitable .代替necessary,evitable17.sth appeals to sb, sth exerts a tremendous fascination on sb代替sb take inter

18、est in18.capture ones attention代替attract ones attention.19.facet,dimension,sphere代aspect20.be indicative of ,be suggestive of ,be fearful of代indicate, suggest ,fear21.give rise to, lead to, result in, trigger代替cause.22. There are several reasons behind sth代替.reasons for sth23.desire代替want.24.pour attention into代替pay attention to 25.bear in mind that代替remember26. enjoy, possess代替have(注意process是过程的意思)27. Interaction代替communication28.frown on sth代替be against , disagree with sth29.to name only a few, as an example代替for example30. next to/virtually impossible, 代替nearly impossible