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1、Tom, had driven three hours to camp overnight by alake in the forest. Unfortunately ,on the way an unpleasant subject came up and they started to quarrel .By the time they reached the lake ,Jane was so angry that she said to Tom,“Im going to find a better spot for us to camp”andwalked away.With no p

2、ath to follow ,Jane just walked on for quite a long time .After she hadclimbed to a high place ,she turned around ,hoping to see the lake .To her surprise ,she saw nothing but forest and ,far beyond ,a snow capped mountain top .She suddenly realized that she was lost.“Tom! ”she cried. “Help! ”No rep

3、ly .If only she had not left her mobile phone in that bag with Tom .Jane kept moving ,but the farther she walked ,the more confused she became .As night was beginning to fall ,Jane was so tired that she had to stop for the night .Lying awake in the dark ,Jane wanted very much to be with Tom and her

4、family .She wanted to hold him and tell him how much she loved him.Jane rose at the break of day,hungry and thirsty.She could hear water trickling（滴落）somewhereat a distance.Quickly she followed the sound to astream.To her great joy,she also saw some berry bushes.She drank and ate a few berries.Never

5、 in her life had she tasted anything better.Feeling stronger now,Jane began to walk along the stream and hope it would lead her to the lake.As she picked her way carefully along the stream,Jane heard ahelicopter.Is that for me?Unfortunately,the trees made it impossible for 读后续写，可以说是英语写作的“集大成者”，它包含了“

6、写作”、“阅读”、“分析”、“创造”。其中，最难的是合理的创造，即逻辑。那么，如何才能在故事续写中做到合理审题、合理创造呢？我们可以从结构阅读、情节阅读两个层面分析。既然是英语阅读，那么无论是读后续写的篇章，还是阅读理解题中的文章，都应该坚持阅读的最重要一步：分析全文结构。阅读理解类的文章，主要涉及社科类，偶尔有叙事类。但是，读后续写主要以故事类文本为主，阅读理解中的结构分析法仿佛一下子失去了作用。确实，故事类文本的分析与社科类文本的分析有很大区别。故事可能在逻辑上缺乏科学性，在情节上充满跳跃性。不过，所有故事都离不开六要素：“who, when, where, what, how, why”

7、。这才是故事的真正结构，因此考生在阅读时，不应该走马观花看情节，而应找出文章的六要素，然后将每个主要事件都用六要素串联成一句话。这样一来，冗长的故事就成了两三句，文章的结构自然水落石出。同时，考生还应该分析答题纸中已给出的两个开头句包含的主要句子结构，这样才能保证正确的写作方向。情节是故事生命力所在，不论一个故事辞藻多么华丽，没有精妙的情节安排，词汇都成了一纸空壳。为了写出符合故事发展的“尾巴”，就必须先分析原文的情节发展方向。除了采用上文提到过的六要素分析法，在审题时还应该着重分析三个点：起因、转折、高潮。这三个点中，最重要的是起因与转折。大家或许会问：为什么高潮部分不是最重要的？因为故事高

8、潮基本都会留给考生自己去创造，即使原文中出现了故事的高潮，那也是次要的。只有确定了故事的起因，考生才能合理推断这个起因会导致的可能结果；只有确定了故事的转折，考生才能合理地将故事发展下去。不过，在设计情节时，同样要考虑六要素，将它们串联成一句话，再将这句话添砖加瓦变成段落。优秀范例点评范例一But no more helicopters came and it was getting dark again.Immediately, an absolute darkness ruled the forest.Jane, exhausted and scared, lay down near a

9、stone, missing her familyat a distance. All the fantastic memory crowded in and she couldnt help crying, “Hadnt I quarreled withTom,walked away andclimbed to the high place, I wouldnt be trapped in this awful place, confronted with the danger of dying.” She regretted with endless anxiety, and then b

10、ecame asleep with shining tears in her eyes.It was daybreak when Jane woke up. Weak as she was, she struggled to her feet, continuing searching for assistance.To her great joy, ahelicopter was flying overhead again and again. Eager and excited, she flagged heryellow blouse and spared no effort to ye

11、ll so as to attract others attention. Fortunately, she was eventually noticed and brought into the helicopter. There, she saw her husband, a man staring at her, wearing an expression of relief. As tightly as possible, she hugged him and was too thrilled to say anything. Besides, they agreed never to

12、 quarrel again, determining to live the life to the fullest.【点评】该篇作文在逻辑、语言方面做到了平衡、全面、出色。首先，在逻辑上，该篇文章做到了合理合情：起初，主人公身陷森林，内心充满了悔恨，在面对困难时焦虑、畏惧；之后，主人公努力求生，最终获救，并且领悟到了一定的人生道理。纵观整个故事，情节发展不仅符合两段给出的开头所限定的情景要求，而且还设置了一定的悬念，增强了故事的可读性。在语言上，这篇文章并没有一味采用大词、难词，而是在高中词汇范围内精挑细选，活用了许多小词，增加了许多阅读趣味。例如，文章第一句“an absolute da

13、rkness ruled the forest”中，“rule”一词就使用了拟人的修辞手法，让森林阴森黑暗的一面展露无遗，同时描绘出主人公身处绝境的紧迫性。在“Eager and excited, she flagged her yellow blouse.”一句中，直接将情绪形容词放在句首，使用了非谓语动词的语法，表达精练。此外，“There, she saw her husband, a man staring at her, wearing an expression of relief.”一句中，使用了几个短句，却包含了两处非谓语动词语法，同时活用了“wear”一词，把两个人相见时的场

14、景生动地描绘了出来。总体来说，这篇文章反映出该考生课外阅读较多，平时应有较多练笔。范例二But no more helicopters came and it was getting dark again.Clusters of stars decorated the vast sky, weakly shining in the moon-eclipsed darkness. Rages and apprehension calmed down and exhaustions came dominatingJane as she hopelessly fell down into the s

15、oft grass. The transparent stream sounded amusing and was no longer as infuriated asthe stream of her mind hours ago. She thought aboutTom, memories flooding out as she closed her eyes and recalled the kindness of him. Regretfully, she fell asleep, flower singing adhering to her ears （flowers singing adhering to her ears）.It was daybreak when Jane woke up. Sunshine embraced the forest plain, reflecting to bloom heryellow blouse to be an attractive “flower”. In her sleepy eyes, ahelicopter was right in the sky. Wild with joy, she jumped up, grabb