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突破压轴课之写作

突破压轴课之书面表达

2014年高考解决方案

1.各类型情景作文的写法。

2.在情景作文中常用的叙事结构、细节扩充手段、抒情方法。

3.各类型应用文的写法。

4.写作中常用的高级词汇和高级句式。

本节课主要是通过范文赏析，来体会情景作文在细节扩充、情感描写上的技巧。

对于应用文，主要是通过范文欣赏注意功能句的运用。

PartA情景作文

一、情景作文话题：

爱与感恩类

【场景设置】

母亲节快要到了，为了报答母亲的养育之恩，我事先告诉妈妈，今天一天所有的家务活统一由我来干。

一大早，我趁着妈妈还没起来，就把家里打扫得干干净净，并且为全家人做好了早餐。

然后我去网上帮妈妈订了一束鲜花和晚上的电影票。

在去取鲜花的途中，突然下起了雨，我看到一位年轻的妈妈把自己的孩子背在肩上，避开地上的水潭。

在那一刻，我明白，此生都无法报答妈妈的爱。

晚上，在妈妈看完电影出来之后，我在电影院外等着妈妈，并献上这一束鲜花，并对妈妈说：

“您永远是我心中最善良最美丽的人”。

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【基本情节描写】

Mother'sDayisaroundthecorner.Toshowmyappreciationtomymum,ItoldherinadvancethatIhaddecidedtotakeoveralltheallhouseworkonthatday.Earlyinthemorning,Igotuptryingnottowakeupmymum,cleanedthehouseandpreparedbreakfastforthewholefamily.Whiledoingallthiswork,Irealizedhowharditwasformumtokeepthisearlymorningroutineforthepast18years.ThenIwentonlinetoorderabundleofflowersandatickettothenewly-releasedromanticfilmforher,sinceIknewmumwasahugemoviefanbackinhercollegedays.WhileIwasonmywaytopickuptheflowers,itstartedtorain.Justthen,IsawthemosttouchingscenethatIthoughcouldonlyexistinmovies.Ayoungmothersquatteddowntolethersonclimbontoherbackandcarriedhimcrossingapuddleofwateronthestreet.ThatwaswhenIrealizedthemeaningofunconditionalloveandwonderedhowIcouldeverpaybackthatlove.

Atnight,Igavemumagreatsurprisebywaitingoutsidethecinemawithabundleoflovelyflowersinmyhand.Ipresentedherwiththeflowers,tellingherthatinmyeyes,shewas,isandwillalwaysbethemostkindandbeautifulpersonontheearth.

【心情和细节描写】

Loveistheultimateredemptionforushumanbeings.WiththeapproachingofMother’sday,therewasastrongdesirewithinmyheart,keepingarousingthepassiontodosomethingformybelovedmother.

WhenIcaughtsightofthecleanandtidylivingroom,asenseofsatisfactionandreliefcapturedmyheart.IwassogladthatIhadgrownuptothestagewhereIhadthecapabilitiestopaybackmymother’slove.

Thesuddendescentofrainhardlyspoiledmymood.Onthecontrary,ItookitasablessingthatIhadthispreciousopportunitytodevotemystrengthandenergytothewell-beingofmymother.

Seeingthesmilespreadingacrossmymother’sface,Iwassaturatedwiththeecstasyofexpressingmygratitude.Althoughitwasdemonstratedtotheleastextent,Icertainlygotsufficientencouragementswhichwouldpropelmeinthefuturetopasslovewithnohesitation.

二、情景作文话题分类：

好人好事类

【场景设置】

周末我们全班同学来到郊区的智障儿童福利中心，为这些孩子带去温暖与关爱。

我们教他们打篮球，和他们做游戏，还和他们一起画画。

孩子们灿烂的笑容点亮了我们的心房。

最后我们和这些可爱的孩子合影留念，并答应孩子们以后只要有时间，一定再来看他们。

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【参考范文】

Servingthepeoplewhoareeitherphysicallyormentallyinferiortomeismybestpleasureandit’sthesamewithmyclassmates.Onweekendsourclassarrivedatthementallydisabledchildwelfarecentretobringchildrenwarmthandlove.Andthenwetaughtthemhowtoplaybasketball,playgamesanddrawpicturestogether,ourheartslightedupwiththeirbrilliantsmile.Eventually,wetookpictureswiththelovablechildren,andpromisedtodothemafavoragainwhenbeingfree.

Allinall,mentallyhandicappedastheyare,weunanimouslyagreethat,itistheythatinspireustotreasureeverysingledayandgetustobeawareoftheimportanceofharmonioussocietyatthedawnofthenewmillennium.

三、情景作文话题分类：

社会公益类

假设你是某所中学的学生，3月22日（世界水日）你参加了你班开展的一系列节水宣传活动。

请根据以下四幅图的先后顺序，以日记的形式记录当天的活动内容。

注意：

词数不少于60。

提示词：

宣传材料leaflets;危机crisis

社区节水方法座谈会

March22，2010MondaySunny

TodayisWorldWaterDay.

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【原范文】

March22,2010MondaySunny

TodayisWorldWaterDay.Inthemorning,wehadaclassmeetingtalkingaboutwhattodoonthisspecialday.Finally,wereachedanagreementandimmediatelybegantomakepreparationsfortheafternoon’sactivities.

At2:

00pm,wewenttotheneighboringcommunitytohandoutleaflets,callingonpeopletosavewater.Around3o’clock,theexpertweinvitedmadeanexcellentspeechonthecurrentwatercrisisinChina.HetalkedaboutthedroughtintheSoutheastandthesevereshortageofwaterinourcity.Thespeechhadastrongappealtoallthepeoplepresent,includingme.

Afterthespeech,wehadadiscussionwithourneighborsaboutvariouswaysofsavingwaterinourdailylife.Isuggestedturningoffthetapwaterimmediatelyafteruse,andagrannycameupwiththeideasofreusingthewaterfromkitchen,forexample,thewaterafterwashingfruitsandvegetablescanbeusedtowaterflowersandsoon.

Today,Ihavehadabetterunderstandingoftheimportanceofsavingwaterandreallylearnedalotaboutsavingwater.（14分）

【参考范文】

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TodayisWorldWaterDay.Duringthe10o’clockclassmeeting,withlotsofencouragementfromourteacher,wedecidedtocomeoutoftheclassroomanddoourbit.Beforethesessionended,lotsofstudentsraisedtheirhandstogivesuggestionsonwhatactivitiestoorganize.

Startingat2pm,Ihandedoutleafletsonsavingourwaterresourcesinthenearbycommunityalongwithabunchofmyclassmates.Manypassers-by,rangingfromyoungtoold,wereextremelyinterestedinthemessagewewereconveying.At3o’clock,aclassmateinvitedhergrandpa,anexpertonwaterresourcestogivealectureonthepresentwatercrisisinChina.Sittingonthestoolsweprovided,acrowdgatheredaroundhimtohearwhathehadtosay.Iwasfairlyintriguedandconcernedwiththeviewshepresented.

Ataround4pm,Iattendedthecommunitymeetingonwaystosavewater.NotonlydidIstresstheimportanceoffixingdrippingtapsandturningthemtightlyuntilnomorewaterdripsdown,Ialsoheardareallyeffectivemethodtousethewaterfromwashingvegetablestowaterplants.

Ilearnttodaythatsavingourwaterresourcesisn’tlimitedtojustoneday,it’sanactionthatmustbecarriedouteverydayandineveryaspectofourlife.（16分）

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TodayisWorldWaterDay.At10o’clock,aclassmeetingregardingtheactivitiestobecompletedwasheldamongthestudents.Havinggraspedthedetailsoftheactivity,I,togetherwithsomeotherstudents,offeredtoparticipateinit.

Theactivitystartedoffatthegateofacommunityat2o’clock.