济南Patrick的雅思写作笔记.docx

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济南Patrick的雅思写作笔记

Writing1

Patrick

WritingExamCriteria

Task2→Argumentativeessay70%

250words40minutes

~20-25Sentences

TR→Taskresponse

appropriateanswersrelevanttotopic

cc→Coherence

→logicalarrangementofideas;paragraphing

→Cohesion

→flow,useofconnectives

GRA→GrammarRangeandAccuracy

Sentencetype→complex/simple

→active/passive

LR→LexicalResource

Vocabulary

Task1→Datareporting→150words,20mins

CC,GRA,LR

SameasTask230%

TA→Taskachievement

TA→Taskachievement

→givingappropriatedatabasedonthequestion

→use/misusewords

Essaytypes→Task2

①Agree/Disagree

②Discussion

③Problem/Solution

④Advantage/Disadvantage

⑤Combinationquestion

argumentstructure

Concept→Topicsentence（Controllingidea）

+Evidence/Support

+Explanation/Illustration

TheInternetisapositivedevelopmentinsociety,Agree/Disagree?

Inmyopinion,theInternetisapositivedevelopmentasitisanimportanttoolofcommunication.（CI）

Modernpeopleareverybusyandlackopportunitytocommunicatewithothers.Assuch,theInternetisimportantaspeoplecanconvenientlycommunicatewithothersbygoingonline.

Forexample,popularmethodsincludeICQ,chatroomsande-mail.

Inaddition,manypeoplealsogo-onlinetoplayInternetgames.

Agree/Disagree

①Introduction——③

②Agree1——①5/620-23句

Body③Agree2——②

④Opposingidea+Rebut③/weakness+solve——②

⑤Conclusion

Introductions→①GeneralStatement

②Introductiontotopic

③Abstractsentence

eg:

Crimeratesarerisinginmodernsociety→Statement

Manypeoplefeelthatstrictpunishmentistheonlysolution.Towhatextentdoyouagreeordisagree?

General

Statement:

Oneofthemostseriousproblemsfacingmodernsocietyistheriseincrimerates.

Eg:

Internetisapositivedevelopment

GS:

Internetisthemostimportantinventioninthelastcentury.

Introduction

Totopic:

Itissaidthatstrictpunishmentistheonlysolutiontoreducecrimerates.

Abstract:

Inthisessay.Iwillgivereasonstosupporttheviewgivenabove.

Agree1:

①Topicsentence（CI）最后五个词

②Support1→Strictpunishmentisabletoreduce.

③Explaintheincidenceofcrimeinsociety.

④Support2Firstly,strictpunishmentactsasa

⑤Explaindeterrencetopotentialcriminals.The

⑥Exampleconsequencesofcommittingcrimes.

⑦ConcludeFurthermoreaftercriminalsarepunished,they

arenolongerabletoadverselyaffectsociety.Forexample,whencriminalsareputinyail,theycannotcommitcrimesanymore.Consequently,societywillbecomeasaferplace.

①Opposingidea

（Topicsentence+CI）

②SupportAnopposingideaisthatstrictpunishment

③Explainthefinancialburdenduetothehighoperating

④Examplecostswilladverselyaffectthegovernment

⑤RebutAgoodexampleistheincreasingcostsfrom

⑥Supportraisingthenumberofpoliceofficersto

⑦Explainenforcethelaw.

⑧ExampleIagreethattheinitialcostsarehigh

⑨ExamplebutIfeelthatthereturnsaremuchgreater.Thereductionincrimeratesmuchraise

productivityinsocietywhichinturnleadstogreaterprosperityinthegovernment.

Conclusion

①Summary

②Concludingstatement

Inconclusion,associetycontinuestodevelop,crimewillalsocontinuetobeatopicisdebated,therefore,moreresearchesarerequiredtodiscoverrelevantsolutions.

Discussion

①Introduction—③

（1）GS

（2）Introductiontotopic（3）Abstract

②Oneside

Body③Otherside5/6

④Ownopinion

⑤Conclusion—②

Question#2

Theinventionofairtransporthasgreatlyimprovedtransportationinthemodernworld.Itisdebatedwhethertheuseofairtransporttoexportfruitsandvegetablesisagoodthingorthatitcannotbejustified.Inthisessay,Iwilldiscussbothsidesaswellasexpressmyownopinions.

Agree1/2somepeoplebelievethisuseofairtransport

①TS+CI①isagoodthingasitpromotesthedevelopmentof

②Supportthelocaleconomy（CI）

③ExplainThereasonisthatlocalproducersareableto

④Exampleexpandtheirmarkettootherareasorcountries.

⑤TS+CI②Assuch,theycanincreaseprofitwhichintern

⑥Supportdrivestheeconomy.

⑦ExampleFurthermore,thisuseofairtransportalsoadds

⑧ExampleVarietytoconsumerchoice.Thisisbecauselocal

⑨Concludeconsumersarenolongerrestrictedtoonlylocal

fruitsandvegetablesasmanyproductscannowbeimported.Asaconsequence,benefitsexisttoboththeindividualandsociety.

Ownopinion

①TopicSentence（CI）Inmyopinion,thisuseofairtransport

②Support1mustcontinuebutshouldberegulatedtocertainextent.（CI）

③ExplainFirstofall,stoppingthisuseofairtransportwill

④Support2greatlyimpacttheeconomyofmanycountries.As

⑤ExplainSuch,itisessentialtopromoteitscontinueduse.At

⑥Examplethesametime,wemustbeawareoftheenvironmentaleffectsofairtransport.Governmentneedstoregulate

⑦Concludetheusebasedontheimportancetothelocaleconomy.

Forexample,developedcountriesshouldbeginreducingexportsoffruitsandvegetablesviaairplanes.

Conclusion

①Summary

②Concludingstatement

Tosummarize,airtransportpresentsmanybenefitsandshortcomingstohumanity.Thereforeitisimperativethatwefullygrasptheimpactithasonsocietybeforeimplementation.

Problem/solution

①Introduction

②Problem

→Causes×218句

③Solution×2

④ConclusionTheproblemofwaterscarcityisfaced

②Problems（Body）bymanycitiesandcountriesallaround

①TS+CI1theworld

②SupportAnalyzethecauses（factor/reasons）ofthisphenomenon

（trend/tendency）（situation/problem）

③Explainandsuggest（recommend）relevant（related/feasible）solutions

④Example

⑤TS+CI2

⑥Support

⑦Explain

⑧Example

⑨Conclude

Environmentalawarenessisontheriseinmodernsociety.Aseriousproblemthatisoftendebatedisconcerningtheissueofwaterscarcity.InthisessayIwillanalyzethecausesandrecommendfeasiblesolutions.

Firstandforemost,themostimportantfactorcausingwaterscarcityisindustrialpollution.（CI）

Thepollutantsfromfactoriesandindustrycontaminatewaterbodiessuchaslakesandrivers.Asaresult,watersupplyisdiminished.Inaddition,thedensityofpopulationinurbanareasisalsorapidlyincreasing.Watersupplyisoftenexceededbydemandintheseareasasthefacilitiesareoftenoutdatedandinadequate.Duetothesefactors,waterscarcityhasbecomeaprevalent（continuing）problem.

Solution→governmentpolicy

→reducedemandbyreducingwaste

④Advantage/Disadvantage

①Introduction3句

②Advantages×218句

③Disadvantages×221-23句

④Conclusion4句

①Ownopinion

②Support/Explanation

③Summary

④concludingstatement

AdvantagesanddisadvantagesoftheInternet

DespitetheobviousdisadvantagestotheInternet,Ibelievethatitwillcontinuetogrowinitsinfluence.ThereasonisthattheInternetisnolongersimplyatoolforcommunicationandentertainment,buthasbecomeapartofmodernlifestyle.Assuch,itisnecessarythatstepsaretakertoensurethattheInternetwillgrowinapositivedirectionthatbenefitshumanityinthefuture.

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⑤CombinationQuestion

①Introduction3句

②Problem/solution第二段7-8句

③Agree/Disagree第二段5-6句—7-8句

④Conclusion2句

3kindsofA/Dquestion

①Towhatextentdoyouagreeordisagree

②Expressyourownopinion

③——or——?

eg.positiveornegative?

Task2Topics

①Technologyhumanlife

②Social[Education（unemployment）]problems

Government（spendingandfunction）

Crime（punishment）

③Progressanddevelopment

culture/traditional/modern（advertising）

④Massmedia

→individualtypesofmedia

→TVmoviesmusic

→internationalmedia

→mediafigures（reporterfamouspeople）

⑤Environment

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Writing2Patrick

Technologyandlife

①Technologyandproductsoftechnology

（a）→transportationtools（planes,carsetc.）

→expandhumanmobility

（b）→communicationtools（cell-phone,Internetetc.0

→expandhumanconnectivity

→convenient,comfortable,flexible,fast.

（c）→mechanization/automation→satisfydemand

→raiseproductivityandefficiency

→increasehumanproductionofgoodsandservices

（eg:

agricultural/industrial/consumerproduct）

NegativeEffects

→lossofprivacy

increasepaceoflife（privatetimeandspace）

→lifestylesbecomebusier→reducehumancommunication

stressandpressure→needforlabourresource

Ifeelstress内在外在

Anxiety/frustration→competition→unemployment

②Ethicaluseoftechnology

eg:

biotechnology.Agriculture（fertilizers）.Genetics.

Animalexperimentsetc.

→drivescientificandtechnologicalchange

→expandshorizonsofhumanknowledge

promotessocialadvances

Negativeeffectssacrifice牺牲

→reflectslevelofcivilizationinsociety

→effectsonhumanphysiologyandpsychology.

Machines→mechanized

（n.）（adj.）

supply←→demand（consumerdemand）

need←→wants→luxuryproduct

（basicneeds→food,shelter,clothing）→

（material/spiritualneeds）

requirement（youmustfirsthaveit）

（universityrequirements,workrequirements）

Airtransportisincreasinglyusedinexportingfruitsandvegetablestocountrieswhereinthesetypesofproduceareunavailableornotinseason.[statement（cannotberebutted）（doesn’trequireexplanation）]Somesaythatthisisagoodthingwhileothersfeelthatthisuseofairtransportcannotbejustified.Discuss[opinions①goodthing②cannotbejustified]

3thingstobedone

①Discovertypeofquestion

②Findstatementand/oropinion

③Findkeypoints

#2→statement→airtransport→exportfruitsandvegetablesgoodthing→opinion→cannotbejustified

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