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MODELTEM4ESSAY05ARGUMENT1

TEM4ESSAY05:

Argumentation-1MODEL

Itwasreportedinthepresssometimeagothatafewsecond-andthird-yearstudentsinaprovincialuniversitydecidedtotrytheirhandatbusinessinordertogetpreparedforthefuture.Theyopenedsixsmallshopsneartheiruniversity.Theirteachersandclassmateshaddifferentopinionsaboutthisphenomenon.Somethoughtthatthestudents’businessexperiencewouldhelpthemadaptbettertosocietyaftergraduation,whileothersheldanegativeview,sayingthatrunningshopsmightoccupytoomuchofthestudents’timeandenergywhichshouldotherwisebedevotedtotheiracademicstudy.Whatdoyouthink?

Writeacompositionofabout200wordsonthefollowingtopic:

ShouldUniversityStudentsGoinforBusiness?

Inthefirstpartofyourwritingyoushouldstateclearlyyourmainargument,andinthesecondpartyoushouldsupportyourargumentwithappropriatedetails.Inthelastpartyoushouldbringwhatyouhavewrittentoanaturalconclusionorasummary.

Markswillbeawardedforcontent,organization,grammarandappropriateness.Failuretofollowtheaboveinstructionsmayresultinalossofmarks.

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Modelessay

Nowadays,youmayencounterstudentswhoaresellingstationeryornewspaperswhenyouarewalkingoncampus.Someofthemhaveevenopeneddifferenttypesofsmallshops.Theyassumethatinthiswaytheymayaccumulatesomesocialexperiencesandgetwellpreparedfortheirfuturejobs.（paraphrasetheintroduction）However,theycanhardlyachievethatpurpose.What'sevenworseisthattheywillwastealotoftimetheycouldhaveusedforstudy.Therefore,inmyopinion,universitystudentsshouldnotgoinforbusinessbecauseofthefollowingtworeasons.（aclearthesis）

Firstly,（badlinkers）universitystudentsusuallyhaveaheavytaskoftheoreticalstudy.（AtypicalChinesewayofreasoning:

startfromthemostindirectreason）Theyhavealotofcoursestotake,apileofbookstoread,andalltypesofhomeworktofinish.Thesetasksareessentialforthemtobuildupaprofoundandtheoreticalfoundation.Afterall,universityeraisthebesttimewhenastudentcanlearntheoreticalknowledge.Theyhavemanyyearstopracticeitlater,butiftheymissthechancetomasteritsystematically,theywillcertainlyregretwastingtheirbestyears.Doingbusinesswilltakethemtoomuchtimewhentheycanspendonphysicalexercises,onbooksandonactivitieswhichwillmakethembetterpeopleinthefuture.（mainidea/topicsentence,whichshouldbemovedtothebeginning）Nomatterwhetherthebusinessturnsoutsuccessfulorendsupafailure,itwilleventuallydistractstudentsfromtheiracademicstudy.Sointheendthestudentswilllosemuchmorethanwhattheyearn.

Secondly,（badlinkers）acompletesocialservicenetworkhasbeenestablishedoncampus,andthestudentsusuallyhavenochancetocompetewiththesupermarketswhichofferedmuchbetterserviceandcommoditiesofhighquality.（topicsentence,whichistoolong）Thesesupermarketssellgoodsrangingfrompens,papertoquilts,frombiscuitstocookedmeals.Youcanalmostbuywhateveryouwilluseindailylifethere.Besides,thesethingsareusuallycheap.Whattypeofshopsthestudentscanrun?

Mostofthemdothesamebusinessasthesupermarkets.Whattypeofgoodstheyoffer?

Nothingbetterthanthoseinthesupermarkets.Asaresult,thebusinessrunbythestudentsusuallyendinbankruptcy.Exceptbitterexperiences,theyearnnothing.

Inaword,ifuniversitystudentsgoinforbusiness,theywillinevitablylosenotonlyenergybutalsotime.Therefore,theschoolauthorityshouldforbidthestudentstorunbusiness,andteachersshouldtrytheirbesttopersuadethestudentsnottotaketherisksoearly.

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Mysampleoutline

Introduction:

studentsshouldnotgoinforbusinessuntiltheyareready.

Body:

a.what’sbusiness（differencewithpart-time）

b.Considertheopposingview:

advantages

c.Myownargument:

disadvantages

d.whencanwedobusiness

Conclusion:

studentsshouldbeverycarefuliftheywantto…

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Myversion（onlyoneofthemanypossibleversions）

Itisanundeniablefactthatmoreandmorecollegestudentsdecidetotrytheirhandsondoingbusiness.Schooladministration,teachersandstudentshavedifferentviewsonthisphenomenon.AsfarasI’mconcerned,collegestudentsshouldnotgoinforbusinessunlesstheyarepreparedpsychologicallyandeconomically.

Collegestudentsshouldunderstanddoingbusinessisnotdoingpart-timejob.Ifastudentspends2to3hoursatweekendsteachingmiddleschoolstudentsasatutoror…,that’spart-timejob.Heorshedoesn’thavetofacetotheriskoflosing…andtheydon’thavetosacrificetoomuchtime.Butifastudentborrowslotsofmoneyfromhisparents,classmates,orbanktoopenashoporbuystocksinstockmarket,that’s….Heorshewillfacetheriskof…

Wecannotignorethepracticalvalueofdoingbusiness.Ifhisshopisrunningwellorhissharegoesup,hecanmakemoneytoreduce…Collegestudentcanalsolearn…

Nevertheless,wemustadmitbusinesshasrisk.Astudent’sshopmaynotbeabletocompetewithsupermarketonpriceandrangeofgoods.Hisstocksharemay…So,hewillfacethedangerof…

Whetherstudentscantrytheirhandsatbusinessdependsonfollowingfactors.Heorsheshouldaskthemselveswhethertheycanmakeabalancebetweenstudyandbusiness…Theyshouldalsoaskthemselveswhethertheyarereadytofacetheriskoflosingeverythingintheirbusiness…（optional）

Tosumup,collegestudentsshouldtrytheirhandsonbusinessverycautiously.Beforetheyarereadytofacethedangerof…they’dbetter…

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What'sthewesternpatternofargument?

1.What'stheorderofbodyparagraphs?

2.Howdoesthewriterintroduceeachbodyparagraph?

Howdoesthewriterconsidertheopposingview?

3.Whatlinkingwordsdoesthewriterusetoconnecteachbodyparagraph?

4.Whatevidencedoesthewriterusetosupporthisview?

Dolly'sFalseLegacy

1.Overlookedintheargumentsaboutthemoralityofartificiallyreproducinglifeisthefactthat,atpresent,cloningisaveryinefficientprocedure[Introduction:

technicalproblem].Theincidenceofdeathamongfetusesandoffspringproducedbycloningismuchhigherthanitisthroughnaturalreproduction--roughly10timesashighasnormalbeforebirthandthreetimesashighafterbirthinourstudiesatRoslin.Distressingenoughforthoseworkingwithanimals,thesefailureratessurelyrenderunthinkablethenotionofapplyingsuchtreatmenttohumans.

2.Evenifthetechniquewereperfected,however,[transition]wemustaskourselveswhatpracticalvaluewhole-beingcloningmighthave.Whatexactlywouldbethedifferencebetweena"cloned"babyandachildbornnaturally—andwhywouldwewantone?

[Thesis:

twoquestions]

3.Theclonedchildwouldbeageneticallyidenticaltwinoftheoriginal,andthusphysicallyverysimilar—farmoresimilarthananaturalparentandchild.Humanpersonality,however,emergesfromboththeeffectsofthegenesweinherit（nature）andenvironmentalfactors（nurture）.Thetwocloneswoulddevelopdistinctpersonalities,justastwinsdevelopuniqueidentities.Andbecausethecopywouldoftenbeborninadifferentfamily,clonedtwinswouldbelessalikeinpersonalitythannaturalidenticaltwins.[Answerthesecondquestion:

differencebetweenclonedbabyandnaturallybornbaby]

4.Why"copy"peopleinthefirst[transition]place?

Couplesunabletohavechildrenmightchoosetohaveacopyofoneofthemratherthanaccepttheintrusionofgenesfromadonor[opposingview1:

themostcommonreason].MywifeandIhavetwochildrenofourownandanadoptedchild,butIfindithelpfultoconsiderwhatmighthavehappenedinmyownmarriageifacopyofmehadbeenmadetoovercomeinfertility.MywifeandImetinhighschool.Howwouldshereacttoaphysicalcopyoftheyoungmanshefellinlovewith?

Howwouldanyofusfindlivingwithourselves?

Surelytheolderclone—I,inthiscase—wouldbelievethatheunderstoodhowthecopyshouldbehaveandsobeevenmorelikelythantheaveragefathertoimposeexpectationsuponhischild.Aboveall,howwouldateenagercopewithlookingatme,abalding,agingman,andseeingthephysicalfutureaheadofhim?

[Counterevidence:

personalexperience]

5.Eachofuscanimaginehypotheticalfamiliescreatedbytheintroductionofaclonedchild—acopyofonepartnerinahomosexualrelationshiporofasingleparent,forexample[opposingview2:

lesscommonreason].Whatismissinginallthisisconsiderationofwhat'sintheinterestsoftheclonedchild.Becausethereisnoformofinfertilitythatcouldbeovercomeonlybycloning,Idonotfindtheseproposalsacceptable.Myconcernsarenotonreligiousgroundsoronthebasisofaperceivedintrinsicethicalprinciple.Rather,myjudgmentisthatitwouldbedifficultforfamiliescreatedinthiswaytoprovideanappropriateenvironmentforthechild.[Counterevidence:

commonknowledge）

6.Cloningisalso[transition]suggestedasameansofbringingbackarelative,usuallyachild,killedtragically[opposingview3:

lessercommonreason].Anyparentcanunderstandthatwish,butitmustfirstberecognizedthatthe