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SampleEssayResponsesandReaderCommentaryfortheIssueTask

Aspeoplerelymoreandmoreontechnologytosolveproblems,theabilityofhumanstothinkforthemselveswillsurelydeteriorate.

Discusstheextenttowhichyouagreeordisagreewiththestatementandexplainyourreasoningforthepositionyoutake.Indevelopingandsupportingyourposition,youshouldconsiderwaysinwhichthestatementmightormightnotholdtrueandexplainhowtheseconsiderationsshapeyourposition.

Note:

Allresponsesarereproducedexactlyaswritten,includingerrors,misspellings,etc.,ifany.

EssayResponse—Score6

Thestatementlinkingtechnologynegativelywithfreethinkingplaysonrecenthumanexperienceoverthepastcentury.Surelytherehasbeennotimeinhistorywherethelivedlivesofpeoplehavechangedmoredramatically.Aquickreflectiononatypicaldayrevealshowtechnologyhasrevolutionizedtheworld.Mostpeoplecommutetoworkinanautomobilethatrunsonaninternalcombustionengine.Duringtheworkday,chancesarehighthattheemployeewillinteractwithacomputerthatprocessesinformationonsiliconbridgesthatare.09micronswide.Uponleavinghome,familymemberswillbereachedthroughwirelessnetworksthatutilizesatellitesorbitingtheearth.Eachofthesecommonoccurrencescouldhavebeeninconceivableattheturnofthe19thcentury.

Thestatementattemptstobridgethesedramaticchangestoareductionintheabilityforhumansthinkforthemselves.Theassumptionisthatanincreasedrelianceontechnologynegatestheneedforpeopletothinkcreativelytosolvepreviousquandaries.Lookingbackattheintroduction,onecouldarguethatwithoutacar,computer,ormobilephone,thehypotheticalworkerwouldneedtofindalternatemethodsoftransport,informationprocessingandcommunication.Technologyshortcircuitsthisthinkingbymakingtheproblemsobsolete.

However,thisrelianceontechnologydoesnotnecessarilyprecludethecreativitythatmarksthehumanspecies.Thepriorexamplesrevealthattechnologyallowsforconvenience.Thecar,computerandphoneallreleaseadditionaltimeforpeopletolivemoreefficiently.Thisefficiencydoesnotprecludetheneedforhumansthinkforthemselves.Infact,technologyfreeshumanitytonotonlytacklenewproblems,butmayitselfcreatenewissuesthatdidnotexistwithouttechnology.Forexample,theproliferationofautomobileshasintroducedaneedforfuelconservationonaglobalscale.Withincreasingenergydemandsofemergingmarkets,globalwarmingbecomesaconcerninconceivabletothehorse-and-buggygeneration.Likewisedependenceonoilhascreatednation-statesthatarenotdependentontaxation,allowingrulingpartiestooppressminoritygroupssuchaswomen.Solutionstothesecomplexproblemsrequiretheunfetteredimaginationsofmaverickscientistsandpoliticians.

Incontrasttothestatement,wecanevenseehowtechnologyfreesthehumanimagination.Considerhowthedigitalrevolutionandtheadventoftheinternethasallowedforanunprecedentedexchangeofideas.WebMD,apopularinternetportalformedicalinformation,permitspatientstoselfresearchsymptomsforamoreinformeddoctorvisit.Thisexerciseopenspathwaysofthinkingthatwerepreviouslyclosedofftothemedicallayman.Withincreasedinterdisciplinaryinteractions,inspirationcanarrivefromthemostsurprisingcorners.JeffreySachs,oneofthearchitectsoftheUNMilleniumDevelopmentGoals,basedhisideasonemergencycaretriagetechniques.Theunlikelymarriageofeconomicsandmedicinehashealedtense,hyperinflationenvironmentsfromSouthAmericatoEasternEurope.

Thislastexampleprovidesthemosthopeinhowtechnologyactuallyprovideshopeforthefutureofhumanity.Byincreasingourrelianceontechnology,impossiblegoalscannowbeachieved.  Considerhowthelate20thcenturywitnessedthecompleteeliminationofsmallpox.Thisdiseasehadravagedthehumanracesinceprehistoricaldays,andyetwiththetechnologyofvaccines,freethinkinghumansdaredtoimagineaworldfreeofsmallpox.  Usingtechnology,battleplansweredrawnout,andsmallpoxwassystematicallytargetedanderadicated.

Technologywillalwaysmakethehumanexperience,fromthediscoveryoffiretotheimplementationofnanotechnology.Giventhehistoryofthehumanrace,therewillbenolimittothenumberofproblems,bothnewandold,forustotackle.ThereisnoneedtoretreattoaLudditeattitudetonewthings,butratherembraceahopefulpostureofthepossibilitiesthattechnologyprovidesfornewavenuesofhumanimagination.

ReaderCommentaryforEssayResponse—Score6

Theauthorofthisessaystakesoutaclearandinsightfulpositionontheissueandfollowsthespecificinstructionsbypresentingreasonstosupportthatposition.Theessaycogentlyarguesthattechnologydoesnotdecreaseourabilitytothinkforourselves,butmerelyprovides"additionaltimeforpeopletolivemoreefficiently."Infact,theproblemsthathavedevelopedalongsidethegrowthoftechnology(pollution,politicalunrestinoil-producingnations)actuallycallformorecreativethinking,notless.

Infurtherexamples,theessayshowshowtechnologyallowsforthelinkingofideasthatmayneverhavebeenconnectedinthepast(likemedicineandeconomicmodels),pushingpeopletothinkinnewways.Examplesarepersuasiveandfullydeveloped;reasoningislogicallysoundandwellsupported.

Ideasintheessayareconnectedlogically,witheffectivetransitionsusedbothbetweenparagraphs("However"or"Incontrasttothestatement")andwithinparagraphs.Sentencestructureisvariedandcomplexandtheessayclearlydemonstratesfacilitywiththe"conventionsofstandardwrittenEnglish(i.e.,grammar,usageandmechanics),"withonlyminorerrorsappearing.Thus,thisessaymeetsalltherequirementsforreceivingatopscore,a6.

EssayResponse—Score5

Surelymanyofushaveexpressedthefollowingsentiment,orsomevariationonit,duringourdailycommutestowork:

"Peoplearegettingsostupidthesedays!

"Surroundedaswearebystridingandstridentautomatonswithcellphonesgluedtotheirears,PDA'sgrippedintheirpalms,andomniscient,omnipresentCNNgleamingintheireyeballs,it'stemptingtobelievethattechnologyhasisolatedandinfantilizedus,essentiallytransformingusintodependent,conformistmoronsbestequippedtosideswipeoneanotherinourSUV's.

Furthermore,hangingaroundwiththeyounger,pre-commutegeneration,whomtech-savvinessseemstohaverenderedlethal,isevenlessreassuring.With"TeenPeople"styletrendsshootingthroughtheairfromtiger-stripedPDAtozebra-stripedPDA,andwiththelateststarletgossipzippingfromjuicyBlackberrytoteeny,turbo-chargedcellphone,technologyseemstosupportyoungpeople'sworsttendenciestofollowthecrowd.Indeed,theyhaveseeminglyevolvedintointergalacticconformitypolice.Afterall,today'stech-aidedteensare,courtesyofauthentic,hands-onvideogames,literallytrainedtokill;courtesyofchatandinstanttextmessaging,theyhavetheirownlanguage;theyevenhavetinycamerastoefficientlyphotodocumentyourfashionblunders!

Isthisadolescence,orpaparazziterroristtrainingcamp?

Withallthisevidence,it'seasytobelievethattechtrendsandtheincorporationoftechnologicalwizardryintooureverydayliveshaveservedmostlytoenforceconformity,promotedependence,heightenconsumerismandmaterialism,andgenerallycreateaculturethatvaluesself-absorptionandpersonalentitlementovercooperationandcollaboration.However,Iarguethatwearemerelyintheinchoatestagesoflearningtolivewithtechnologywhilestilllovingoneanother.Afterall,evengiventheexamplesprovidedearlierinthisessay,itseemsclearthattechnologyhasn'timpairedourthinkingandproblem-solvingcapacities.Certainlyithasincapacitatedourbehaviorandmanners;certainlyourvalueshavetakenasevereblow.However,weareunarguablymoreefficientinourbadnessthesedays.We'reeffectiveworkerbeesofineffectiveness!

IfT\technologyhassoincreasedoursensesofself-efficacythatwecanbecomeveritableagentsoftheawful,virtualCEO'sofselfishness,certainlyitcanbebeneficial.Harnessedcorrectly,technologycanimproveourabilitytothinkandactforourselves.Thefirstchallengeistofigureouthowtoprovidetechnologyuserswithsomedirely-neededdirection.

ReaderCommentaryforEssayResponse—Score5

Thelanguageofthisessayclearlyillustratesbothitsstrengthsandweaknesses.Thefloweryandsometimesuncannilykeendescriptionsareoftenusedtopowerfuleffect,butatothertimesthisdescriptivelanguageresultsinerrorsinsyntax.See,forexample,theproblemsofparallelisminthesecond-to-lastsentenceofparagraph2("Afterall,today'stech-aidedteens...").

Thereisconsistentevidenceoffacilitywithsyntaxandcomplexvocabulary("Surroundedaswearebystridingandstridentautomatonswithcellphonesgluedtotheirears,PDA'sgrippedintheirpalms,andomniscient,omnipresentCNNgleamsintheireyeballs,it'stemptingtobelieve...").However,suchlucidproseisoftencounteredbyanover-relianceonabstractionsandtangentialreasoning.Forexample,whatdoesthefactthatvideogames"literallytrain[teens]tokill"havetodowiththeuseordeteriorationofthinkingabilities?

Becausethisessaytakesacomplexapproachtotheissue(arguing,ineffect,thattechnologyneitherenhancesnorreducesourabilitytothinkforourselves,butcandooneortheother,dependingontheuser)andbecausetheauthormakesuseof"appropriatevocabularyandsentencevariety,"ascoreof5isappropriate.

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