重点四级作文范文.docx

1、重点四级作文范文Directions: For this part, you are allowed 30 minutes to write a composition on the topic The Moonlight Clan. You should write at least 120 words, and base your composition on the outline (given in Chinese) below: 1)现在很多年轻人每个月都把自己赚的钱花光，他们被称作“月光族” 2)有人认为这是一种时尚的消费观念，但很多人反对这样消费 3)我对此的看法是 The Mo

2、onlight Clan_ _ 行文思路 本题属于提纲式文字命题。提纲第1点指出一种现象，提纲第2点针对该现象提出两种不同的观点，提纲第3点要求谈谈“我”的看法，由此可判断本文应为对比选择型作文。 根据所给提纲，本文应包含如下内容：描述“月光族”现象，引出对这一现象的不同看法;对比阐述两种看法各自的理由;表明“我”对“月光族”的看法并说明理由。 高分范文 The Moonlight ClanNowadays, more and more people, 1especially the young are joining in the army of “the moonlight clan”.

3、These people exhaust their earnings every month without any savings. 2Many people think this is a fashionable life style, 2while more other people object to this kind of consumption style. 3Those who support “the moonlight clan” think that those people know how to enjoy life and have a higher life q

4、uality. 3However, more other people criticize “the moonlight clan”. They say that the consumption habit of “the moonlight clan” is unhealthy and sometimes wasteful. In addition, no savings will 4place “the moonlight clan” in a difficult position 5in case of unexpected expenses. 6Weighing these two a

5、rguments, I prefer to the latter one. In my eyes, 7though “the moonlight clan” may acquire temporary satisfaction from their consumption, 8in the long term, it 9is unfavorable to their family and career. 10Just as a proverb says, one should always prepare for a rainy day. 佳句临摩 1.佳句：Many people think

6、 this is a fashionable life style, while more other people object to this kind of consumption style. 临摩：勇敢的人往往会获得更多的机会，而懦弱的人面对机会也有可能错过。 _. 2.佳句：Those who support “the moonlight clan” think that those people know how to enjoy life and have a higher life quality. 临摩：持悲观态度的那些人认为地球上有限的能源很快就会枯竭。 _. 3.佳句：

7、Just as a proverb says, o , one should always prepare for a rainy day. 临摩：正如一句谚语所说的，“机会只给那些有准备的人。” Directions: For this part, you are allowed 30 minutes to write a composition on the topic Travel Alone or Travel with a Companion? You should write at least 120 words, and base your composition on the

8、outline (given in Chinese) below: 1)有的人喜欢独自旅行，有的人喜欢与别人结伴而行 2)两种旅行方式的好处 3)你更喜欢哪种旅行方式，为什么? Travel Alone or Travel with a Companion? _ _ _ 行文思路 本题属于提纲式文字命题。提纲第1点指出两种不同的旅行方式，提纲第2点要求分别阐述两种旅行方式的好处，提纲第3点要求表明“我”的倾向，由此可判断本文应为对比选择型作文。 根据所给提纲，本文应包含如下内容：指出人们对旅行方式的不同偏好：有人喜欢独自旅行，有人喜欢结伴旅行;对比阐述独自旅行和结伴旅行各自的好处;表明“我”更

9、喜欢于哪种旅行方式，并说明理由。 高分范文 Travel Alone or Travel with a Companion? 1When it comes to traveling way, different people will offer different opinions. 2Some people like to travel alone, 2while others prefer to travel with a companion. 3Of course, everyone has his consideration for his preference. 4Travelin

10、g alone, one can enjoy more freedom. The traveler can arrange his tour as he wishes without the trouble of humoring others. 3Moreover, traveling alone 5tend to bring the traveler 6unexpected surprise, 7such as making a new friend and enjoying a different scenery. 8Compared with traveling alone, trav

11、eling with a companion has also its advantages. 3For one thing, the group members can help and look after each other in the journey. 3For another, 4traveling with others who have same interest with, you can share costs and experiences with them. 9As to me, I prefer to travel with a companion. 3First

12、ly, we can deal with the possible problems and difficulties in the journey. 3Secondly, I like to share the pleasure of traveling with others. 3In sum, 10both traveling alone and traveling with a companion have their attractions, and you can find the pleasure from either one. 【亮点点评】 1“当涉及到或谈到时”。 2用于提

13、出两种不同的观点、态度或喜好。 3过渡衔接词语，使文章条理清晰、衔接紧密。 4现在分词短语作伴随状语。 5“倾向，趋于”。 6“意外的惊喜”。 7表示列举。 8“和相比”。 9用于引出自己的观点或选择。 10“或者，或者”。 佳句临摩 1.佳句：When it comes to traveling way, different people will offer different opinions. 临摩：当谈到是否应该取消“黄金周”假期时，人们的看法各不相同。 _. 2.佳句：Compared with traveling alone, traveling with a companion has also its advantages. 临摩：和城市相比，乡村的经济相对落后。 3_