1、Unit 13 Rainy days makes me sad单元话题写作分析Unit 13 Rainy days makes me sad单元话题写作分析 Unit 13 Rainy days makes me sad【单元话题分析】 天下雨的时候,你有什么样的感受?它让你感到伤感还是浪漫?本单元的话题就是谈论感受。生活中我们的心情会受到外界影响,产生各种不同的感受。谈论感受是每个人生活中离不开的话题。英语课程标准要求学生要学会描述和谈论自己的个人情感、感受。各类考试中也不断地涉及本话题。该话题设计的内容很广泛,可以谈论自己对各种颜色、声音的感受、对事物的喜怒哀乐的感受、天气等外界事物对自己
2、的影响等。这样的话题贴近学生生活,是每个中学生都有亲身感受与体验的。本单元话题通常采用“Guided Writing”的命题方式,渗透出现在很多话题作文中。通过对物体的描述、对事件的叙述来逐步表现自己的感受。写作时要注意结合题目选择恰当的时态,描述物体或讲述事件要按照一定的顺序,为一定的目的服务,以便准确的表达自己的感受。【写作指导】 1. 写作时要仔细审题,紧扣题目中的材料,抓住题目的细节要求,不要随意发挥,偏题离题。如果题目允许适当的发挥,则发挥的部分一定要成为作文有机的构成部分,成为有效的过渡内容或补充细节内容。2. 描述物体要按照一定的顺序、有条有理的进行,为表达个人感受做好铺垫,如有
3、必要可以详细说明产生这种感受的原因。叙述事件要做到开篇点题,把时间、地点、人物等要素交代清楚,结尾要扣题,突出作文的中心思想,使个人的感受得到充分的表达。3.从时态上看,该话题涉及到多种时态。一般叙述事件多用过去时,而像描述天气、声音和颜色等自己的影响时则常用一般现在时。时态的选择应针对写作材料灵活应用。【佳篇欣赏】AI live in a noisy neighborhood near the market. At half past five every morning, the shouts from the market will wake me up. Because it is t
4、oo early, I always feel sleepy at school. When the teacher asks me questions, I dont know what to do. Then my classmates would laugh at me. It makes me really angry.Its ok during the lunchtime. But the neighborhood will become noisy again at night. A young boy near my house is learning to play the v
5、iolin. He is just a beginner. I think you can imagine how terrible his music is. It is so unpleasant and loud that it makes me feel tense. I cant concentrate on my schoolwork.I feel really frustrated. I hope I can move to somewhere quite some day.BMy friend Lin Ling moved to a new house. Yesterday h
6、e invited us to have a look at his new bedroom. The house is very beautiful. There is one living room and two bedrooms. The living room is bright light green. I like it very much. Because green makes people relaxed, and it is good for eyes. Lin Lings bedroom is yellow. Its my favorite color. It make
7、s people feel happy. I think it must be comfortable to do homework in a yellow bedroom. He has a very lovely small sofa. It is like the Donald Duck. His new home is really lovely and beautiful.CSports in Our SchoolSports in our school have changed a lotNow we have more than three classes a weekand w
8、e have at least one hour to exercise every dayWe get so excited at these changesMore and more students take an active part in the ball games,running,and jumping on the playgroundOur school life is becoming more wonderful. Doing sports is a good way to relax and keep fitWhats more? A healthy body can
9、 help us study better and live a happier life【重点结构和句型展示】A 原汁原味(课本重点结构和句型)1. Loud music makes me tense. 喧闹的音乐让我紧张。2. Loud music always makes me want to dance. 嘈杂的音乐总是使我想去跳舞。3. It was so sad that it made me cry. 它(电影)太忧伤,我感动的哭了。4. Waiting for her made me angry. 等她让我很生气。5. Soft colors like pink and lig
10、ht blue make people relaxed. 柔和的颜色,如粉色和淡蓝色,会使人感到放松。6. How do you feel about pollution? 你对污染感觉如何?7. To make things easier, some people would rather just give money. 为了图方便,有些人宁愿只给些钱。8. It really made me feel embarrassed. 它真的让我感到很尴尬。B 精彩例句拓展1. What he said made us confusing.他说的话令我们感到困惑。2. How do you fe
11、el about the TV play? 你对这部电视剧感觉怎样?3. We feel excited because we will have a picnic this weekend. 这个周末我们要去野炊,我们都很兴奋。4. What a boring movie it is! 多么无聊的一场电影啊。5. How nice the pictures are! 多么漂亮的图画呀!6. You look beautiful in that dress. 你穿这条裙子显的很漂亮。7. I would also rather stay at home and read a good book
12、 than go to a party. 我宁愿待在家里看一本好书也不愿去参加舞会。8. She prefers to read rather than sit idle.她喜欢读书而不愿闲坐着。【原创习作点评】同学们,看到下面的四幅图片及相应的报道后,你感到最担忧的是哪两种情形?请简述你担忧的理由并提出建议或希望。要求: 从所给素材中任选两种情形进行阐述,不可多选或少选。 条理清楚,意思连贯,语句通顺,标点正确; 词数 80 100。THE POLLUTIONS One third of the worlds people dont have enough clean water. More
13、 and more diseases are caused by polluted air. People are disturbed quite often by kinds of noises. Every person in our city makes about kilos of rubbish every day.分析:这是一道看图作文题,要求表达自己对环境问题的担忧,并说明理由,提出建议或希望。写作这篇作文应该结合个人的观点,有较大的选择余地。写作时要认真读题,选择最担忧的两种情形阐述个人的观点,不要对图片进行描述。提示中,对每种污染都进行了阐述,考生可以利用这些描述来讲述担忧的
14、理由。最后,针对所选择的两种情形提出自己的建议或希望。习作 1:The environment is becoming worse and worse. There are many kinds of pollutions that I feel worried about. The most serious two are water pollution and air pollution, because people cant live healthily with dirty water and polluted air, nor can animals. More and more
15、disease are caused by polluted air.I think factories should not pour dirty water into the river directly or produce more waste gas. Wed better go on foot or by like instead of by car, because more cars mean more waste gas. We should make our world more and more beautiful.教师点评这是一篇中上水平的学生习作。得分点(1)能按照要
16、求写作,要点齐全,开篇名义,表达了自己对环境问题的担忧。(2)提出了一定的建议。失分点(1)使用句型结构较单一,名词用法不熟悉。(2)所提出的建议比较笼统,缺乏针对性,显得结尾比较随意。此处用词错误,pollution 为不可数名词。此处名词使用有误,应使用其复数形式diseases。习作 2:The first fact I feel worried about is noise pollution. People cant sleep well if there is too much noise. Thats why so many people prefer to live in th
17、e countryside rather than live in the noisy city. I suggest all the factories and cars shouldnt make terrible noises. If they make terrible noise that isnt allowed, they will be fined, and we can also produce the cars that cant make terrible noise.The other pollution is rubbish pollution. If everyon
18、e makes so much rubbish, one day we may live in a world filled with rubbish. Some people throw the waste paper about. I suggest rubbish should be put into different kinds of dustbins or paper bags.教师点评这是一篇比较好的学生作文。得分点(1)对自己最担忧的两种情形分别进行了阐述,层次清晰。(2)针对每种情况,提出了相应的集体的措施。(3)使用了丰富的词汇、短语和句型结构,基本无重大语言错误。失分点此
19、处用词不当,应为dont。此处应为throw about the waste paper。【拓展练笔】1、(四川省凉州市中考题) 假如你叫Li Lei,在去年夏令营认识的朋友Jim 从英国给你寄来一件礼物 一件红色的衬衫,并附有一封信。他在信中向你问好,并想知道你最近的忙些什么。请你写封信表示感谢,80词左右。内容要点:1. 向Jim 问好并对他表示感谢;2. 你非常喜欢这件礼物,颜色、尺寸很合适;3. 告诉Jim 你最近很好,上周刚过完生日,生日聚会很热闹。询问他的近况,并表示希望他能来中国。要求:1.信的格式已经给出,已给出的词不计入总词数;2.信中不得使用真实的人名、地名。65 Zhon
20、ghua StreetChengdu,Sichuan 610061PRChinaJune 15,2004Dear Jim,_Please write back soon.Yours,Li LeiOne possible version:65 Zhonghua StreetChengdu,Sichuan 610061PRChinaJune 15,2004Dear Jim,How are you? Thanks for sending me the shirt. I love it very much. Red is my favorite color! It makes me feel ener
21、getic. And the shirt suits me just fine. Every time I wear it, I will think of you.I am fine recently. Last week I had a birthday party. Many of my friends came and we really had a wonderful time together. How are you doing, Jim? I always miss the days when we were on the summer camp last summer hol
22、iday. I hope you can visit China some day.Please write back soon.Yours,Li Lei2、(2007湖北省怀化市初中毕业学业考试试卷)初中阶段的学习生活即将结束。假设你是张华,身在中考考场,回想自己在父母和师长的关爱和帮助下的成长过程,心中充满感戴之情。请根据表中所列信息,用英语给父母或老师写一封70词左右的短信,表示谢意。注意:1. 感谢对象可在父母或老师中任选其一,但请避用真实姓名和校名。2. 除表格所列关键词语外,还可适当发挥、举例并抒发感受。3信的开头和结尾已经给出。感谢对象FatherMotherMiss Gao参考
23、用语take care of, love, help, encourage, cheer upthankful, work hard, try to do betterDear _,Words fail me when I want to express my thanks to you._Best wishes!YoursZhang HuaPossible versions:Dear Miss Gao,Words fail me when I want to express my thanks to you. Youve taken good care of my studies since
24、 I came to this school. When Im in trouble, you always encourage me and give me good advice. I still remember that once I failed in an English exam and was upset. You cheered me up and told me some good ways to improve my English. With your help, Ive made great progress in English. Im so thankful fo
25、r your love that Ill work harder and try to do better in the future.Best wishes,YoursZhang HuaDear parents,Words fail me when I want to express my thanks to you. Youve taken good care of me since I was born. When Im in trouble, you always encourage me and cheer me up. Once I argued with my best frie
26、nd and was upset. You talked with me the whole night and finally helped me solve the problem. With your help, Ive become a good student. Im so thankful for your love that Ill work harder and try to do better in the future.Best wishes,YoursZhang Hua3、(2007年苏州市初中毕业暨升学考试题)假设某英语杂志“奥运来了”栏目正在举办征文比赛。请你根据下面
27、的“奥运会徽”和内容要点,用英语以“中国印-舞动的北京”为题写一篇短文,参加比赛。内容:1 会徽设计成中国印,名为“中国印-舞动的北京”;2 印中的“京”字代表北京,像个舞者,向世界展开双臂;3 印是红色的,下面写有“北京2008”,红色代表好运;4 “舞动的北京”使你想到.(考生自拟,至少一点)。注意:1 词数90字左右。短文的标题和开头已为你写好,不计入总词数;2 短文须包括所有内容要点,不要逐词翻译,可适当发挥,使短文连贯、通顺;文中不得出现真实的人名、校名等相关信息。Chinese Seal-Dancing BeijingThe Olympic emblem for the 2008 Olympic Games was shown to the public in Beijing, August 3, 2003._One possible version:Chinese Seal-Dancing BeijingThe Olympic emblem for the 2008 Olympic Games
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