中考英语优秀作文评析附范文汇编.docx

1、中考英语优秀作文评析附范文汇编中考英语优秀作文评析优秀作文评析（一）记叙文 1【习作要求】根据中文意思和英文提示词语，写出意思连贯，符合逻辑的英文文段。所给英文提示词语必须都用上；每组英文提示所写的句数不限。 彼得只有五岁，和他的祖母住在一起。一天他的祖母得了重感冒，彼得急得直哭，后来他 (1) Peter, five (2) live, grandma (3) have, cold, worried, cry (4) idea, find, parents telephone number, call (5) news, hurry, home, hospital 【参考范文】 Peter

2、is only five (years old). He lives with his grandma. One day his grandma had a cold. Peter was so worried that he began to cry. Then he had an idea. He found his parents telephone number and gave them a call. When his parents heard the news, they hurried back home and took Peters grandma to the hosp

3、ital. 【名师点评】 根据中英文提示可理清需要进行表达的大致情节是：彼得只有五岁，他和他的祖母住在一起，一天他的祖母得了重感冒，他急得直哭。后来有了一个主意，他找到了他父母的电话号码，他打电话给了他们，当他的父母得知这一消息后迅速地赶回家，把祖母送进医院。须注意前面介绍的是一般情况用一般现在时，后面叙述的是过去发生的事用一般过去时。动词的运用及动词的时态是在进行书面表达时尤其要注意的。优秀作文评析（一）记叙文 2【习作要求】请根据下面所给李玲的个人小档案，以My good friend为题，写一篇英语短文，介绍李玲的基本情况。要求条理清楚，语句通顺，体现表中的全部内容，不得少于12句话。

4、中文名：李玲 英文名：Susan 性别：女 年龄：15 祖籍：青海 学校：第八中学 年级：三 班级：二 特长：数学、英语 爱好：唱歌、看电视、打排球 优点：友好，善良，乐于助人，学习努力 【参考范文】 My Good Friend I have a good friend. Her Chinese name is Li Ling, and Susan is her English name. She is from Qinghai. Li Ling is fifteen years old. She studies in No. 8 Middle School. She is in Class

5、 Two, Grade Three. Li Ling is good at maths and English. She likes singing and playing volleyball very much. And she sings quite well. She likes watching TV, too. Li Ling is very kind and friendly. She studies very hard and always likes helping others. What a good girl she is! I like her! 【名师点评】 这是一

6、篇记叙文，内容要交待清楚、全面，要注意中英文的表达习惯，如汉语中年级在前，班级在后，而英语正相反；首尾句要格外留意，要保持短文的完整性。 (1) 格式：人物介绍 (2) 人称：第三人称 (3) 时态：一般现在时 (4) 短语：have a good friend, English name, to be from, No. 8 Middle School, in Class Two, Grade Three, to be good at, like singing and playing, sing well, like watching TV, study hard, what a good

7、 girl (5) 句型：陈述句与感叹句优秀作文评析（一）记叙文3【习作要求】根据中文意思和英文提示词语，写出意思连贯、符合逻辑的英文文段。所给的英文提示词语必须都用上，句数不限；中文提示内容不必逐句翻译。 一个雨天，李莉乘出租车回家。在车里她发现司机在学英语。他对李莉说了些什么? 此事对你学习英语有何启发? 为支持北京奥运你打算做些什么? (1) one rainy day, go home, by taxi (2) in the car, find, was learning English (3) said to Li Li, I, weak, English, when at scho

8、ol, now work hard, to help with the Beijing 2008 Olympic Games (4) I think. to show support （n.支持）for the Beijing 2008 Olympic Games 【参考范文】 One rainy day, Li Li went home by taxi. In the car she found (that) the driver was learning English. He said to Li Li: I was weak in English when I was at schoo

9、l. Now Im working hard at it to help with the Beijing 2008 Olympic Games. I think I should learn from the driver. English is very important to us because it is widely used all over the world. As a student, Ill do my best to learn English well at school. And Im going to speak English as much as possi

10、ble to show support for the Beijing 2008 Olympic Games. 【名师点评】 第一句很重要，以便确定全文时态。句与句之间要连贯。关键句要用上，如：Im going to speak English as much as possible to show support for the Beijing 2008 Olympic Games. (1) 格式：简介 (2) 人称：第三人称 (3) 时态：一般现在时，一般过去时，一般将来时 (4) 短语、句式、句型：短语与句式已给出，句型包括简单句、直接引语、宾语从句优秀作文评析（二）应用文 1【习作要求

11、】假如你的名字叫王磊，你有一位美国朋友杰克(Jack)今年暑假要到西安来参观，你写信告诉他，你住在西安市南大街65号，从火车站乘10路公共汽车到历史博物馆下车。到时你将在车站等他。此信写于2004年5月1日。 注意： (1) 数不得少于50个。 (2) 求意思完整，语句连贯。 【参考范文】 Xian, China May 1st, 2004 Dear Jack: Im very glad to hear that youll come to visit Xian this summer holiday. Now I would like to tell you how to get to my

12、 house. I live at 65 the South Street, Xian. When you arrive in Xian by train (or by plane), you can catch (take) the No. 10 bus and get off at the History Museum. Ill wait for you there. Yours, Wang Lei 【名师点评】 完成这道书面表达题应从以下几个方面着手考虑： 首先，这道题属于书信文件，所以应注意书信的正确格式。其次从提示的内容来看，主要是说王磊的一位美国朋友杰克于暑假要来西安参观，王磊写信

13、告诉他行走的路线及到时在车站等他等细节，应采用一般现在时和将来时态来叙述。最后，同学们应结合所给的主要内容，用所学过的词（组）及句型来完成此文。 参观 visit 今年暑假 this summer holiday 想要 would like to do到达 get to/arrive at/reach 乘坐公共汽车 catch/take a bus 下车 get off 等等。 优秀作文评析（二）应用文 2【习作要求】假如你叫Han Meimei，你的笔友Mary现在上海三中学习。她邀请你去参加聚会。请你用英语给Mary写一封信。信的要点如下： (1) 你很抱歉，不能去。 (2) 你母亲病了，

14、医生叫她卧床几日。你要照料母亲。 (3) 谢谢寄来的漂亮的明信片(postcard)，很喜欢，将放在书桌上。 注意： (1) 信要通顺、连贯。 (2) 词数60字左右。信的开头和结尾已为你写好，不计入总词数。 (3) 如写不下，可写在横线下空白处。 No.3 Middle School Shanghai April 20, 2004 Dear Mary, Thank you very much for inviting (邀请) me to your party. _ _ _ _Give my best wishes to your family. Yours, Han Meimei 【参考范

15、文】 No.3 Middle School Shanghai April 20, 2004 Dear Mary, Thank you very much for inviting me to your party. I am very sorry, but I cant come. My mother is ill. The doctor has told her that she should stay in bed for several days. Ill take care of my mother. Thank you very much for sending me such a

16、beautiful postcard. I like it very much. I am going to put it on my desk. Could I hear from you soon? Give my best wishes to your family. Yours, Han Meimei 【名师点评】 利用所学英语知识和题目所给材料写一封英文信。通读全文，可较详细地列出要点： (1) 你很抱歉，不能去 (2) 原因是母亲生病了 (3) 医生嘱其卧床几日 (4) 你必须照料母亲 (5) 谢谢寄来的明信片，很喜欢 (6) 明信片放在桌上 要注意的是：内容要点不遗漏；时态、语态

17、正确；句子结构正确；符合英文信的格式；单词拼写正确；语句通顺，上下文连贯；字数在60左右。 通过以上分析，再着手开始写，一定会写出一封符合题意要求的英文信来。 优秀作文评析（二）应用文 3【习作要求】 Miss Jo Hunt和Lily是好朋友。Lily给Jo写信，告诉她自己和双胞胎妹妹在中国学习和生活的情况，并询问对方的汉语学习情况及是否能来中国。 要求：写一篇100词左右的信。 【学生习作】 March 5th，2004Dear Jo: How are you? I havent heard of you for a long time. Id like tell you somethin

18、g about our school life in China. Now we are students of No.4 Middle School. Were in the same grade, Grade Two, but in different class . Im in Class 1, but Lucy is in Class 4. We go to school five days a week. Every morning, we leave home after a quick breakfast. Classes begin at eight oclock in the

19、 morning. We have four classes in the morning and three classes in the afternoon. We have lunch at school because we all like Chinese food very much. Our favorite food is dumplings. School is over at about 3 in the afternoon. After school we have sports on the playground. We have made friends with a

20、 lot of Chinese children. We teach them English and they teach our Chinese. Now we can speak and write a little in Chinese. What about you? By the way, when are you coming to China? Please write to me soon. Love from: Lily from，“收到某人的信”应为hear from。 to tell，正确的说法是“would like sb. to do sth.” classes，既

21、然在不同班级，应该用复数形式。 both，all表示三者以上的人或物，both表示二者。 us，此处应用宾格形式。 【名师点评】 本文从句子结构到语言能力的表达都很不错。思路清晰，行文流畅。正确地运用了动词时态，但是大小写及动词搭配还要多加练习。优秀作文评析（三）看图作文1【习作要求】看图写话 根据所给图示，以“Wang Leis Busy Day”为题，写一篇不少于50字的短文，内容必须符合图意，语意连贯，句式规范，字迹工整。（正文第一句已给出） Wang Leis Busy Day It was March 8th yesterday._ _ _ 【参考范文】 It was March 8

22、th yesterday. It was Womens Day. Wang Lei wanted to do something for his mother. He went shopping and bought much food. Then he cleaned the room. He did his best to do some cooking. When his mother came back after work, she was very happy. Wang Lei was very tired, but he felt pleased. （58个词） 【名师点评】

23、先“看准题意”：题目是Wang Leis Busy Day。写作要围绕王雷一天中所忙碌的事情的顺序展开。描述昨天的事应该用过去时。从题意理解中即可“规范格式”：本文用记叙文格式去写。再“按点组句”： （1）3月8日为妇女节。It was Womens Day. （2）王雷去商店购物。Wang Lei went shopping and bought much food. （3）王雷打扫卫生。He cleaned the room. （4）他烧饭。母亲回家很高兴。He did the cooking. When his mother came back, she was very happy.

24、完成组句后，“连句成段”，可加上句子间的衔接句子。如在（1）与（2）之间可加上Wang Lei wanted to do something for his mother.在最后可再谈王雷一天的感受：He was very tired, but he felt happy.把这些句子连成段后，最后“通篇润色”。 优秀作文评析（三）看图作文2【习作要求】看图组句 根据所给图画和提示词语，写出意思连贯、符合逻辑的四句话。每幅图只写一句话，所给提示词语必须都用上。（注意：只抄提示语不得分） 提示： （1）It was Tree Planting Day yesterday. （2）early, mo

25、rning, I, go, in my old clothes. （3）we, help, each other, dig, hole, large enough, for, trees. （4）plant, some, along, school, playground. （5）from now on, water, tree, often, possible. 优秀作文评析（三）看图作文3【习作要求】看图作文 根据图示，写一篇80词左右的短文。要求故事完整，句子通顺，内容与图片相符。 参考词汇：newspaper (报纸)，bird (鸟)，nature (自然) 【参考范文】 One d

26、ay my uncle was reading a newspaper and learned that birds were our friends. We should get alone well with them. He looked at his nice bird in the cage, and decided to let it fly back homenature. He took the cage with the bird in it and went to a little hill near his house by bike. He went home with

27、 the empty cage. When he got back, he sat in a chair and had a rest. A moment later, to his surprise, he found the bird back in the cage. 【名师点评】 分析：该例四幅图画描述的是一位先生保护动物的故事，内容贴近考生的生活实际，有利于对考生进行保护生态平衡、保护地球环境的教育。内容要点是： （1）看报（Let Birds Fly）；（2）上山去放飞笼中鸟； （3）提着空笼返家； （4）惊奇地发现鸟儿重飞回笼。 通过观图、分析、判断，列出了要点，可写草稿，再进行

28、润色，注意运用简单的、熟悉的句型结构，检查要点有无遗漏，注意拼写、词汇、语法及搭配上是否有误。 说明：看图作文是从直观入手，通过观察、分析、理解，运用联想，将图画语言转换成书面文字的写作过程。答题的思路和方法如下：首先，观察图画，弄清故事梗概。仔细观察每幅图画的内容，抓住图中的主要情节，把握关键的信息与联系，诸如人物、时间、地点、动作等。其次，明确信息，编拟提纲。经过认真的观察和分析，我们掌握了每幅图的主要信息。为了在表达中不漏要点，可为每幅图配上一个提纲性的句子，即用一句话表达这幅画的大意，这几句话实际上就是短文的写作提纲。有了提纲，我们在写作过程中就能做到重点突出，有条理，不会离题。再次，

29、依据图示、提纲，连句扩写成篇。连句成文时，要按照一定的顺序和图画间的关系，中间加上一些符合逻辑关系的过渡词、句，从而使所写短文层次分明，内容连贯，浑然一体。同时注意尽可能运用简单易懂、自己熟悉的有把握的句型结构。最后，结合要求与图示，复查所写短文。写完短文后要检查格式、篇幅是否符合要求，文理是否通顺，要点有无遗漏，词汇、语法、搭配上是否有误，单词拼写有无错误等。 优秀作文评析(四)提示作文1【习作要求】马虎搞到两张全兴队对国安队的足球比赛入场券。他电话通知好友赵华洋，约他放学后在新华公园门口碰头，一起吃晚饭，然后去看球赛。二人在饭店美美吃了一顿，到付账时马虎才发现自己把钱夹忘在了家里，入场券也在他的钱夹中。 【学生习作】 Ma Hu got two ticke