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1、四级作文讲解作文2.2 评分标准本题满分为15分，阅卷标准共分五等：2分，5分，8分，11分及14分。阅卷人员根据阅卷标准，对照样卷评分，若认为与某一分数(8分)相似，即定为该分数(8分)；若认为稍优或稍劣于该分数，则可以加一分(即9分)或减一分(即7分)。但不得加或减半分。具体标准如下：2分条理不清，思路紊乱，语言支离破碎或大部分句子均有错误，且多数为严重错误。5分基本切题，表达思想不够清楚，连贯性差，有较多的严重语言错误。8分基本切题，有些地方表达思想不够清楚，文字勉强连贯，但语言错误较多，其中有少 量的严重错误。11分切题，表达思想清楚，文字连贯，但有少量语言错误。14分切题，表达思想清

2、楚，文字通顺，连贯性较好，基本上无语言错误。注：白卷，作文与题目毫不相关，或只有几个孤立的词而无法表达思想，则给0分；特别优秀的作文也可评15分。作文字数不足应酌情扣分：累计字数在：90-99之间，扣1分；累计字数在：80-89之间，扣2分；累计字数在：70-79之间，扣3分；累计字数在：60-69之间，扣4分；累计字数在：50-59之间，扣5分；累计字数在：50以下，最多给5分；从以上评分标准来看，要在四级考试作文题中得高分，必须做到：内容切题，语言准确，表达清楚，文字连贯，句法多变。14：漂漂亮亮；11： 清清爽爽；8：马马虎虎；5：糊里糊涂；2：一蹋糊涂样卷判分实例(2000.1)Par

3、t Writing(30 minutes)Directions: For this part, you are allowed thirty minutes to write a composition on the topic How I Finance My College Education. You should write at least 120 words, and base your composition on the outline (given in Chinese) below:1. 上大学的费用(tuition and fees)可以通过多种途径解决。2. 哪种途径适

4、合于我(说明理由)。How I Finance My College Education14 points Nowadays, tuition and fees for college are much higher than ever before. How to finance your college education has become a matter of concern for many. You can deal with it in many ways. You can get all of the money from your parents. You can app

5、ly for a loan especially set up for college students. You can also acquire the money completely by yourself, doing a full-time job in summer or winter holiday. In addition, you can ask your parents for most of it and earn the rest in your spare time in college, by doing a part-time job. In my opinio

6、n, I prefer the last way. Having acquired most of the tuition and fees from my parents, I neednt worry too much about the money and can concentrate on my study; on the other hand, a part-time job in my spare time makes my campus-life colourful. I can make a lot of friends, improve my abilities and l

7、earn lots of knowledge. Therefore, I choose this way to cover my tuition and fees.点评：这篇文章在第一段中列举了多种缴纳学费的方法，都很有代表性; 在第二段中, 作者清晰地阐述了作者为什么选择第二种途径的理由。在写作过程中，作者使用了一连串排比句，使文章开篇就流畅且又有很强的连贯性。此外，全文的句式富于变换，从句和非谓语动词的使用都很娴熟。全文结构严谨，词语的搭配也很成功，基本无语言错误，是一篇较成功的习作。11 points Nowadays, if we want to go to college, well

8、 have to pay a big sum of money. Its a problem to many students. Many ways can contribute to solve this serious problem. But the following ones may be the most effective. First, you can ask your parents for help if they have nice careers. Another way to solve this problem is to apply for a bank loan

9、. Finally, we can find a part-time job to get enough money. As to me, Im in favor of the second idea. My reasons of choice can be listed as follows: First of all, my parents are not rich enough to afford me. Secondly, youll not have enough time and energy to study after finishing the part-time job.

10、Finally, Im sure that Ill get a nice job after graduation, then Ill be able to pay back the loan. Through above analysis, I believe that bank loan is my best choice.点评：本文列举了三种筹集学费的办法，并较详细给出了自己选择第二种方法的理由，条理很清楚，也较连贯，但有少量语法错误，如contribute to solve . 应改为： contribute to solving .; my reasons of choice应改为m

11、y reasons for this choice或者the reasons why I choose this; 此外，有些词语用法错误，如：afford不能用来修饰somebody, 而应该修饰something。而且，有些连接词用法也欠妥，例如，第一段中的连接词but就显得突兀。文章的句式过于单一，显得拘谨。8 pointsAfter I came into the college, there is a question how (a question about how)I finance my college education. There are many way (ways)

12、 to solve (finance) the tuition and fees of college education. The most usual way is use the familys money. Most of the students get money from their parents. If someones family situation is not well (ones economic situation is not so good), he can apply for loan to bank (bank loans). The government

13、 will help the students like this (such students). Other (Another) way is find a job through schools help(with the schools assistance). Of course we still put study in the first place. In my opinior (opinion), I choose the wavy is to combine (I choose to combine) getting money from parents and (with

14、) working (working part time). On one hand, most of the education fees can be got (obtained) from my parents. On another (the other) hand, I spend my spare time doing some jobs as private teaching (such jobs as being a tutor). Through doing part-time job I can not only earn money but also obtain (ac

15、quire/accumulate) some social experience. Social experience is also very important to me (which is very important to my growth). This is the way how (这里应该删除how)I finance my college education.点评：本文基本尚能切题，但是存在较多语法错误，而且很多表达是按照中文的句式进行的(如文中的下划线部分为较典型的错误，已在文中的括号里得到了更正)，虽然基本能够读懂，但是很费力，而且很多论述并未展开。5 pointsWe

16、 are in the college. The tuition and fees is very expensive. We can get it inmany ways. Example, (For example,) we can through our parents get it, also we canearn money out of class get it, and even we can through the school get it and so on. (We can get it from our parents or try to earn some by do

17、ing a part-time job, and you can even manage to get scholarship.) If you study hard and get a high score, the school will be pride of (award) you with money. You can also borrow it from school(ask for a loan from the school). But I would be better to earn money out of class (I would rather earn mone

18、y bymyself). Because (because) it can adapt (offer) me a chance which is doing somethingby myself (to do something on my own). It let (It lets) me know that the money isnot easy earn (it is not so easy to earn money). I should make good use of money.I must also study harder than other (than other st

19、udents), because I lost my timeof studying (for I have lost some study time). So it let (makes) me able to make gooduse of time. This is just how I finance my college education.点评：文章基本尚能切题，但是有太多的语法错误，使得句子不通顺，读起来很费劲。且很多都是严重的语法错误，如：文中的划线部分均为较为典型的错误，且对主题的阐述也不够深刻，全面。在连贯性方面，作者很多时候也未能做有意识的处理。如最后三句话，作者的思维就

20、有很大的跳跃性，其中“so it let me make good use of time”里的 “it” 所指就是模糊。2 pointsHow I finance my college education Following way is my think to the question.There have many of different roads to finance ones college tuition and fees. The different people has different idea, example is you can do some work for

21、your tuitionand fees, or do your best in studying, then you will get money. But, in mains is yourmother and fathers money. Though, I doesnt leave off my mother. I has done some work out of school, something is myself to find, I t can get only little money, but Im very happy in my hart. It cant finan

22、ce my University tuition. It can reduce my mothers money.It is mine that How I finance my college education.点评：文章条理不清，思路紊乱，全文几乎没有一句话符合语言习惯，句子支离破碎，而且还有严重的语法错误。一、论说文的基本框架一般而言，完整的论说文有论点、论据和论证三大要素，因此论说文写作通常按提出问题、分析问题、解决问题三个步骤进行，常被称为“三段式”作文。分析归纳四级考试写作，可将其分为四大类型。1. 对立观点型 这类作文多为提纲式作文，是四级考试写作中最常见的作文形式。如：【案例

23、一】Can Money Buy Happiness (1995.1)1.有人认为金钱是幸福之本(source of happiness)2.也有人认为金钱是万恶之源(root of evil)3.我的看法【案例二】Do Lucky Numbers Really Bring Luck (1998.6)1.有些人认为某些数字会带来运气2.也有些人认为数字与运气无关3.试说明你的看法对立观点型论说文常用句型 点明文章主题的常用句式 1. has become a hot topic among people recently. Opinions vary from person to person.

24、已经成为人们谈论的热门话题，不同的人对此有不同的看法。2. There is an argument / much disagreement / no consensus of opinions among people concerning / over / as to / on关于，人们的看法不尽相同。3. Nowadays, people are divided on the question as to whether如今关于的问题，人们的观点很不相同。4. Different people have different views/ perspectives on不同的人对有不同的见

25、解。5. When being asked about different people will offer different answers.当被问及 时，不同的人会给出不同的答案。6. There is a public debate / discussion / controversy today about the problem of如今关于 的问题，公众已经展开了辩论 / 讨论。7. The issue of whether or nothas been widely argued/ debated currently.关于是否的问题，如今公众已经展开了广泛的讨论。 具体介绍两

26、种对立观点的常用句式1. Some people suggest / maintain / hold the opinion that. But / However / While / Nevertheless / Yet / other people hold a different point of view有些人认为 ，但是另外一些人却持有不同的观点。2. Some people are inclined to think thatOn the contrary / In contrast, there are still many people who wont agree, and

27、they claim一些人往往认为，但是仍然有些人对此表示异议，他们认为3. When it comes to Some people think / believe that . While others argue / claim that the opposite / reverse is true.当谈及的时候，有些人认为 ，但是其他人却站在相反意见的一边。4. Those who criticize / oppose to / object to argue that But people who advocate / favor, on the other hand, mainta

28、in / assert that那些批评/反对 的人认为 ， 但是赞成 的人认为5. Now it is commonly/ generally/ widely/ universally thought/ accepted/ believed/ held that But I wonder / doubt whether现在大家普遍认为 ，我却对此持怀疑态度。6. To the general public / popular mind, But despite /in spite of / I still believe尽管大部分人（都认为）, 我仍然认为 7. Nowadays, an o

29、verwhelming majority of people think that Nevertheless, there are still some people of the opinion that 虽然如今绝大多数人认为， 但是还是有些人认为。 陈述自己观点的常用句式1. For my part / As to me / As far as I am concerned, Id like to agree to the former / my favor goes to the first view.就我而言, 我赞同前一种观点。 2. I agree to the latter o

30、pinion to some extent. 我比较同意后一种观点3. Im in favor of / Im on the side of 我赞成 4. In my opinion, both sides are partly right. When we we should take into consideration all aspects of the problems and then make the right decision.我认为双方都有一定的道理；当我们, 我们应该全面地考虑该问题，然后作出正确的决定。5. There is probably some truth in

31、 both arguments / statements, but两种观点都有一些道理，但是Directions: For this part, you are allowed thirty minutes to write a composition on the topic Is the College English Test Band 4 / 6 Necessary? You should write at least 120 words, and base your composition on the outline (given in Chinese) below:1. 有人认为大学英语四、六级考试有必要。2. 也有人对此持不同看法3. 我认为 Recently there has been a heated debate on _ 点明主题_.Some students and teachers claim that _ 赞成的观点_