上海高三英语一模作文范文汇编.docx

1、 2018年高三一模作文汇编 1.黄浦区 2017年已接近尾声，还记得年初你为自己定下的小目标吗？不知你是否实现了你的小目标？发一个微信朋友圈来回顾一下吧（文中请不要出现真实的校名人名）。你的朋友圈文字内容需包括：1. 你的2017年度小目标；2. 你为实现年度小目标所作的努力；3. 你实现（或没有实现）年度小目标的经验总结。范文：My new years resolution for 2017 was that I should be able to communicate with foreign people in English. To achieve this goal, I had

2、 asked my English teacher for help. According to her suggestions, I made up a plan. Firstly, I started with simply reading English articles and found many pronunciation errors in my reading after listening to the video tape of its recording. Then, I tried to learn phonetics and practice one syllable

3、 after another again and again. I started with a single word, then a phrase, a sentence, a paragraph and finally the whole passage. After 3-month practice, I was able to read an article fluently without making any mistakes in pronunciation. I felt happy. Next, I practiced my listening. By listening

4、to a passage four times, I required myself to take it down without spelling errors or any information blank. Last but not least, I installed an app called Shanbei Oral English on my phone to practice both my listening and speaking. Its like having conversations with a robot. I had to understand what

5、 it said to me and answer its questions accordingly. After practicing for almost 8 months, I had my first talking session with an American teacher in our school. I was proud of myself.What I have learnt from this experience is something as a saying goes: no pain no gain. Though the process of learni

6、ng could be dull and tiring, its worth all the efforts after I achieved my goal. Even if I didnt, its still a valuable part of my life.阅卷作文8+8+4=20The wonderful year of 2017 is drawing to an end. I remember that I set an annual goal to keep fit at the beginning of 2017, since staying healthy is cruc

7、ial to ensuring my study, thus better prepare myself for Gaokao.To achieve my goal of keeping fit, here are some efforts Ive taken throughout the year. On the very first day of 2017, I downloaded a fitness app called Keep. Following the fitness instructions the app offered, I exercised every other n

8、ight before I go to bed. Also, I did some research into the daily nutrition I need in order to stay healthy both physically and mentally, after which I devised a moderate dieting plan. Apart from the above, Ive invited family members and friends to join me so that we can encourage each other and exc

9、hange fitness experience.So far, the record shown on my fitness app shows that Ive done well this year, reaching a record high of 200 training times in total. Although at times I felt like giving up because of too much study pressure and limited time, Im glad I have stuck to my plan. It seems to me

10、that anything is possible if I throw in all of my energy and passion, and most of all, perseverance. Some rules apply to study. So I hope I will keep such passion and strength to do my best in the coming 2018. （237 words）点评：1 文本结构段落清晰，符合作文题目要求。1） 第一段明确告知自己的年度小目标是什么；2） 第二段有总起句，段落中有清晰的标记词 (如also, apar

11、t from) 告知读者自己所做的努力，且努力的行为都非常具体。3） 第三段对经验的总结可以再和第二段的三个努力匹配些，a. 借助科技的力量(app)；b. 借助科学的力量（did research into the daily nutrition）; c. 组团抗击惰性。2在语言表达能力比较强的基础上，可以考虑文字的进一步精炼。是否有“废话”？字数建议不超过200（此学生语言能力强，中等学生160左右即可）。精练而准确的表达也是思维和表达功力的体现。7+8+4=19Greeting from the end of 2017! Its now the time to conclude our

12、yearly goals again. On the new years eve, I set up two goals for the year: to getter better grades and to lose weight and Im proud to announce that Ive accomplished the first one.To realize the goals, much effort has been put in throughout the year. First of all, I changed my attitudes towards vario

13、us subjects. Ive spent more time on them, as you might already know, and try to find my own strength and weaknesses and strived hard to overcome my weak points. In addition, Ive found my own pace of studying, which I regard as the most precious reward of this years effort. Secondly, I began to take

14、a more active part in sports this year. I took every opportunity I have to exercise, and take sports lessons at a gym near my apartment. Though I havent lose much weight, I feel myself much healthier than ever before.To conclude how Ive made these progress, here comes my years motto: no pains, no ga

15、ins. No matter how hard it might be, stick to the goal and never quit, and never dream of shortcuts to success. So if you want to achieve something, just try hard, no matter what the result might be, youre surely going to benefit from the process. Good luck everyone, and I wish you a happy, successf

16、ul new year in 2018! (241 words)点评：1， 有读者意识，明确知晓是在朋友圈发的年度总结，所以开头结尾很应景。2， 段落结构总体比较清晰，符合作文题目要求。1） 第一段告知了自己的两个年度目标。2） 第二段中有总体句、标记词（如：first of all, in addition），方便读者阅读。但总体表达都比较含糊，建议可以更加清晰化具体化（改变的行为不具体是因为目标不具体导致的）；特别是第二点，如果学生把目标定位，今年我要参加多少节健身课，或者我要完成多少公里的跑步，那么行为可以更具体，对是否可以达到自己年度目标的检测也可以更明确。3） 第三段的经验总结与之前努力的匹配度不高。如果要写no pains, no gains，那么第二段里应该有具体的自己在遭遇瓶颈或者难以坚持的时候是如何咬牙坚持下来的。4） Good luck建议可以另起