部分区县二模作文范文Word格式.docx

1、from the sensitive eyes of the little girl and through those simple but interesting words. I feel very sad when I readchildren from humble families出身卑微的孩子have no dream and no peaceful families.This book shows me a quite different childhood and makes me value everything around me. I just love it and

2、recommend it to you! （105）内容分析：喜欢的一本书，按照引出书名介绍书本大致内容谈对我的影响。本文首句引出书名-芒果街上的小屋，Body部分给出书的内容和吸引我的理由独特的写作视角和新奇的语言；结尾总结书对我的影响：拓宽了眼界，让我懂得珍惜拥有的，并不忘扣题推荐。Nowadays，its not uncommon to see a top student with excellent school performancenever lays a finger on（从不沾手家务） any housework.I, actually, feel sorry for tho

3、se students，for（并列连词表示原因）they never know how much their parents have done for them and therefore hardly develop any family responsibility.Besides,its impossible for those children tostand on their own feet（自食其力）in future if they dont practice to be independent now. In my life, I have often helped my

4、 parents with housework like dish washing, mopping, room cleaning etc.Instead oftaking me much time; those things teach me to be a responsible and independent girl. 本篇为典型议论文，但题目要求给出自己经历，因此议论部分不宜过长。开篇第一句给出现象；二三句给出自己的两点看法：不做家务的小孩无法锻炼责任感和独立能力；第四句给出自己亲身经历，第五句结尾。环环相扣，结构紧凑。2013年中考徐汇区二模英语作文范文范文：This is the

5、 first day in my new school inNew Yorkwhen I heard from Mr. Jones with a set of school rules.Generally speaking, there are a few differences between the Chinese school rules and the American ones. I am ruled to call my teacher with Mr. or Ms in my new school,while（对比）my old school does not make it a

6、s a rule, though we are used to calling our teacher like that.The main difference between the Chinese school rules and the American ones lies in the details of every action.I will“do as the Romans do”during my stay in the new school. 从题目来看，本文要求非常明确，要求比较中美校规的不同之处，题目只列了美国学校的校规，并没有同时列出中国的校规，中国的校规是要学生自己

7、进行比较的，作文中学生容易忽略中美双方校规不同的比较。精彩亮点分析：亮点一，用词组“generally speaking”一句先引出总体上中美校规之间的大致差异或相同点。亮点二，“while”表示对比，在这一类需要对两者进行比较的作文中，这一句型非常好用。亮点三，用词组“the main difference between”也是一句可以用作对比类型作文的句型，开门见山列出对比。亮点四，“do as the Romans do”表示入乡随俗。这样的idiom（习语）使用在作文中，也可以起到画龙点睛之笔。写作小Tip：本次二模作文出题要求比较明确，直接点出要求比较中美两国校规的差异。由于题干中只

8、罗列了美国学校的校规，所以学生需要根据自己的经历来进行中美两国校规差异的比较，即在描述美国校规的时候也要描述中国的校规，缺一不可。2013年普陀二模原题Suppose your school newspaper is holding a discussion about the topic “What makes a great class leader”, please write an article about your opinion on the topic and give reasons. （假如你们的校报在组织一场关于“怎样才是好的班干部”的讨论，请写出你的想法和理由。）（注意

9、：短文中不得出现任何人名、校名及其他相关信息，否则不予评分。Recently, there has been a hot issue about what qualities a great class leader should have and how to be a better one. From my viewpoint, not only should he be outstanding（倒装） in some aspect, like learning, buthe ought to be a patient listener. Aware of what happens in

10、the class, he will be able to deal with all the matters and help others, thus making everybody get along well with each other. Besides, creativity is a must. Chances are that（很可能的是）one with creative mind is willing to face challenge and fills the class with energy. Anyway, never a rose without the p

11、rick刺, so just try our best. （字数110）文章首句就点题。第二、四句给出自己的观点：一不但要在某方面很突出，更要是个耐心的倾听者；二必须有创新能力。然后再第三句和第五句分别给出了自己的理由。尾句用谚语“金无足赤人无完人”结尾，意指只需尽力做好即可。2013年中考黄浦区二模英语作文范文Last month thousands of dead pigs appeared on the Huang Pu River. People were very upset about the event. What do you think?上个月黄浦江水域出现大量死猪。人们对此

12、事很焦虑。请你就这个事件谈谈你的看法。1That the increasing number of dead pigs has been collected fromShanghaisHuangpuRiversurprised me recently.2With the waterways are severely polluted, measures should be immediately taken to improve the situation,3for water is the source of life.4On the one hand, the government hav

13、e to get5those people relatedpunished and issue a set of law to regulate the waste into waters.On the other hand, we shall6make every effort toprotect our environment. In fact, even the simplest everyday activities canmake a real difference tothe environment. （字数92）从题目来看，本文围绕实事展开，要求谈一谈自己的看法。可以判断，这是一

14、篇和环境话题有关的作文，既要结合实事提供一些建议，同时又要表达自己的看法。要点缺一不可，一定审题要清晰。亮点一,开头句使用主语从句，在从句中把事件描述清楚。亮点二，用with结构表达伴随的状态，说明此事仍在处理和反思之中。亮点三，使用原因状语从句“for water is the source of life”来表达自己的观点，其实也是亮出作者撰写此文的观点。亮点四，用“on the one hand”和“on the other hand”将本文分出明确的层次，即从两个方面来提出具体的建议。亮点五，用动词的过去分词作后置定语。亮点六，“make every effort to”表示不遗余力，是一个“亮点词”。亮点七，最后进行总结并收尾,同时也显现出一种号召力。The newswhichsaid t