1、 好的作文应达到以下几点(多数省市要求写一篇短文,计分25分): 1要点全面、表达准确、语句连贯,符合交际要求。 2能用书写体熟练清楚地书写,格式、连笔、词距、标点正确。 3书写格式、行文及礼貌用语等无严重错误。 4基本语法和常用句型无严重错误,意思表达清楚。 5恰当使用复杂结构、新颖词汇和顺畅连接。 二、 试评学生真实高考作文得分 以下是两篇从高考学生考卷中选取的作文。请你根据参考答案和评分标准,自己给它们评个分数,这对你了解高考作文的具体要求非常有好处。 试题: (2007年北京试卷)假设你是李华,要给英国笔友Harry写封信,介绍你班两位同学竞选班长的过程。请按下图顺序描述。(20分)
2、注意:1.信的开头已为你写好。2.词数不少于60。 提示词:竞选班长monitor election (二)评分标准: 第一档:(18分20分)。完全完成了试题规定的任务:覆盖了所有内容要点;运用了多样的句式和丰富的词汇;语法或用词方面有个别错误;有效地使用了语句间的连接成分。 第二档:(15分17分)。完全完成了试题规定的任务:运用的句式和词汇能满足要求;语法和用词基本准确;使用了简单的语句间连接成分,所写内容连贯。 第三档:(12分14分)。基本完成了试题规定的任务:覆盖了内容要点;运用的句式和词汇基本满足任务要求;语法和用词方面有一些错误,但不影响理解。 第四档:(6分11分)。未恰当完
3、成试题规定的任务:漏掉或未描述清楚主要内容;所用句式和词汇有限;语法或用词方面的错误影响了对所写内容的理解。未能清楚地传达信息。 第五档:(1分5分)。未完成试题规定的任务:明显遗漏主要内容;句式单调、词汇贫乏;语法错误较多 。 第六档:0分。未能传达任何信息;所写内容与要求无关。 (三)参考答案: One possible version: How are things going? Last Monday, our class held a monitor election. This was our first election, so everyone was excited. Two
4、 of my classmates took part in the race; Liu Dong and Wang Hong. They each gave a speech telling us what they would do when they were elected. Then we voted for the monitor. The result was 28 to 15 in Wang Hongs favor. Wang Hong became our new monitor. The whole class cheered for her, and she promis
5、ed to do the best she could for us all. Best wishes, Li Hua (四)学生的作文: (1)_分 Last Monday, an exciting monitor election was held in my class. The two candidates are Liu Dong and Wang Hong. In the beginning of the election, each of them gave a speech to us and talked about the future plan. Then the mos
6、t exciting moment came. Every student stood up and walked to the election box to cast a vote to his/her ideal monitor. I thought Wang Hong was well qualified for this position. So I wrote down her name and put my note into the box. Several minutes later, the final result came. Compared to Liu Dongs
7、15 votes, Wang Hong got 28 votes and became or monitor. We all congratulated to Wang Hong and believed that she would serve our class heart and soul in the future. What about the monitor election in your class? I hope that I will receive your reply soon. ( 2 )_分 Last Monday, we had a monitor electio
8、n. At the beginning the two candidates, LiuDong and Wang Hong gave us a speech introducing themselves and telling us their plans in the future. Then we had a vote. We wrote down the name of the better one in our mind and put the paper in a box. Then the exciting time came that our teacher counted th
9、e number and wrote it on the blackboard. The result was that 28 students who voted Wang Hong, 13 more than the number of students who voted LiuDong, which meaned WangHong was elected as our monitor. Wang is really pretty good. I believe she will be a good monitor. (五)得分与启示 第一篇得分:19分;第二篇得分:13分。 启示: 1
10、第一篇得了高分是因为该文内容要点全,符合交际要求、语言地道,有复杂句式,顺畅连接和准确用语。 2第二篇得了三档的分数是因为该文虽然内容要点齐全,但语言功底不够,句式平庸,只会一般词汇,且有一定语言错误。 3考生要想得一个高分就一定要注意内容要全,连接要顺畅,句式要有变化,符合交际要求。 三、书面表达应试要领 1第一步是仔细审题。重点注意内容要点,写作对象和交际目的。 2要写草稿,实在没时间也要写一个提纲。 3确定好时态。转述别人观点常用现在时。记叙经常发生的事用一般现在时,描写过去发生的事用过去时。 4不出现中文,不用汉语拼音。不生造中国式的英语。要用你听过的话来说,用你读过的句子来写。 5第
11、一句很重要,不要轻易下笔。尾句部分容易出错,要留意。 6为防止遗漏内容要点,可在原题上标出记号。 7几个必要的连词一定要用,或顺接、或转折、或让步、或比较。 8写记叙文,注意六个要素:who, where, when, why, how and the result. 9议论文,注意论点与论据一致。还要注意是让你写一方观点还是介绍对立的两种观点。 10应用文主要是写信或通知,告知活动安排。一般按时间顺序写比较稳妥。 11试卷注意部分给出的参考词汇应尽量用上,不要自作主张忽略不用。 12词汇的闪光之处即不要重复你在本文中用过的和大家都可能用的。全是简单句得不了好分。要用新颖的词汇传达最通俗的信息
12、。 13采用多变的句式,如被动句式、定语从句,with加复合宾语以及倒装句等。 14有时候阅读题中的句型可以稍加改造,抄来用在自己的作文中。 15字数一般应稍多于试题的最低要求,但不宜过长,因为言多有失。 16写完后要检查复核,重点看动词的使用。最好是写完作文后先查查别的题型,因为自己刚写完的东西马上检查常常看不出问题。 四、书面表达提高措施 (一)几个小建议 1经常写随笔,每日三五句。出点错误也没什么。 2背诵小短文或漂亮句子,多多益善。 3最好的练习材料就是近几年各地的高考试题。练习时,先看题,自己写,写完后看答案,根据答案,修正自己的作文。但注意不要过多修正,要保持自己作文的原貌,每次只
13、改动34个地方即可。 4初学写作多写记叙文。 5抄写短文,会使自己摆脱中文式的英文,可练习抄写新概念第二册。 6多听、多说、多读对写作的提高至关重要。 (二)背会20个连接词语 1. to tell the truth;2. last but not least;3. on the contrary;4. that is;5. believe it or not; 6. so far as I know;7. in the middle of; 8. next to;9. in addition; 10. in general;11. in short;12. so long as;13. to begin with;14. in case;15. whats more; 16. as a matter of fact;17. on the other hand;18. as a result; 19. generally speaking; 20. in my opinion (三)熟练运用30个基础句型 最基本句型5个: 1. 主语+谓语 The story happened yesterday. 2. 主语+谓语+宾语 They study English. 3. 主语+系动词+表语 They
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