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范文赏析

　　范文赏析

（一）

　　1.MyViewonFakeCommodities （1998.1）

　　1.假冒伪劣商品的危害。

　　2.怎样杜绝假冒伪劣商品。

　　MyViewonFakeCommodities

　　Nowadaysfakecommoditieshavefloodedalmosteveryinchofthemarket.Whereveryouare,whateveryoudo,itseemsthatyoucanhardlyhavefallenpreytothem.Inotherwords,itishighlyprobablethatyouhaveboughtsomeofthosefakegoodsorproductsofinferiorquality。

　　Needlesstosay,fakecommoditieshavealreadydonegreatharmtooursociety.Ontheonehand,theywillruinthegoodreputationofgenuineproductsanddisturbthebalanceofthemarket.Ontheotherhand,theprevalenceofsuchproductshashinderedinterpersonalrelationshipandresultedinthedeclineofpublicmorality.Asaconsequence,theyhavewastedexhaustibleresources,endangeredpeople’spreciouslifeandhealth,andinthelongrunerodedpublictrust。

　　Then,whatshouldbedonetodoawaywithfakecommodities?

Tostartwith,thegovernmentneedstotightenitsinspectionprogramandstrengthenitsenforcementpolicies.Secondly,honestbusinessmenshouldmodifysomelong-acceptedpracticesattheprotectionoftheirintellectualpropertyright.Mostimportantofall,weconsumerswillhavetodoabetterjoboflearninghowtodistinguishbetweenthegenuineandthephoneyanddefinitelysaynotothefakeones.Inoneword,thecoordinatedeffortofthewholesocietywillputanendtofakecommodities。

　　2.ChangesintheOwnershipofHouses （2003.6）

　　要求：

1、根据上图描述该市住房产权的变化；

　　2、分析产生这些变化的原因；

　　3、说明这些变化对个人和社会产生的影响。

　　ChangesintheOwnershipofHouses

　　Asisshowninthechart,greatchangeshavetakenplaceintheownershipofhousesinthecity.Therehasbeenasteadydeclineinthepercentageofstate-ownedhousesfrom75in1990to20in2000.Onthecontrary,thepercentageofprivatehouseshasbeenontherise。

　　Severalfactorsmayaccountforthetrend.Foronething,owingtothepolicyofreformandopeningtotheoutsideworld,thepastdecadewitnessedsignificantimprovementinpeople’sstandardofliving.Inotherwords,theyhavehadthemeanstopurchasehousesoftheirown.Foranother,people’sideasaboutconsumptionhaveundergonesomeradicalchanges.Inthepast,theywerereluctanttospend,butnowtheyarewillingtobuy.Anyway,itismuchmorecomfortabletodwellinahouseofone’sown。

　　Thesechangesintheownershiphavealreadyhadapositiveeffectonbothindividualsandsociety.Individuals,youngpeopleinparticular,willbemotivatedtoworkhardertopurchaseanestoftheirown.Asaresult,thehousingindustrywillbeboostedandmorerevenueswillberaisedtocoverothersectorsofournationaleconomy。

　　范文欣赏

（二）

　　议论型作文

　　1.ShouldCollegeStudentsLiveonCampus

　　a.有些人喜欢住在学校的宿舍，因为……

　　b.有些人喜欢住在校外，因为……

　　c.我的看法

　　Thereareanincreasingnumberofstudentswhochoosetoliveoffcampus.Parentsanduniversityadministrationsunderstandablyreacteddifferently.Theyvoicedconcernsaboutsecurityandthethreatofoff-campuslifestylesgettingoutofcontrol.However,collegestudentshavetheirownreasonsfortheirchoices。

　　Somestudentsprefertoliveoncampusforthefollowingreasons.First,campusresidentsareclosertoclasses,thelibrary,andotherresources,sotheyaremorelikelytosucceedincollegeandcompletetheirbachelor’sdegreeinfouryears.Furthermore,Livinginadormisagreatopportunitytomeetallkindsofnewpeopleanddeveloprelationshipswiththem,sostudentslivingoncampusaremoresociable.Lastbutnottheleast,livingoncampusischeaperandmoreconvenient.Oftentimes,off-campushousingismoreexpensivethanon-campushousingandwhilelivingoncampus,youdon’thavetoworryaboutmonthlyrentpaymentsandutilitybills。

　　Someotherschoosetoliveoffcampusbecausetheybelievelivingoffcampustheyaremoreindependent,withmoreprivacyandalotmorequiettime.Livingoffcampusgivesthemfreedomfromthosedormrulesandallowthemtosettheirown.Theextraspacealsomeansthatonecanprobablyfindaquietplacetostudyintheconvenienceofhisownhome。

　　Asforme,I’mafaithfulsupporteroftheformergroupbecauseI,livingoncampusmyself,havewitnessedandenjoyedalltheconvenienceandhappinessofdoingso.Tome,livingoncampusundoubtedlyaddsanimportantelementtothecompletecollegeexperience。

　　2.PursuitofAMaster’sDegree

　　A.根据下图描述某校毕业生毕业意向的变化            b.分析选择读研的毕业生数目增加的原因

　　C.说明选择读研对个人和社会产生的影响

　　1994

　　2004

　　Itisillustratedinthepiechartsthatgraduates’choicesaftergraduationhaveexperiencedmuchchange.Thenumberofstudentschoosingtopursueamaster’sdegreeandstudyabroadgrowsseveraltimesoverthedecade。

　　Thereasonsoftheincreasingnumberofstudentspursuingamaster’sdegreeareasfollows.First,withthenumberofcollegegraduatesgrowingeachyear,thesituationinthejobmarketisgettingtighterandtighter.Thepublicawarenessofthesituationhascreatedasurgeofinterestinseekingamaster’sdegree.Secondly,manycross-nationalcompaniessetamuchhigherstandardfornewrecruitsthanever.Itseemsthatthehighereducationyouhave,thehighersalaryyoumayreceive。

　　Choosingtostudyformaster’sdegreewillbenefittheindividualsandthewholesocietyaswell.ThequalityofChineseintellectualswillbeconsiderablyenhanced,whichinturnwillboosttheprogressofthewholesociety。

　　3Directions:

SupposeyouareWeiQiangandyouwillgraduatefromuniversity.WritealetterofinquirytotheDepartmentofPhysics,UniversityofWisconsin,askingforadmissionasagraduatestudent。

　　July,2007

　　DearSirs,

　　Iamveryinterestedinundertakinggraduateworkinyouruniversity.IhavereadresearchpapersbytwoofyourprofessorsDr.ThomasBayandMr.SherryHaily.I’dliketostudyundertheirguidance。

　　InSeptemberof2003IwasenrolledintheComputerSchooloftheXYZUniversityasacomputermajor.Throughoutthefouryearsofstudy,Itakethisfieldasoneofgreatpotentialsformycountry.Ifeeltheneedtostudyfurtherinordertodevelopwellinthisarea。

　　Iwouldappreciatereceivingyourmaterialssuchasdepartmentalbrochureorpamphlet,andauniversitycatalogorbulletin。

　　Thankyouforyourconsideration.Iamlookingforwardtoyourreply。

　　Respectfullyyours,

　　WeiQiang

　　4.Directions:

Forthispart,youareallowed30minutestowriteanessayentitledSay“ThankYou”toParents.Youshouldwriteatleast150wordsfollowingtheoutlinegivenbelowinChinese:

　　1.很多的大学生从未跟父母道过谢 2.请说明原因 3.你的建议

　　Accordingtoarecentsurveyinvolvingover3000undergraduates,35%ofuniversitystudentshaveneversaid“Thankyou”totheirparents.Theirparentshavedonealltheycouldtobringthemupinthepastscoreofyears,buthaveneverbeenrewardedwithgratitude。

　　Thesubjectsclaimsuchreasonsasfollows.Firstandforemost,aquarteroftheinterviewedstudentsregarditasparents’dutytosupportthemspirituallyandfinancially.Anditisnotnecessarytoexpressappreciationtotheirparents.However,themajorityofyoungstersareawareoftheirparents’tenderlovebutarenotaccustomedtosaying“Thankyou”.Someevenfindagenerationgapbetweenthemselvesandtheirparents,thusfeelingreluctanttoexpresstheiraffectionfortheirparents。

　　Inmyopinion,extendingthankfulnesstoourparentsisawayofrespectingthemandtheirlove.Weshouldexpressourfeelingsdirectlyandbravely,butwhat’smoreimportantis,weshoulddoallthatwecantorewardthem。

（一）FirePreventiononCampus

　　1.        前段时间校园火灾频发，造成生命和财产损失

　　2.        分析火灾发生的原因

　　3.        作为学生，如何预防校园火灾发生

　　●审题概述●

　　这是一分析火灾原因和如何预防火灾为中心的文章，撰写时重点即在于此。

开篇综述校园火灾频发情形及造成的生命和财产损失，然后说明火灾原因，最后提出可能的火灾预防措施。

第一段，主要概述；第二段，说明原因；第三段，详细论述措施。

　　【范文】

　　l      FirePreventiononCampus

　　Peoplearealarmedbythesuccessionofcampusfiresinrecentyears.Ineachoftheseaccidents,heavycasualtieswerereported–houseswereburneddown,studentslosttheirlives,andpropertiesweredamaged.Facedwithsuchachillingfact,peoplekeepasking,“Whatonearthresultsintheserepeatedtragedies?

”

　　Abriefsurveyofthemrevealsthathumanfactorsstillprovetobetheleadingcauses.Forexample,threeofthesefireswerecausedbythestudents’useofelectricwater-heaters.Asstudentsoftenleavetheheatersunattended,therisksareratherhighshouldthewaterinthebottleboildrywhilenooneisaroundtoturnoffthepower.Inothercases,fireswerealsocausedbystoves,candles,cigarettebutts,etc。

　　Sincemostofthesedisasterscouldhavebeenpreventedifproperprecautionshadbeentaken,studentsshouldbebettereducatedontheimportanceandmeasuresoffirecontrol.Thefollowingthreeremindersareofparticularimportanceforusstudents:

First,learnhowtouseafireextinguisher.Second,double-checkcandles,heaters,stovesandotherelectricappliances,andmakesuretherearenoopenflamesbeforeleavingrooms.Lastly,donotsmokeinthedorm. 

　　◇第一段思路点评：

　　概述并引入下文

　　◇语言点提示：

（1）此句Whatonearthresultsintheserepeatedtragedies?

常可作为过渡句，引出下文

（2）注意描述有关火灾客观事实，多使用被动语态，如arealarmedby，werereported，wereburneddown，weredamaged，Facedwith。

　　◇第二段思路点评：

　　论述火灾的主要原因是使用电热水器，还有造成火灾的次要原因是实用电炉、蜡烛和乱扔烟蒂，

　　◇语言点提示：

　　electricwater-heaters电热水器

　　◇第三段思路点评：

　　详述预防火灾的三点措施，注意使用连接词语first,second,lastly。

　　◇语言点提示：

　　takeprecautions采取预防措施

　　fireextinguisher灭火器

（二）EnhanceAwarenesstoGuardagainstCampusThefts

　　1.        校园盗窃案件时有发生

　　2.        物品被盗的原因

　　3.        学生如何加强防盗意识

　　●审题概述●

　　这是一篇论述校园物品被盗和加强防盗意识的文章。

第一段，主要陈述校园盗窃案件发生的情况。

第二段，主要分析校园物品被盗的原因。

第三段，主要阐述学生怎样增强防盗意识。

【范文】

　　l      EnhanceAwarenesstoGuardagainstCampusThefts

　　“Ifyoudon’twanttowakeupandfindyou