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雅思写作

（七分范文）Somepeoplebelievethatstudyingatuniversityorcollegeisthebestroutetoasuccessfulcareer，whileothersbelievethatitisbettertogetajobstraightafterschool.

Discussbothviewsandgiveyouropinion.

Whentheyfinishschool，teenagersfacethedilemmathatwhethertogetajoborcontinuetheireducation.Whiletherearesomebenefitstogettingajobstraightafterschool，Iwouldarguethatitisbettertogotocollegeoruniversity.

Theoptiontostartworkstraightafterschoolisattractiveforseveralreasons.Manyyoungpeoplewanttostartearningmoneyassoonaspossible.Inthisway，theycanbecomeindependent，andtheywillbeabletoaffordtheirownhouseorstartafamily.Intermsoftheircareer，youngpeoplewhodecidetofindwork，ratherthancontinuetheirstudies，mayprogressmorequickly.Theywillhavethechancetogainrealexperienceandlearnpracticalskillsrelatedtotheirchosenprofession.Thismayleadtopromotionsandasuccessfulcareer.

Ontheotherhand，Ibelievethatitismorebeneficialforstudentstocontinuetheirstudies.Firstly，academicqualificationsarerequiredinmanyprofessions.Forexample，itisimpossibletobecomeadoctor，teacherorlawyerwithouthavingtherelevantdegree.Asaresult，universitygraduateshaveaccesstomoreandbetterjobopportunities，andtheytendtoearnhighersalariesthanthosewithfewerqualifications.Secondly，thejobmarketisbecomingincreasinglycompetitive，andsometimestherearehundredsofapplicantsforonepositioninacompany.Youngpeoplewhodonothavequalificationsfromauniversityorcollegewillnotbeabletocompete.

Forthereasonsmentionedabove，itseemstomethatstudentsaremorelikelytobesuccessfulintheircareersiftheycontinuetheirstudiesbeyondschoollevel.

以上就是这篇雅思写作7分范文的全部内容，字数足够。

这篇雅思写作范文所占的观点是应该在大学继续学习，但是对另外的观点也做了相应的论述，所用的篇章结构的语法结构都值得大家借鉴。

Band5

Somepeoplethinkthatuniversitiesshouldprovidegraduateswiththeknowledgeandskillsneededintheworkplace.Othersthinkthatthetruefunctionofauniversityshouldbetogiveaccesstoknowledgeforitsownsake,regardlessofwhetherthecourseisusefultoanemployer.What,inyouropinion,shouldbethemainfunctionofauniversity?

Whatknowledgeandskillsshoulduniversitiesprovidehasbeenarguedformanyyears.Somepeoplethinkthatthetruefunctionofuniversitiesprovideknowledgefortheirownpurpose,butnowadays,moreandmorepeoplepointoutthatuniversitiesshouldprovidegraduateswiththeknowledgeandskillsaccordingtotheworkplace.

Thefirstreasonforuniversitiesshouldprovidetheseknowledgeandskillisthestudents’needs.Obviously,themostofthestudentsgotouniversitypurposeofistogetsomeknowledgeandskillswhichcouldmakethemhavetheabilitytogetajob.Ifauniversitydoesnotprovidetheseknowledgeandskills,thestudentsmightnotgetajobandtheywouldbeverydisappointed.Asaresult,theuniversitywouldloseitsstudents.

Moreover,providingknowledgeandskillsneededintheworkplacemakesauniversityprogress.Thenewskillsandinformationalwaysareinitiatedintheworkplace,sofocusingontheneedsoftheworkplacetheuniversitycouldgetsoundstrategiestodoresearchandmakeitmoremodernization.

Lastly,providingtheseknowledgeandskillscouldbenefitourcountrywhichusuallygivesafinancialsupporttouniversities.Havingtheseknowledgeandskills,studentsaremoreeasytogetajob,andthiscanmakeourcountries’economystrong.

Inconclusion,itcanbesaidthatprovidingtheknowledgeandskillswhichtheworkplaceneedsiseveryuniversity’sbasicfunction.

只能拿到5分的原因：

一、这个题目中有两方的观点：

some及others的，很明显这位考生在后面的论证过程中完全忽视了others的观点,都在一味地论证some的观点的正确性，于是考官给出的评语是：

itdoesnotaddressallpartsofthequestion.

写作建议：

Donotneglectanypart,oryouwillregretyourmark.

不要忽视任何东西，否则你的分数会让你很伤心。

二、这位考生在连接词和复杂句型上都表现得不错，可是他太偷懒了，knowledgeandskill这个词组一共用了9次，这种高频率的repetition让这位考生付出了比较惨重的代价，所以看者希望你们能够汲取这样的教训，多注意Paraphrase的练习。

尤其是常考的考试主题所可能涉及到的高频单词更是要做好homework.knowledgeandskill就属于top3的高频考题的教育类，所以这类的词汇一定是多多准备才对，如expertise,conversance,instruction,competence,aptitude,technique,prowess,dexterity都可以拿来替换这两个词。

写作建议：

Paraphrasehelpsyouparachuteintoahigherband.

改写能助你拿到高分。

Band6

Somepeoplethinkthatasenseofcompetitioninchildrenshouldbeencouraged.Othersbelievethatchildrenwhoaretaughttoco-operateratherthancompetebecomemoreusefuladults.Discussboththeseviewsandgiveyourownopinion.

Nowadays,purposeofeducationbeingchangedinKorea.Therearesomepeoplewhothinkthatcompetitioninchildrenshouldbemade,alsoothersbelievethatchildrenwhoaretaughttoco-operateaswellasbecomemoreusefuladults.Thereareadvantagesanddisadvantagesforbothofthearguments.

Tobeginwith,whatisgoodifasenseofcompetitioninchildrenismade?

Theycoulddevelopthemselvesmoreandmoreastheylearnandstudyalottowinfromthecompetition.Toprovethis,inKorea,itispopular-evencommonnow-tohaveatutorwhocometostudent’shousetoteachextrapiecesofstudywithpayingalotofmoney.Theylearnfasterthanwhattheylearnatschool.Furthermore,duringthevocations,studentsstudyabroadtolearnEnglishforamonthinsteadofreviseschoolwork.Iftheyhaveexperimentssuchasstudyabroad,itisoneofthegreatestpluspointtogotothefamouswell-knownhighschool.Moreover,therearefourbigschoolexamandtwonationalexaminationstoteststudents’levelofstudies.Generally,onlythehighest40%cangotothegoodqualityhighschoolsandcollegeschildrenlearnasmuchastheycan,towinthecompetitiontoobtaingoodqualityschools.

Ontheotherhand,astheyarebusytoentertheschoolsandstudyindividuallywiththeirowntutors,thereareproblems.Theybecomeselfish.Theybecomecarelessanddon’thelpothersalotifitisaboutstudies.Therewillbenoco-operationsforthem.Then,whyaretherecompaniesformanypeopletoworkin?

eachofthemareclever,however,thereareweakpartsandstrongpartsforeachperson.Toco-operateistoimprovethispart.Peopletalkandlistentowhatothersthinkingofandlearn.Thatcouldalsobeagreatopportunitytolearninsteadoflearningalonewithoneteacher.

Inconclusion,Istronglyagreewiththatchildrenshouldbetaughttoco-operateratherthancompete.Nobodyisperfect.Peoplelearntogether,worktogethertodevelopeachother.therefore,Iwantparentsandteacherstoeducatechildrenconcentratingonco-operation,notcompeteandrankingthem.

问题分析：

从论证大主题的角度来说，这一篇的最后的收尾是co-operation更重要的成立的，但是这位考生在文字数量分配上缺乏规划，分配给competition的文字明显多于给co-operation的，这样就给了考官一个非常合情合理的借口扣分，实在是遗憾啊!

写作建议：

Ifitisyourpreference,giveitmorereference.

如果你更认同那个观点，那就在这个观点上多写点吧。

如果我们进一步看下Body段里的细节内容，其实这位考生的语法功力和逻辑论证能力比上面那位5分同学还要差，但是这篇文章把题目中的两个方面都提到，没有犯我的建议中的错误。

除此之外，文字总量上这一篇文章叫上两篇都有绝对的优势，所以再强调下数量真的也很重要。

写作建议：

Aquantitativechangecausesaqualitativechange.

量变带来质变。

Somepeoplesaythatthegovernmentshouldnotputmoneyonbuildingtheatresandsportsstadiums.Theyshouldspendmoremoneyonmedicalcareandeducation.

Doyouagreeordisagree?

?

Muchdiscussionconcerningallocationofresourcesassumesthatthegovernmentshouldspendmoneyonmedicineandeducationratherthanontheatresandsportsstadiums.Inmyopinion,thisissueshouldbeexaminedfromtheangleofwhethertheinvestmentbenefitsthegreatmajorityofthepopulation.

Theinstitutionsofmedicalcareandeducation,undoubtedly,shouldreceivepriorityintheallocationofagovernment’sexpenditures,atthethoughtofmillionsofchildrenfromdeprivedbackgroundswhonowgetasubstandardeducation,andwhowouldrequirearelativelyhighqualityofeducationiftheyaretoenjoyanythingapproachingequalityofopportunityinlaterlife.Anotherpressingneedofsocietyisimprovementofmedicalcarefortheadultpoor,fortheaged,andsoforthdownthelist.

Theatresandsportsstadiumsareinstitutionsforpromotinghumanculture.Asuccessfultheatricaleventisanexcitingandstimulatingexperience,whetheritoccursinagrandtheatreorahighschoolauditorium.Spectatorsaswellasthoseinvolvedintheproductionfeelthisexcitement.Sportsstadiums,ontheotherhand,attractmillionsofspectatorstowatchprofessionalsplayeveryyear.Manymoremillionswatchgamesontelevision,readabouttheminnewspapers,anddiscussthemwiththeirfriends.Therefore,canwesaythattheseareunnecessarypublicexpendituresthegovernmentshouldignore?

Inconclusion,todaymanisbecomingevermoreawareofhisspiritualneeds.Medicineandeducationareneedsthatwerecognize,butarecontactswiththeatricalorsportseventsalsobasicneeds?

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Somepeoplebelievethatstudentswhowanttogotouniversityaftergraduationfromhighschoolshouldhaveaboutoneyear’stimetogetajobtoobtainworkexperienceorhaveatraveltoenlargetheirvision.

Doyouagreeordisagree?

Whatisyouropinion?

Highschoolstudentswhointendtostudyatuniversityshouldattendtertiaryeducationaftergraduation.Tospendoneyear’stimedoingajobtoacquireworkexperienceortotravelforbroadeningone’svisionis,tomymind,awasteoftimeandenergy.

First,universityeducationisthecontinuationofhighschooleducationforthosestudentswhowanttopursuetheirlearningatanadvancedlevel.Abreakofoneyearfromacademicstudywillprobablyweakenone’smemoryofwhathasbeenlearned,especiallyforthosewhowillstudysuchtheoreticalsubjectsasmathematics,physicsorchemistry.

Besides,manynationshaveestablishedoneexaminationthatallstudentsmustpasstoqualifyforadmissiontoauniversity.Forexample,inChinathere