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六级写作评分标准解读+批改报告
六级写作评分标准解读+批改报告
六级写作满分评分标准解读
CET作文题采用总体评分方法。
从内容和语言两个方面对作文进行综合评判。
内容和语言是一个统一体,作文应表达题目所规定的内容,而内容要通过语言来表达。
要考虑作文是否切题,是否充分表达思想,也要考虑是否用英语清楚而确切地表达思想,也就是要考虑语言上的错误是否造成理解上的障碍。
满分15分,根据考试大纲的评分标准,给出的最高的14分评分标准为:
14分:
切题,表达思想清楚。
语言通顺,连贯性较好,基本上无语言错误;
解读:
A.“切题,表达思想清楚”:
所谓切题,最直观的理解就是“不跑题”,在四六级英语写作中,跑题是比较难的,因为题目会给出非常明确的观点选择或者命题场景。
所谓表达思想清楚,尤其对于四六级写作中的给出两种观点,问你同意哪一个观点的时候,这个时候建议同学们要有清晰的观点倾向,即便你会对比两种观点各自的利弊,最终你清晰的preference是给考官非常重要的信息传递。
B.“语言通畅,连贯性较好,基本上无语言错误”:
这一条主要要求考生的语言的逻辑和语言的使用能力。
在四六级写作中,虽然不像GREGMAT这种高端逻辑写作对逻辑要求那么高,但是逻辑的通畅也是最基本的,而且只有逻辑通畅了,语言才是通畅的。
但是英文作为“形合”语言,既注重“内容逻辑”也注重“形式逻辑”,例如必要的逻辑引导信号,firstly,secondly,whereas,ontheotherhand,allinall….都能引领读者和考官更加清晰的把握你的文章的起承转合。
关于语言错误,建议大家还是要高标准严格要求自己,用最地道的书面英文进行写作,四六级写作还不是真正的文章写作,但是是非常好的过渡都GRETOEFL、甚至论文写作的桥梁,培养自己书面化表达的严谨性和地道性。
2007年12月六级作文真实批改报告
题型:
英语六级作文
题目:
2007年12月英语四级作文
原文字数:
173
批改时间:
2013年08月09日20:
27
Nowadays,wecanneverfailtofindthephenomenon1thatdigitaldevicesareusedmoreandmorewidely,suchasmp3,mp4,digitalcameras2,mobilephones,3andsoon.
Aswecansee,digitaldeviceshaveahuge4infuluenceonourmodernsociety.First,theyarechangingourmethodofworking.Usingtheinternet,weareabletoworkonourcomputersinourownhomesinsteadof5inoffices,whichmeansourtimecanbemoreflexible.Second,ourlearningefficiency6areimprovedby7them.Forinstance,wecantakesomeonlineclasses8to9promoteourstudies,whereasmp3canbenefitourEnglishandlisteningabilities.Third,theyhelpourlivesbecomemoremeaningfulandcolorful.Forexample,withmobilephones10wecancommunicate11morethanbefore,whichisgoodformaintainingtherelationshipswithourfamilyandfriends.
Asismentionedabove,thankstothefastdevelopmentoftechnology,digitaldevicesare12becmingmoreandmorepowerfulanduseful.Onlybyadaptingtodigitaldevices,canweliveabetterlife.
错误归类分析:
格式错误:
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Poorformation.修改建议:
ofdigitaldevicesbeingused.
标点错误:
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Thepunctuationmarkisnotneeded.修改建议:
Omit.Use“and”.
10:
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Acommaismissing.修改建议:
多余文字:
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Avoidusingthiskindofphraseinaformalessay.修改建议:
Omit.
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Notneeded.修改建议:
Omit.
拼写错误(SPL):
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Wrongspelling.修改建议:
influence.
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Wrongspelling.修改建议:
becoming.
介词错误:
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Notneeded.修改建议:
Omit.
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Poorchoiceofpreposition.修改建议:
of.
时态错误:
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Verbtenseerror.修改建议:
is.
选词错误:
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Poordiction.修改建议:
Usingsuchelectronicgadgetslikecomputers.
单词缺失:
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Awordismissing.修改建议:
conveniently.
得分11.0分(满分30分)
切题Responsetotheprompt
文章切题,阐说充分
responsetothepromptwithadequateexplanation
文章结构Organization
段落组织有序,衔接紧密
well-organizedstructure,clearandclosetransitionaswell
论点扩展和细节运用DevelopmentandDetails
段落内句与句连接顺畅,句式使用恰当,用词确切,得体,论证充分
coherentstructure,appropriatewordusage,adequateexampling
语法Grammar
表达准确,简单句、复杂句使用流畅
accurateexpression,advancedvocabularywithahighdegreeofaccuracy
总评
该篇文章得分为11分(满分为30分)。
能基本清清楚楚地表达,框架完整,语言、逻辑有小的瑕疵。
范文重写
Oflate,theworldhasgonetechnological,affectingnotonlythewaypeoplecommunicateorgatherinformation,buteventheirlifestyles.Gadgetsliketelevisions,radios,musicplayersandphoneshavegraveeffectonpeople.
Technologicaladvancementinsphereslikecomputershaschangedthewaypeoplegatherinformationorcommunicate.Gonearethedaysofphysicalletterwriting.Anemailtakesjusttwosecondstoreachitsdestination.Workandstudyingaremadeeasybecausetheycanbeeffectedfromhomes.Boredomisamythaspeoplecanlistentomusicandwatchmoviesonmusicplayersandphones.Withaphone,afriendorfamilymemberisascloseasone’snose.
Onthewhole,adigitalworldisofnoblewelcomeforitamassesnumerousadvantagesandbenefitstopeople
2008年06月六级作文真实批改报告
题型:
英语六级作文
题目:
2008年06月英语四级作文
原文字数:
188
批改时间:
2013年08月13日15:
47
Inthecontemporarysociety,withthesteadydevelopmentofinformationtechnology,the1E-booksareplayingamoreandmoreimportantroleinour2life.Agreat3dealofpeopleholdtheviewthatE-bookswillreplacethetraditional4paperbooksinthelongrun.
Apparently,thereareseveralreasons5ofthisidea.First,comparedtotraditionalbooks,theE-booksismuchmoreaccessible,asthere6existalotof7bookresourcesontheinternet.Second,sincethecostofproducinge-booksismuchlower8.the E-books9boaststhepriceadvantage.Lastbutnotleast,thee-booksareeasierto10transport11whereasitismoreconvenienttokeepandstorethem12thesame.
Frommypointofview,IinsistthatE-books13willbeusedmoreandmorewidely,butitwillnotreplacethetraditionalbooks.Ononehand,notallthepeopleareaccustomedto14readbooksondigitaldevices.Ontheotherhand,readingon digitaldevicescanharmoureyesight.Allinall,thereareprosandconsineverything,soIbelievebothkindsofbookswillcontinuetoexistforalongtime.
错误归类分析:
大小写错误:
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Capitalizationerror.修改建议:
Use“e-books”insteadinasentence.
单复数错误:
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Errorinsingularorpluralform.修改建议:
“lives”shouldbeusedhere.
选词错误:
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Poorwordselection.修改建议:
“number”isbetterhere.“agreatdealof”isusuallyusedtomodifyuncountablenounsliketime,waterandetc.
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Poorwordselection.修改建议:
“are”isbetterhere.
10:
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Poorwordselection.修改建议:
“carry”isrightwordhere.
13:
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Poorwordselection.修改建议:
“should”willbebettertogowith“insist”.
多余文字:
4:
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Thewordisnotrequiredhere.修改建议:
Deletetheword“paper”.
12:
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Thetwowordsarenotneededhere.修改建议:
Deletethem.
介词错误:
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Errorinprepositionuse.修改建议:
“behind”isbetterhere.
单词重复过多:
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Repetitivewords.修改建议:
“books”or“resources”isbetterhere.
标点错误:
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Incorrectpunctuation.修改建议:
Acomma“,”shouldbeusedinsteadhere.
单词合并错误:
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Errorinwordcombination.修改建议:
“boastsof”shouldbeusedhere.
连词错误:
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Incorrectconjunction.修改建议:
“as”or“since”ismuchbetterthan“whereas”.
语态错误(VOI):
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Invalidverbuse.修改建议:
Theword“reading”goesmuchbetterwiththephrase“beaccustomedto”.
得分13.0分(满分30分)
切题Responsetotheprompt
文章切题,阐说充分
responsetothepromptwithadequateexplanation
文章结构Organization
段落组织有序,衔接紧密
well-organizedstructure,clearandclosetransitionaswell
论点扩展和细节运用DevelopmentandDetails
段落内句与句连接顺畅,句式使用恰当,用词确切,得体,论证充分
coherentstructure,appropriatewordusage,adequateexampling
语法Grammar
表达准确,简单句、复杂句使用流畅
accurateexpression,advancedvocabularywithahighdegreeofaccuracy
总评
Logicallydevelopedessay.Takemorecaretowritegrammaticallycorrectsentences.Checkyourwritingforspellingmistakes,agreementamonggrammaticalelementsofeachsentence,theuseofarticles,thechoiceofsingularandpluralformsofaword,incasetheyunderminetheeffectivenessofyouressay.Keepontryingalittleharder,you’llbeaverygoodwriter!
范文重写
Incontemporarysocitety,withthesteadydevelomentofinformationtechnology,thee-booksareplayingamoreandmoreimportantroleinourlives.Agreatnumberofpeopleholdtheviewthate-bookswilreplacethetraditionalbooksinthelongrun.
Apparently,thereareseveralreasonsbehindthisidea.First,comparedtotraditionalbooks,thee-booksismuchmoreaccessiblefreeofcharge,astherearealotofe-booksontheinternet.Second,sincethecostofproducinge-booksismuchlower,thee-booksboastsofthepriceadvantage.Lastbutnotleast,thee-booksareeasiertocarrysinceitismoreconvenienttokeepandstorethem.
Frommypointofview,Iinsistthate-bookswillbeusedmuchmorewidely,butitwillnotreplacethetraditionalbooks.Ononehand,notallthepeopleareaccustomedtoreadingbooksondigitaldevices.Ontheotherhand,readingondigitaldevicescanharmoureyesight.Allinall,thereareprosandconsineverything,soIbelievebothkindsofbookswilcontinuetocoexistforalongtime.
2011年12月六级作文真实批改报告
题型:
英语六级作文
题目:
2011年12月英语四级作文
原文字数:
174
批改时间:
2013年08月17日15:
57
1Successissomethingeveryonelooksfor,longsforanddiesfor.Buthaveyoueverconsideredwhatsuccessis?
Somemayholdthatsuccessmeansonehas2beautifullife,3likeprettyhouse,coolcarsandgreatpower.It’sindeedonewaytodefinesuccess.Buttome,successisdoingsomethingonereallyfeelslikedoing4。
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Toachievethiskindofsuccess,onehastobearinmindthreeessentialprerequisites,namelyknowingwhereyourinterestreallyliesin,possessingthestrongwilltopursueyourinterestandhavingthediligencetorealizeyourdream.Inotherwords,theyare“what”“why”and“how”ofsuccess.It’sreallyluckilygoodforone,especiallyfortheyoungergenerationoftoday6tofind7their8dreams,follow9themandintheend,make10themcometrueandbecomesuccessful11。
Althoughit’snevereasytosucceed,12progressingwiththestrongwillanddiligence13towardstherightdirection,you’llbetheone14。
错误归类分析:
冠词错误:
2:
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Anarticleismissing.修改建议:
Add“a”here.
单词合并错误:
3:
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Errorinwordcombination.修改建议:
Turnthetwowordsinto“withabig”.
13:
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Poorwordcombination.修改建议:
Usethefollowingalternatives:
“intherightdirection”or“towardstherightgoal”.
标点错误:
4:
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Punctuationerror.修改建议:
UsetheEnglishversionofthefullstop“.”.
6:
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Punctuationerror.修改建议:
Insert“,”here.
11:
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Punctuationerror.修改建议:
Insert“.”here.
14:
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Punctuationerror.修改建议:
Insert“.”here.
词义不明(INC):
5:
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Incomprehensibletext.修改建议:
Didyoucopythisessayfromthewebsite?
Ifso,you’rewastingbothyourtimeandmine.Hope