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…everygrassandtrees…

…recyclesomethingthatcanusedtwice…

…Herearesomeadvice…

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一、写作规范

1.首字母大小写

2.标点

3.首行缩进对齐

4.谚语引用格式

下句是否正确

Thereisalsoasayingthatrubbishisresourcebutinawrongplace.

谚语引用格式

1）Aproverbgoes/says,---

2）Asa/theproverbgoes/says,---

3）Asa/theproverbhasit/putsit,

首字母大小写

AsaSpanishproverbhasit,“Fliesdon’tenteraclosedmouth.”

AsaSpanishproverbhasit,fliesdon’tenteraclosedmouth.

二、词汇

1.行动

Let’smoveandcontributetoprotectingenvironment.误

takeaction正

2.采取、遵循（建议）

…obeythefollowingrequirements…误

…take/follow正

3.关灯和关水龙头

…close/shutthetaps…误

…closethelights…大彻大误

…turnofftaps/lights…正

4爱护学校的一草一木

…preserve…误

…love…误

…takegoodcareof…不当

…carefor…正

5.资源

…material…误

...source...误

…resources…正

三、要点写作（优秀范例）

1.背景介绍与过渡

不妥之处：

过渡过长

提出建议

Ithinkweshouldfollowthefollowingadvice.

优化

Ithinkweshouldtakethefollowingadvice.

Ithinkitbeneficialtotakethefollowingadvice.

Itisconsideredadvisableforustotakethefollowingadvice.

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常见提出看法之引入用语

AsfarasIamconcerned,…

Tobefrank,…/Tobehonest,…

Inmyopinion,…

Iholdthefirmbeliefthat…

Frommypointofview,…

Frommyperspective,…

I’mcompletelyconvincedthat….推荐

Whenitcomesto…,Iholdthebeliefthat…

推荐

AsIseeit,….推荐

优秀句

It’shightimethatweshouldtakemeasurestoprotectourcampus.9LXQ

2.步行或骑车上学；

两种写法，哪种优

Weshouldgotoschoolonfootorbybike.

Toreducegreenhousegases,weshouldgotoschoolonfootorbybike.9LJP

3.谨记关灯和关水龙头；

4.爱护学校的一草一木，不乱扔垃圾；

Weshouldcarefortheplantsandtreesaswellasnotthrowrubbisharound.9YWY

5.循环使用资源，为环保做贡献。

…it’swiseofustorecycletheresourcesandmakecontributiontoenvironmentalprotection.9ZWP

更高一筹（找到更高层次的逻辑关系）

Lastbutnottheleast,hewhoknowstheimportanceofrecyclingwouldcontributemoretoenvironmentalprotection.9LJJ

Lastbutnotleast,I’mcallingforyouractiveparticipationinrecyclingtomakecontributionstoenvironmentalprotection.

9ZCX

6.结尾：

发出号召与展望

Finally,wecan’tfollowthismovementjustoneortwodays.妖气

Withtherapidlyprogressofgrowth,Iholdtheunshakablebeliefthat….妖气

倡议，号召，建议类型，作文结尾

以表明信心，展望未来作为结尾

句式以倒装为主，或结合背句

如本文：

Withwestudents’activeparticipationinprotectingtheenvironment,Iholdtheunshakablebeliefthatweareboundtohaveabetterlifeincampus.9YYS

Onlywhenwetakeseriousandimmediateaction,cananagreeableenvironmentbebuiltandwell-protected.9ST

Bynomeansshouldweenjoyourselvesbysacrificingenvironment.Shouldn’twetrytheadvicementionedabovetobuildamoreagreeableenvironment?

9GL

Hewhodoesharmtotheenvironmentwilleatthebitterfruitofhisimproperaction.Let’stryourbesttobuildacivilizedcampus.

9LJP

Ifonlyallofustookactionpositivelyforourenvironment.Iholdtheunshakablebeliefthatitwillbeameaningfulexperiencethroughoutourlife.9HMY

四、成功写作要素

1.行文者先谋篇

倡议类作文段落结构划分

三段式:

第一段倡议背景，目的

第二段倡议具体做法

第三段号召，信心与展望

写作真经：

结构优先，表意其次

写作心理：

不要急，不要猴急！

2．过渡与铺垫

本文写作目的：

环保倡议

例作：

无过渡

Asisknowntoall,ourschoolhaslaunchedacampaignagainstbadhabitsinordertobuildacivilizedcampus.Thereismuchtobesaidaboutwhattodo.

（下文写要点）

有过渡,但不当

Asisknowntoall,ourschoolhaslaunchedacampaignagainstbadhabitsinordertobuildacivilizedcampus.Besides,ourenvironmentisbecomingworseandworsebecauseoftheeconomicdevelopment.Today,I’mcallingforyouractiveparticipationinintheenvironmentprotectioncampaign.

Asisknowntoall,ourschoolhaslaunchedacampaignagainstbadhabitsinordertobuildacivilizedcampus.Tomakebettereffortstoprotectenvironment,thereismuchtobesaidaboutwhattodo.

优秀例作

Asisknowntoall,ourschoolhaslaunchedacampaignagainstbadhabitsinordertobuildacivilizedcampus.Itisweseniorstudentsthatshouldshouldertheresponsibilitytoprotecttheenvironment.Thereissomeadvicetobesaid.

9YYS

适当过渡与铺垫，避免思维跳跃，令阅读者读起来自然，轻松。

胸中有表达的熊熊大火，也要用理智把它扑灭。

理性写作，高分保证。

3.指代明确

案例一

Ifeveryoneofusdoesit,Iholdtheunshakablebeliefthat….

案例二

Torecycleresourcesisagreatonenottobemissedbyanyenthusiasticyouth.

修正，优化

Torecycleresourcesisareasonableadvicenottobeignoredbyanyresponsibleyouth.

应用背句应注意具体语境中代词的意义是否明确，相关词汇（形容词，动词）应顺势而变

一招鲜，绝对不可吃遍天

4.避免简单罗列，句式单一

Ihavesomeadviceforyou.Theseadviceareasfollows.

Ihavesomeadviceforyou,whichisasfollows.

Ihavethefollowingadviceforyou.

Iproposethefollowingadviceforyou.

简单句不要接连着用。

写完拉倒？

分数也拉倒

5.多点并列，注意过渡词全盘考虑

本文的倡议点写作

案例一、123型

案例二、一to到底型

案例三、查户口型

案例四、过渡自然、赏心悦目型

顺序表达优化，曾记否？

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Firstofall/Aboveall,

Additionally,

Furthermore,

Lastbutnotleast,

写作的任务不重要，通过写作show自己（的能力）才重要。

6.注意行文的心理因素

阴暗型

Youwouldbelookeddownuponifyouthrowtherubbishanywhereasyouplease.

阳光型

Youwouldbehonoredifyoudon’tthrowtherubbishcasually.

行文应展现积极阳光的一面

阳光高考，阳光写作

五、文体特点与句式选用

比较：

边个好？

Additionally,bearinmindtoturnofflightsandtaps.

Notonlyshouldweswitchoffthelightsbeforeleavingtheclassroom,butalsoweshouldturnoffthetapafterusingit.

经验积累：

倡议、建议类写作，应注意语气委婉。

祈使句（特别是以动词原形开头）实乃下下之选。

为什么？

六、句法:

请更正

1.Electricityandwatertousiswhatwatertofish.

更正：

Electricityandwateraretouswhatwateristofish.

…theenvironmentistousaswateristofish.

…theenvironmentistouswhatwateristofish.

症因：

背功不足

2.Asamiddleschoolstudent,tryingourbesttoprotectenvironmentisourresponsibility.

Ourresponsibilityistryingourbesttoprotectenvironment.

Asmiddleschoolstudents,wetryourbesttoprotectenvironment.

Asstudents,thelongesttimewespendisinschool.

Asstudents,wespendthelongesttimeinschool.

独立成分与句子主语逻辑一致

3.Themostimportantis,weshouldloveourschoolandtryourbesttoprotectit.

Themostimportantthingisthatweshouldloveourschoolandtryourbesttoprotectit.

表语从句引导词

4.Onlydowefollowthemcanbuildamorewonderfulenvironment.