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It'

snecessarytheworld.reallydamageChinesereputationintheirbehaviors

forustolearnhowtobehavewhenwe'

retravelling.Aboveall,we'

resupposedtobecivilizedwhilevisitingfamousplaces.

listeningsites,onhistoricalthingslikecuttingnamesInsteadofdoingboring

sthecountry.showourrespectforthetoguidesareencouragedinorderto

restaurant,Inthesecretlywithoutpermission.badalsoabehaviortotakephotos

Whydon'

tit'

simpolitetotalkwithfriendsloudly,whichmayannoyothers.

inforeignlanguageandtrypolitewordstocommunicatewithlocalsomewelearn

people?

Thisreallyhelpsustohaveabetterunderstandingaboutdifferent

cultures.

Whyarewesupposedtodoso?

Goodmannersmakeourtourmorecomfortable

andpleasant.Asweallwanttohaveaharmoniousenvironmenttolivein,polite

behaviorsleaveagoodimpressiononeverybody'

sheart.Ourcoursesaresymbol

ofChina,andeachChineseshouldpayhisowneffort.

（189字）

点评：

整体看，作者运用长句的能力很强，而且文章的组织性很强，内容很充实，全篇无语法错误再加上高级的长句运用，当然必须满分。

1.开篇内容很充实，有标黄长句，用词地道，搭配贴切，给评委很好的第一印象。

2.中间标红句子运用without这一小词非常地道。

3.结尾部分也有标黄长句，再次形成前后呼应，开头结尾都有高级长句坐镇，所以文章从内容从形式上都是一流水准。

实用借鉴词组及句型：

1.bringtheChinesetraditionalvirtueabroad把中国美德带到国外

2.damageChinesereputationintheworld破坏中国在国际上的名声

3.haveabetterunderstandingof…更好掌握…

4.it'

salsoabadbehaviorto…=wearenotsupposedto…不建议做某事

2

wanttohaveaharmoniousenvironmenttolivein想要有一个和谐的生存环境5.

besymbolofsth.是某事的象征6.

某事在某人心中留下好sth.7.leaveagoodimpressiononeverybody'

sheart.的印象to…与其做某事（不rdersth,doingsth.isencouragedino8.insteadofdoing

好的事）…做某事（好事）是值得鼓励的，因为这样可以（后加好处）

分）范文二：

（101中学15Howtobeacivilizedtourist

FromtimetotimeitwasreportedthatChinesetouristbehavebadlywhen

civilizedatotelleveryonehowtobetravelling.Itseemsparticularlyimportant

politerather,beobligatedtoactproperly,touristnow.Firstofall,orweare

andfollowlocalruleswhentravelling.Obviously,litteringanddamaging

historicalsitesbyengravingletters,whicharecommonamongtourist,are

behaveweshoulddoso.Tobehateful.Wearedefinitelycivilized,notsupposedto

politely.Aswell-educatedpeople,touristarenotsupposedtotalkloudlyin

public,whichisreallyannoying.Inaddition,Isuggestlearningsomelocal

unconsciouslythebreakrulessothatwewon'

tcustomsbeforewegotravelling,

we'

llwaysandusbehaveintheir.Thelocalswillbegladtoseewhentravellingblindwe'

rewhenavoidingthecaseslotmorerelaxedtoenjoyourtrip,feela

andpolitely.Theseareallproperlyabouthowtobecivilizedabouthowtobehave

tourists.Andweshouldneverignorethatourbehaviorsnotonlyrepresentour

personalqualitiesandmanners,theyalsosymbolizethequalitiesofweChinese.

（185字）

这篇文章没有上一篇好，原因在于

1.没有分段。

层次性不够强。

2.句型相对比较单一，长句结构不够丰富

3.使用的高级词汇以及地道用法也不如上一篇多

但这篇还是得到满分的主要在于无语法错误，表示建议类的句型比较丰富，并且句型在使用的时候比较地道的体现在于有插入语的运用。

1.Itseemsparticularlyimportantto…做某事看起来尤其重要

2.tobeacivilizedtourist做一个文明的游客

3.weareobligatedtoactproperly我们有责任举止妥当

4.breaktherulesunconsciously无意中没有遵守规则

5.Thelocalswillbegladtoseeusbehaveintheirways按照当地人的做事风格来做会让他们很开心。

（此处如果能引用DoasRomansdo也不错。

）

6.representourpersonalqualities代表我们的个人品行

3

代表我们中国人的品行（注意这里两个7.symbolizethequalitiesofweChinese.

代表“represent”和“symbolize”体现词汇的丰富性）

范文三：

（101中学14分）Howtobehavewhenwearetravelling

cultures.theChinesemanners”isoneofisItbelievedthat“havinggood

Asaretravelling.badlywhiletheybehaveUnfortunately,manyChinesetourists

astudent,everyoneshouldbehaveasacivilizedtourist.

Everyoneplaysanimportantpartwhiletravelling,especiallyinforeign

assupposedtospeaktravellingloudlywhenwecountries.Firstofall,arenot

enjoyingthebeautifulsceneryisfarmoreimportant.Ofcourse,wearenot

interestfamousplacesthehistoricalsites.ofTheorexpectedtolittledamage

lineinbetterthequeue,wehadstandofalwaysfullofpeople.Insteadjumping

andwait.

thatreportedItisspiritofhisnation.personThebehaviorofreflectsthe

moreandmoreChinesetouristshavebadmannerswhilethey'

retravellinabroad.

Inordertosolveit,weshouldbehavewellwhenwearetravelling.Havinggood

mannerscannotonlyprotecttheplaceswevisit,butcanchangewhatforeign

peoplethinkofChinesepeople.Althoughthere'

sstilllongwaytogo,Ibelie