肖作文点评级第一次模拟考.docx

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肖作文点评级第一次模拟考

辅导时间：

5月22日晚18：

30至20：

00

PartⅠWriting（30minutes）

Directions:

Forthispart,youareallowed30minutestowriteashortessayentitledTheDecreaseofPublicTransportationTicketFare.Youshouldwriteatleast120wordsfollowingtheoutlinegivenbelow:

1.近来一些城市政府实施多项举措降低公共交通票价，大力发展公共交通；

2.此措施带来的好处；

3.作为市民应如何响应政府的号召。

TheDecreaseofPublicTransportationTicketFare

大学英语四、六级写作评分标准

同学们在考试时应该明确作文的评分标准，根据大纲规定，作文的评分标准是：

　　1．正确表达思想；

　　2．意义连贯；

　　3．无重大语法错误。

这三者是互补的，但又各有侧重。

为评分的方便，国家考题组又将评分原则归纳为八个字，即“总体评分”和“综合评判”，并作了相应的解释。

前者指的是“阅卷人员就总的印象给出奖励分，而不是按语言点的错误数目扣分”。

后者指的是“要考虑作文是否切题，是否充分表达思想，也要考虑是否用英语清楚而确切地表达思想，也就是要考虑语言上的错误是否造成理解上的障碍，用词和造句是否清楚确切地表达思想”。

根据这八个字，将阅卷标准分为五等：

2分，5分，8分，11分及14分，每一等都可上下浮动一分，各等的具体标准如下：

　　2分—条理不清，思路紊乱，语言支离破碎或大部分句子均有错误，且多数为严重错误。

　　5分—基本切题。

表达思想不够清楚，连贯性差。

有较多的严重语言错误。

　　8分—基本切题。

表达思想比较清楚，文字尚连贯；但语言错误较多，其中有少量的严重错误。

　　11分—切题。

表达思想清楚，文字连贯，但有少量语言错误。

　　14分—切题。

表达思想清楚，文字通顺，连贯性较好。

基本无语言错误。

除了以上五个主要标准之外，评分时还考虑以下三个因素：

　　l．白卷，作文与题目毫不相关，或只有几个孤立的词而无法表达思想，则给零分。

　　2.字数不足者酌情扣分（81-89个词扣1分，7l-80个词扣2分，61-70个词扣3分，51-60个词扣4分，不足50个词最多只给5分）。

所计字数不包括卷面上已给主题句。

　　3．只写一段者0-4分，只写两段者0-9分。

例文一（5分）

Intherecents,governmentsofsomecitiesaredevelopingpublictransportationandreducelossofpublictransportationticketfaretomakepeopleeasiertogoout.

Betheway,increasingpeoplewilltakebussbecausethecansavealittlemoney.Inaddition,increasingpeopletakebussmeansdecreasingpeopletaketheirowncarsout.Socaserunninginthehighwayareless.anditiseasyforpeopletotakeout,wichcanprotectenvironmentsandincreasethequalityofenvironment.

Ascitizens,weshouldtakeactivepartinit,wearesupposedtoawardandbeproundofthemwhooftentakebussout.

Inthisway,wecanmakeourearthbecomebluerandhealthier.Onlyinthiswaycanhuman’slifeintheearthalongandalongbecauseearthisonlyone!

（136字）

例文二（8分）

Inordertodevelopthepublictransportation,somegovernmenthavetakensometreatmentstodecreasetheticketofpublictransportation.Whichcaninfluenceourlifeinmanyaspects.

Everythinghasdisadvantageandadvantage.Nowwetalksomethingabouttheadvantageofthesetreatments.Firstly,asforaveragecitiens,theysurelyapprovalit.Thedecreaseofpublictransportationticketcanhelpthemsavealotofcostonit.Secondly,itmaybeincreasetheamountsoftakingallkindsoftransportationforcitiens.Whichcanbeagreatinfluenceforthedevelopingofpublictransportation.

Personally,asacitienofourcity,weshouldapprovalthesestreatmentstakenbyourgovernment,thesestreatmentscanbetakenquicklyandsuccessfully.Asweallknow,publictransportationholdsanimportantroleinthedevelopmentofcity.Howtoapproval?

Firstly,weshouldgooutbypublictransportationasmoreaswecan,insteadoftakingourowncar.Ithinkeveryonecandoiteasily.Ifthepublictransportationcandevelopsuccessfully,ourcitywillcangetagreatdevelopmenttoo.（180字）

例文三（11分）

公共事业管理申丽君

TheDecreaseofPublicTransportationTicketFare

原文：

Recentlysomecity’sgovernmenthavetakenalotofmeasurestodecreasethepublictransportationticketfare,thesemeasurearegoodforthedevelopmentofpublictransportation.

Theybringalotofbenefitsforoursociety.Tobeginwith,moreandmorepeoplereplacecarswithpublictransportation,andthisphenomenonextremelybenefitsourenvironmentthroughreducingtheproductionofcarbon.Next,tothedegree,itcansolvetheproblemoflackofoil.What’smore,becausethepriceofoilisincreasingcontinuely,moreandmorepeoplearefacingdepressofowningacar.Luckily,thesemeasuresprovideachoiceforustohelprelieveeconomicdepress.Lastbutnotleast,itcanhelpgovernmentwithtrafficproblems,suchastrafficjam,accidentandsoon,wecannotwaitinbusyroad.

Inaword,weshouldtakeactionstosupportgovernment’smeasures,anddoourbesttogooutbypublictransportation.Ifwealldothis,wewillhaveabetterlife!

（166字）

批改后：

Recentlysomemunicipalgovernmentshavetakenalotofmeasurestodecreasethepublictransportationticketfare.Thesemeasuresaregoodforthedevelopmentofpublictransportationthataresupposedtoinfluencetheresidents’livespositively.

Theybringconsiderablebenefitstooursociety.Tobeginwith,moreandmorepeoplereplacecarswithpublictransportation,whichdoextremelygoodtoourenvironment.Forinstance,theemissionofcarbondioxidehasbeenreducednotably.Next,itcansolvetheproblemoflackofoiltosomedegree.What’smore,sincethepriceofoilisincreasingcontinuously,moreandmorepeoplefeeldepressedinconsideringwhethertheyshouldownacarornot.Luckily,thesemeasuresprovideachoiceforustorelieveeconomicpressure.Lastbutnotleast,itcanhelpthegovernmentswithtrafficproblems,suchastrafficjams,accidentsandsoon.Asaresult,wedon’thavetowastetimewaitinginbusyroadtoandfrowork.

Inoneword,weshouldtakeactionstosupportgovernment’sappeal,anddoourbesttogooutbypublictransportation.Ifwealldothis,wewillhaveabetterlife!

例文四（13分）

Recentlysomecitygovernmentstooklotsofactionstoreducethepublictransportationticketfare,whichaimsatdevelopingourpublictransportationgreatly.Theseactionshavealsoarousedextensiveargument.

Frommyperspective,thesesactionsinevitablybenefitusalot.Firstofall,reducingthepublictransportationticketfareplaysasignificantpartinenvironmentalprotection.Astheticketfaredecrease,moreandmorepeoplegiveupthechoiceoftakingtheirowncarstogooutside.Thankstoit,thelesscarsormotorsontheroad,themoresplendidairweenjoy.Secondly,theactionslessenpeople’spressureoflife.Asthecostofpetroleumbecomeshigherandhigher,quiteafewfamilieshavetospendmoreontheirdailytransportation.Oncethepublictransportationticketfarecomesdown,itencouragesmorepeopletotakepublictransportationwhichalsoweakenpeople’sburdenoflife.

Asacitizen,itisadvisableforustorespondtothegovernment’sactions.Notonlyshouldwetakemorepublictransportation,butweshouldaskourfriendsandfamiliestotakeit.Onlyinthisway,canwebuildamorebeautifulcity!